Date: 16 Jun 2017 10:43 AM Title: Chapter 17
The story focuses on pointless information instead of the true gritty parts I feel the turning up of Edward could have been expanded and more gripping . The poor Grammer is really irritating. The story as a whole has great bones, just needs a good editor.
Date: 31 Mar 2016 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 17
thanks for the ch's
Author's Response:
no worries.
Date: 29 Mar 2016 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 13
can't wait for more more it's a ten
Author's Response:
Thank you, sweets, and i will put another chapter or two up for you.
Date: 29 Mar 2016 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 12
great ch's
Author's Response:
thanks darlin', putting another chapter up now.
Date: 24 Mar 2016 5:08 PM Title: Chapter 10
i love it so far
Author's Response:
thank you, will put another one up soon
Date: 24 Mar 2016 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 9
lmao
Author's Response:
I know, right? Anyway i am putting another up later.
Date: 24 Mar 2016 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
Hi ladies,
I am so sorry for the slip up in regards to chapter 7 going up twice. or was it 8. Anyway, i deleted and reuploaded them and added chapters 9 and 10.
Date: 21 Mar 2016 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
great ch and love the part were she meets granddad lol
Author's Response:
I know you like it and i do appreciate it.
next chapter is coming up.
Date: 20 Mar 2016 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 6
can't wait for more to read about her horsies
Author's Response:
thank you and i will put the next chapter up now.
Date: 19 Mar 2016 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 5
great ch can't wait for more to read
Author's Response:
thank you and i will put a chapter up soon
Date: 12 Mar 2016 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 1
Sounds like a blast! Bella needs to get all the pain off her chest....and Peter will make a great ally!
Author's Response:
thank you, this is one of my favourites
Date: 12 Mar 2016 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 4
Wonderful! You bring out how very much Bella still loves Jasper, but will not let her heart be trampled again. Good for her! They need to work together to get things working again - especially for Maria's sake! I loved it!
Author's Response:
I fall back on what i know at times not by my experience but from what i am told when i can be there as a sounding board of advice. but i have broad shoulders and a safe for a mind. when it remembers ;D
Date: 12 Mar 2016 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 4
Love it....!! Maria is soo cute!:-):-) Update soon.
Author's Response:
i love her to bits
Date: 12 Mar 2016 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 4
Love it.
Author's Response:
thanks
Date: 11 Mar 2016 2:23 PM Title: Chapter 4
Maria is a smart girl making her daddy prove himself. She is protecting her mama.
Author's Response:
she is very protective of her momma, as momma is of her.
Date: 11 Mar 2016 1:06 PM Title: Chapter 4
Great update
Author's Response:
thank you
Date: 11 Mar 2016 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 4
i wood hit him too keep up the great job
Author's Response:
i know, right. i would do it more than once though
Date: 11 Mar 2016 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 3
Very good
Author's Response:
thanks
Date: 10 Mar 2016 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 3
I love Maria! She'll love having an aunt and uncle! Wonderful!
Author's Response:
it is going to be good for her and she will meet daddy eventually
how about Peter, momma Whitlock, and Jasper confrontation? what are your thoughts on that
Date: 09 Mar 2016 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 3
Flas Peter and Charlotte are getting closer to Bella and Marie, hope jasper gets to see them soon xx
Author's Response:
do not worry, it will happen
Date: 09 Mar 2016 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 3
can't wait wendy to see what you come up with lol
Author's Response:
putting up ch 4 once reviews are done.
Date: 09 Mar 2016 2:54 PM Title: Chapter 3
Peter better watch it Maria has him wrapped around her finger. Great chapter.
Author's Response:
Men never learn, sugar and excitement is a nightmare when it is caused by a man.
I learnt that from experience.
Date: 09 Mar 2016 9:44 AM Title: Chapter 3
Loved it.
Author's Response:
next chappy coming up
Date: 09 Mar 2016 4:04 AM Title: Chapter 2
Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
it is coming
Date: 09 Mar 2016 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 2
My heart is breaking for Bella, Jasper, and their daughter! Wonderful idea and and I can't wait to read it! Thank you!
Author's Response:
I know, darl', but it will get better
Date: 09 Mar 2016 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 2
Love it.
Author's Response:
thank you
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:07 PM Title: Chapter 1
Yes please continue this sounds really good look forward to next update x
Author's Response:
coming up in a few minutes
Date: 08 Mar 2016 8:32 AM Title: Chapter 1
Please do. Loved it
Author's Response:
okay then, no problemo
Date: 07 Mar 2016 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
okay it is going up online now
Date: 07 Mar 2016 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
Please add! I don't usually read J/B stories but occasionally one will catch my fancy and I end up rooting for them.
Author's Response:
I hope you end up liking it
Date: 07 Mar 2016 1:09 PM Title: Chapter 1
I hope that you decide to continue the story. Little Maria is so precious. I quite enjoyed the chapter. If you don't mind me saying, some of the wording during Bella's conversation sounded slightly awkward but it was still readable.
Author's Response:
I love Maria, simply because i made her their daughter, not some hussy or nasty momma or anything. as writers we can do as we wish, within reason, to the characters
Date: 07 Mar 2016 12:27 PM Title: Chapter 1
More please
Author's Response:
no worries it is coming
Date: 07 Mar 2016 11:17 AM Title: Chapter 1
yes please asap
Author's Response:
okay, i will
Date: 07 Mar 2016 10:18 AM Title: Chapter 1
Awesome start! I can't wait to see what will happen next!
Author's Response:
it will be up soon
Date: 07 Mar 2016 10:13 AM Title: Chapter 1
Loved the start. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
it is coming
Date: 07 Mar 2016 8:01 AM Title: Chapter 1
I am glad you tell people you are writing your story and you should stick to that. Just write it and they will read.
Author's Response:
thank you
Date: 07 Mar 2016 5:10 AM Title: Chapter 1
I would love for you to continue the story! I'm positive that "Pete" is Jasper's brother. Can't wait to see if you continue!
Author's Response:
of course he is
Author's Response:
of course he is
Date: 07 Mar 2016 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 1
Yes more chapters please. I love your stories.
Author's Response:
no worries