[Report This]Date: 23 Jul 2011 9:18 PM Title: Friday Night
Hot! I loved it. Keep on writing.
[Report This]Date: 21 Mar 2011 5:28 AM Title: Saturday: Part 2
Umm, the sex scene ended WAY too early it was almost like a "wham bam thank you ma'am" type of thing...disappointing. Don't get me wrong...the situation of her being with both Jasper and Edward together at the same time is hotter than He££, however the way that it ended so abruptly was a total buzz-kill.
=(
Author's Response:
I do agree with you, but a few things to remember: Jasper didn't stop broadcasting the emotions in the room before Bella's orgasm hit, and therefore she got another dose, and Edward's was triggered. Also, vampire or not, Edward was still a virgin who had never jacked off or orgasmed before. I didn't change that part, and I suppose I should have mentioned that. It was only Jasper's influence that caused him to go as far as he did. Because of his past experiences, Jasper could have gone many more times, but when I post the final chapter, that will be explained. My laptop is currently out of commision and I'm using my mom's so it might be longer than anticipated.
[Report This]Date: 21 Mar 2011 5:11 AM Title: Saturday: Part 1
Mmm, YUMMY! Bella is one lucky gal, you know?
;~D
Well done.
=)
Date: 18 Mar 2011 6:05 PM Title: Saturday: Part 2
:)
Author's Response:
:-D