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Reviewer: tracylk Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2011 6:03 AM Title: Chapter 1

Hey!  That was a GREAT 1st attempt and yea... there were some grammar/spelling issues but hell!  YOU DID IT!  Good for you!  You took the plunge and did it!

I wouldn't mind seeing this turned into a story... I'd kind of like to see where Edward and Bella go from here.

Thanks for being brave enough to share with us!

~Muah!~



Author's Response:

 

 

Aloha!

OMG, thank you so much for reading and leaving this review! ^^ It made my day a little better ;D  I´m still pretty self -councious about the whole writing thing about I guess, you can only improve and get better while trying are something like that?! Did that actually made sense?! I don´t know!! ;D ;D

I actually thought about writing there story myself! ^^ Tell about some of the stuff that happened before the infamous night and then what happens after that. But I think I´d need some time to do so, since I haven´t but that much thought into it, yet, And I´m currently writing a short story and need to finish that one before ^^ But if I ever get to continue they´re story I sure as hell going to post it here! ;D

Thank you again!

Muah with a cherry on top right back at ya!

 

-Sue

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Feb 2011 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 1

I loved it how silly they are in love for so long and afraid to ack because they didnt want to ruin there friendship.  I want to know how he talked them out of a ticket for having sex on the side of the road.?????



Author's Response:

 

Hey!!!

Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review!! ;D I´m glad to hear you liked it! ^^  What can I say - Bella and Edward just don´t do stuff the easy way! They have a drama- fetish or something like that! ;D  As for the ticket - I have no idea how Edward did that! He won´t tell!!! Which lets me think it must be something bad... :D :D :D   Maybe Edward got the pixie involved and she talked the officer´s ear off until he let B&E go...^^

Thank you again!!! ^^

-Sue

Reviewer: XxAskanixX Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Feb 2011 6:26 AM Title: Chapter 1

Sue-

As soon as i got your e-mail i hurried my ass over here so i could read your 1st story!!!

And.... holy hell! :) I'm so proud of you hun, you did great!

The emotions between the two were so real, and you described them very well... Like i said, your English is pretty damn good so i knew you would do good!

BTW the lemon was hot... and the cop yelling at them to put their clothes on was funny, it made me laugh. For some reason i pictured Charlie catching Bella and Edward doing it... which only made me laugh harder cause that would be hella awkward and super embarrassing... can you imagine? Your cop dad catching you... omg... LOL

In the beginning i thought she was actually beating up Edward, so i was glad that it was just the car and not his pretty face she was assaulting. I was a little nervous... although them beating the crap out of each other would make for some pretty kickass make-up sex. ;P

I hope this isn't the only one-shot you decide to write, cause i'd love to read more!!

*two thumbs up*

KEEP IT UP!!!!

-MIRI

Author's Response:

MIRI!!!!!

OMG!!! It´s sooooooo weird to get reviews and write author´s responses for a change!!! We totally switched places! ;D ;D ;D   I just realize that getting reviews (or more like waiting for reviews...^^) makes me really giddy...!!! ^^ God, I was so afraid people would tell me everything was crap!!  And now I have 7 people telling me they liked it!!!!  Whooooop!!!!! ;D  I know I´m being silly but I really don´t care! =P

And you really liked it?!  Geeeeez, I think my head just got bigger ;D ;D  I almost didn´t even write the lemon, because I was pretty much blushing the whole time while doing so!!! Can you imagine that?!?! Reading lemon is sooooo much easier than writing it!!! Oh, I just realized I basically popped my writing-cherry twice, since it was my first lemon also!!!  ;D ;D ;D  Thanks for complementing me on the writing and my English! ;D  I´m glad you found the officer-incident funny! OMG- the idea of Charlie busting them!!! *sqeal* THAT would have put things to a whole new level!!!! And I can totally see why that would make you laugh!!! Charlie wouldn´t know what to do first, beat Edward up and then arrest him in his anger, or being sooo embarrassed himself that he wouldn´t look anybody in the eye, turning beet-red or he would give BElla a chastity-belt, wrap her in a nuns cloak/dress/whatever it is  and ground her for live in some high security room!!! ;D OMG- that would have been awesome!!! Maybe I can write an alternative ending or something and use that!!! ;D 

I hoped that people got confused and thought that Bella was kicking the shit out of Edward,when she was kicking the car actually! That was totally intentional!!! ;D I thought it was funny!!! ^^

If I can come up with another idea for a story or one shot, or better to say if I can put the storyline into words, I´d definately post it!!! I´ll try my best!! Maybe a story about all the things that can go wrong during/after  sex ;D Getting busted by Cop- dad...CHECK!!!! ;D ;D

Thank you so much for reading it and reviewing!! And of course for all the sweet things you´ve said!!! It really means a lot!!! You´re aweswome!!!

-Sue

Reviewer: almoncla Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Feb 2011 3:51 AM Title: Chapter 1

I loved your story, you did a great job, you should write more!!



Author's Response:

Hi!

Thank you so much for reviewing!!! And for liking my story!!!! ;D Wow, if I get more reviews like that I´ll definately consider writing some more! ^^ ;D  I´ll try my best!!!  Thank you so much again for liking it!!! It really means a lot to hear stuff like that when you are scared shitless !!! ;D

-Sue

Reviewer: hitc4manynewmoons Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 14 Feb 2011 2:19 AM Title: Chapter 1

Awww. I loved the content and story line. It was very good. No worries about grammar mistakes, those are easy fixes. It's the context and plot that are the most important and hardest to change. You did great on those, I loved how much emotion I felt from Bella. I could really feel the way she struggled against her gut instincts in the car...so glad she didn't by the way! LOL Great job...keep writing!



Author's Response:

OMG!!! Thank you so, so much!!! Wow, I´m like totally flattered right now!! ;D  I´m glad you liked it so much!! ^^ I´ve already edited the story, aresed the typos and whatnots and changes a few sentences- but yeah, you are definately right! Geeeeeez, you have no idea what your review does to me!!! LOL ;D   Seriously, I thought people would tell me it was crap and that the storyline was not original and has been there about 100 times before....!^^  And now you guys come along and tell me it was good and that you actually felt the emotions and  got what I tried to say ?!  Let me just tell you that I´m wearing a big ass smile on my face right now! ;D    I´m pretty glad that she did what she did, too!!!  But you know those kids, they just can´t keep their hands and other body parts by themselves! ;D ;D

Thanks again for your sweet words!!!

-Sue

Reviewer: mayi Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Feb 2011 2:17 AM Title: Chapter 1

I really like it!!!  Good Job!!!



Author's Response:

Hey!

Thank you so much!!! I´m gald you liked it!!! ;D

-Sue

Reviewer: Anadabyel Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2011 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

It was adorable. :)



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!!! It means a lot to me since this really was my attempt at writing!^^ I´m definately wearing a grin on my face now!! ;D Thank you!

 

-Sue

Reviewer: CassieCullen06 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2011 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 1

Yes, a few typos. Nothing major, and an awesome story to boot! Good job! Now keep writing!!!!



Author's Response:

Hey! Thank you so much for taking the time and reviewing!  Yeah, stupid typos....! I double checked it before posting it and was surprised I hardly found any- and then, as soon as the story was actually posted-BAM!!! There they were!!! I noticed I wrote "care" a lot instead of "car"....DANG! *sigh*  I´ll have to work it over in a few days or something!!´^^ Thanks again for reviewing!!! I´m still super nervous!n I´m glag you liked it! ;D

-Sue

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