Date: 22 Jan 2016 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 24
What a tangled weave you made. Good story, please update it
[Report This]Date: 06 Oct 2013 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 2
waiting for chapter 25. please update
[Report This]Date: 06 Oct 2013 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 1
please please update
[Report This]Date: 18 Apr 2013 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 24
Oh I think Edward is innocent. ok, not totally, but he hasn't murdered anyone.
My guess is, Esme killed Elisabeth, Carlisle killed Esme.
[Report This]Date: 18 Apr 2013 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 23
oh my Gosh! You're one hell of a mystery writer! Great job! Great job!
I believe, the murderer is Carlisle.
Edward Platt's genitals were cut, Edward is afraid of him... I wonder if Edward Platt was a pedo. :-/
[Report This]Date: 18 Apr 2013 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 22
Thank you for updating. I was dying to know what happens next. This story is my favorite of all. I was so shocked and happy to see that there wasn't just one but three updates! You really made my day today!
[Report This]Date: 18 Feb 2013 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 21
OH MY GOD! OH MY GOD! Been waiting for this update! God! Edward has scared the hell out of me! I re-read the Platt and Edward's conversation, but I didn't get a clue. eeeep! Can't wait for the next update!
Brilliant chapter!
This is the only story where I have given 10/10 rating on every chapter. Mind blowing! Keep up the excellent work.
[Report This]Date: 13 Feb 2013 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 20
interesting story but i don't want edward to be a murderer i want him to be happy and stable with bella and their baby!!!!!!!!!!! please don't let this story end without a hea!!!!!!!!!!!
[Report This]Date: 12 Feb 2013 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 20
*screams at the top of my lungs* I LOVE THIS STORYYYYY!
Damn Edward! You psycho! lol! I knew something was off about him but after reading the revelations about him in this chapter has left me with fear and chills. This guy is a total psycho! oh my!
God, please save our Bella. She's been through a lot already! :-S
Fantastic chapter! Dying to read the new chapter!
[Report This]Date: 21 Jan 2013 12:22 AM Title: Chapter 20
I absoulty have loved reading this extreamly inspiring & captivating story!! U are doing an amazing job in writing such a beautifully well developed stort line with an awsomely developed plot!! PLEASE UPDATE!!! IMPATIENTLY WAITING!! It's been nearly 1 month since last update!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind words!
I hope to update in the next week or so. The story actually has been updated earlier in January but the update date never changed. There was a glitch.
Thanks again!
Chapter 21 preview: “It was an accident,” he whispered. “I didn’t mean to do it. I…I was just trying to make her see reason. I didn’t mean to push her.” “What happened?” “We were arguing and…I was just so angry. She was threatening to leave me.”
[Report This]Date: 08 Jan 2013 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 20
Idk if I've ever reviewed your story before, I'm usually not the best at remembering too. But wow! I can't decide if I believe Dr. Darnell or not, it kind of seems a little far-fetched, but at the same time not at all. Gah! confusing, I wanna read more.... haha
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you want to read more.
Chapter 21 preview:
“It was an accident,” he whispered. “I didn’t mean to do it. I…I was just trying to make her see reason. I didn’t mean to push her.”
“What happened?”
“We were arguing and…I was just so angry. She was threatening to leave me.”
[Report This]Date: 07 Jan 2013 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 20
:)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Chapter 21 preview:
“It was an accident,” he whispered. “I didn’t mean to do it. I…I was just trying to make her see reason. I didn’t mean to push her.”
“What happened?”
“We were arguing and…I was just so angry. She was threatening to leave me.”
[Report This]Date: 02 Jan 2013 9:43 AM Title: Chapter 19
Oh my God! Siobhan is Dr Darnell's daughter? Hmmm...I think Siobhan was the other woman in Elizabeth and Edward Sr's life. I guess this is why Elizabeth killed herself.
Hey Velley, you're doing a great job writing this story. Please don't underestimate your story just because you aren't getting much reviews. You should see the Read Count, see how many people are reading this. 12k+ count is not so bad. Sometimes people are too lazy to write reviews. Please don't be disappointed, it broke my heart when I read that Author's note where you said you were disappointed because of lack of reviews. I've noticed people mostly comment on those stories that have a lot of sex, details...you know. But many readers like me want a good story and not just hardcore description of sex.
Like I said earlier, you are doing a great job. This is the best mystery story of ExB I have ever read. There are so many twists and turns, it gets you hooked. I found this story last night, read half of the chapters and thought of continuing later and went to study, but I couldn't concentrate for more than half an hour as I was dying to read what happened next. See! You got me hooked! lol! I'm pretty sure everyone here is enjoying this story and waiting for the next update. :-D Please stop being disappointed. This story ROCKS!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your kind words and the review.
When I wrote that note I was mostly referring my readers over at fanfiction. net. I've since decided that I am going to continue with my story regardless of the lack of reviews. I enjoy writing this story and I am happy to share it with others. Your words were very touching and I am glad you're enjoying my story.
There are going to be some interesting revelations in the next chapter. I'm looking forward to posting very soon.
[Report This]Date: 02 Jan 2013 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 7
Oh my! Something is off. Eeeep! Can't wait to read the next chapter! I found this story just yesterday. I am still a few chapters behind but I don't wanna lose the surprise in just one night. I'll take it slow.
ONE OF THE BEST SUSPENSE STORIES!
[Report This]Date: 26 Dec 2012 6:21 AM Title: Chapter 19
No one is who they seem... This story has me all turned around with more questions then answers
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I know you just reviewed chapter 20 but it disappeared so I'll give you a preview of chapter 21 here.
Chapter 21 preview:
“It was an accident,” he whispered. “I didn’t mean to do it. I…I was just trying to make her see reason. I didn’t mean to push her.”
“What happened?”
“We were arguing and…I was just so angry. She was threatening to leave me.”
[Report This]Date: 22 Dec 2012 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 19
You are good!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
I posted the next chapter but it's not showing up.
[Report This]Date: 03 Dec 2012 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 18
Wow this is getting crazier.
Date: 03 Dec 2012 10:32 AM Title: Chapter 11
I keep waiting for this Edward to grow horns
Date: 03 Dec 2012 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 10
this story is so good but so stange and very confusing i cant stop reading it! =)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you like it.
[Report This]Date: 03 Dec 2012 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 17
Wow.. didn't see that coming. How very bold of you to kill off such a big character. I'm seriously intrigued
Author's Response:
There is a reason for it. Trust me.
Thanks for reviewing!
The next chapter is coming very soon.
Date: 02 Dec 2012 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 17
The only person with a clue to help Bella be a mother is gone. Tragic esme is also a coward.
Author's Response:
Esme couldn't handle her secrets and the things she had done anymore. She is someone that lived with a lot of guilt. There will be more on that later.
She also took her life for a lot of selfish reasons.
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 02 Dec 2012 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 17
whoa.
Author's Response:
Yeah. It's shocking, but it had to be done.
Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: 02 Dec 2012 8:25 AM Title: Chapter 17
:)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: 02 Dec 2012 8:09 AM Title: Chapter 17
I have truely enjoy reading this story. It truely is amazingly beautifully well written. This story is absolutly captivating & intriging!!! This is absolutly a most wonderful story! You truely are a very talented writter & I want to thank u for all ur hard work & dedication in writting this amazing story!! I truely understand all the time & effort it takes to write a story. I definatly rate this story as a #10 out of a #10!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you are enjoying the story and thank you for all the kind words. I really appreciate it.
You will find out a little bit about Bella's father in the next chapter.
Date: 02 Dec 2012 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 17
OMG! Esme! I can't even imagine! Poor Edward & Alice. I would say poor Carlisle too, however I have a feeling that he may have had somethng to do with it. He doesn't seem like a nice guy at all.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Carlisle is definitely not the nicest person in the world.
The next chapter will be posted very soon.
Date: 01 Dec 2012 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 17
I kinda saw this coming but I have no clue what's coming next and can't wait to find out!
Author's Response:
Esme was definitely headed down that path. A lot of things are about to change because of her death.
Thanks for reviewing! I hope to post very soon.
[Report This]Date: 01 Dec 2012 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 17
No, not Esme no! no! no!
Author's Response:
I'm sorry, but it had to be done.
Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: 30 Nov 2012 3:54 AM Title: Chapter 16
Esme is nutts. Edward is losing his mind & seems ready to snap at the right (or wrong) question.
Bella needs to get away from these people, maybe that Charlie guy is someone she can trust.
I was right, he wants her to be dependent on him & stay that way.
[Report This]Date: 29 Nov 2012 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 7
Is that her purpose? Breeding? I'm getting more & more nervous & afraid for Bella the more I read. I hope it turns out okay.
Is Charlie in this fanfic at all?
Author's Response:
Charlie will come later.
[Report This]Date: 29 Nov 2012 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 6
Is this a Darkward fic?
Edward basically stole her & now appears to be hiding her away from everyone.
He started dating Renee to get close to Bella didn't he? He was watching her for awhile before he made his move would be my guess in this story so far.
I thought I odd but didn't think too much of it when Esme walked away without saying anything to her husband that day at the bakery.
Edward wants to control Bella & make her completely reliant on him. He's shuting her away from the world. Poor Bella is so excited someone cares for her she's not questioning whats happening. A lot of little red flags are going the further I read. Let's see if any of my guesses are right.
Author's Response:
Thanks for revewing!
Esme's relationship with Carlisle is very strained and Edward is very messed up. You'll find out more later.
Date: 25 Nov 2012 10:28 PM Title: Chapter 16
I just stumbled upon your story and I am still so confused...still don't know why he picked Isabella...because he thought she'd never question anything? I got that Darnell was the senator with Elisabeth before she died...wh is Carlisle so weird? Edward only speaks in riddles....
Author's Response:
All of that will be revealed after the next chapter, which is currently posted on fanfiction.net with the penname Shiloh2010. I will be posting it here soon.
Carlile is wierd because he habors a lot of bitterness because of some things that happened with Esme's family.
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 25 Nov 2012 10:05 PM Title: Chapter 16
Esme is fucked up and she's messing with Edwards head big time.. I hope Bella can save Edward from himself..
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Esme is a very good manipulator and she's not even the mastermind behind all of this.
Date: 13 Nov 2012 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 15
OMG you can't leave us like this!!!!! What does he mean by that ???? please update real soon!
Date: 05 Nov 2012 1:36 AM Title: Chapter 14
I just found your story and it is intersting. I can't tell if I am really creeped out by Edward or if he is a good guy with some problems. Whatever it is Carlilse is in on it too. Also, it's strange that Alice is on so much medication. I'm intersted in how this will all play out.
Waiting for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Edward definitely has lots of problems. Everybody in the family have secrets that they are keeping.
Chapter 15 is on Fanfiction under the penname Shiloh2010.
I'm still working on getting the next chapter uploaded here, but it's giving me problems.
[Report This]Date: 04 Nov 2012 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 14
Love your story , I think maybe she should talkto Alice or Esme ? I don't know for sure.But can't wait for more goodluck,great story.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 04 Nov 2012 4:31 AM Title: Chapter 6
Ok, he is seriously creeping me out. What is going on with him? Better yet, what's up with both Carlisle and Edward? On to the next chapter :)
Author's Response:
Edward is creepy at the moment but he will explain himself in the next chapter.
Chapter 15 is posted on fanfiction.
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 04 Nov 2012 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 14
I have no idea what is going on.
Author's Response:
It all ties together. If you want to read more chapter 15 is posted on Fanfiction under the penname Shiloh2010
Date: 04 Nov 2012 12:21 AM Title: Chapter 14
Loving the story but have no idea what's going on.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
You can check out Chapter 15 on Fanfiction if you're interested. The penname is Shiloh2010
[Report This]Date: 31 Oct 2012 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 13
can't wait for next chapters great story can't wait.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're enjoying it!
If you are interested in reading the next chapter, it's on Fanfiction.
[Report This]Date: 31 Oct 2012 12:36 AM Title: Chapter 13
:)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: 31 Oct 2012 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 13
I wonder if Edward only dated Renee in order to get to Bella? I hope that was the case, even though that's a very bizarre way of going about it...otherwise, I wonder what the attraction was? I mean, not only is she quite a bit older, but a terrible mother, worthless, and an all-around selfish, disgusting human being!
I'm STILL aggravated that he didn't really defend Bella when her mother was being mean to her. Why? Did he & Renee ever have sex? If so, ewwwww! Did Renee know that Edward was wealthy? How/where did they meet?
I'd LOVE some insight on Edward, and also his weird family! Does his family know that he used to date Bella's mom? Awkward! Does he even love Bella? Will this story have a HEA?
As far as Renee's call, I wouldn't trust her one iota! I'd be shocked if she even knew who Bella's dad was, since she's a slut. Plus, I think that the call is just her way of trying to weasel her way back into Bella's life. She's gonna shit when she finds out who Bella married, and that she's pregnant. I fear that she's gonna cause trouble! Please don't let Bella fall for this.
Looking forward to next chapter! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Edward's family did not know about Renee. You will find out more about that later. Edward is a bizarre person. He acts strange sometimes.
If Renee knew Edward was wealthy she would not have let go of him so easily. As for the HEA, I'm definitely planning on one.
Chapter 14 is posted on Fanfiction if you're interested in reading it now, or you can wait until I post over here.
Date: 30 Oct 2012 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 13
This is getting so interesting... can't wait to find out more about the cullens! I surely hope they have a happily ever after ending!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you're liking it. I am planning for an HEA.
Chapter 14 is posted on Fanfiction.
Date: 29 Oct 2012 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 2
Renee is such a bitch ... can't wait for her reality check!
[Report This]Date: 28 Oct 2012 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 12
Can't wait for next chapters,love your story.
Date: 28 Oct 2012 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 12
Ok so Edward knows that she is pregnant I assume... Can you at least tell me if they will have a HEA???
Author's Response:
Edward does know she is pregnant and as of now there will be a HEA.
Date: 28 Oct 2012 6:27 PM Title: Chapter 12
See what I tell you, his very own slave. Poor Bella is so brainwashed that she doen't even see it coming. First there is isolation then there is domination. Poor Poor Bella. c u soon
E/k
p.s yeah i no she is preggers.
Date: 27 Oct 2012 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 11
I know what Edward is, he's a jerk!
Date: 27 Oct 2012 9:15 PM Title: Chapter 11
oh wow ... I wonder exactly what monster Carlisle was talking about hmmm?? wait to read more
[Report This]Date: 26 Oct 2012 5:59 PM Title: Chapter 10
I think he's strange and he likes control and to her her in little ways... the chocking
Date: 26 Oct 2012 4:58 AM Title: Chapter 10
please tell me you're going to update soon. I love this story. I can't wait to see the secrets Edward is keeping from her!
Date: 25 Oct 2012 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 9
I won't lie, I am confused. Here is my theory, Bella is going to be Edwards wife/slave. His property. Thats why he made her remove his shoes. (2)Carlise had the old couple run off the road in hopes they don't get in the way of what ever it is he and Edward is up to. Honestly I really just don't know what to think. Arhhgg!!
E/k
[Report This]Date: 25 Oct 2012 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 9
I am so intrigued by this story. I can't figure it out yet! That's a good thing. It's not predictable.
Date: 22 Oct 2012 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 3
I do wonder if he does have a spilt personality. Renee is the most selfish thing I have ever read. Can't wait for her to get hers.
E/k
[Report This]Date: 22 Oct 2012 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 8
Why the heck is he so scared of Rosalie
Date: 22 Oct 2012 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 7
This is downright creepy. Perfect for Halloween season!
Date: 21 Oct 2012 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 7
Cnt wait 4 nxt update
Date: 21 Oct 2012 9:10 AM Title: Chapter 7
Don't know where you're taking this, but "Cult! Cult! Cult!" keeps running through my head. Bella is so fucked.
It would've been nice to see more development. I understand this is fanfic, but this is very rushed. I went back and read through it and I found Renee's character unrealistic. I know you needed to create a bad environment for her to make the decision to leave, but the way you did it...it felt lazy to me. It was very one dimensional.
I think I'll still keep reading, but only to find out what Edward's and Carlisle's motives are.
[Report This]Date: 21 Oct 2012 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 1
Can't wait for more updates.
Date: 21 Oct 2012 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 5
Hmm there must be more to this
[Report This]Date: 20 Oct 2012 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 3
is edward bi polar lol
[Report This]Date: 20 Oct 2012 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 6
Okay Now I'm going out of my mind trying to figure out what's up with Edward and his family... How come Bella doesn't see how cold he is when Rose say it at first glance?
[Report This]Date: 20 Oct 2012 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 5
What the heck is he up to?
[Report This]Date: 28 Jul 2012 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 4
Yeah big mistake to leave with someone she doesn't know. He's really gonna hurt her and I wonder if he'll do it alone or will daddy help out
[Report This]Date: 28 Jul 2012 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 4
Wow what a piece of work renee is. I would leave too. HMm I wonder where edward will take her. I am hoping anything is better than what she is in now. Carlise seems like jack as $ but not too sure on him. update soon.
Date: 28 Jul 2012 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 4
I hate Renee, but I'm really worried about Bella leaving with Edward and even more so about Carlisle's plans. Can't wait to read more :)
[Report This]Date: 28 Jul 2012 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 3
okay so love the story and I think I see were you are going with the Isabella and Edward thing he told his family that Isabella is the girlfriend didn't he. Oh please update soon I soo want to see what happens next.