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Reviewer: WickedTruth23 Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Jun 2013 1:36 PM Title: The Fire Inside

i don't really get how the bank would work if their new to the town

maybe people back than are more trusting?

it seems Jasper does not like Carlisle much

is it cuz he attacked and chamged Jasper without is say so,

than left him?

i think Bella's being too trusting

and i like slow build up between people

but it's ok.

are Vampires and gifted humans the only supernaturals?

or are there shifters and others?

~WickedTruth~

Reviewer: WickedTruth23 Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Jun 2013 1:10 PM Title: The Fire Inside

they have to kill right?

so i don't think they can stay in one place too long without people take notice of others disapearing and seeing a few new faces, the people will put the fault on them.

i think right now Jasper is just going with what Edward says when it comes to Bella.

he dose not feel for her yet like Edward.

does Jasper like Men more than Women? while Edward goes for women and his main partner is Jasper?

~WickedTruth~

Reviewer: WickedTruth23 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 20 Jun 2013 12:49 PM Title: The Fire Inside

i don't know if i should feel bad that i like this chapter cuz like you warned, it has rape and non con

and i find some things...lets just say i have odd tastes in things.

but i like your story

i'm just worried over my mental health.

i don't really understand the whole Bella/Edward thing at the end.

shouldn't Jasper be more..um.. possessive of Edward when it comes to Bella?

~WickedTruth~

 

 

Reviewer: WickedTruth23 Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 20 Jun 2013 12:24 PM Title: The Fire Inside

this is a great start

and no you did not give too much away about Bella

just enough to keep me reading.

i want to find out what she is?

~WickedTruth~

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2013 11:40 PM Title: The Fire Inside

You're going to wrap all this upon one chapter? Okay well, looking forward to the next chapter, this was an interesting story & I'm looking forward to the conclusion. 



Author's Response:

Well, yeah, since Aro was taken care of a few chapters ago and they sent Carlisle packing too.   This wasn't ever really a story of twists and turns that were going to go on forever.  It was about finding home, and since that's the last step, it should just take one more chapter.  ;-)

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2013 5:02 AM Title: The Fire Inside

wow  Wolves chasing and B prego.  You are ramping up the suspense again.  Cant wait for more.



Author's Response:

Well, one more chapter, and I'm putting this baby to bed, so I'm looking to get everything resolved before it's over.  There might be a few surprises left in store for everyone.  :-)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2013 3:56 AM Title: The Fire Inside

That would not be a bad place to stop but I'm not opposed to more chapters.

i like that thought, it's true for most families too, as long you're together it doesn't matter where you are, you're home. 



Author's Response:

Yeah, just another chapter or two.  And I think we're all looking for something like that.  A place to call home.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 9:30 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Woo hoo For Jazz changing too!!!



Author's Response:

Yeah!  Wait til you see the next chapter.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: carebear31374 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 9:23 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Enjoyed it....looking forward to reading more 



Author's Response:

Great!  There's more on the way.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2013 12:51 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Wonderful!  Jasper's emotional "territory" makes all the differance!  I loved it!



Author's Response:

I'm glad!   That was truly my goal.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2013 9:46 PM Title: The Fire Inside

So glad Carlisle got at least a little of what was coming to him!  Nice!



Author's Response:

Yeah, I know.  It felt good just writing it!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2013 2:42 AM Title: The Fire Inside

Glad j got to deck Carlisle.

Author's Response:

Yeah.  I had to throw that in there for Jasper's sake.  Next few chapters should really be interesting though.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jan 2013 6:52 PM Title: The Fire Inside

still don't trust Tanya. Dunno why.

Author's Response:

That's okay.  We'll have her figured out soon enough.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: carebear31374 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2013 5:48 AM Title: The Fire Inside

Really enjoying this 



Author's Response:

I'm glad!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: carebear31374 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2013 12:39 AM Title: The Fire Inside

Love how tender the boys are with each other :D

Reviewer: carebear31374 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2013 12:22 AM Title: The Fire Inside

Enjoyed this second chapter also. Atleast the killing isn't violent.

Curious about the relationship between Edward and Carlisle....Edward seems to have quiet alot of sexual freedom considering they are mates

Reviewer: carebear31374 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jan 2013 12:00 AM Title: The Fire Inside

I really enjoyed this first chapter :D

Reviewer: kini_113 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jan 2013 6:21 PM Title: The Fire Inside

How can Bella be considered human since she is essentially an imortal at 200 years old or are they only calling her "human" because they don't know what she is? 



Author's Response:

It is more or less because they don't know what she is yet.  I'm really glad you're enjoying the story!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: kini_113 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jan 2013 5:09 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Interesting twists and so many questions looking forward to finding the answers :D

Reviewer: kini_113 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Jan 2013 4:13 PM Title: The Fire Inside

I'm truely enjoying your story so far :)

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2013 10:58 AM Title: The Fire Inside

hmmm that seemed too easy.  Carlisle agreed too fast.  He'sup to something.  Not sure I trust Tanya either.    



Author's Response:

I have something special planned for Carlisle that might make up for it, but don't worry about Tanya.  I think you'll like her when this is all over.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Dec 2012 10:02 PM Title: The Fire Inside

hmmm Carlisle is just as insane as Aro in certain ways.  I hope that J, B, and E get to leave and be happy



Author's Response:

He is, and it will begin to show soon.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Emeraldiiz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Dec 2012 4:44 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Oh I love this veriation of twilight, I love that Bella and Edward are mated to Jasper as well and I would love to see Bella get pregnant *laughs* I know I am totally twisted but Imagine she could have twins one that looks like each Jasper and Edward. I have to say I am not a big fan of Carlisle in this story or Alice, but I love this story so far and can't wait to see the next direction it travels.



Author's Response:

I know about Carlisle.  He's not anyone's favorite, either.   But time will tell.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Nov 2012 4:33 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Someone needs to kill Dr Mengele.....oh I mean Aro.   Grrr



Author's Response:

I know!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: MaineMomma Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Nov 2012 12:27 PM Title: The Fire Inside

I think Jasper realizes that he has mated with Bella because he carries her sent. Oh, and he just might have noticed that Edward's human now.

Author's Response:

I think so too.  And while Edward appears human, he's much more than that now.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Nov 2012 4:22 AM Title: The Fire Inside

hope that Jazz and Kate get revenge on Carlisle and Aro for forcing them into thier squabble.



Author's Response:

Only time will tell.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Oct 2012 5:20 AM Title: The Fire Inside

hmmm a human e with a human b.....baby making material there??? Guess we'll see.

 

dl

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Oct 2012 4:43 AM Title: The Fire Inside

loved it!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: Purple Passion Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Oct 2012 8:05 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Almost sounds like Edward is going through again from Bella's blood. Is that even possible?



Author's Response:

It all has to do with Bella's ability with her pyrokinesis.   She's hot on outside and on the inside.  We'll learn more as we go on.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Oct 2012 10:12 PM Title: The Fire Inside

oh you are so evil!!!!   Poor Edward.   Hope Bella burns the crap out of Aro....or Jazz pulls him apart then B burns hum.



Author's Response:

I do try.  :-P   We'll see what happens to Aro.  Stay tuned.

Thanks for reading reviewing!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Oct 2012 8:03 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Terrific chapter!  I think Bella's blood is turning Edward human again.  Just a thought.  Carlisle has a lot to answer for!  Can't wait for your update!



Author's Response:

Her blood is changing him.  We'll see just how much soon.  And don't worry.  Carlisle will eventually get what he deserves, in one way or another.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Oct 2012 11:31 PM Title: The Fire Inside

hope Tanya can be trusted.   Carlisle is still up to something.  What a prick for letting Alice take the brunt of Jaspers anger that should be directed at him.



Author's Response:

Of course he's up to something!  He's a vampire.  I'm working on making sure he pays for this in one way or another.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Sep 2012 11:04 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Jasper should have attacked Carlisle instead of Malice.  Carlisle is insane to thing Jasper will want to stay with them once he has B and E back.  Hope that Carlisle gets hurt for every day B is in the V's hands and another hurt for every hair damaged or scared.



Author's Response:

Trust me, you are not alone, and Carlisle will get his -- in one way or another.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Sep 2012 4:31 AM Title: The Fire Inside

Oh I hope Jasper kill Carslisle for this betrayal and anyone else complicit in his deceit.   GRRRR.   I wanna kill him and he's only a fictional character.



Author's Response:

Yeah, it looks like everybody wants him to get his.  We'll see.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Lil_rebel_devil Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2012 11:31 PM Title: The Fire Inside

i love it so of course i'll hang on lol x

Reviewer: dreamngo4it9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2012 11:22 PM Title: The Fire Inside

hmm this story is so interesting. all the different bonds and rules and powers are so different and intriguing. i definitely cant wait for more!!!



Author's Response:

Thanks!  It's good to have you on board.

And thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Lil_rebel_devil Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2012 8:35 PM Title: The Fire Inside

bad charlisle dnt trust him, he is lyin he wants to keep jasper anyone can see that silly edward lo poor jasperl x



Author's Response:

Yeah, Carlisle's not doing very good right now.  It'll get worse before it gets better, but hang in there.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2012 7:46 PM Title: The Fire Inside

oooooh   As if I didnt already NOT like Carlisle, I really hate him for what he did.   Pretty sure Jasper didnt want the initiated, def not in that way, and I really don't trust his motivations revolving around Bella.



Author's Response:

Good.  Don't trust him.  He definitely has ulterior motives.  There's more to come.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: yankeerose Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Sep 2012 12:31 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Loving the twist and turns in the plot.



Author's Response:

Good!  There are a lot more on the way.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: yankeerose Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Sep 2012 2:17 AM Title: The Fire Inside

Very unusual story line.  Looking forward to reading more.



Author's Response:

Good to have you on board.  Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Sep 2012 1:50 AM Title: The Fire Inside

hmmm now what else is alice hiding i wonder



Author's Response:

Oh, she's hiding much more than it might seem possible, and don't worry.  It will all become clear soon.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Sep 2012 1:43 AM Title: The Fire Inside

oh Carlisle...you have big dreams huh?     Tanya can have her power as long as she leaves our boys alone.  LOL

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Aug 2012 7:50 PM Title: The Fire Inside

oooh yummy private time for our guys

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Aug 2012 10:28 PM Title: The Fire Inside

ooh we meet the rest of the clan. Cant wait for next.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you're liking it!

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Aug 2012 9:57 PM Title: The Fire Inside

If time elapses do add a recap when you update. The story diverges so much from Canon that it will be difficuti to just  get in, otherwise.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2012 7:00 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Glad she is doing ok. Ah we meet the rest of the players.

Author's Response:

Bella is going to be just fine.  And just wait till we become reacquainted with Carlisle.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2012 1:29 PM Title: The Fire Inside

hmmmm this is going to be a nice yummy story.    Wondering more of B's background too.



Author's Response:

I'm really glad you're liking it so far.  I hope I don't disappoint.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: almondgirl3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jul 2012 2:35 AM Title: The Fire Inside

Interesting, but there's still a lot of mystery surrounding Bella, for me at least. Like that though, that the story's pace isn't too quick. Looking forward to your next chapter.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're liking it!  And the mystery of Bella will be revealed over time.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Cullensbabymama7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jul 2012 8:08 PM Title: The Fire Inside

I love this story, but I'm soo confused.. Maybe the confusion will go away as time goes on through the chapters..



Author's Response:

If you have any questions, just let me know.  I'll do my best to answer them.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jul 2012 5:25 PM Title: The Fire Inside

hmmm this is going to be ans interesting trio i can see.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like it.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Cullensbabymama7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2012 3:42 PM Title: The Fire Inside

THIS STORY IS GONNA BE AWESOME.. FIRE BELLA! FUUCK YEAH!

I also read the bold stuff.. so Bella is older than 17??



Author's Response:

Yes, she is.  I tried to put a twist on that, and it plays a big part later on.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: mFrank Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2012 8:24 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Wow, wonder what happens next.

 

About the introductory exposition:  helpful, but also could have been woven into a prologue rather than just listing all the parameters of the universe you've created.  But the universe you're creting is interesting.  Looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

Afterthought, I guess.  For future reference.

Thanks for reading!  I'm really glad you like it.

Jo

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2012 5:53 PM Title: The Fire Inside

looks to be an interesting twist to the vamp world.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you think so.  Stick around, and we'll see more of it.

Thanks!

Reviewer: fall up Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2012 3:43 PM Title: The Fire Inside

Excellent 1st chapter



Author's Response:

Thanks!

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