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Reviewer: LadyLetters Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2017 8:03 PM Title: The Worn Path to the Sea and Stars

Wilma??? Somebody call Cat Protection because that is a cruel name for a cat.  FYI I have a Fluffy little black cat so you had me from there.  

This is a nice piece,  you describe his turmoil really well and the anguish feels genuine. You also use a lot of the senses which brings reality to the piece such as the spray on his face and the feel of Wilma.  

If this is part of a longer piece it needs some purpose or hint as to the key conflict of the story here.  Such as he's dreading school but can't tell parents he's being being bullied / flunking because of the situation.  If it was the start of a novel I would want to know what was going on.  LL



Author's Response:

I'm so sorry for the late response! 

Cats are the best, especially fluffy black ones! I don't know what we humans did to deserve cats but I'm grateful we have them.

Thank you so much for your feedback, it's incredibly helpful. I truly appreciate you taking the time to read and review, it means a lot.

I'll take your advice into consideration and use it to improve what I'm working on at the moment! 

Thanks again!

LSylvaine

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