Date: 27 Nov 2022 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
Poor Bella. Always thought he got off too easy for that kiss.
Author's Response:
thanks,
Yeah, way to easy xx
Alexis
Date: 06 Jul 2016 6:21 AM Title: Chapter 1
Jacob when too far this time.
Author's Response:
Thank you, yes he needed more than a slap on the back for that XX
AAP
Date: 05 Jul 2016 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very interesting point of view. Realistic. And it's nice to see Charlie concerned about how Bella feels because of Jacob's actions. I like the way he switches from daddy blaming Bella "What have you done now Kiddo?" to the Chief against his pseudo-son "Sit down now Jacob, if you value your life". Short but excellent.
Author's Response:
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it xx
AAP
[Report This]Date: 04 Jul 2016 10:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
That was an interesting What If. You hit two of my pet peeves about Eclipse, and there are many and relate to ALL the main characters.
The best change here is Charlie's reaction. S. Meyer really damaged Charlie's character when he pat his daughter's attacker on the back, dismissed her obvious pain and threatened to arrest her boyfriend for expressing his anger about what happened. We see here a father caring about the welfare of his daughter, despite who hurt her, and an officer of the law doing his job. I like that we also see the pain it causes him to arrest the boy he considered a son and that he took his share of the blame for this happening.
I really wanted Jacob's aggressive behavior to be dealt with in the books, but S. Meyer wrote their kisses like an assault then dealt with it with kid gloves, especially the first one. She also had Bella forgive him time and time again for some really hurtful things. Characterwise, Jacob of Twilight and early New Moon never seemed capable of this kind of behavior and being young and desperate does not make it okay to forcibly hold a woman down to kiss her against her will, or make it romantic, especially when you're that much stronger than her. I like that he is challenged to see the error of his ways here and he rose to the occasion.
Author's Response:
Thank you, yes I agree obviously, it never sat right with me
and a million other women, even if he was a lousy father, he
should have been a better cop or the other way around xx
AAP
Date: 03 Jul 2016 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 1
Loved it
Author's Response:
Thank you, possibly Edward's POV xx
AAP
Date: 02 Jul 2016 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
Hope you go further with this
Author's Response:
Thanks, had no real plans to,
unless it's Edwards POV xx
AAP
Date: 02 Jul 2016 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed this. It has alwyas bothered me how the kiss was handled in the book/movie.
Author's Response:
Thank you,glad you enjoyed it xx
AAP
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2016 2:46 AM Title: Chapter 1
the story was great i wish it could have a few mor ch to see waht happen
Author's Response:
Thanks and sorry but it is what it is,
just my take on what happen then xx
AAP
Date: 02 Jul 2016 2:30 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is awesome. Charile's reaction to that kiss in the book always bothered me. I like your Charlie better
Author's Response:
Thanks, yes never sat well with me either, no loving father
would say nothing or laugh in your face, if your hand was broken!
It's sick at best, depraved at worst!
AAP
Date: 02 Jul 2016 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 1
I wonder why this was never addressed in the book or the movie?
Author's Response:
Yes, if my father had acted like him I'd have left.
SM made her such a wimp that they could treat her like shite
and nobody cared not even The Cullens xx
AAP
Date: 01 Jul 2016 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
I liked it. You should do a Edward point of view
Author's Response:
Thank you, that's a thought xx
AAP