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Reviewer: queenbettyben24 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Feb 2023 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 19: Wound Up

More chapters please 🥺 add more 

Reviewer: dreamkeeper1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Apr 2019 5:47 AM Title: Chapter 19: Wound Up

Love your stories update soon 

Reviewer: Jessa7635 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 May 2018 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 19: Wound Up

Please come back and continue this story please 

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Dec 2014 8:10 PM Title: Chapter 19: Wound Up

Possessive Bella is peeping out from behind her hair, it seems those girls were just the push she needed to make up her mind.  I thought she was going to get caught in the toilet cubicle.

So happy to see this update. :)

Jane x

Reviewer: PetralouiseSahriSahri Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Nov 2014 12:04 AM Title: Chapter 19: Wound Up

Hope you post again soon

Reviewer: GrandeDame Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Nov 2014 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 19: Wound Up

Glad to see an update! Can't wait for more! ;)

Reviewer: Snowflakebaby4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2014 11:17 AM Title: Chapter 7: Dangerous Line

Loved it!

Reviewer: Snowflakebaby4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2014 11:05 AM Title: Chapter 6: Help Me

Loved it!

Reviewer: Snowflakebaby4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2014 10:54 AM Title: Chapter 5: Pretending

Loved it! Poor Emmett!

Reviewer: Snowflakebaby4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2014 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 4: Natural

Loved it! Poor Bella!

Reviewer: Snowflakebaby4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2014 10:42 AM Title: Chapter 3: Don't Be Like Me

Loved it!

Reviewer: Snowflakebaby4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2014 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 2: Daddy's Dinky

Loved it!

Reviewer: Snowflakebaby4 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2014 10:32 AM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

Loved it!

 

Reviewer: CChuff Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2014 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 18: Morning

Ansioso para o próximo capítulo!

 

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2014 11:59 AM Title: Chapter 18: Morning

Renee has been absent from her children's lives for so long, even when she was there she wasn't much of a parent. I'm wondering if she'll suspect that Emmett and Bella's relationship has changed in that way or whether she just thinks that Emmett has turned into Bella's parent.

I'm glad to see you're back. :)

Jane x

Reviewer: PetralouiseSahriSahri Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jun 2014 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

Just read your story hope you post soon

Reviewer: GrandeDame Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Jun 2014 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 18: Morning

Glad to see this update. Can't wait for more! ;)

Reviewer: Snow one Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jun 2014 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 18: Morning

Thanks for getting back to this story. Things are getting pretty interesting. Did Renee see them in bed together?

Reviewer: pretty_gwapa Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jun 2014 6:31 AM Title: Chapter 17: Accept It

nice story

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Apr 2014 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 17: Accept It

Oh my!  Things are moving on and dreams are becoming reality.  I wonder how long they'll be able to keep this secret before someone gets suspicious or jealousies rear their heads again.

Thank you for continuing to write this, as taboo a subject as it is this is a brilliant story.

Jane x

Reviewer: Steph1597 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2014 11:18 PM Title: Chapter 17: Accept It

hot. so hot. but too short:(

Reviewer: twi-sessed Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2014 6:48 PM Title: Chapter 17: Accept It

Loved it. So glad you were motivated to write it. Looking forward to more.  Have a great weekend. 

Reviewer: monkey22marie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2014 7:02 AM Title: Chapter 17: Accept It

Can't wait for more chapters to come 

I was starting to wounder if this story was ever going to be continued to be written so glad it wasn't abandon 

Reviewer: momomacka Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2014 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 16: Dreams

Uh oh...

Reviewer: momomacka Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2014 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 14: Euphoria

:(

Reviewer: momomacka Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2014 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 9: Popularity

Uh h

Reviewer: momomacka Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2014 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 5: Pretending

...she has no idea

Reviewer: momomacka Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2014 8:55 PM Title: Chapter 3: Don't Be Like Me

:/ confusing for them

Reviewer: momomacka Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2014 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

Kids..lol

Reviewer: beautyineverything Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Dec 2013 10:17 AM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

Nice start.

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Nov 2013 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 7: Dangerous Line

love it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Nov 2013 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 6: Help Me

Awesome chapter!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Nov 2013 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 5: Pretending

loved it¡

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Nov 2013 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 4: Natural

love it!

Reviewer: monkey22marie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Oct 2013 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 16: Dreams

Please up date soon I love to read more 

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2013 12:16 PM Title: Chapter 3: Don't Be Like Me

loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2013 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 2: Daddy's Dinky

loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2013 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

loved it!

Reviewer: dreamkeeper1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Aug 2013 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 16: Dreams

Good

Reviewer: Team66fan Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2013 9:48 AM Title: Chapter 16: Dreams

Very intersting dilemma! Cant wait to read more

Reviewer: CChuff Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jul 2013 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 16: Dreams

Continue!

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2013 9:47 PM Title: Chapter 16: Dreams

Oh my, that was some dream, but was it really a dream?  Bella's subconscious is screaming at her, was Emmett helping it along?  Surely she can't deny how she feels about Emmett any longer, can she?  I can't wait for the next chapter.

Jane x

Reviewer: loventherussian17 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jul 2013 4:26 PM Title: Chapter 16: Dreams

love it

Reviewer: CChuff Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2013 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 15: Heartbeats

Continue please!!

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Jun 2013 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 15: Heartbeats

You're back, woohoo!!!  Please don't forget about us, we may not be many but we love this story.

So, Emmett finally cracked.  It was bound to happen and I'm glad that it has. Emmett's laid his cards on the table and voiced what Bella's been thinking about their feelings being wrong for each other.  I wonder how Bella will react once she's had time to process what Emmett has said.  Their circumstances, growing up, were so different from the norm, it's not surprising that they find themselves in this situation.

Please update again soon.

Jane x

Reviewer: benjimg Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2013 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 14: Euphoria

how come you don't update aymore!?!?!?!?!?!!

Reviewer: CChuff Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2013 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 14: Euphoria

Continue!!

Reviewer: MissMollyCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Nov 2012 2:21 AM Title: Chapter 7: Dangerous Line

:-)

Reviewer: MissMollyCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Nov 2012 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

=)

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Nov 2012 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 14: Euphoria

powerful chapter

Reviewer: Eileen22 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Nov 2012 4:51 AM Title: Chapter 14: Euphoria

Thank you for updating. Can't wait to see what will happen after the kiss. 

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Nov 2012 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 14: Euphoria

Loved it!

Reviewer: aerobam Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Nov 2012 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 14: Euphoria

very interesting, please udate soon!

 

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Nov 2012 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 14: Euphoria

Oh poor Bella, she ran and that was only natural.  It seem she did a better job of convincing herself that Emmett wouldn't want her that way than I thought and now all of that's been blown out of the water.  I've said it before and I'll say it again, they really need to talk.  I think it's time for Emmett to man up and tell her how he feels but, of course, he's going to be sat downstairs hating himself and thinking that Bella will think he's some kind of sick monster whilst Bella is upstairs thinking that she's sick and twisted.

Please update soon, I really love this story it's most definitely fascinating.

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Nov 2012 6:38 PM Title: Chapter 13: Believe In Me

Wow!  Will Bella run scared or will she embrace this?  They both know this is wrong and they've tried not to give in but when you feel love this deeply and you've had no guidance from being small, well what can I say, I hope she embraces it, they deserve to be happy and loved.  What they feel for each other is far beyond familial love.  This is such a sensitive topic but you write it so well.

I can't believe I missed this update but the good news for me is that I still have another chapter to read, woohoo!!

Jane x

Reviewer: Readersheart Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Sep 2012 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 13: Believe In Me

Oh please tell me you plan to continue this story!  You have me completely hooked! :-)

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Sep 2012 9:05 AM Title: Chapter 12: Gentlemen

Emmett and Bella really need to talk.  One of them is going to have to be brave and explain what they're feeling.  I know Emmett's jealous and angry but still I don't know how he could let Rose talk about Bella like that, she might be beautiful on the outside but she's ugly on the inside.

Jane x

Reviewer: DrPepperChk21 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 8:42 PM Title: Chapter 13: Believe In Me

Cant wait to see Bella's reaction. Please dont make us wait too long. You have me completely hooked on this story.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 13: Believe In Me

:)

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 8:05 PM Title: Chapter 13: Believe In Me

they kissed!

Reviewer: DrPepperChk21 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 12:04 PM Title: Chapter 12: Gentlemen

Wow these 2 really need to do a lot of talking.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 7:04 AM Title: Chapter 12: Gentlemen

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 7:01 AM Title: Chapter 11: Visitor

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 10: Lying

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:55 AM Title: Chapter 9: Popularity

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:53 AM Title: Chapter 8: Heady Aroma

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:50 AM Title: Chapter 7: Dangerous Line

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 6: Help Me

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:43 AM Title: Chapter 5: Pretending

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:38 AM Title: Chapter 4: Natural

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:34 AM Title: Chapter 3: Don't Be Like Me

;)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:28 AM Title: Chapter 2: Daddy's Dinky

:)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2012 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

:)

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 3:57 AM Title: Chapter 11: Visitor

Oh so not a good move, a payback date.  Then again, maybe this is what it takes for one of them to confess their feelings.  God, I can't believe a wrote that but there it is.  They can't go on like this much longer, no matter what happens something has to be said.

I know this must be hard to write, I wouldn't even know where to begin but I'd love it if you could make your chapters a bit longer.

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 10: Lying

Oh yes, jealous and possessive Emmett is in the building.  Is it Bella's own feelings for him that's stopping her from telling him about the date or the fact that she know's he going to be all possessive and protective?  Maybe it's both.

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 9: Popularity

Oh dear God, Bella's going on a date.  I get the feeling Emmett's going to get all possessive, jealous and protective of her.  In a way that's what Bella's been with him by keeping all the 'sluts' away.

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 8: Heady Aroma

So I got my answer, she was oblivious until Emmett had his face buried in her panties.  Now she's having the same feelings as Emmett but she doesn't feel quite so guilty about imagining it's Emmett that's touching her.  How long will it take Emmett to realise that things have changed?

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 2:56 AM Title: Chapter 7: Dangerous Line

Their relationship has developed in such a way that for Emmett it almost seems like he's dating but without any kissing or sex.  I'm still wondering whether Bella's as oblivious as Emmett thinks she is.

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 6: Help Me

Listening to her brother though those thin walls must be unbearable for Bella knowing that he doesn't want her to be like him.  Has she started to have feelings for Emmett like he does for her?  I can't work out whether she's still feeling her normal close sisterly love for him or whether things have started to move on.

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 5: Pretending

Emmett's really struggling and trying to ignore his feelings for Bella.  Pretending that the girls he takes to bed are Bella is probably not the best idea he's had, but then he's a hormone riddled teenager who's just trying to make sense of everything.  How would you ever be able to tell anyone about this?  He's so alone.

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 4: Natural

Aww, poor Bella she's so confused, she just doesn't understand why her brother would pull away from her.  She truly does not think that there was anything sexual happening to cause that reaction.  She really is a product of her upbringing.  Neither she nor Emmett are to blame for this, they have lacked parental guidance at a crucial time in their lives.  It's good to be curious when you're young but there comes a time when those shared bath times should stop.

This is so confusing for them both.

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 2:00 AM Title: Chapter 3: Don't Be Like Me

Bit of a shock for Emmett there but given how close their relationship is, especially at that age, it was bound to happen.  It sounds as though they have been left completely to their own devices and Renee hasn't been their to say that they shouldn't shower together.  It's only now that Emmett has had a sexual reaction to his sister that the thought could be entering his head that this is wrong.

Have you read Flowers in the Attic?  If you haven't you should, fantastic book and due to their circumstances they developed and incestuous relationship.  Like you I don't condone this but it seemed right in that situation.

Jane x



Author's Response: Thank you for all the reviews - I'm glad someone else understands that, while wrong, this situation can happen under Bella and Emmett's circumstances. I haven't actually read Flowers in the Attic. I looked it up; it sounds slightly too gruesome for me, but it does have some very interesting concepts. That is why I like writing this story - and because it brings out rather funny reactions in some people ;] Happy reading xxx

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 2: Daddy's Dinky

Lol, a skin coloured cucumber, hahahaha!!  Oh my, that's one way of describing it.  I almost expected her to say something but her curiosity got the better of her and she stayed quiet.  I think most kids have seen their dad's dinky. *snort*

Jane x

Reviewer: Robsblueeyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

Poor Sue having to explain sex to a seven year old boy who's not even hers, lol.  Emmett's pretty curious for such a young boy, mind you, I only have a daughter and if she was curious at seven she never said a word.

Jane x

Reviewer: gwendo24 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Aug 2012 1:16 AM Title: Chapter 11: Visitor

.... update please.i like this story :)

Reviewer: Vane3131 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Aug 2012 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 11: Visitor

What a bitch

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 11: Visitor

Oh no!

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Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 10: Lying

Poor date guy .... Emmett is not happy!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 9: Popularity

This date does not seem like something that Emmett will approve of!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:26 AM Title: Chapter 8: Heady Aroma

I think things may start moving faster for the siblings now!  Especially with Emmett enjoying Bella's flower juice!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:23 AM Title: Chapter 7: Dangerous Line

Sweet!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 6: Help Me

Love that line... "Why don't you help me?"

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 5: Pretending

What a realization!  Awesome story!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:18 AM Title: Chapter 4: Natural

Poor bella!  Loving the story!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 3: Don't Be Like Me

Interesting...

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 2: Daddy's Dinky

What a way to learn about sex --- poor Bella!

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:11 AM Title: Chapter 1: Connected

Dinky & flower --- love it!  very cute!

Reviewer: Hayley3296 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Aug 2012 11:34 PM Title: Chapter 11: Visitor

write more

Reviewer: DrPepperChk21 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Aug 2012 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 11: Visitor

Wow what did Emmett see in that bitch?

Reviewer: DrPepperChk21 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Aug 2012 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 10: Lying

Is it really twisted that I love this story? I have read every story you posted so far and I love them all. They all currently reside in my favorite list and you are also one of my favorite fan fic authors as well. Cant wait for the next chapter. Hopefully real soon...

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