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Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 28

Edward seems to handle touch better when he does it. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 28

Edward seems to handle touch better when he does it. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 27

Surely Aro would not try anything at the funeral.  

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 26

Poor Edward.  I hope we hear all about this adventure from Edward's POV too. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 25

Well it seems like Edward is going to have to get use to being touched.  

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 24

They have made some progress

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Date: 26 Jun 2017 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 23

I am wondering if Edward heard her or if be was having his own fantasy about her 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 11:11 AM Title: Chapter 22

Glad Charlie got on to Bella.  She needs to realize how serious things are. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 21

I am so glad that Emmett called Bella out on being a brat. Glad Edward is not taking any shit off her too. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 20

Edward is stating to care for Charlie and his family. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 20

Edward is stating to care for Charlie and his family. 

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Date: 26 Jun 2017 5:41 AM Title: Chapter 19

Thus should be really good with these two together.

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 5:41 AM Title: Chapter 19

Thus should be really good with these two together.

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 5:41 AM Title: Chapter 19

Thus should be really good with these two together.

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 18

Emmett is smart to figure out she was the girl from the club. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 17

Oh my!!!!!! What will they both do?

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 3:54 AM Title: Chapter 16

I still say James was talking to Aro on bus Bluetooth.  Edward definitely proved himself there. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 15

Love reading Edward's POV  too 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 3:23 AM Title: Chapter 14

I wonder what Edward is going to think when he finds out his Little  One is Charlie's daughter.

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 3:12 AM Title: Chapter 13

WOW, Little One is stirring up feelings in Edward.  

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 12

WOW, Edward does have a troubled past. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 2:49 AM Title: Chapter 11

We hear from Edward.  

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 10

I have a feeling James was talking to Air on his Bluetooth. So Bella and Edward finally meet again. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2017 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 9

Is this a set up? Is James working with Aro? 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 11:39 PM Title: Chapter 8

This was a serious chapter compared to the others. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 7

Why is Bella worrying about the new guy? Has she always been like this? Or it because of the threat from Aro that had her on alert? 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 6

Bella' s commentary is killing me in this story. Lol she is too funny.

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 5

Lol. Love the conversation with Charlie.  Especially the end.  

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 3:53 PM Title: Chapter 4

Edward has entered the story.  He left her wanting more.  I'm sure she is not used to being left like that. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 2:19 PM Title: Chapter 3

Like I said, this Bella is too funny. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 2

This Bella may be spoiled but she is funny. I laughed at her describing everything. Lol. 

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 5:21 AM Title: Chapter 1

Can't wait to start reading.  I decided to read this one since you referred to it in your story The One That Got Away. 

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2017 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 57

No, I don't think he loves HER, but he loves how she makes him feel. We will see if love exists when he has to lay his cards on the table. I wish you would give Edward some opposition in his "job"...you started to go there with Rose and backed off and I thought Carlisle would have at least threatened to pull him. Is my judgement clouded? Ummm YES you like and care about these people and it's not about integrity, it's about performing the job. At the very least Carlisle should have said NO to Italy. Perfect example "do you have a passport" YUP...the business is in Seattle, he has already established that Bella is not involved other than being a target.  Many an FBI informant has died over the years so I don't think the FBI would ok their agent going to Italy when there is no sign that any business will occur. Hell James and Victoria could end up dead in WA, assasignated by the Cignos and Edward will be enjoying the Italian Rivieria discussing King Dong. So much potential angst and plot twists and everything is just going in a straight line 

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 56

God, really? Are these people law enforcement or a dating service. THEY have been working on the case 1.5 years too but let's throw our jobs away because Edward won't get therapy of take anti-anxiety medication? What pals or co-workers or live guru(s)? I'm not sure who anyone is other than Bella...she is an entitled princess. And what Edward said to Alice "I'm going to get MY ❤️ Broken"? He is breaking his own heart...ass hat!!!

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 55

No offense but things have taken a turn for the unrealistic? They are not police they are FBI and why wouldn't the Seattle PD be there. Maybe have them there as colleagues on a group task force but here we go with more lies and deceit. I am starting to really not like Edward except for the need for slow and being a gentleman he is a world class ass!! And, Charlie doesn't want revenge? Please!! Edward watched him on the docks selling illegal firearms so this "I have nothing" makes no sense especially when people ended up dead. Charlie is the biggest pussy mob boss I have ever seen! But, I will keep reading because I have to know how this plays out 

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 54

Is this date rape in reverse? Don't you love me? That has to be uncomfortable 😣 where did understanding, enjoying taking it slow, mad at Angie Bella go? We get it, she likes sex but I would be uncomfortable too

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 52

Oh God drop everything Bella needs something...sorry but she is one clingy bitch...even before the bomb. Maybe now would be a good time to notify his boss that shit just got real...and I don't mean Charlie...but, he may find out that he is being reassigned and he can't have that, nor will he be honest with Emmett or Charlie so... hey Edward grab that shovel and keep digging (lol)

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 51

Does Edward feel any guilt what-so-ever in this situation when she's calling him all these names...they may have literally almost been blown up tonight but he is planning on blowing up her world all on his own. I get that he is in emotional overdrive right now but when we are in Edward's head, I just expect him to feel some remorse or be torn in someway. Even when she met Rose & he lied about who she was, there was nothing about starting a relationship based on a lie...anything!! Is Edward so emotionally damaged that he has no conscience? That's how it's reading for me right now...like a sociopath who perhaps will need bondage to get off? I hope this doesn't become an S&M thing but I will say you are setting it up perfectly if it is 😀

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 1:57 PM Title: Chapter 47

Billy Burke getting head from Kendra Wilkerson...that's what you just burned in my brain lol

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 11:57 AM Title: Chapter 45

Lol...that was a great last paragraph!! I see that Edward is trying to be as honest as he can be which is good but the situation is terrible "I love you Bella but I'm on my way to arrest Charlie and Emmett"...or "I love you Bella but I couldn't protect Charlie and Emmett and they're dead"? Honestly, the death is better and I can see him not being able to get Charlie since he is so far removed from the crime but Emmett? Ya, I don't see anyway of him not going to prison unless he is the informant which wouldn't make any sense since he is 2nd in command to take over and has only known this life. Jacob, I can see that since his father died...even Seth since we don't know much about him. But, even Sammy "The Bull" did prison time even though he turned states evidence so, like I said can't see a ray of hope at this point 

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 40

I found that scene heartbreaking she is crying just thinking about something happening to Charlie and Edward is there to make that nightmare come true. Like I said they are truly doomed from before the first kiss 

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 8:08 AM Title: Chapter 39

There is no way someone like Rose would get involved with Emmett especially now that she knows he is second in command...I am keeping my fingers crossed that this was just a one shot to appease the need for Cannon 

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2017 7:52 AM Title: Chapter 38

Rose should write a report and Edward should be pulled...end of story because the way Bella feels about Charlie and losing her mother already...the word "doomed" comes to mind unless Charlie dies of course 

Reviewer: LesleyLunaCullen Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2017 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 37

Why would Edward take her to this car painting business when he is meeting Rose there? Her family is still the target, even if he isn't focused on them per say. I hope this isn't some lame way to hook Emmett up with Rose because in this situation it doesn't work. I like the story so far...I just hate when writers feel like they have to force cannon on a story even when it makes no sense

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2017 7:26 AM Title: Chapter 12

Actually, this chapter was hilarious!!!

Since this story is complete, I'm going to stop review every chapter as it takes forever to post on my PC.

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2017 7:19 AM Title: Chapter 11

I don't like calling Bella Skankella.

Edward's had an incredibly difficult and painful childhood. It' quite brilliant he's using it for good.

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2017 5:10 AM Title: Chapter 10

Like I said, Bella has excellent instincts!!!! I wish her Dad and Emmett would listen!!!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2017 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 9

Bella is seriously scared for her Daddy's life!!! I hope she doesn't do anything stupid!!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2017 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 8

Emmett's worried about Aro and a possible gang war where people he loves may die and he doesn't lie it!!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2017 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 7

Bella has excellent instincts and a better head on her shoulders then Daddy realizes!!!!

She's really cute with her cousin/brother, Emmett!!! He thinks he needs to fatten her up a bit!!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2017 3:39 AM Title: Chapter 6

Bella really loves he Dad!!! They're actually really close!!!

Green eyed, reddish sex hair, tall and handsome is on his way and hopefully Bella will get laid soon!!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2017 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 5

Charlie loves his little girl, Isabella!!!!! So cute when he rambles and throws a temper tantrum!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2017 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 4

Quite a hot introduction to Sex on Legs Cullen!!!! Yum!!!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2017 11:42 PM Title: Chapter 3

Miss Snarkiness Galore and yes, it's pun based on Pussy Galore in "The Man with the Golden Gun". She really is a hoot and I totally adore her monolog!!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2017 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 2

I love Bella's snarkiness in this chapter!!! She's also totally blunt regarding both her parents nd herself!!!!

Aro Volturi is always an excellent villain of villains!!!!

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2017 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 1

Twisty beginning and I liked it!!!

My reviews are never long when the story has short chapters.

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jan 2017 1:55 AM Title: Chapter 2

Loved it! Poor Bella!

Reviewer: Autumnbaby23 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2017 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 1

Loved it!

Reviewer: PATTYBG Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2016 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 1

HI JOSIE!

MAYBE YOU COULD FOLLOW-UP WITH ANOTHER SEGMENT WHEN THEY WERE IN ITALY THAT FURTHER DISCUSSES THEIR TIME THERE. I JUST WANT MORE OF EDWARD AND HIS PRINCESS.  GREEDY OF ME??? YEAH!!! PATTY :)))

Reviewer: balesp Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Mar 2016 11:33 PM Title: Chapter 201

I loved this story!  Oh my gosh it was wonderful!  You did an amazing job with it.

Reviewer: robin5589 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Feb 2016 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 188

Love this fic. Bella has come a long way and I'm ready for Aro to be thrown under the jail. I do have to say that Esme disappointed me. When she told Edward several chapters back if Bella pushed him away 1 more time to walk away and play the field. After raising Edward who had similar issues that Bella is dealing with now.  Would that have been her answer when he pushed her away when she was raising him. Bella went through an unreal amount of abuse that couldn't be healed overnight and I think after what she dealt with she did what anyone in her position would do. Of course she would be hot and cold. As I remember Edward was a little that way in the beginning. Just my thoughts but love your fic. I guess I just expected Esme over anyone to understand Bella after raising Edward who handled his own demons the same way. Again great story.

Reviewer: lynard69 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Feb 2016 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 61

That last little bit is the Edward I love most in a story.

Reviewer: lynard69 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Feb 2016 8:25 AM Title: Chapter 45

I love the Lisa Frank reference.  It so dates me, but I loved her shit as a kid.  Especially the puffy stickers.

Reviewer: cupcakebabe25 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Dec 2015 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 2

Loved it!

Reviewer: cupcakebabe25 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Dec 2015 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

Loved it!

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jan 2015 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 110

He wants to take care of her ;)

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Dec 2014 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 109

Rose and Alice where caught with there pantys down lol

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Dec 2014 9:17 AM Title: Chapter 108

What a great gift.  I hope Ro is Rose and she wants to talk to Emmett

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Dec 2014 9:07 AM Title: Chapter 107

Sad they have to go back

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Dec 2014 8:59 AM Title: Chapter 106

She made it a very special night for him and he made her feel his love to

Reviewer: nello1418 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 26 Nov 2014 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 201

Brilliant read.  i really enjoyed every bit of it. You write really great stories.

Reviewer: twirob13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Oct 2014 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 201

awesome story ;) i really hope you do write some f/t & o/t because i really want them to have more kids ;D

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 18

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 17

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 16

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:30 PM Title: Chapter 15

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 14

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 13

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:07 PM Title: Chapter 12

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:02 PM Title: Chapter 11

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 1:59 PM Title: Chapter 10

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 9

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 8

Loved it!

Reviewer: angels2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 1:42 PM Title: Chapter 7

Loved it!

Reviewer: mar76 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jul 2014 1:06 PM Title: Chapter 11

Fitting name "skankella". Is she going to be this way for awhile.I'm trying here, its so different from ur other Bellas.

Reviewer: maggiegurle Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2014 5:36 AM Title: Chapter 201

What a great story. I enjoyed every word of it. Thank you! :o)

Reviewer: Cullenbabe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2014 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 55

I love Alice 

Reviewer: magmom1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Mar 2014 7:53 PM Title: Chapter 201

Wonderful story. I will miss them. I did hope for a boy.

Reviewer: magmom1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2014 8:56 PM Title: Chapter 157

What is a telemetry floor?

Reviewer: magmom1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2014 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 133

I was thinking it was Charlie but I didn't know why. I guess I missed or forgot someone called Carlisle.

Reviewer: magmom1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Mar 2014 2:32 PM Title: Chapter 66

I can't help wonder what will happen when he is found out or however it happens.

Reviewer: magmom1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2014 11:45 PM Title: Chapter 49

This chapter is making me very nervous.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2014 2:49 AM Title: Chapter 201

A beautiful wrap up to a great story.
You mentioned possibly writing a sequel.........I would definitely fall in line to read it.
I have questions about Edward's mentor and boss Leslie. Did he move to Seattle? What were the reasons behind the move?
Did Alice and Jasper have children?
Do Charlie and Sue get married?
Will Rose finally break down and say yes to a proposal from Emmett?
Will Edward ever become a US District Attorney?
Any more children for E&B?
So much more to write about.

Thanks for a great ride. I'm glad you were able to finish this and not be censored (by the other site).

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2014 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 200

Glad Emmett was able to take some of the edge off of Bella's sadness. Edward's proposal was beautiful. Where will they live?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2014 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 199

Nothing to fear, Edward. She is as ready as you are to be liked as husband and wife.
Leslie is a riot.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2014 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 198

Edward will find a way to be at the graduation ceremony!
Esme seems to be lightening up her rigid stance on Bella's love of Edward.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2014 8:00 PM Title: Chapter 197

Ya, who really has a boss like Felipe? He is nice though. A good bit if relief and relaxation.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2014 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 196

Bella's strength is derived from Edward's encouragement.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2014 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 195

A ring is waiting. The time apart is slowly closing in on being over. They are both still growing.

Reviewer: magmom1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2014 7:39 PM Title: Chapter 9

Bella has good intuition.

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