Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 17
More please.
Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 17
More please.
Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 17
More please.
Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 17
More please.
Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 17
More please.
Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 17
More please.
Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 17
More please.
Date: 22 Nov 2023 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 17
More please.
Date: 21 Nov 2022 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 17
Loved it! Can't wait to see what will happen next!
Date: 20 Nov 2022 4:35 AM Title: Chapter 7
Loved it! Charlie is an amazing father to Bella!
Date: 29 Apr 2019 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 1
I would love to see this continued.
Date: 15 Aug 2017 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 17
I so so so so love all your stories. I hope that you update this story and YFWYALFAW soon or when you can.
Date: 14 May 2017 11:22 AM Title: Chapter 17
I love this story and You'll Always Find What You're Looking for at Walmart!!! But are you ever going to finish them?? I know I've asked a few times and I'm sure a lot of people have but, could you please let us know??? We only keep asking because we just love you. You have serious talent and it would be a dog gone shame if you let these stories go unfinished. I know you still write cause I've seen on fabric that you've recently posted some new stories. I know I'm a pain in the rear and I am sorry about that but I'm PLEADING with you now to give your fans these stories.
Date: 25 Feb 2017 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
I let me just say that I love your stories. You make laugh, have great lemons I truly hope that one day this story will be finalized
Date: 25 Feb 2017 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
I let me just say that I love your stories. You make laugh, have great lemons I truly hope that one day this story will be finalized
Date: 25 Feb 2017 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 1
I let me just say that I love your stories. You make laugh, have great lemons I truly hope that one day this story will be finalized
Date: 15 Feb 2016 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 17
I would so love to read more of this one if you decide to pick back up on it!
Date: 21 Nov 2015 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 17
Oh please continue this story......
Date: 08 Jan 2015 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 17
I really hope you work on this after intensity or with it its all good.
Date: 05 Apr 2013 4:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
Awh man i need more! I HOPE you can update soon this is really good..Fuckward needs to die along with the twisted pixie.
Date: 30 Dec 2012 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 1
please say you havent givin up on this story i need to know whats happening.
Date: 20 Oct 2012 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 17
Glad Demertri is there to help out. ROFL with the fake twilight book references Glad Rose got Esme away. Poor little girl and her family. Fuckward and Malice really need to die.
Date: 20 Oct 2012 1:39 AM Title: Chapter 17
Poor lauren and jess . But holy shit edward and alice feeding on minnocents and a baby!? They are really crazy....
Date: 17 Oct 2012 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 17
wow!!! So much happened... Too funny with their talk about the books :) Can't wait to read more!!! So happy that you are back to writing :)
-Kate
Date: 17 Oct 2012 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 17
loved it cant wait till the next update when ever that will be ! keep it comming
Author's Response:
I'll do the best that I can. Thanks for sticking with me. I'm so happy that you enjoyed it. XOXO
Date: 29 Apr 2012 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 16
looking forward to more .... but was this chapter 16? because its labled as chapter 17.... just to let you know
Author's Response:
I'll check on it immediately. It was chapter 16. Thanks for reading and reviewing. More to come soon. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 29 Apr 2012 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 16
Loved it!! Great idea in singling out Chelsea.... she was the key to swaying everyone. Loved Charlie's fighting skills :) Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response:
Yes, singling out Chelsea was a necessity. Remember though, Charlie has already proven to be much more powerful than any of the Volturi vampires. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 29 Apr 2012 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 16
Charlie is one hell of a vamp. Gotta love him. Marcus is a trip
Author's Response:
Remember what Eleazar said: Charlie is who the Volturi will want--not Bella. And yes, he's a cool dude from our generation my friend. Marcus will be a wonderful addition. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 29 Mar 2012 2:08 AM Title: Chapter 15
I just finished reading this story from the first chapter. Amazing! I adore your Jasper and Bella. For all that she has gone through, now she understands that Jasper is there for her - 100%. Charlie! As Jasper said he is frighteningly powerful. Luckily he 's a good, decent man and never abuses it. Kudos on a story well told!
I'm so sorry that someone found the need to steal your work. They are our children,in a way, so the hurt is real and justified! We'll be on the look,out! Thanks for a great piece of ORIGINAL fanfiction!
Author's Response:
Hello, glad you're enjoying the story. Jasper and Bella are definitely there for each other. As you're beginning to see, they're feeding into their shared gift too. Charlie is powerful and the Volturi will definitely want his gift for themselves. They're a power hungry bunch. Fortunately, Charlie is on the right side of justice.
Regarding the theft of my story, thank you. Believe it or not, one of my other stories was copied and pasted onto another site just the other week. Unbelievable--it take so much time and energy to get the plagiarized story removed and it is extremely frustrating.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO
Date: 23 Mar 2012 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 15
DPOV: Well at least D has brains to think with. Ewww a pair of panties? OMG he pulled it off?!?!?! too funny<p>JPOV: Go J & B. Sexcalthalon. hmmm professor whitlock, yummy. Sex house, ha ha. Love that they have Charlie there for B. OMG Germaphobe B is funny. hee hee for peter having to stop the girls from laughing. Dayum Charlie is gooood. hmmm D with T, not sure if that is good or not. OMG Alistair did NOT just say that to D about Tanya?!?!? Hee Hee for clothes conversation. Can't wait for them to take out Malice, Fuckward, and the Moron V brothers.</p>
Author's Response:
Chapter 15 brought in Demetri, but, more importantly featured Charlie's power. By coaxing Demetri's true feelings out, he was able to break the bond that Chelsea placed on him. This proves that Charlie isn't willing to abuse the power he wields, he could have just as easily commanded Demetri to follow him, but he didn't.
Demetri is an example of a good character who was controlled by threats and a false bond. You'll see more of this next chapter when some other Volturi members arrive in Alaska. The Volturi are an example of vampires abusing another's gift. If they got ahold of Charlie, who knows what kind of damage they could do. One thing is for certain, though, it can't happen without Chelsea--who fabricates bonds for them.
The Volturi's abuse of power is reason enough for our team to revolt against them--Eleazar is well aware of this fact. Now that they have amassed a group of talented vampires, it won't be too long until they, themselves, are under threat.
As for Jasper's and Bella's gifts--um...poor Demetri. He's going to be scarred for eternity.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 22 Mar 2012 9:42 PM Title: Chapter 15
Another fun and entertaing chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response:
I'm so happy that you enjoyed it. More coming soon. Thank you for reading and reviewing. XOXO
Date: 22 Mar 2012 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 15
OMG poor Demitri... I can't believe he did that!! Great chapter.... So they are going to over throw the Volturi....Can't wait to read the next one!!
Author's Response:
Ouch! Yep, Demetri was in some serious pain. They really do have to overthrow the Volturi. Thank you for reading and reviewing. XOXO
Date: 22 Mar 2012 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 15
Heck yeah, we need to take them all out...Aro is a complete idiot to simply take the missive and not verify it...sheesh...
I really like how you have managed to paint three different Aros in your stories. It's pretty cool, and I can't wait to see him dethroned...
Author's Response:
Yes, Aro is an absolute dolt...keep in mind that he's been alive for thousands of years and he's pretty set in his ways. He trusts Carlisle Cullen--and Alice and Edward are being very smart by using his name. They are aware of the weight it carries in the world.
Yeah, I need to dethrone Aro this time, but I believe my favorite Aro is Paul's buddy in Walmart. Thank you for reading and reviewing. XOXO
Date: 22 Mar 2012 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 15
Poor Demetri is right. I mean the guy tore his own dick off! that's fucking aweful and hilarious in the same right lmao. Omg, I would never let him live it down. But he was thinking of Tanya, deep down I think he always knew she was hismate but his bond to the volturi didnt let him act on it or have it come together. But once Charlie got his bond to the Volturi taken care of, it came to light!
Now I an see why theywould want Charlie more than they would want Bella. His gift is very awesome and it would gain them even more power. Fuck thats awful.
Bella's panties though??? Seriously, I'm grossed out and have half the mind to go check to make sure all my panties are where they belong lmao.
I love how Jasper's pov came along. I love hearing from him lmao.
Author's Response:
Poor Demetri, he needed a surgical procedure performed on him upon his arrival in Denali. Meanwhile, Jasper is thinking that Demetri is extremely disturbed when he and Bella were actually the cause of his...um...amputation. There were lots of answers hidden within this chapters and we'll be bringing more to light in the next. Thank you for reading and reviewing. XOXO
Date: 21 Mar 2012 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 15
lol
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO
Date: 21 Mar 2012 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 15
lookingforward to the next chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you, the next chapter is coming soon. Thanks for reviewing. XOXO
Date: 29 Feb 2012 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 14
Love the chapter! Creepy succubus house wow.... Love the empath lesson! Can't wait to read more !
Author's Response:
Yes, the love shack was a bit much for most normal folk, but perfect for the succubi sisters. Jasper and Bella were simply to nice to tell them off. t Jasper is a Dartmouth educated teacher, of course he'll be *talented*...ahem. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 16 Feb 2012 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 14
Hey...if I was alone with Jasper in the woods, I would not give a flying fig what the cabin looked like hee hee :)
Um...wow...I take it back...I would get my own place too...
Love the empath lessons, I think I would goof up a couple of them on purpose haha :)
Excellent, and I, of course, can't wait for more!!
Author's Response:
Creepy love shack, but really nice succubi sisters. They just don't know how to take no for an answer.
Empath lessons are fantastic with Professor Whitlock.
More to come. Thanks
for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 12 Feb 2012 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 14
loved it! tanya an kate cracked me up! cant wait for more!
Author's Response:
Although they don't understand the meaning of the word no, Tanya and Kate are really sweet. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 12 Feb 2012 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 14
looking forward to more
Author's Response:
More to come soon. Glad you're enjoying it. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 12 Feb 2012 5:17 AM Title: Chapter 14
BPOV: EWWWWW for cabin and those icky women. I'd be going somewhere else immediately. Guess those women havent heard of safe, sane, and CONSENTUAL!. RV sounds like an interesting solution. LOL for laundry lessons. Cool emotion practice and lemony end to practice. Wow they can project really far. Wonder if they are amplifiers to each other?
Author's Response:
- Ah, the cabin of pleasure? Inequities? Kink? Hmm...Tanya and Kate are very open sexually, but they have a couple of marbles missing. They're very sweet though. Jasper and Bella are simply too nice, they didn't want to yell at the girls since they were trying to be hospitable in offering up their sex den. Thank goodness Peter and Lauren are freaks.
Date: 12 Feb 2012 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 14
that cabin sounded nasty, but perfect for the Denali whores.
Author's Response:
Yes, the love shack was a bit much for most normal folk, but perfect for the succubi sisters. Jasper and Bella were simply to nice to tell them off. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 08 Feb 2012 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 13
This was really good, naturally!
I love Charlie's gift, and I love that they are about to overthrow the VOlturi :) *claps hands*
Yes, Alice surely would. Her mate's needs are her only concern, and she definitely will stop at nothing for him...talk about co-dependence...
Author's Response:
They still haven't decided yet on overthrowing the Volturi...
Alice is absolutely feeding off of Edward's addiction. XOXO
Date: 08 Feb 2012 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 12
Bella is funny for a newborn...
The empathic teaching the empath was kind of hot :)
Love it!
Author's Response:
Bella's an interesting newborn--she's retained most of her human traits. And Jasper? Let's just say that Bella has the best instructor...*ahem*
XOXO
Date: 03 Feb 2012 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 13
OMG, they are going to start a revolution and bring down the Volturi government? Wow.
Poor Tanya for not understanding the principle of how to eat something as simple as a hotdog. I thought that they would have had a TV, DVD player, satellite system for entertainment, and that she would have seen a movie at some point within the last 20 years or so in which somebody ate a hotdog. I'm a bit disappointed that she has not been keeping up with modern technology as to have witnessed such an everyday activity on the boob tube. J/K It was funnier than §hit when she was all ready to masturbate with the hot dog, after having eaten the bun. Sheesh, stunted vocabulary to not know the difference between masticate and masturbate. It must be that her blond roots are showing. LOL J/K
:p
I was rather impressed with how Charlie handled the whole situation with Alistair. He was very mature, logical, intelligent, authoritative, commanding, leader-like, etc.
This is a great story; I love everything about it... the humor, drama, sense of suspense, passion, the characters involved, the characters and how they have developed in personality, their interactions in action and dialog, and the plot thus far. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next and also to reading additional chapters.
Well done - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Tanya is...hmm...well, she's a horny lady and she has a one track mind. You'll see what I mean when I post the next chapter.
As for Charlie, I doubt that he became a police chief by sheer luck, there had to be something p in the noggin.
Glad you're enjoying the chapter. XOXO
Date: 24 Jan 2012 5:32 PM Title: Chapter 13
ALICE AND EDWARD THOSE FUCKERS. UGH!
Author's Response:
Alice and Edward are insane! XOXO
Date: 24 Jan 2012 6:44 AM Title: Chapter 13
The hot dog eating was great, poor Tanya! ALice and Eddie need to be tracked down if they are trading on their old association with Carlisle. Perhaps he needs to call and warn all the vamps he knows, including Aro? He could make it sound like he corrected Edward's abandonment of her and killed her, maybe? Nothing like a quick bit of a frame up to clear out a problem, lol.
Author's Response:
Something absolutely needs to be done about Alice and Edward. We're getting to that part soon. XOXO
Date: 24 Jan 2012 3:35 AM Title: Chapter 13
wow... ok so I have finally got all caught up on all 3 stories... for some strange reason I didn't get the last update email :( .... Loved the last 2 chapters! Bella cleaning her kill first! too funny! .... and then this one.. Peter is such a perv with the hot dog! LOL ... and then Charlie's powers! wow! Can't wait to read the next one!
Author's Response:
One of my other readers didn't get an update for the last chapter either--it must have been some sort of technical glitch. :)
Bella was always a bit OCD about food...
As for Peter and the hot dog? Did you notice that none of the other guys said a word. I'm sure Charlie and Emmett knew how hot dogs are to be masticated.
XOXO
Date: 23 Jan 2012 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 13
Well well the nasty keep being nasty. LOL
Author's Response:
Yes...the nasty are nasty and are controlled by their insanity. XOXO
Date: 23 Jan 2012 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 13
well i hope bella is the one to kill edward ! looking forward to the next chatper
Author's Response:
Edward will get what's coming to him! XOXO
Date: 23 Jan 2012 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 13
Carlisle: awww Poor Jess. Gotta be hard. Sucks that the girls are housebound and all. LOL for Eli buying the house to get rid of all the riff raff. At least Eli was nice enough to warn Carlisle and all. Charlie can be a bit scary. LOl for Tanya. Wow Jazz really has to get that temper under control. Gotta love Charlie. He is a blast. Crazy hearing him curse too. Wow talented family. awww Mean to make her acutally eat it. OMG Masticate/Masturbate. You are too funny. Someone smack peter. Bella and her food obsessions is so goofy.
Jazz: Poor Bella and Jess. Glad the girls all get to see each otheragain. Ah Alistair huh? Wonder how Malice suckered him into it. lol for flirty Charlie. Ah so Fuckward and Malice are throwing Daddy C's name around. aww Jazz zapped for no reason. lol for the description of esme. Aww for Bella having to move away for a bit. But its for the best I guess
A/N: Hell yeah the V would want Charlie. And they could possibly get him by using any of the girls against him. I want Charlie to meet up with Fuckward and Malice. muhahaha Fun gift time then. And of course the V will become involved at some point.
Author's Response:
You've met the Denalis and they are pretty decent folks. You also learned what Charlie's gift is with the way he was able to manipulate Tanya. She really does need to review her grammar a bit. There's a distinct difference between the definitions of masticate and masturbate.
Now you know just how insane Alice is and Edward is even worse. They are both mentally ill and Edward's addiction has taken complete control of both of their faculties. They've lost their common sense.
Alistair is a good, honorable man. He truly thought that he was assisting Carlisle. Let's just hope that Edward's use of his name doesn't go too far.
As far as Bella is concerned, she is an empath and a newborn vampire and she needs to gain emotional control in relative peace. Eleazar's solution of the cabin is perfect. He's very experienced with newborn gifts so he knows what needs to be done.
Thank you for reading and reviewing. More to come soon. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 22 Jan 2012 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
You're very welcome !I can tell, this one is pretty epic :D
Yeah Jasper seems to be a sensitive guy :) I'm glad he is though, because Bella sometimes needs that.
XOXO
Author's Response:
Jasper is definitely sensitive and so is Bella--that's why they're both empaths. :) XOXO
Date: 17 Jan 2012 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 12
I was not expecting Bella to be so persnickity about her feeding from criminals, but when you think about it, yeah it would be disgusting to suck on a stinking and dirty neck.
Wow, Bella was quite the Super Vamp Tranq Gal there, huh? LOL
Holy cow, talk about your uber fancy ancestoral homes, hey? LOL
Mmm, I loved Jasper teaching technique for helping Bella to learn how to control her empathic ability - very sexy.
;~D
.-.-.
'"... And I'm telling you this much now, I'm not living in the same house as your father. Just his mere presence is a cockblocker."'
Tell me about it, try living next door to your mother-in-law for nine years... it puts a damper on your love life and a HUGH strain on your marriage. I shouldn't have let my hubby talk me into it all those years ago. Oh well, a learning experience, hey? UGH! LOL
.-.-.
Hmm, it almost sounds like Charlie has the power of persuasion to compel others to give into his desires. Now that would be a handy power to have, wouldn't you think? LOL
;~D
Great story, I'm looking forward to reading additional chapters.
Well done - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Date: 17 Jan 2012 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 11
*::sporting a huge grin::*
This chapter was great with Bella's last moments; especially Jasper's choice of timing for turning her.
;~D
I thought that it was brilliant how Bella was so very calm, cool, and collected upon her awakening.
Jasper is indeed a lucky sod in that he is able to have sex with his mate from the get go of her awakening, whereas Peter and Emmett have to wait a few months for their significant others to get control of themselves - too funny that. LOL
:P
Great chapter and story - well written - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Date: 17 Jan 2012 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 10
I got a kick out of the last name of the sales manager, Cheatum (cheat them), and the first and last name of the fleet sales manager, Richard Stroker, aka Dick Stroker - too funny.
Geez, the boys are completely clueless when it comes to protecting themselves from being shafted by salespeople. Strange when you think of how they were able to prevent it during the divorce process, but put a pretty and new truck in front of them and they go all stupid (similar reaction that menfolk have when viewing breasts). LOL
Oh man, talk about your over enthusiastic welcomes - poor Lauren and Jessica, and poor Bella for having suffered such a panic attack due to witnessing the events.
Well done - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Date: 17 Jan 2012 4:15 PM Title: Chapter 9
I was both horrified and yet twistedly amused about Edward's OCD impaired rape attempt of Bella. Thank the gods that all of the friendly vamps guys showed up in time to prevent Doucheward from completing his intentions for Bella.
.-.-.
I got a kick out of Lauren freaking out at the idea that she had unknowningly had sex with two of the wolves.
I enjoyed how things went down between the Charlie, the other vamps, Billy, Harry, and the wolves, in their negotiations for reworking the treaty.
It was heartwarming that Billy wanted to include some fishing areas into the treaty so that he could get together with Charlie sometime to drown some worms.
It was fantastic that they even offered to provide protection for Jessica and Emmett's wedding.
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'"You look like a southern belle, Jess," my father said. "Though I'm not sure where the cat comes in."
"Oh, stop, honey," my mother chastised. "Jess has always been a Hello Kitty fan. I didn't realize that she was quite so obsessed, but this is her wedding."'
The bit above was just to funny.
.-.-.
Well done - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Date: 17 Jan 2012 3:36 PM Title: Chapter 8
OMFG, I was LMAO when I read how Peter proposed to Lauren.
;~D
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'... Hello Kitty wedding gown with the matching pink bridesmaid dresses...' Ewww! Between Emmett's choice of tuxes and Jessica's choice for the dresses... I was both cringing and laughing.
.-.-.
Mmmm, Bella is one lucky gal to have Jasper be her first lover, and the fact that he marked her as his mate is hotter than He££, you know?
;~D
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Good God Gertie! The interaction between Edward and Alice was so... twisted and disturbing that it gave me the willies.
.-.-.
Well done - great story - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Date: 17 Jan 2012 2:59 PM Title: Chapter 7
I was cackling up a storm about the stuff Charlie was saying and doing when he was drunk in Vegas; especially when he was in possession of the LVPD police car that he stole. I thought that it was great that he took it back to the police station, and the note that he left in it. I'm still wondering about their having placed the vehicle upon the roof of the building.
I love this story!
Well written - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Charlie went out with a bang, fulfilling everything he could on his bucket list. I wrote a more playful Charlie because he's a newlywed and he's still a relatively young forty-two. He and Laurent will become good friends. Laurent is delighted to have someone his age around.
Author's Response:
Charlie went out with a bang, fulfilling everything he could on his bucket list. I wrote a more playful Charlie because he's a newlywed and he's still a relatively young forty-two. He and Laurent will become good friends. Laurent is delighted to have someone his age around. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO
Date: 17 Jan 2012 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 6
OMG, I was laughing my a§§ off about Peter's costume - too f'ing funny.
Edward is a sick, twisted and self-centered piece of crap in his renewed interest in Bella.
Bummer about Jasper and Bella's, not to mention Peter and Lauren, and Emmett and Jessica's, playtime was interrupted by the arrival of the harbingers of bad news, both old and new.
;~D
I enjoy your take on the characters of Victoria and Laurent.
Great story - well written - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
You witnessed Jasper wielding his power at both the Halloween party, and then at home. If he puts his mind to it and uses it properly, Jasper is capable of emotionally enslaving people, as Peter noted. You might have noticed that Bella was seemingly unaffected by Jasper's gift, she wasn't unaffected, she was able to keep her head together because she knew that Jasper was using his gift.
Date: 17 Jan 2012 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 5
LMAO, poor Emmett in his brain numbing job due to the lowered IQ of the clientele that frequent his work place.
Jasper is a lucky sod to have so much in common with Bella that he is a happy camper with both their work place and the college courses that they are able to attend together.
I truly am enjoying reading this story. It is very well written. Keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Date: 17 Jan 2012 12:52 PM Title: Chapter 4
Bella and the girls are a blast in their nasty sense of humor in their backhanded complimentary pitcher of beer for the ex-boyfriends from Forks.
I'm looking forward to learning more about the past enperiences of Bella in a Steak House.
Well done - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
In chapter 4, you were able to see that Bella had true reasons for not jumping in to trust Jasper. After two boyfriends that were ingrates, it's no surprise that she had her guard up. Jasper, for his part was wrong to sneak into Bella's hotel room uninvited and thrust his attentions on her. We'll give him a bit of a break for realizing, admitting to, and apologizing to Bella for the way he acted though. That paved the way for Bella to open up to him about her own demons and vice versa.
Date: 17 Jan 2012 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 3
Wow, a horned-dog bump and grind love fest courtesy of the sexy vamps and their newly found liquored-up human mates... it is no wonder that Bella, the virgin, hightailed it out of there. LOL
;~D
Great story, I love everything about it!
Well done - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
You have officially heard from both Jasper and Bella. Unfortunately for Jasper, he's going to have a harder time than everyone else convincing Bella to give him a chance. First of all, she's not drunk like her three friends. She was instantly on alert as soon as she ran into the Cullens. Second, her questions and fears are all valid. She cares about her friends and these are full blown red-eyed vampires. Remember that during her previous encounter with vampires in Forks, she was taught that red eyes are bad and golden eyes are good. She also doesn't know much about mating either. At this point, I'm also going to tell you that she has no idea that wolves exist in La Push.
Date: 17 Jan 2012 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 2
Great pairings, humor, dialog, and storyline.
Well written - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
So, you got to hear from Angela, Carlisle, Jessica, and Peter, and in the process got some important background information. You were also able to see what a tight knit group the four girls were. They are very protective of each other and they're there for each other no matter what. Alice, Edward, Esme, and Rose also made an appearance. I can tell you now that Edward is definitely not who he presents himself as, and neither is Alice. You'll hear from them again soon as we start delving into the plot.
Date: 17 Jan 2012 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 1
OMG, this chapter was a blast to read. It was funny, dramatic, and heartwarming too - I love it!
Well done - keep up the good work.
=)
Author's Response:
Welcome and I'm glad you enjoyed it. XOXO
Date: 11 Jan 2012 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 12
ah an extra gift for Bella. I can see the empathic thing though cause she always cared about other feelings.
Author's Response:
You're very perceptive, I threw in tiny hints throughout the previous chapters as well.
Date: 11 Jan 2012 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 12
looking forward to seeing what kind of powers she and charlie have. cant wiat till the next chatper
Author's Response:
Oh, wait until Eleazar gets a read on Charlie. *winks*
Date: 11 Jan 2012 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 11
Uwah. I love this story its so.. fucking amazing! :D! Its like super duper awesome dude like amazingly fantastically fucktastic ^_^
I like that Jasper did that for Bella and how he changed Bella :) That was just so perfect. Ahaha it makes me giggle to see how Lauren and Jess woke up but its almost fitting for them... they are always so dramatic so why wouldn't them becoming newborns be dramatic as well? And no, that poor poor delievery man :(
-Panda
Author's Response:
Hi Panda,
Aw, thanks for the compliments on my story! I'm enjoying writing this one.
Jasper is a sensitive guy and he realized that Bella seeing her best friends lose their lives in front of her was a huge stressor. Yes, Lauren and Jess had dramatic wake-ups because they're drama queens and the delivery man? Hehe. XOXO
Date: 29 Dec 2011 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 11
Loved her day of pampering and junk food before her change... and then those Swan's are just freaks of nature huh?! LOL :) Can't wait to read the next one!
Author's Response:
Yes, those Swans are a bit odd. Bella deserved the pampering, she watched her two best friends get murdered before her very eyes. XOXO
Date: 27 Dec 2011 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 11
'i'll get it"....so funny....thanks.
Author's Response:
Well, someone had to get the door! LOL. XOXO
Date: 22 Dec 2011 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 11
Excellent chapter, and what a sweet thing for Jasper to do for ehr on her last human day. Very cool :)
Love it, and hope you have a great holiday!
Author's Response:
Jasper is as sweet as pie. XOXO
Date: 22 Dec 2011 2:48 AM Title: Chapter 11
Nice ;) Love it!!!
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoyed it. XOXO
Date: 21 Dec 2011 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 11
So Pete and Emmett get forced abstinence and jasper gets a little payback? LOL! I guess Carlisle is going to be a little traumatized by nearly being raped by a newborn, or is Angela going to explain nicely that he's hers and Lauren has to keep her hands off? This just gets funnier every time you post.
Author's Response:
We're getting ready for a bit of a surprise. *wags eyebrows*
Date: 20 Dec 2011 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 11
wow! freaky bella is such a natural vampire lol and lauren and jess were funny! cant wait for more!!
Author's Response:
Bella makes a superb vampire and Lauren and Jess--they were nutty to begin with. XOXO
Date: 20 Dec 2011 11:41 AM Title: Chapter 11
I thought that Jasper got it all right. I'm pleased that Bella got to relax first and is finding it easy. I do think its funny that the girls are struggling more. I look forward to the next chapter. Hope you have a great Christmas and new year.
Author's Response:
Bella truly needed to unwind after her traumatic week. More to come. XOXO
Date: 20 Dec 2011 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 11
You just knew Bella would completley skip your newborn stage. Look at her dad....it's a Swan thing ;-)
Author's Response:
It's all in the genes. The Swans are truly special. XOXO
Date: 20 Dec 2011 6:13 AM Title: Chapter 11
Love how he took her away to relax. lol for the wax. Hee Hee for Bella having such an easy change and transition. Fuck buddy.....roflmfao. Poor Fed Ex guy.
Merry Christmas!!!!!!!
Author's Response:
Jasper needed a bit of self gratification for giving Bella some r and r time alone. The Swans are truly special as you will notice soon. XOXO
Author's Response:
Jasper needed a bit of self gratification for giving Bella some r and r time alone. The Swans are truly special as you will notice soon. XOXO
Date: 12 Dec 2011 5:56 AM Title: Chapter 10
Peter: Go Lauren and Bella. Usually its the men who get the car deals. Wow those girls are bad ass. Tyler aint gonna know what hit him. OMG those girls work great together. go bella for getting a new ride for herself too.
LOL for Charlie wanting to go fast and the girls shutting him down. Wow Lauren with a broken back. That sucks. Aww poor scared B. Agree that Fuckward and Malice are off the deep end.
Author's Response:
The girls knew exactly how to work the deal, especially after they learned that the salesman was Tyler. Bella deserved a new ride.
Bella is terrified because her friend's deaths came so instantly. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 11 Dec 2011 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 1
Well I didn
t get you told last chapter that I liked it that you had the townfolk out looking for Bella, never seen that in a story before, so neat...enjoying Lauren being a friend also. Great start! I'm also a huge fan of Jasper/Bella stories so that doesn't hurt to begin with anyway. ha ha
Author's Response:
Yes, the townspeople did go out looking for Bella. I imagine that in a small town like Forks, the missing daughter of the chief of police had to be big news. Someone had to give Lauren a break! XOXO
Date: 08 Dec 2011 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 10
wow those girls showed them!! and por bella she must be terrified! loved it and ready for more!!
Author's Response:
Yes, the girls worked the deal. Bella is scared because she literally saw Lauren and Jess lose their lives in a snap. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 06 Dec 2011 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 10
Aww, poor shell-shocked Bella! but I don't think even a vampire attack would let me have ANYTHING with 'Hello Kitty' on it anywhere near me, friend or not. Pat's gonna feel awful at having to apologize for breaking her duaghter almost in half.
Author's Response:
Bella is terrified because the lives of her friends were gone in a snap. Yes, Pat will feel guilty, just wait until the girls wake up though. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 05 Dec 2011 8:45 PM Title: Chapter 10
Haha, that scene reminds me of when my roommate went car shopping and the first thing the guy did was show her the make-up mirror. Needless to say, she purchased a vehicle elsewhere... :)
Wow...that salesman is a complete idiot...I mean, really?Also, it is NEVER a good idea to call The Major's mate a bitch...
Boys, boys, boys...you think your mates are feral now? Just wait until they're changed and you pull something like this...
Are you kidding with the names at the dealership? Freaking hilarious!! I actually did a spit-take on my computer screen hahaha
Haha, Bella brought The Major to his knees...and I bet she is in shock...just a little bit maybe...wow...
Nope, the boys can never be trusted with checkbooks and dealerships...
That was pretty smooth about getting a new truck, and man, the changes were pretty sudden, weren't they? I wonder if Charlie feels bad about grumbling about their changes now...
LOVE IT!!
Author's Response:
Honestly, those vampires are completely naive when it comes to money. And no, calling the Major's Mate a bitch is a horrific idea.
Lauren and Jess's changes were just a bit too abrupt for Bella, that's why she's freaking out now. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 05 Dec 2011 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 10
Loved this chapter.... and OMG loved that they took all the guys form of money! and no they should never be allowed to make a deal.... but the girls... if they can manage a deal like that while human imagine what they will be able to do once they are changed! :) Bella's reaction was great... finally she had some self preservation.... Can't wait to read the next one!
Author's Response:
I wish I could make a car deal like the girls did. Bella was terrified because...well...she saw her two friends literally lose their lives in a snap. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 05 Dec 2011 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 10
Good and funny, as usual..
Thanks Mama.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Mary. More coming your way. Thanks for reading and reviewing. XOXO mama4dukes
Date: 05 Dec 2011 1:22 PM Title: Chapter 9
Edward and Alice need to stay with each other as they have been move on "with each other". If Jasper, Charlie or any of the guys get a hold of Ed he will be a gonner.
I love how Charlie looks at things. "I am alive".
Author's Response:
The problem is that Edward can't move on from Bella's blood--it's his heroin. Charlie has a fantastic outlook on life.
P.S. I'm so sorry that I somehow missed replying to your review.