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Reviewer: Angelsoultaker Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 17

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Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 17

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Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 17

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Reviewer: snowydreamer32 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Nov 2022 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 17

Loved it! Can't wait to see what will happen next!

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Date: 21 Nov 2022 8:47 AM Title: Chapter 16

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Date: 21 Nov 2022 8:30 AM Title: Chapter 15

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Date: 21 Nov 2022 8:08 AM Title: Chapter 14

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Date: 21 Nov 2022 7:49 AM Title: Chapter 13

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Date: 21 Nov 2022 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 12

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Date: 21 Nov 2022 6:34 AM Title: Chapter 11

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 10

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 5:23 AM Title: Chapter 9

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 8

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 4:35 AM Title: Chapter 7

Loved it! Charlie is an amazing father to Bella!

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 6

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 3:57 AM Title: Chapter 5

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 4

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 3

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Date: 20 Nov 2022 1:39 AM Title: Chapter 2

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Date: 19 Nov 2022 4:37 PM Title: Chapter 1

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Reviewer: Angelsoultaker Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Apr 2019 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 1

I would love to see this continued.

Reviewer: twilove1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Aug 2018 8:40 AM Title: Chapter 17

Wow 

Reviewer: Jasperstiger3376 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Aug 2017 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 17

I so so so so love all your stories. I hope that you update this story and YFWYALFAW soon or when you can. 

Reviewer: jmccoy620 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 May 2017 11:22 AM Title: Chapter 17

I love this story and You'll Always Find What You're Looking for at Walmart!!! But are you ever going to finish them?? I know I've asked a few times and I'm sure a lot of people have but, could you please let us know??? We only keep asking because we just love you. You have serious talent and it would be a dog gone shame if you let these stories go unfinished. I know you still write cause I've seen on fabric that you've recently posted some new stories. I know I'm a pain in the rear and I am sorry about that but I'm PLEADING with you now to give your fans these stories. 

Reviewer: alices911turbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2017 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 1

I let me just say that I love your stories. You make laugh, have great lemons I truly hope that one day this story will be finalized 

Reviewer: alices911turbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2017 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 1

I let me just say that I love your stories. You make laugh, have great lemons I truly hope that one day this story will be finalized 

Reviewer: alices911turbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2017 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 1

I let me just say that I love your stories. You make laugh, have great lemons I truly hope that one day this story will be finalized 

Reviewer: Jenablur Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Feb 2016 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 17

I would so love to read more of this one if you decide to pick back up on it!

Reviewer: piperann_25 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Nov 2015 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 17

Oh please continue this story......

Reviewer: 01katie Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jan 2015 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 17

I really hope you work on this after intensity or with it its all good.

Reviewer: LoverOfFiction15 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Apr 2013 4:02 PM Title: Chapter 1

Awh man i need more! I HOPE you can update soon this is really good..Fuckward needs to die along with the twisted pixie.

Reviewer: glorim88 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2012 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 1

please say you havent givin up on this story i need to know whats happening.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Oct 2012 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 17

Glad Demertri is there to help out.   ROFL with the fake twilight book references  Glad Rose got Esme away.  Poor little girl and her family.  Fuckward and Malice really need to die.

Reviewer: crystanroten Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Oct 2012 1:39 AM Title: Chapter 17

Poor lauren and jess . But holy shit edward and alice feeding on minnocents and a baby!? They are really crazy....

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Oct 2012 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 17

wow!!! So much happened... Too funny with their talk about the books :) Can't wait to read more!!! So happy that you are back to writing :)

 

-Kate

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Oct 2012 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 17

loved it cant wait till the next update when ever that will be ! keep it comming 



Author's Response:

I'll do the best that I can.  Thanks for sticking with me.  I'm so happy that you enjoyed it.  XOXO

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Apr 2012 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 16

looking forward to more .... but was this chapter 16? because its labled as chapter 17.... just to let you know 



Author's Response:

 I'll check on it immediately.  It was chapter 16.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  More to come soon.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Apr 2012 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 16

Loved it!! Great idea in singling out Chelsea.... she was the key to swaying everyone.  Loved Charlie's fighting skills :) Can't wait to read more!



Author's Response:

Yes, singling out Chelsea was a necessity.  Remember though, Charlie has already proven to be much more powerful than any of the Volturi vampires.   Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Apr 2012 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 16

Charlie is one hell of a vamp.  Gotta love him.   Marcus is a trip



Author's Response:

Remember what Eleazar said:  Charlie is who the Volturi will want--not Bella.  And yes, he's a cool dude from our generation my friend.  Marcus will be a wonderful addition.   Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Mar 2012 2:08 AM Title: Chapter 15

I just finished reading this story from the first chapter.  Amazing!  I adore your Jasper and Bella.  For all that she has gone through, now she understands that Jasper is there for her - 100%.  Charlie!  As Jasper said he is frighteningly powerful.  Luckily he 's a good, decent man and never abuses it.  Kudos on a story well told!

I'm so sorry that someone found the need to steal your work.  They are our children,in a way, so the hurt is real and justified!  We'll be on the look,out!  Thanks for a great piece of ORIGINAL fanfiction!



Author's Response:

Hello, glad you're enjoying the story.  Jasper and Bella are definitely there for each other.  As you're beginning to see, they're feeding into their shared gift too.  Charlie is powerful and the Volturi will definitely want his gift for themselves.  They're a power hungry bunch.  Fortunately, Charlie is on the right side of justice.  

Regarding the theft of my story, thank you.  Believe it or not, one of my other stories was copied and pasted onto another site just the other week.  Unbelievable--it take so much time and energy to get the plagiarized story removed and it is extremely frustrating.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO

 

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2012 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 15

DPOV: Well at least D has brains to think with. Ewww a pair of panties? OMG he pulled it off?!?!?! too funny<p>JPOV: Go J & B. Sexcalthalon. hmmm professor whitlock, yummy. Sex house, ha ha. Love that they have Charlie there for B. OMG Germaphobe B is funny. hee hee for peter having to stop the girls from laughing. Dayum Charlie is gooood. hmmm D with T, not sure if that is good or not. OMG Alistair did NOT just say that to D about Tanya?!?!? Hee Hee for clothes conversation. Can't wait for them to take out Malice, Fuckward, and the Moron V brothers.</p>



Author's Response:

Chapter 15 brought in Demetri, but, more importantly featured Charlie's power.  By coaxing Demetri's true feelings out, he was able to break the bond that Chelsea placed on him.  This proves that Charlie isn't willing to abuse the power he wields, he could have just as easily commanded Demetri to follow him, but he didn't. 


Demetri is an example of a good character who was controlled by threats and a false bond.  You'll see more of this next chapter when some other Volturi members arrive in Alaska.  The Volturi are an example of vampires abusing another's gift.  If they got ahold of Charlie, who knows what kind of damage they could do.  One thing is for certain, though, it can't happen without Chelsea--who fabricates bonds for them.

 
The Volturi's abuse of power is reason enough for our team to revolt against them--Eleazar is well aware of this fact.  Now that they have amassed a group of talented vampires, it won't be too long until they, themselves, are under threat.


As for Jasper's and Bella's gifts--um...poor Demetri.  He's going to be scarred for eternity.


Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes    

Reviewer: tuckerjnp1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2012 9:42 PM Title: Chapter 15

Another fun and entertaing chapter.  Can't wait to see what happens next.



Author's Response:

I'm so happy that you enjoyed it.  More coming soon.   Thank you for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2012 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 15

OMG poor Demitri... I can't believe he did that!! Great chapter.... So they are going to over throw the Volturi....Can't wait to read the next one!!



Author's Response:

Ouch!  Yep, Demetri was in some serious pain.  They really do have to overthrow the Volturi.   Thank you for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  

Reviewer: AngelBones76 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2012 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 15

Heck yeah, we need to take them all out...Aro is a complete idiot to simply take the missive and not verify it...sheesh...

I really like how you have managed to paint three different Aros in your stories.  It's pretty cool, and I can't wait to see him dethroned...



Author's Response:

Yes, Aro is an absolute dolt...keep in mind that he's been alive for thousands of years and he's pretty set in his ways.  He trusts Carlisle Cullen--and Alice and Edward are being very smart by using his name.  They are aware of the weight it carries in the world.  

Yeah, I need to dethrone Aro this time, but I believe my favorite Aro is Paul's buddy in Walmart.   Thank you for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  

Reviewer: Cullensbabymama7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2012 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 15

Poor Demetri is right. I mean the guy tore his own dick off! that's fucking aweful and hilarious in the same right lmao. Omg, I would never let him live it down. But he was thinking of Tanya, deep down I think he always knew she was hismate but his bond to the volturi didnt let him act on it or have it come together. But once Charlie got his bond to the Volturi taken care of, it came to light!

Now I an see why theywould want Charlie more than they would want Bella. His gift is very awesome and it would gain them even more power. Fuck thats awful.

Bella's panties though??? Seriously, I'm grossed out and have half the mind to go check to make sure all my panties are where they belong lmao.

I love how Jasper's pov came along. I love hearing from him lmao.

 



Author's Response:

Poor Demetri, he needed a surgical procedure performed on him upon his arrival in Denali.  Meanwhile, Jasper is thinking that Demetri is extremely disturbed when he and Bella were actually the cause of his...um...amputation.  There were lots of answers hidden within this chapters and we'll be bringing more to light in the next.   Thank you for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2012 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 15

lol



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2012 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 15

lookingforward to the next chapter



Author's Response:

Thank you, the next chapter is coming soon.  Thanks for reviewing.  XOXO

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Feb 2012 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 14

Love the chapter! Creepy succubus house wow.... Love the empath lesson! Can't wait to read more !



Author's Response:

Yes, the love shack was a bit much for most normal folk, but perfect for the succubi sisters.  Jasper and Bella were simply to nice to tell them off.  t

Jasper is a Dartmouth educated teacher, of course he'll be *talented*...ahem.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes   

Reviewer: AngelBones76 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 14

Hey...if I was alone with Jasper in the woods, I would not give a flying fig what the cabin looked like hee hee :)

Um...wow...I take it back...I would get my own place too...

Love the empath lessons, I think I would goof up a couple of them on purpose haha :)

Excellent, and I, of course, can't wait for more!!



Author's Response:

Creepy love shack, but really nice succubi sisters.  They just don't know how to take no for an answer.

Empath lessons are fantastic with Professor Whitlock.

More to come. Thanks

 for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes   

Reviewer: crystanroten Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2012 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 14

loved it! tanya an kate cracked me up! cant wait for more!



Author's Response:

Although they don't understand the meaning of the word no, Tanya and Kate are really sweet.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2012 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 14

looking forward to more 



Author's Response:

More to come soon.  Glad you're enjoying it.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2012 5:17 AM Title: Chapter 14

BPOV:  EWWWWW for cabin and those icky women.   I'd be going somewhere else immediately.   Guess those women havent heard of safe, sane, and CONSENTUAL!.    RV sounds like an interesting solution.  LOL for laundry lessons.  Cool emotion practice and lemony end to practice.   Wow  they can project really far.  Wonder if they are amplifiers to each other?



Author's Response:

  1. Ah, the cabin of pleasure?  Inequities?  Kink?  Hmm...Tanya and Kate are very open sexually, but they have a couple of marbles missing.  They're very sweet though.  Jasper and Bella are simply too nice, they didn't want to yell at the girls since they were trying to be hospitable in offering up their sex den.  Thank goodness Peter and Lauren are freaks.

Jasper's purchase of an RV has gone a long way in giving both him and Bella peace of mind.  Neither of them are anti-social, they just need privacy because their empathic gifts affect everyone's emotions and vice versa.  There are too many newborns with confused emotions at this point.  The fact that they can project for long distances will go a long way in what's to come.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2012 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 14

that cabin sounded nasty, but perfect for the Denali whores.



Author's Response:

Yes, the love shack was a bit much for most normal folk, but perfect for the succubi sisters.  Jasper and Bella were simply to nice to tell them off.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes   

Reviewer: AngelBones76 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Feb 2012 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 13

This was really good, naturally! 

I love Charlie's gift, and I love that they are about to overthrow the VOlturi :) *claps hands*

Yes, Alice surely would.  Her mate's needs are her only concern, and she definitely will stop at nothing for him...talk about co-dependence...

 



Author's Response:

They still haven't decided yet on overthrowing the Volturi...

Alice is absolutely feeding off of Edward's addiction.  XOXO

Reviewer: AngelBones76 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Feb 2012 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 12

Bella is funny for a newborn...

The empathic teaching the empath was kind of hot :)

Love it!



Author's Response:

Bella's an interesting newborn--she's retained most of her human traits.  And Jasper?  Let's just say that Bella has the best instructor...*ahem*

 

XOXO

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Feb 2012 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 13

OMG, they are going to start a revolution and bring down the Volturi government?  Wow.

Poor Tanya for not understanding the principle of how to eat something as simple as a hotdog.  I thought that they would have had a TV, DVD player, satellite system for entertainment, and that she would have seen a movie at some point within the last 20 years or so in which somebody ate a hotdog.  I'm a bit disappointed that she has not been keeping up with modern technology as to have witnessed such an everyday activity on the boob tube.  J/K  It was funnier than §hit when she was all ready to masturbate with the hot dog, after having eaten the bun.  Sheesh, stunted vocabulary to not know the difference between masticate and masturbate.  It must be that her blond roots are showing.  LOL  J/K
:p

I was rather impressed with how Charlie handled the whole situation with Alistair.  He was very mature, logical, intelligent, authoritative, commanding, leader-like, etc.

This is a great story; I love everything about it... the humor, drama, sense of suspense, passion, the characters involved, the characters and how they have developed in personality, their interactions in action and dialog, and the plot thus far.  I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next and also to reading additional chapters.

Well done - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

Tanya is...hmm...well, she's a horny lady and she has a one track mind.  You'll see what I mean when I post the next chapter.  

As for Charlie, I doubt that he became a police chief by sheer luck, there had to be something p in the noggin.

Glad you're enjoying the chapter.  XOXO

Reviewer: Cullensbabymama7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jan 2012 5:32 PM Title: Chapter 13

ALICE AND EDWARD THOSE FUCKERS. UGH!



Author's Response:

Alice and Edward are insane!  XOXO

Reviewer: Voracious_Reader Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jan 2012 6:44 AM Title: Chapter 13

The hot dog eating was great, poor Tanya! ALice and Eddie need to be tracked down if they are trading on their old association with Carlisle. Perhaps he needs to call and warn all the vamps he knows, including Aro? He could make it sound like he corrected Edward's abandonment of her and killed her, maybe? Nothing like a quick bit of a frame up to clear out a problem, lol.



Author's Response:

Something absolutely needs to be done about Alice and Edward.  We're getting to that part soon.  XOXO

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jan 2012 3:35 AM Title: Chapter 13

wow... ok so I have finally got all caught up on all 3 stories... for some strange reason I didn't get the last update email :( .... Loved the last 2 chapters! Bella cleaning her kill first! too funny! .... and then this one.. Peter is such a perv with the hot dog! LOL ... and then Charlie's powers! wow! Can't wait to read the next one!



Author's Response:

One of my other readers didn't get an update for the last chapter either--it must have been some sort of technical glitch.  :)  

Bella was always a bit OCD about food...

As for Peter and the hot dog?  Did you notice that none of the other guys said a word.  I'm sure Charlie and Emmett knew how hot dogs are to be masticated.

XOXO

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2012 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 13

Well well the nasty keep being nasty. LOL



Author's Response:

Yes...the nasty are nasty and are controlled by their insanity.  XOXO

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2012 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 13

well i hope bella is the one to kill edward ! looking forward to the next chatper 



Author's Response:

Edward will get what's coming to him!  XOXO

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2012 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 13

Carlisle:  awww Poor Jess.  Gotta be hard.   Sucks that the girls are housebound and all.  LOL for Eli buying the house to get rid of all the riff raff.  At least Eli was nice enough to warn Carlisle and all.    Charlie can be a bit scary.  LOl for Tanya.   Wow  Jazz really has to get that temper under control.    Gotta love Charlie.  He is a blast.   Crazy hearing him curse too.    Wow   talented family.    awww  Mean to make her acutally eat it.    OMG  Masticate/Masturbate.  You are too funny.  Someone smack peter.     Bella and her food obsessions is so goofy.  

Jazz:  Poor Bella and Jess.  Glad the girls all get to see each otheragain.   Ah  Alistair huh?  Wonder how Malice suckered him into it.   lol for flirty Charlie.    Ah so Fuckward and Malice are throwing Daddy C's name around.   aww Jazz zapped for no reason.   lol for the description of esme.  Aww for Bella having to move away for a bit.  But its for the best I guess

A/N:  Hell yeah the V would want Charlie.   And they could possibly get him by using any of the girls against him.  I want Charlie to meet up with Fuckward and Malice.  muhahaha  Fun gift time then.      And of course the V will become involved at some point.



Author's Response:

You've met the Denalis and they are pretty decent folks.  You also learned what Charlie's gift is with the way he was able to manipulate Tanya.  She really does need to review her grammar a bit.  There's a distinct difference between the definitions of masticate and masturbate.

Now you know just how insane Alice is and Edward is even worse.  They are both mentally ill and Edward's addiction has taken complete control of both of their faculties.  They've lost their common sense.

Alistair is a good, honorable man.  He truly thought that he was assisting Carlisle.  Let's just hope that Edward's use of his name doesn't go too far.

 
As far as Bella is concerned, she is an empath and a newborn vampire and she needs to gain emotional control in relative peace.  Eleazar's solution of the cabin is perfect.  He's very experienced with newborn gifts so he knows what needs to be done.


Thank you for reading and reviewing.  More to come soon.  XOXO  mama4dukes    

Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2012 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 1

You're very welcome !I can tell, this one is pretty epic :D

Yeah Jasper seems to be a sensitive guy :) I'm glad he is though, because Bella sometimes needs that.

XOXO



Author's Response:

Jasper is definitely sensitive and so is Bella--that's why they're both empaths.  :)  XOXO

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 12

I was not expecting Bella to be so persnickity about her feeding from criminals, but when you think about it, yeah it would be disgusting to suck on a stinking and dirty neck.

Wow, Bella was quite the Super Vamp Tranq Gal there, huh?  LOL

Holy cow, talk about your uber fancy ancestoral homes, hey?  LOL

Mmm, I loved Jasper teaching technique for helping Bella to learn how to control her empathic ability - very sexy.
;~D

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'"... And I'm telling you this much now, I'm not living in the same house as your father. Just his mere presence is a cockblocker."'

Tell me about it, try living next door to your mother-in-law for nine years... it puts a damper on your love life and a HUGH strain on your marriage.  I shouldn't have let my hubby talk me into it all those years ago.  Oh well, a learning experience, hey?  UGH!  LOL

.-.-.
Hmm, it almost sounds like Charlie has the power of persuasion to compel others to give into his desires.  Now that would be a handy power to have, wouldn't you think?  LOL
;~D

Great story, I'm looking forward to reading additional chapters.

Well done - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

Bella couldn't be perfect--no, no, no; she needed to have some newborn challenges too and what better than having to control both an empathic gift and a shield.  There were hints along the way that she was an empath, she was always perceptive to everything around her and she was always able to empathize with her friends more.  Jasper will be too busy helping Bella and Emmett and Peter will completely understand why he can't help with Lauren and Jess.  

I decided to give Jasper a past and a family that he remembered and felt a strong connection to rather than one whose life was defined by the time he spent with Maria.  Remember that Maria has already been killed by Jasper and Peter in this story so she doesn't exist.  Also, by giving Jasper a past, it literally makes him Alice's polar opposite.  She doesn't remember her human life at all.

As for the handi-wipes, think about how obsessive Bella was about the steaks and you'll see where that fits.  Bella takes feeding seriously.  Besides, if you were a human feeding vampire, would you seriously want to put your mouth on some stinky person's neck?

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 11

*::sporting a huge grin::*
This chapter was great with Bella's last moments; especially Jasper's choice of timing for turning her.
;~D

I thought that it was brilliant how Bella was so very calm, cool, and collected upon her awakening.

Jasper is indeed a lucky sod in that he is able to have sex with his mate from the get go of her awakening, whereas Peter and Emmett have to wait a few months for their significant others to get control of themselves - too funny that.  LOL
:P

Great chapter and story - well written - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

Jasper gave Bella just enough time to relax and unwind prior to her change so she could come to terms with it without over thinking it.  Jess and Lauren's awakenings have much to do with their abrupt changes.  While Bella has had years to contemplate the vampire world, Jess and Lauren have only had a year spent in bliss with their mates.  As for Bella's awakening, she was an odd duck to begin with and Charlie's easy transition should have given you enough hints as to how Bella's change would go.  Now, if I were the FedEx delivery man, I certainly wouldn't return to the house of horrors.

Thank you for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 10

I got a kick out of the last name of the sales manager, Cheatum (cheat them), and the first and last name of the fleet sales manager, Richard Stroker, aka Dick Stroker - too funny.

Geez, the boys are completely clueless when it comes to protecting themselves from being shafted by salespeople.  Strange when you think of how they were able to prevent it during the divorce process, but put a pretty and new truck in front of them and they go all stupid (similar reaction that menfolk have when viewing breasts).  LOL

Oh man, talk about your over enthusiastic welcomes - poor Lauren and Jessica, and poor Bella for having suffered such a panic attack due to witnessing the events.

Well done - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

I had a blast coming up with those names for the salesmen.  I started the chapter off with the car negotiations to provide a backdrop, per se, of how quickly life can change.  You had strong, capable women who, in an instant, lost their lives due to unintentional accidents.  It also pointed out how out of touch the men were when it came to finances and real life.  The women are their links to the real world and they were also taught a very important life lesson in the process:  money isn't something that you flaunt or throw away.

As for Bella's reaction, it was normal and she was due for a break down.  Yes, she's been the proverbial rock of the group and yes, she knew that vampires posed a danger to humans; but to see it happening so instantly in front of her caused her to really think about the reality of vampirism.  Her friends lost their lives in front of her and she just wasn't prepared to witness their deaths, bear in mind that she didn't actually witness Angela losing her life.  Bella's a smart cookie though and Jasper loves her with all his heart, he'll make sure that she's able to relax and she just needs to take a breather to think things through.

Thank you for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

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Date: 17 Jan 2012 4:15 PM Title: Chapter 9

I was both horrified and yet twistedly amused about Edward's OCD impaired rape attempt of Bella.  Thank the gods that all of the friendly vamps guys showed up in time to prevent Doucheward from completing his intentions for Bella.

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I got a kick out of Lauren freaking out at the idea that she had unknowningly had sex with two of the wolves.

I enjoyed how things went down between the Charlie, the other vamps, Billy, Harry, and the wolves, in their negotiations for reworking the treaty.

It was heartwarming that Billy wanted to include some fishing areas into the treaty so that he could get together with Charlie sometime to drown some worms.

It was fantastic that they even offered to provide protection for Jessica and Emmett's wedding.

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'"You look like a southern belle, Jess," my father said. "Though I'm not sure where the cat comes in."

"Oh, stop, honey," my mother chastised. "Jess has always been a Hello Kitty fan. I didn't realize that she was quite so obsessed, but this is her wedding."'

The bit above was just to funny.

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Well done - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

Edward is obviously a sick and deranged character.  What I'm attempting to do is to liken him to a heroin addict; someone that will stop at nothing to get his personal choice of drug:  Bella's blood.  Alice is a different character altogether.  She is Edward's mate and her passion in life is pleasing her mate.  She has completely lost any semblance of herself and that's partly because her goal in life has always been to get her mate.  Now, that she has him, she'll do whatever it takes to please him.  In her eyes, he can do no wrong.  She is, in every sense of the word, Edward's enabler.

Jessica's fears are very valid and real.  She's an only child and she means the world to her parents as they do to her.  I wrote this part because I felt that book Bella never took this factor into consideration when committing herself to Edward.  She only thought of herself and what she wanted.  I wanted Jessica to actually consider her fears and reservations before committing herself to an eternity with Emmett.

Charlie definitely had tons to do with the pack's acceptance of this new group of vampires.  The fact that both Billy and Harry have their own daughters helped them to understand the scope of Charlie's thinking.  As fathers, they would do whatever it takes to protect their own children.  Jacob being a new father himself helped and so did Bella cooking dinner for the pack without being asked to do so.

More to come soon.  Thank you for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 3:36 PM Title: Chapter 8

OMFG, I was LMAO when I read how Peter proposed to Lauren.
;~D

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'... Hello Kitty wedding gown with the matching pink bridesmaid dresses...'  Ewww!  Between Emmett's choice of tuxes and Jessica's choice for the dresses... I was both cringing and laughing.

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Mmmm, Bella is one lucky gal to have Jasper be her first lover, and the fact that he marked her as his mate is hotter than He££, you know?
;~D

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Good God Gertie!  The interaction between Edward and Alice was so... twisted and disturbing that it gave me the willies.

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Well done - great story - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

Alice is just plain obsessed with pleasing Eddie Pooh and he knows it.  She truly feels that her job is to keep her mate happy and satisfied and if what he wants is Bella's blood, then she is going to try her best to get it for him.  Now, Edward is just an anally rententive, self-righteous, spoiled brat who believes that a woman is there to serve a man.  He is also completely obsessed, not only with Bella's blood, but with Bella's body as well.  He feels that Bella is rightfully his because he had her first.  He's definitely not all there and neither is Alice.

As for the proposals, my personal favorite is actually Emmett's.  I'd love for a guy to whisk me up to the top of the Eiffel Tower and propose to me in such a sweet and romantic way.  As you can see, though, each vampire proposed in a way that suited their personality the best.

Jasper finally was able to claim Bella, in a much more intimate way than he had planned.  Now that Bella's scent has changed to an even more fragrant one, you can bet that once Eddie boy gets a whiff off it, he'll become even more obsessed. Bella took her time with having sex for the first time.  It's a testament to how much she's matured, and this time she was careful and completely sure of the man she was dating instead of becoming consumed like she did with Edward.

The fact that Peter's been drinking from Lauren all along is proof of how different each couple is from each other.  Still, they all have good, secure relationships.

As for Jessica's choice of wedding attire, go to this page:  jezebel (dot) com/5069998/hello-kitty-wedding-gowns-for-the-childish-bride

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO mama4dukes

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Date: 17 Jan 2012 2:59 PM Title: Chapter 7

I was cackling up a storm about the stuff Charlie was saying and doing when he was drunk in Vegas; especially when he was in possession of the LVPD police car that he stole.  I thought that it was great that he took it back to the police station, and the note that he left in it.  I'm still wondering about their having placed the vehicle upon the roof of the building.

I love this story!

Well written - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

Charlie went out with a bang, fulfilling everything he could on his bucket list.  I wrote a more playful Charlie because he's a newlywed and he's still a relatively young forty-two.  He and Laurent will become good friends.  Laurent is delighted to have someone his age around.


Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO mama4dukes



Author's Response:

Charlie went out with a bang, fulfilling everything he could on his bucket list.  I wrote a more playful Charlie because he's a newlywed and he's still a relatively young forty-two.  He and Laurent will become good friends.  Laurent is delighted to have someone his age around.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO

 


 

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 6

OMG, I was laughing my a§§ off about Peter's costume - too f'ing funny.

Edward is a sick, twisted and self-centered piece of crap in his renewed interest in Bella.

Bummer about Jasper and Bella's, not to mention Peter and Lauren, and Emmett and Jessica's, playtime was interrupted by the arrival of the harbingers of bad news, both old and new.
;~D

I enjoy your take on the characters of Victoria and Laurent.

Great story - well written - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

You witnessed Jasper wielding his power at both the Halloween party, and then at home.  If he puts his mind to it and uses it properly, Jasper is capable of emotionally enslaving people, as Peter noted.  You might have noticed that Bella was seemingly unaffected by Jasper's gift, she wasn't unaffected, she was able to keep her head together because she knew that Jasper was using his gift.  


You heard from Edward, and now you know that he is obsessed with Bella's blood.  Edward is obsessed with Bella's blood, not with Bella herself. He thinks that she's beautiful, not physically, but because of her blood.  When he has sex with Alice, he is imagining Bella because her body houses the most perfectly, pure substance in the world to him.  Phoenix was an elaborate set-up for Edward by Alice so he could feast on Bella's blood.

Now, Alice, oh Alice.  She's about as crafty and manipulative as one can get.  She has no problem sleeping with people to get what she wants. She slept with James to get him to comply with her wishes so that he would go after Bella, even if she and Edward were mates.  At this point, though, she wants Bella dead, and she's willing to give Edward what he wants in hopes that he'll get over his obsession of Bella's pure, virgin blood.

Victoria and Laurent showed up with a warning.  I can tell you this much, those two are completely honest in their endeavors and they have absolutely no ulterior motives.  All they want to do is keep Bella safe, partly because they feel so horrible about what went down in Phoenix.  Like Victoria told Jasper, they tried their best to get to Bella on time.  The couple really will be a great help to the girls and, at this point, they need extra protection.  Laurent being a shield will be a great help in training Bella, just as soon as she can get her mind away from the BDSM novel. And Lauren was nice enough to offer them showers and even clean panties in Victoria's sake.  

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.  Mr. and Mrs. Charlie Swan come for a visit next.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 5

LMAO, poor Emmett in his brain numbing job due to the lowered IQ of the clientele that frequent his work place.

Jasper is a lucky sod to have so much in common with Bella that he is a happy camper with both their work place and the college courses that they are able to attend together.

I truly am enjoying reading this story.  It is very well written.  Keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

Bella is someone you should never go to a steakhouse with.  I did, however, put a bit of me in it.  I once sent a steak back three times at Morton's because they couldn't seem to get it to medium rare.  I was so annoyed then.

Carlisle slipped, and it was about time too.  Think about it, though, Angela is his mate and her blood was especially intoxicating to him.  He was also in the throes of passion and let his vampire senses take over.  It was after the deed was done that Carlisle completely lost it, Bella and Jasper had to take charge of the situation because Carlisle's mind was on Angela and Angela alone.  By the way, Peter's comment that only Bella could be Jasper's mate was particularly valid in this case.

As for Lauren and Jessica, they were a bit more accepting than the boys expected.  In Lauren's case, she was a bit disappointed that the vampires weren't cooler.

I had to throw Peter waiting tables and Emmett working the McDonald's drive-thru in there.  I can only picture how annoyed the actual employees get at customers and triply so with vampires.  Jasper is now a full fledged romance junkie.

As for Charlie, you'll have to wait and see.  Thank you for reading and reviewing.  XOXO mama4dukes

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 12:52 PM Title: Chapter 4

Bella and the girls are a blast in their nasty sense of humor in their backhanded complimentary pitcher of beer for the ex-boyfriends from Forks.

I'm looking forward to learning more about the past enperiences of Bella in a Steak House.

Well done - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

In chapter 4, you were able to see that Bella had true reasons for not jumping in to trust Jasper.  After two boyfriends that were ingrates, it's no surprise that she had her guard up.  Jasper, for his part was wrong to sneak into Bella's hotel room uninvited and thrust his attentions on her.  We'll give him a bit of a break for realizing, admitting to, and apologizing to Bella for the way he acted though.  That paved the way for Bella to open up to him about her own demons and vice versa.


I plead the fifth on the backwash beer trick, I never did that to any of my ex-boyfriends in college.  Really, I didn't.  Mike and company deserved it for the way they were talking about the girls though.  

It took Carlisle to finally explain vampire mating to Bella.  Now her friends need to be told and it'll happen sooner rather than later because the fact that the guys are vampires will come to light at a most untimely moment.

As for Bella and steakhouses, you'll have to wait until next chapter to find out.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 3

Wow, a horned-dog bump and grind love fest courtesy of the sexy vamps and their newly found liquored-up human mates... it is no wonder that Bella, the virgin, hightailed it out of there.  LOL
;~D

Great story, I love everything about it!

Well done - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

You have officially heard from both Jasper and Bella.  Unfortunately for Jasper, he's going to have a harder time than everyone else convincing Bella to give him a chance.  First of all, she's not drunk like her three friends.  She was instantly on alert as soon as she ran into the Cullens.  Second, her questions and fears are all valid.  She cares about her friends and these are full blown red-eyed vampires.  Remember that during her previous encounter with vampires in Forks, she was taught that red eyes are bad and golden eyes are good.  She also doesn't know much about mating either.  At this point, I'm also going to tell you that she has no idea that wolves exist in La Push.


Peter took it upon himself to tell Bella about her and Jasper being mates because he knew that the latter would skirt the issue.  Bella needed to know and this will push things along for the two of them.  Bella's also mature enough to know when she needs to stop and take a break to think. She was not running away from her problems, rather, she was temporarily removing herself from the situation.  Now, she shouldn't have to notify Jasper of this, really, when you think about it, they just met, and he has no claim over her.  Notice, though, that she was responsible enough to send a text message to her three friends.  Remember all of this when you get to Jasper's POV next chapter.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 2

Great pairings, humor, dialog, and storyline.

Well written - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

So, you got to hear from Angela, Carlisle, Jessica, and Peter, and in the process got some important background information.  You were also able to see what a tight knit group the four girls were.  They are very protective of each other and they're there for each other no matter what.  Alice, Edward, Esme, and Rose also made an appearance.  I can tell you now that Edward is definitely not who he presents himself as, and neither is Alice.  You'll hear from them again soon as we start delving into the plot.


Now that you know who is mated with whom, the couples can party a little with each other while the guys try to make some headway with the girls.  I can tell you that Jasper is not going to have an easy time with Bella.  She's been burned before by a vampire, and she is also aware what vampires are capable of.  Her friends have no knowledge of the supernatural and Bella will be putting all of the guys through the third degree.

Glad you enjoyed the chapter.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO

Reviewer: TheMoreSmutTheBetter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2012 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 1

OMG, this chapter was a blast to read.  It was funny, dramatic, and heartwarming too - I love it!

Well done - keep up the good work.

=)



Author's Response:

Welcome and I'm glad you enjoyed it.  XOXO

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2012 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 12

ah  an extra gift for Bella.  I can see the empathic thing though cause she always cared about other feelings.



Author's Response:

You're very perceptive, I threw in tiny hints throughout the previous chapters as well.

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2012 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 12

looking forward to seeing what kind of powers she and charlie have. cant wiat till the next chatper 



Author's Response:

Oh, wait until Eleazar gets a read on Charlie.  *winks*

Reviewer: MrShyRockstar Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2012 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 11

Uwah. I love this story its so.. fucking amazing! :D! Its like super duper awesome dude like amazingly fantastically fucktastic ^_^

I like that Jasper did that for Bella and how he changed Bella :) That was just so perfect. Ahaha it makes me giggle to see how Lauren and Jess woke up but its almost fitting for them... they are always so dramatic so why wouldn't them becoming newborns be dramatic as well? And no, that poor poor delievery man :(

-Panda



Author's Response:

Hi Panda,

Aw, thanks for the compliments on my story!  I'm enjoying writing this one.

Jasper is a sensitive guy and he realized that Bella seeing her best friends lose their lives in front of her was a huge stressor.  Yes, Lauren and Jess had dramatic wake-ups because they're drama queens and the delivery man?  Hehe.  XOXO

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Dec 2011 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 11

Loved her day of pampering and junk food before her change... and then those Swan's are just freaks of nature huh?! LOL :) Can't wait to read the next one!



Author's Response:

Yes, those Swans are a bit odd.  Bella deserved the pampering, she watched her two best friends get murdered before her very eyes.  XOXO

Reviewer: OposKneg Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Dec 2011 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 11

'i'll get it"....so funny....thanks.



Author's Response:

Well, someone had to get the door!  LOL.  XOXO

Reviewer: AngelBones76 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Dec 2011 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 11

Excellent chapter, and what a sweet thing for Jasper to do for ehr on her last human day.  Very cool :)

Love it, and hope you have a great holiday!



Author's Response:

Jasper is as sweet as pie.  XOXO

Reviewer: samolly Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Dec 2011 2:48 AM Title: Chapter 11

Nice ;) Love it!!! 



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it.  XOXO

Reviewer: Voracious_Reader Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2011 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 11

So Pete and Emmett get forced abstinence and jasper gets a little payback? LOL! I guess Carlisle is going to be a little traumatized by nearly being raped by a newborn, or is Angela going to explain nicely that he's hers and Lauren has to keep her hands off? This just gets funnier every time you post.



Author's Response:

We're getting ready for a bit of a surprise.  *wags eyebrows*

Reviewer: crystanroten Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Dec 2011 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 11

wow! freaky bella is such a natural vampire lol and lauren and jess were funny! cant wait for more!!



Author's Response:

Bella makes a superb vampire and Lauren and Jess--they were nutty to begin with.  XOXO

Reviewer: Tinkerbell Blake Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Dec 2011 11:41 AM Title: Chapter 11

I thought that Jasper got it all right. I'm pleased that Bella got to relax first and is finding it easy. I do think its funny that the girls are struggling more. I look forward to the next chapter. Hope you have a great Christmas and new year.



Author's Response:

Bella truly needed to unwind after her traumatic week.  More to come.  XOXO

Reviewer: Purple Passion Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Dec 2011 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 11

You just knew Bella would completley skip your newborn stage. Look at her dad....it's a Swan thing ;-)



Author's Response:

It's all in the genes.  The Swans are truly special.  XOXO

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Dec 2011 6:13 AM Title: Chapter 11

Love how he took her away to relax.  lol for the wax.   Hee Hee for Bella having such an easy change and transition.   Fuck buddy.....roflmfao.    Poor Fed Ex guy.

Merry Christmas!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Jasper needed a bit of self gratification for giving Bella some r and r time alone.  The Swans are truly special as you will notice soon.  XOXO



Author's Response:

Jasper needed a bit of self gratification for giving Bella some r and r time alone.  The Swans are truly special as you will notice soon.  XOXO

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Dec 2011 5:56 AM Title: Chapter 10

Peter:  Go Lauren and Bella.   Usually its the men who get the car deals.  Wow  those girls are bad ass.  Tyler aint gonna know what hit him.    OMG those girls work great together.    go bella for getting a new ride for herself too.

LOL for Charlie wanting to go fast and the girls shutting him down.   Wow   Lauren with a broken back.  That sucks.  Aww poor scared B.   Agree that Fuckward and Malice are off the deep end.



Author's Response:

The girls knew exactly how to work the deal, especially after they learned that the salesman was Tyler.  Bella deserved a new ride.  

Bella is terrified because her friend's deaths came so instantly.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: OposKneg Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Dec 2011 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 1

Well I didn

t get you told last chapter that I liked it that you had the townfolk out looking for Bella, never seen that in a story before, so neat...enjoying Lauren being a friend also. Great start!  I'm also a huge fan of Jasper/Bella stories so that doesn't hurt to begin with anyway. ha ha



Author's Response:

Yes, the townspeople did go out looking for Bella.  I imagine that in a small town like Forks, the missing daughter of the chief of police had to be big news.  Someone had to give Lauren a break!  XOXO

Reviewer: crystanroten Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Dec 2011 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 10

wow those girls showed them!!  and por bella she must be terrified! loved it and ready for more!!



Author's Response:

Yes, the girls worked the deal.  Bella is scared because she literally saw Lauren and Jess lose their lives in a snap.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: Voracious_Reader Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Dec 2011 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 10

Aww, poor shell-shocked Bella! but I don't think even a vampire attack would let me have ANYTHING with 'Hello Kitty' on it anywhere near me, friend or not. Pat's gonna feel awful at having to apologize for breaking her duaghter almost in half.



Author's Response:

Bella is terrified because the lives of her friends were gone in a snap.  Yes, Pat will feel guilty, just wait until the girls wake up though.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: AngelBones76 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Dec 2011 8:45 PM Title: Chapter 10

Haha, that scene reminds me of when my roommate went car shopping and the first thing the guy did was show her the make-up mirror.  Needless to say, she purchased a vehicle elsewhere... :)

Wow...that salesman is a complete idiot...I mean, really?Also, it is NEVER a good idea to call The Major's mate a bitch...

Boys, boys, boys...you think your mates are feral now?  Just wait until they're changed and you pull something like this...

Are you kidding with the names at the dealership?  Freaking hilarious!!  I actually did a spit-take on my computer screen hahaha

Haha, Bella brought The Major to his knees...and I bet she is in shock...just a little bit maybe...wow...

Nope, the boys can never be trusted with checkbooks and dealerships...

That was pretty smooth about getting a new truck, and man, the changes were pretty sudden, weren't they?  I wonder if Charlie feels bad about grumbling about their changes now...

LOVE IT!!

 

 



Author's Response:

Honestly, those vampires are completely naive when it comes to money.  And no, calling the Major's Mate a bitch is a horrific idea.

Lauren and Jess's changes were just a bit too abrupt for Bella, that's why she's freaking out now.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: tigger5600 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Dec 2011 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 10

Loved this chapter.... and OMG loved that they took all the guys form of money! and no they should never be allowed to make a deal.... but the girls... if they can manage a deal like that while human imagine what they will be able to do once they are changed! :) Bella's reaction was great... finally she had some self preservation.... Can't wait to read the next one!



Author's Response:

I wish I could make a car deal like the girls did.  Bella was terrified because...well...she saw her two friends literally lose their lives in a snap.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: Mary Mary Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Dec 2011 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 10

Good and funny, as usual..

 

Thanks Mama.



Author's Response:

Thanks, Mary.  More coming your way.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO  mama4dukes

Reviewer: Mary Mary Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Dec 2011 1:22 PM Title: Chapter 9

Edward and Alice need to stay with each other as they have been move on "with each other".  If Jasper, Charlie or any of the guys get a hold of Ed he will be a gonner.

 

I love how Charlie looks at things. "I  am alive".



Author's Response:

The problem is that Edward can't move on from Bella's blood--it's his heroin.  Charlie has a fantastic outlook on life.  

P.S.  I'm so sorry that I somehow missed replying to your review.  

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