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Reviewer: dreamkeeper1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jun 2017 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 22

Love the story



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  Did you know I have a Facebook group called Dinia Steel Fan Fiction?  In that groups files are pdfs (some with pictures) of all my completed stories.  Come check us out.

Again thank you for your support.

Hard Hugs

Dinia

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 6:11 PM Title: Chapter 22

I like the rapid FIRE happy ending. Pun intended of course. Haha.

Author's Response:

I'm very happy that you seemed to enjoy Capture.  As I said before, I departed from Canon in many places.  I had one reader become insensed when Rose had unknowing sex with others.  Oh well, can't please them all.

Have you read my "Out of Time - A Halloween Love Story"?  To be honest I think it's the best I've written.  It's an O/S and I cried while writing a great deal of it.  There is an HEA however.  

If you belong to Facebook, come look for my Dinia Steel Fan Fiction group.  Within the files I've up loaded all my completed works as pdfs and most have pictures also.

I look forward to hear from you again.

Hard Hugs

Dinia



Author's Response:

I'm very happy that you seemed to enjoy Capture.  As I said before, I departed from Canon in many places.  I had one reader become insensed when Rose had unknowing sex with others.  Oh well, can't please them all.

Have you read my "Out of Time - A Halloween Love Story"?  To be honest I think it's the best I've written.  It's an O/S and I cried while writing a great deal of it.  There is an HEA however.  

If you belong to Facebook, come look for my Dinia Steel Fan Fiction group.  Within the files I've up loaded all my completed works as pdfs and most have pictures also.

I look forward to hear from you again.

Hard Hugs

Dinia

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 21

The three sisters together could become more powerful than Aro can control.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 20

Aro should know better than to try and keep mates away from each other. Why would he give up his prize mind reader?
Can Alice see Aro's decisions or is he blocking her?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 5:31 PM Title: Chapter 19

I feel a bit sad for Aro. He seeks comfort just like any other creature.
But I'm happy that you didn't pair him with Alice.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 18

Even though Alice was pleased with the idea of joining the group of psychics, she seems hollow. Less giving in her actions and emotions.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 17

Eleazar was lucky he chose wisely in turning the brothers. His fate would not have been so pleasant otherwise.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 16

That was a very unexpected twist.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 15

Does the change work the same way in this story? Three days of burning? Edward's or his brothers change wasn't fully documented.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 4:59 PM Title: Chapter 14

Emmett should have missed her stupid before she tried to run.
Where is Jasper during Alice's change?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 4:44 PM Title: Chapter 13

That discussion went better than expected. Rosalie will be the next challenge. But maybe the fact that Bella has already chosen Edward and Alice is amenable to her future, she will decide to keep the trio together.

Author's Response:

I took a great deal of liberty with the canon Twilight characters in this one, and it does bode that I'll be taking more as time presses forward.  If I might ask, what have you read of mine before?  I might be able to help in your quest for the next of mine you'll try.

Please don't let Alice and Jasper's fate put you off.  :)

 

Thanks for reading and your wonderful reviewing!

 

Hard Hugs

Dinia 

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 12

How much convincing will it take for Rosalie to remain with Emmett?
Maybe I'm rushing things here, but where has Jaspeer been this entire time?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 11

Well, Alice seems to be taking their unique future plans with a grain of salt.
Did the treatment Rosalie recurved from Laurent become a reason to kill him in the future?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 4:25 PM Title: Chapter 10

The 'Sister' bond saved them from further torment by their captors.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 9

How did Emmett get the job of retrieving Rosalie? Will their pairing be noted as well?
Why hasn't Jasper entered Alice's life yet?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 4:12 PM Title: Chapter 8

Oops!
Carmen was right, they should have taken Edward to a remote location before he woke up.
Where are the Brother's?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 7

I really enjoyed the way you wove a bit of the nation's history into this chapter.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 3:43 PM Title: Chapter 6

Ari's actions had me so engorssed in the story I moved on to the next chapter before I realized I forgot to review, haha.
Drama within the Volturi network. This changes the tone of story for the girls future

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 5

Laurent's modifications to Rosalie might just bide her enough time for Emmett to find her and save her for himself.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 3:29 PM Title: Chapter 4

Very aggressive training. It's a wonder why human survives long enough to be sold.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 3

Will Emmett find his pairing with Rosalie or will she end up being trained as well by Laurent?
What is happening to SS at this moment?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 3:16 PM Title: Chapter 2

The fact that Edward is already ensconsed in the Volturi way sets up a very different feel to his character. Even though bit of his human life still affect his actions.
The girls background stories set them up as easily written off except for their financial holdings.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2017 3:11 PM Title: Chapter 1

Hello Dinia,
I'm going back through your body of work seeking out stories I have yet to read. This one popped up on my radar.
Looks very interesting.
I'm going to continue read now.
Chat with you later.

Reviewer: Siriusmunchkin Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Aug 2016 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 22

That was a lot of fun.  Liked the whole storyline,  very different concept.



Author's Response:

Thank you and I even had the history right!  I think you'd even enjoy my Domanitrix and Ms. O story.  It's not your "normal" BDSM.  It was one of my very first stories.

Hugs

Carol

Reviewer: twirob13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2015 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 22

AWESOME ending ;) couple of things though in chp 19 it was mentioned that marcus lost his mate at the same time as aro but in this chp he still had his mate? and when edward mentioned to bella about feeding he said he had green eyes still because of what scientists made for them? anyway thanks for sharing this story on here for us ;D



Author's Response:

Thanks!  Really?  Humm.  I'll need to look at that again.  

Appreciate your kind words.

Hard Hugs

Dinia

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2014 12:33 PM Title: Chapter 22

yay

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Date: 02 Feb 2014 11:45 AM Title: Chapter 16

somehow that suits Jasper

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2014 11:26 AM Title: Chapter 15

very  good

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2014 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 1

I think I read this but I don't remember it finishing so maybe now it will ...it says completed

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 22

That was a really good ending to a bad situation, Aro in pieces and burnt to a crisp! I like that Marcus let the castle burn and tuened loose the humans! That's a different happy ever after, but not a bad one at all!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 21

Good for Edward, he will have to start now before Emmett tears down the castle! I wonder if Aro is slipping into vampire insanity? Is that even possible?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 20

Aro, that sneaky bastard! He gets rid of the mates so he can have their mates for himself! This will mean war, no doubt!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 19

Aro not getting what he wants? That usually isn't allowed to happen. I wonder if he really would end Fred so he could have Alice to himself?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 18

Wow, Rose as a goddess, who knew? That's pretty powerful and should work just as Aro expects it to.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 1:09 AM Title: Chapter 17

That was handled as well as could be, I guess. Lucky for Eleazar he brought two talented recruits back or he might have suffered Aro's wrath.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 16

That's different for Jasper and Eleazar to be mated. It must mean Alice has someone else in her future. At least I hope so. Her sisters are , so Alice shouldn't be left out in the cold that way!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 15

Emmett and Rosalie are on their way to a happy future, I hope! Knowing what can happen, I won't hold my breath, just in case!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 12:52 AM Title: Chapter 14

Rose  is now apprised of her future and hopefully Emmett won't be in too much trouble with Aro.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jan 2014 12:12 AM Title: Chapter 13

I'm kind of glad Edward is being honest with Bella and not trying to keep things from her!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 12

Doesn't sound to me as if the girls have much of a choice, no matter what happens in the future. They are stuck here at the mercy of the vampires.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 11:52 PM Title: Chapter 11

Now that she's back to herself again, Alice seems to have no problem with the future she sees for them all.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 10

Well, so far, so good. Hopefully nothing awful is going to happen to the girls, beyond what has been already done, that is! I suppose there's no way around them being changed, though.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 9

Through time and space, I have no doubt that Edward and Bella would find each other. I see Rose is as fiesty as ever, even after Laurent's tender mercies.  Now she and Bella need to draw Alice back to the land of the living. Marcus saw how closely the girls are bonded, which I hope is a good thing.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 8

Eleazar doesn't seem to be very good at planning ahead, otherwise he wouldn't have newborn vampires on board a sailing vessel. Makes me wonder how he plans to sail without a crew?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 7

Eleazar must be able to sense Jasper's gift as well as Edward's. He will most likely take all three brothers and be very satisfied with his work.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 6

Good roddance to bad rubbish, as they say! Now that Caius is gone, maybe the beatings, at least, will end.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 5

Laurent is an evil son-of-a-bitch, if ever I read about one! Poor Rosalie!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 4

I can only guess that males, human or vampire would dream up some godforsaken training device like that! YUCK!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 10:49 PM Title: Chapter 3

Sounds like Edward  got to Bella just in time. Interesting that Marcus sees the mate bond between Edward and Bella. Aro can't read anything from her, just as Edward can't hear her thoughts.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 2

I see Caius is the usual nasty uncaring bastard he's written as! Quite the operation the vampires have going here, and such nice guys, too! Wonder what misery is in store for the three girls?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2014 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 1

Seems rather a cruel fate for these three girls to be stolen like that, for God knows what purpose. It's not like they haven't suffered more than enough grief in their lives! Hope there is some kind of help for them somewhere from someone! Otherwise, this is going to be pretty damn depressing!

Reviewer: Toolman Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jan 2014 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 4

This story is incredibly mixed up.  I'm unsure where I am when I start a new chapter.  I think the concept is good but the writing and the grammar and the first person, third person narratives are all very poor.

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 22

Thanks for the story

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 21

Not good

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:29 PM Title: Chapter 20

Not good

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 19

Glad it is not aro

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:23 PM Title: Chapter 18

Oookay....interesting

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 17

Alright

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:10 PM Title: Chapter 16

Oh man you made his gay.....not jasper

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:08 PM Title: Chapter 15

Cool

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:06 PM Title: Chapter 14

Why are they being so mean to her?  her thinking was logical...not selfish

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 13

Alright

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 12:59 PM Title: Chapter 12

Rose always gets the crap deal...always

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 10

Oh em you big stud

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 7:10 AM Title: Chapter 9

She knows him...oh wait from before?

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 7:06 AM Title: Chapter 8

Way to go ed

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 7:05 AM Title: Chapter 7

Interesting

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 7:03 AM Title: Chapter 6

A reprieve for rose!

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 5

Well of corse Bella gets rescued and rose literally is going to get screwed

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 4

Well that sucked....

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 6:52 AM Title: Chapter 3

Ok

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 6:49 AM Title: Chapter 2

Great they are in human trafficking..grat job Ed 

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2013 6:44 AM Title: Chapter 1

Ok let's see where it goes.

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2013 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 22

Not a bad story, didn't go in the direction I was expecting but I was a good story. 

Reviewer: cjrich Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Nov 2013 5:38 AM Title: Chapter 2

Different story and I am anxious to see where you take this! XOXO, Cheri

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 22

good story..

 

Thank you

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 20

ut oh. Alice will see this..

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 6:25 PM Title: Chapter 18

well Bella took that rather well Edward having sex with Rose.  Most mated females would fight to the death.. well Ha ha 101 vampire learning from Fan fiction. LMAO

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 16

so Jasper and Eleazar are mates..  I am guessing Aro and Alice since he sensed something in her.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 14

Well Rose is still self centered. Some things stay the same.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 13

Good chapter..

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 12

Rose is the weak one. Strong in looks weak in ability. Then she has to give in to Emmett so her life is not as a sex toy..ugh

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 2:40 PM Title: Chapter 6

saved.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 2:33 PM Title: Chapter 5

ugh

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 4

well it would seem to me if Edward wants her he will not want those men to touch her. Marcus stop this now.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 12:29 PM Title: Chapter 1

good start

Reviewer: toomanycats Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Nov 2013 3:59 AM Title: Chapter 22

love it

Reviewer: Sherry80 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2013 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 2

I liking it

Reviewer: sarah38 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Feb 2013 1:13 AM Title: Chapter 1

I like it so far, I would like to als hear what the back stories are of our boys, also are the girls their mates and will they be changed.

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2013 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 6

Wow. I wonder what will happen to the girls when Emmett sees Rose and Jasper sees Alice. What will Alice see when she comes back around?

Reviewer: MrsPapatastic Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2013 12:36 PM Title: Chapter 6

Hello, I really like the story and I would appreciate it if you would keep writing it. Bt the thing is , sometimes whilst I was reading it, these weird symbols and things popped up. I don't think it was my computer, but you should check it to see what it is. Idk! I really like the plot too! I think that it's a great one, but can you give some more history in the upcoming chapters? I'm confused about Ed, Em and Jas and why they're there and Aro's hovering and stuff. But overall I think this is a really great story! I apologize if I seem like a critic, I'm just an avid reader!!!



Author's Response:

He.  Sorry to take so long to get back to from TWCS.  I have no idea where or how those weird symbols got into the text.  If it bothers you and you'd like to read it in pfd - which I have - I'd be happy to send it to you.  PM me thru FF or Face Book.

xo

Dinia

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