[Report This]Date: 21 Jun 2016 10:57 PM Title: Return of the King
thanks so much for sharing this cool and exciting little story with us ;D
[Report This]Date: 17 Jun 2016 4:23 AM Title: Return of the King
Great story. The only thing I wondered about was the agents who were killed while guarding Rose. If I was reading correctly Jacob should have been on duty. Yet there was no mention of his death.
Again, great story! Thanks!
Date: 17 Oct 2015 9:50 AM Title: Return of the King
That was a fitting end to Caulfield's trial. Good to know he paid for his many crimes, just too bad they couldn't kill him twenty-eight or so times! Pretty exciting for Bella and Edward, too, having their son pop into the world in such a rush!
Date: 17 Oct 2015 9:28 AM Title: Return of the King
That turned out much better than it might have, with Rose and Bella both safe and not too hurt!
Date: 17 Oct 2015 9:14 AM Title: Return of the King
Here's to her finding a way out of her restraints! Plus, good for Rose, at least they got her back!
Date: 17 Oct 2015 8:51 AM Title: Return of the King
This is the part I always hate, when the good person goes up against the really bad guy! Things do not always go well!
Date: 17 Oct 2015 8:27 AM Title: Return of the King
Just what I was afraid of, that this sick bastard is fixating on Bella!
Date: 16 Oct 2015 11:29 PM Title: Return of the King
I smelled a rat as soon as Bella started questioning Victoria, something was just off about her story!
Date: 16 Oct 2015 11:17 PM Title: Return of the King
Poor Rosalie and poor Emmett! God only knows what that monster is doing to her! To have survived the first assault , only to fall into the same horror again is just hideous! They must find and rescue her!
Date: 16 Oct 2015 10:58 PM Title: Return of the King
The twin thing would be a huge break in the case andthe possible solution! Boy, the team really is smart and relentless chasing clues! It's great that Edward finally asked if he had a chance with Bella, too!
Date: 16 Oct 2015 10:33 PM Title: Return of the King
Since we know there's no magic involved in this, there somewhere has to be a rational explanation! It may well be twisted and devious on someone's part, but it will be there! Poor Bella, this is all falling on her like a ton of bricks!
Date: 16 Oct 2015 12:11 AM Title: Return of the King
Hmm! Jake and Bella in a comforting embrace, a hurt look on Edward's faceand the plot thickens! Looks like maybe he has feelings for his boss, perhaps! I loathe Jane already, by the way, what a bitch!
Date: 15 Oct 2015 10:36 PM Title: Return of the King
Jane the pain, huh? Sounds like there's interesting history there! Seems to be a mutual admiration society going on here, between Bella , Edward and his dad!
Date: 15 Oct 2015 10:14 PM Title: Return of the King
This is starting out as gripping as any episode of the television shows you mentioned! What a ghastly crime scene! You are sure getting it right!
Date: 02 Feb 2015 10:26 PM Title: Return of the King
enjoyed this story!!
Date: 09 Oct 2012 12:48 PM Title: Return of the King
Great, quick read!
[Report This]Date: 21 Sep 2012 1:06 PM Title: Return of the King
:) loved this story
[Report This]Date: 03 Feb 2011 2:54 AM Title: Return of the King
Great story. Good luck with your new book. I'll be waiting for more stories.
[Report This]Date: 03 Feb 2011 2:26 AM Title: Return of the King
Great ending.
[Report This]Date: 03 Feb 2011 2:04 AM Title: Return of the King
Wow. great chapter.
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 11:26 PM Title: Return of the King
I loved it I really hope after your break that you will write more fro these two great story!
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 11:04 PM Title: Return of the King
I knew Bella could take James down that was really good
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 10:48 PM Title: Return of the King
I hope her team finds her soon
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 10:42 PM Title: Return of the King
Oh crap I hope Bella can stop him and still be safe .
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 10:32 PM Title: Return of the King
I knew that he was going to come after her I just hope Edward is as good as Bella thinks he his and gets to him fast.
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 10:11 PM Title: Return of the King
I know Victoria and James are in on this together .I just hope Bella and the team can find Rose soon .
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 10:00 PM Title: Return of the King
Oh God poor Rose they have to find her soon I am freaking out .I really love this story
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 9:50 PM Title: Return of the King
I knew it I am so loving this story but I know there will be more bumps in the road .Aww that was so cute of Edward to ask her out love him !!!! Great story
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 9:33 PM Title: Return of the King
I bet he has a twin or they put his twin in jail .This is really good I am hooked
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 9:17 PM Title: Return of the King
Aww Edward likes her now he thinks Jake is with her.And wow what a big bitch Jane is lol Bella is better than her.
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2011 8:58 PM Title: Return of the King
This is really good I can't wait to find out who is behind this and how Bella and her team get him!!!
Date: 28 Jan 2011 2:40 PM Title: Return of the King
To bad he didnt die on that day I am so happy he gets to look forward to his death and Bella and Edward get to look forward to there new life. Great short story Thanks
Date: 28 Jan 2011 3:16 AM Title: Return of the King
Not gonna lie, I definitely teared up at the end with the birth.
Love love love your stories. Can't wait til we have some more of your fabulous writing. Good luck working on your second novel! And congratulations :)
Date: 27 Jan 2011 7:08 PM Title: Return of the King
AW, Parker, I love that name=) I can't believe Bella was able to wait through all those contractions just to hear "guilty" but shes a fighter. Amazing story. I can't wait to read your other works.
~My Not-So-Secret Obssession
Date: 27 Jan 2011 5:55 PM Title: Return of the King
Love the ending. This isn't the usual writing you do so I'm a little apprehensive to check on it until everything is posted. Once it is completed, I devoured the entire thing.
[Report This]Date: 27 Jan 2011 5:12 PM Title: Return of the King
Great story, great wrap up and happy tears at the end.
Yes, we need more from this team.
We will be patient (cough cough) while you take care of your other projects and hope to hear from you again soon with another great story.
[Report This]Date: 27 Jan 2011 12:02 AM Title: Return of the King
Beautiful!!
Date: 26 Jan 2011 8:13 PM Title: Return of the King
Oh thank god she got away and they got the bastard to bad he didnt try to shoot someone so they could of killed him.
Date: 26 Jan 2011 5:38 PM Title: Return of the King
I have to tell you how much i love this story....you didnt shy away from any of the scarier or sickening details and for that i commend you.I would like to think that even if my favorite characters werent in this story i would've still read it. This is an amazing story. Keep up the good work
kT
[Report This]Date: 26 Jan 2011 4:34 PM Title: Return of the King
I know we still have the epi to go but I can really see a sequel here or possibly even a series with the great team you've assembled. I love the forensics and crime solving aspect so much that I hate to see it end here.
Author's Response:
I know I would like to see more, but don't know if I'd have the time to do it. I've thought about adding it to the series thing and seeing of others were interested in building on it. I'll have to look into that.
Author's Response:
I know I would like to see more, but don't know if I'd have the time to do it. I've thought about adding it to the series thing and seeing of others were interested in building on it. I'll have to look into that.
Date: 26 Jan 2011 3:00 PM Title: Return of the King
Hmm, good!! Hope they roast the fucker this time - how's THIS for a death notice headline -"Caulfield Cooked in Marion by "Old Sparky!' "
Date: 26 Jan 2011 2:56 PM Title: Return of the King
EEEK! Yay, she's free and they're together=) haha, great chapter, I think all your information about the case (even if made up) and forensics makes the story so much more incredible. Please put up the epilogue soon=)
~My Not-So-Secret Obsession
Date: 26 Jan 2011 2:09 PM Title: Return of the King
AHHH, no update soon please! I need to know what happens and make sure Edward finds her. They didn't even go on a date yet. lol. amazing chapters, you're an excellent writer, almost too good because I NEED to know what happens. Update soon=)
~My Not-So-Secret Obsession
Date: 26 Jan 2011 3:06 AM Title: Return of the King
Too short!!!!!!!!
That was really slick him letting Rose go. I love the hidden room. Hopefully the guys don't take too long finding her.
Date: 25 Jan 2011 11:33 PM Title: Return of the King
Oh MY, MY, MY!!! You said there was a cliffy.....I have faith in Bella, she is one smart cookie-----not to mention the EMOTIONS I am sure Edward is going through!!
[Report This]Date: 25 Jan 2011 4:02 PM Title: Return of the King
Killer cliffie indeed!!!!!!!!!!! He truly is a psychopath!
Edward to the rescue?
Date: 25 Jan 2011 3:38 PM Title: Return of the King
OMG please if she found it Edward has to be able to find it to. I cant wait till tomorrow what is he planing on doing to her.
[Report This]Date: 25 Jan 2011 1:52 PM Title: Return of the King
Yea, I knew it couldn't be that easy. So, it was a bit on the short side, but definitely moved the story along. Are you planning on bouncing POVs or are you sticking to Bella's fight? Thanks for the update and for sharing your talent with us! Love the Bones and Supernatural references...campy, but fun!
Author's Response:
No, although you will see a bit of what the guys were going through while after she disappeared in the Epi.
Date: 22 Jan 2011 6:05 PM Title: Return of the King
What a great intro! I am looking forward to figuring out the mastermind and reading the character development. I loved FDKK and the Wallflower and the Flyboy and am very much looking forward to this story! Thanks for sharing your talent with us!
[Report This]Date: 21 Jan 2011 2:36 AM Title: Return of the King
The plot thickens!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jan 2011 10:59 PM Title: Return of the King
I don't know either, but this would be so good, to make a series of stories with the same characters.
Date: 19 Jan 2011 10:44 PM Title: Return of the King
Needless to say, "Oh-oh, spaghetti-o!!"
Date: 19 Jan 2011 9:55 PM Title: Return of the King
Good Chapter.....
Date: 19 Jan 2011 9:48 PM Title: Return of the King
Good Chapter.....
Date: 19 Jan 2011 9:40 PM Title: Return of the King
Good Chapter.....
Date: 19 Jan 2011 8:05 AM Title: Return of the King
OMFG I knew she would go all Bella. The kiss was sweet and loving and I love that Carlisle knew what is going on with the two of them.
Date: 19 Jan 2011 7:42 AM Title: Return of the King
Holly shit this is freaking me out and I love it trill me. Please tell me she does not pull a Bella and go to him alone????
Date: 19 Jan 2011 7:27 AM Title: Return of the King
So Victoria is a lying bitch did the boys have a sister king to kingsley???? I love Dean and Sam I do believe I love Dean more tho LOL.
Date: 19 Jan 2011 5:30 AM Title: Return of the King
Bella is something always so self sacrificing. I'm sure Rose is going to be pissed when she finds out what Bella is about to do..
This was one of the best chapters yet.....
Date: 19 Jan 2011 5:11 AM Title: Return of the King
Now how is she going to ditch Emmett and Edward. I can not see that happening so where are they going to be following her too...
Date: 19 Jan 2011 4:50 AM Title: Return of the King
You have twisted everything around so well that while you see the true characters from Twilight they are so far removed that it is truly amazing to read.
[Report This]Date: 19 Jan 2011 4:34 AM Title: Return of the King
Wow, great story. Can't wait for the next chapter. Hope your son gets better.
Date: 19 Jan 2011 4:32 AM Title: Return of the King
This story just gets better and better. There is nothing about it that I do not love. I want to let you kmow how sorry I am that I didn't read and review sooner, but I wanted to reread the first 5 chapters and in order to do that I needed to find a time where I could do it without little eyes around. When I like something I tend to zone and that is not good with a 7 year old.
Author's Response:
That's alright hon...I know how it is. Thanks for the review and glad you are enjoying it~!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jan 2011 3:56 AM Title: Return of the King
Wow, this is really good. I have thought of making this into a series? It would be really good.
Author's Response:
You know...I've never done the series thing. How exactly does that work.
[Report This]Date: 17 Jan 2011 11:09 PM Title: Return of the King
This guy is a major psycho! Great plotting and clue dropping too. On the edge of my seat waiting for more!!!!!
[Report This]Date: 17 Jan 2011 8:23 PM Title: Return of the King
So it looks like she might be next or is he planning on exchanging rose for her. I can't wait to see what develops next.
[Report This]Date: 16 Jan 2011 5:30 AM Title: Return of the King
HAHAHA I love the Supernatural reference, my sons got me watching that show this past summer.
Wow, more pieces to the puzzle.
Date: 16 Jan 2011 2:11 AM Title: Return of the King
More soon? Like super soon? :) Please! Had to throw in please, it makes things seem nicer.
[Report This]Date: 14 Jan 2011 4:29 AM Title: Return of the King
interesting development. can't wait to see what happens next.
Date: 14 Jan 2011 3:22 AM Title: Return of the King
No not Rose OMG. At least they know who they are looking for only thing they have to do is find that needle in the hay stack. I am so happy to get an update on this story thanks.
Date: 13 Jan 2011 4:35 PM Title: Return of the King
Good Chapter.....
Date: 20 Nov 2010 8:21 PM Title: Return of the King
This is really great. I thought that maybe it was a twin but put that out of my mind because I thought for sure that it would of come out in his trial. I'm really glad that you went this route. Because so many things can come from it. Kings defense could say that his brother did everything, while J.C. (I'm so glad that James is the other killer) lawyer's could say that they had the right person. That could cause so much doubt in a juriors mind that they could both walk. I can't wait to see how they tie this one together.
I can't wait to read more. Congrats on the book, can't wait to read it.
Date: 20 Nov 2010 7:48 PM Title: Return of the King
This is just getting better and better. I know it's twisted but I love the fact that the babies DNA matches King's. I wonder if the baby is actually the victums or did they implant a frozen embro into the poor girl after she was kidnapped.
There are so many sick possibilties and I can't wait to see what happens next.
Date: 20 Nov 2010 7:27 PM Title: Return of the King
Ah I like the Jane twist. That girl really is a bitch..... Mike is a real loser going where the money is.
I love this story, it is so different. I love the technical aspects to it. Sorry it has taken me so long to get to it but I am seriously behind on my reading and this is one story that I didn't want to rush through.
Date: 17 Nov 2010 5:19 AM Title: Return of the King
The only thing I can think of so far is that Royce King has an identical twin brother - because how do the tell identical twins apart with DNA? I know of one set of identical twins when they we born 90 days apart because one was born immature. Was one born out of wedlock and adopted while one born on time and kept? I have a cousin whos parents had her out of wedlock and adopted her but then still married? Royce's mother would still have been showing so it does not completely make sense but its hard to come up with theories. Really good story so far.
[Report This]Date: 12 Nov 2010 5:20 PM Title: Return of the King
you're a really good writer. i love how you made the characters come alive as agents.
im so looking forward to the next posts.....
Date: 01 Nov 2010 9:15 PM Title: Return of the King
Very interesting investigation but I was most interested in the talk between Edward and Bella. how are they going to be able to wait till this case is over.
Date: 31 Oct 2010 1:47 AM Title: Return of the King
enjoyable post.. hope the leads they have are credible and that headway is made in the case.. the sooner that's done, the sooner Bella and Edward can go out to that nice restaurant one evening.... loving your story as always.. Pamb.
[Report This]Date: 30 Oct 2010 2:44 PM Title: Return of the King
Pease update real soon i am looking ford to reading more
[Report This]Date: 25 Oct 2010 3:10 AM Title: Return of the King
awe that was a sweet ending. Great new info. Good luck with your editing.
Date: 24 Oct 2010 11:42 PM Title: Return of the King
Nice work!! Weird to say with this story (which I am TRULY loving BTW!!), but it was "cute" to have them start to get closer :-).
I truly believe you will go far in the writing/publishing world....you are a very good author! Keep up the good work, and yes I know we have to wait a few weeks for all your stories, and I will TRY to be patient----good thing you can't HEAR me!!! :-)
Date: 24 Oct 2010 10:49 PM Title: Return of the King
R&R'ed on FFN, Jen!! :-D
Date: 24 Oct 2010 7:43 PM Title: Return of the King
Great job. Please keep writing, i'm need to know what happens=)
[Report This]Date: 24 Oct 2010 6:32 PM Title: Return of the King
GREAT CHAPTER ! Yes, I know I'm shouting. Beautiful job of laying the foundation of facts to build their case on. And the beginnings of a hint of romance between Bella and Edward are really sweet.
Take your time posting the next chapter and focus on your editing task. We'll all be waiting.
Thanks again for all the wonderful stories you send to us!
Date: 18 Oct 2010 4:30 PM Title: Return of the King
great chapter....
Date: 18 Oct 2010 4:21 PM Title: Return of the King
great chapter....
Date: 12 Oct 2010 9:58 PM Title: Return of the King
GOOD start, I hope you can keep this up. So many never finish on an intense story.
Deep subject matter.
[Report This]Date: 10 Oct 2010 6:14 PM Title: Return of the King
Identical twins! Only thing that makes sense.