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Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2014 10:32 AM Title: Chapter 24 Epilogue

Dear Corinne, You haven't heard from me lately. My dear husband got ill (a merciless form of Leukemia) and died last july 22nd.

I'll be around the fandom, lurking, but to write and  review is difficult at this moment.

Camilla



Author's Response:

Just responding to the review.  For those who look through these, I've responded in private.    

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2014 8:46 AM Title: Chapter 24 Epilogue

I just love how this turned out for Leah and Kyle! I too am sure they will see Nahuel in the future. Wonderful how Rose has dedicated herself to helping children around the world.. It's a great outlet for her maternal instincts!I will think of all these people now and again and wonder how they might be doing!



Author's Response:

Thank you for your support all through this story.  I have a tendency to put too much into my epilogues.  Some people like them, since they get a glimpse of the future, and know the HEA stuck.  But I myself worry they're too much like what Rowling did with Harry Potter.  That epi tied everything up in a bow, and took it out of the hands and minds of readers.  It's great if you just want a glimpse at the future, but not so great if you're writing fan fiction, or wanting to imagine characters in jobs and relationships different from what the author saw.  Meyer gave us the fairy tale ending:  And they lived happily ever after, the end, cue violins.  It left the door open for some great stories after the ending.  It didn't try to shove a books worth of information and story into a few pages.  But I'm guilty of doing it myself.  

Thanks again for reading.     

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2014 8:59 PM Title: Chapter 23 Honeymoon

So, you noticed the likeness, but definitely put your own spin on the idea! Leah's theory about how far back this kinship among supernatural creatures was just fascinating! By the way, their honeymoon was great, from the sound of it! It was kind of cute when Leah discovered how well off Kyle was! He must operate on the principle of , got it, DON'T flaunt it!



Author's Response:

I liked that Kyle had money, but didn't flaunt it  I know it's advised that when couples plan to marry, they sit down and talk about their finances, including debt and goals.  Leah and Kyle were already so much in love, there wasn't any going back if the financial outlook was grim.   She just assumed that he was like the rest of her friends and family, who struggle to make ends meet.  Since the Quileutes are a real tribe, I assume they suffer with the same kind of poverty on other reservations.  

The supernatural angle is one that just seems natural to me.  It wouldn't make sense that shape-shifters manifested in the presence of vampires alone, if they weren't somehow connected.  Then there's the link between Nessie and Jacob that's hard to deny.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2014 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 23 Honeymoon

Well, I had missed that Star Trek episode(?) I thought it very interesting albeit difficult to viasualize. However this seems to tell me that really the shapeshifters are not human but a different species (and to think that Jacob in the Saga boasted to be human despite his nature).



Author's Response:

I'd forgotten all about it, until I started editing the story, and realized what it was I saw in my head.  Maybe that's why I didn't describe it very well in the story.  I was afraid too much description would edge into science fiction territory, especially after I glossed over the details of them making love.  I wrote this when I was very conscious of the rating. 

Reviewer: zanath Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2014 5:56 PM Title: Chapter 23 Honeymoon

Great Story...I love it!  The shifters you describe are so much more that in the books and so much like what i have thought of them from the legends. Thanks - Xanath



Author's Response:

Thank you for the kind review!  I still have one more chapter to go, and I'll try to get it posted within the week.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2014 8:31 AM Title: Chapter 22 Wedding

I confess I have an issue with fanfiction weddings. So girlish and so fluffy. When my characters have one I just dedicate a few lines to it (But I still think that the wedding in The Parachutist is great, if super short).



Author's Response:

You're right about the weddings.  This one was too much fluff, but then again, the whole story is fluffy.  I do try to avoid as much of the girly stuff as possible, like the kind of flowers and the description of the dress, etc.  This was my first, so I went overboard.  For the most part, if there's not something going on besides the nuptuals, then it really is unnecessary to write it out.  If I were reading this wedding chapter in someone elses story, I probably would have rolled my eyes at the scene with the birds flying in the shape of a heart.  But then again, another reader loved it.  It's a tough call, whether to leave in the fluffy bits for those who love the romance, or take them out, for those who want plot without cliche's.  

I've never read The Parachutist, though I've had two recommendations for it.  I tend to steer away from most AU, AH stories.  Those are just original stories masquerading as fan fiction by using the likenesses of Pattinson and Stewart.  I also have too many sour grapes to read hugely popular stories.  Either I unintentionally copy their fanon, or I'm hugely critical of them.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2014 8:33 AM Title: Chapter 22 Wedding

That wedding was just perfect for the couple marrying and everyone else! Having all the young shifters form a heart as birds was fabulous! Edward playing and singing for Leah's wedding was a very nice touch! The Cullen women doing all that girly stuff for Leah was great I just loved the whole thing! Now I'm curious as to where they are going!



Author's Response:

Thank you.  The birds were a take on how some couples release doves when they get married.  I thought shape-shifters would do it differently.  The way the Cullens pitched in to help was unusual.  But I think they recognized how much Jacob and Leah helped them against Victoria's army, as well as how they stood with them when the Volturi came.  The Denali turned their backs on them, and the wolfpack stood in the gap.  That matters.  I'm also thinking that if Charlie, Harry and Sue were friends, then Bella and Leah were once friendly as well.  Add in Rosalie's warming toward Kyle, and Emmett's friendship with him, and it gives them all reason to be there.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jun 2014 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 21 Anticipation

Well, OK there isn't a lot of drama. But you still manage to keep the interest



Author's Response:

Thanks for the kind words.  Maybe I was afraid to write a bit more drama, because Leah had it so rough in the books.  At least it's not one of my marathon stories, and I managed to get to the end before a year passed!

 

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jun 2014 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 21 Anticipation

The family lineage Sue showed Leah sure explained a lot, and Kyle's take on it made perfect sense! The future, with Seth and Ahnah's and Leah and Kyle's offspring, is going to be even more amazing! This has been such a nice preperation, with Sue managing it all so seemingly easily, the shower and next up the batchelor party! Leah explained the heart of this endeavor so well to Ahnah, what's important and what isn't. Looking forward to the wedding and honeymoon.



Author's Response:

Oops, I forgot to answer the reviews.  Anne Rice writes a series about witches, and in them, the lineage is traced through the women of the family.  I loved that idea, because it makes so much more sense.  A woman who gives birth to a child, is obviously its mother.  But the man who claims the child may or may not be the father.  It's easier to attach parenthood to birth, rather than conception or even commitment.  Yet all through history, it's the men who are credited with the lineage and family names.  Here, I wanted to show that they shouldn't count out the women.  The idea that a woman could be pregnant when she marries isn't so far-fetched.  

The whole manifestation of the wolves was one that interested me.  In the books it was hard to tell if it came from magic, or some physical geneology.  Was it brought on by exposure to vampires?  A mystical connection with the wolves?  Anger?  Or a difference in species?  In some ways, I think it's a little of everything, but ultimately, they're a different species, diluted with human.  

The wedding plans are woven throughout, but I didn't want them to dominate the story.  I watched an episode of Bridezilla, as well as a few romantic comedies where wedding preparations go so far over the top it's ridiculous.  I can't understand why so many women get caught up in wedding fever.  It's one day, and they put so much expectation on it, and lose the focus of what really matters.  I've heard stories from travel agents, photographers, caterers, and wedding planners, complaining about how some bride wants them to pay for the entire wedding, because something unforseen "ruined their whole special day!"  A travel agent booking them in coach instead of first class is not a traumatic event, nor is a cake with the wrong color icing.  

I saw an outdoor wedding during a sever rainstorm, where the tents collapsed and the wind blew them away.  The bride cried over the whole event and said she was traumatized.  Me, I'd have rescued as much as possible, then laughed like crazy over the wet wedding party.  The marriage is what matters, not the wedding.  My singer was eight months pregnant, my piano player played something that sounded godawful, pounding the keys discordantly, and my bouquet fell apart before I walked down the aisle.  I stepped on my dress and tore it, and my crinoline slid down and made it hard to walk.  

For the reception, one of my friends had found a bag of balloons I intended for the signs leading to the church, and she blew them up and stuck them to the wall behind the brides table, making it look like a birthday party.  Many of the guests got lost and couldn't find the church.  My maid of honor wore a dress from Goodwill, which was what I based the wedding colors on.  It was blue, and blue flowers are usually fake or dyed.  Still, we all had a good time, and nothing got me down.  The wedding is just a ceremony, and a party; the marriage is what matters.      

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2014 8:34 AM Title: Chapter 20 Supernatural

You put al lot of care in describing shapeshifters. Nice.



Author's Response:

At the time, I didn't know what the heck I was doing.  I think this story benefits from its authentic voice.... but sheesh, I wish I knew then what I know now!  This is a little too pure a romance for my liking.  It needs something else going on, some real conflict, some push to read the story.  I'm also a bit upset with the amount of tell and lack of show.  It is what it is.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2014 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 20 Supernatural

Even though they are from different tribes, the family of shifters and imprints continues to grow! Akiak was properly amazed at the number and kinds of supernatural creatures around. I agree with Leah, it's a good thing Lora has made a friend in Sue, because it will help her adjust to the new situation!



Author's Response:

I kind of feel bad for Lora.  She's stuck in a dying village.  Her older children have left home, and her husband fishes all day, and spends his evenings at the bar.  Sue could be her first real friend.  

Reviewer: zanath Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2014 1:40 PM Title: Chapter 18 Family

cute twist for Setth!  I like it.  I have always had a soft spot for Seth.  Thanks _ Xanath



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the review!  A couple years ago, I caught an interview with the actor who plays Seth, and he was such a cute and chatty fellow, I like him too.  I think he's the one who spilled the beans about a fifth movie, though it was honest enthusiasm, not trying to break trust.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2014 6:28 AM Title: Chapter 19 Fate

The talk with Ahnah and Seth went beautifully, including the shifting. They are quite mature for their ages and with Kyle and Leah's help will work it out. The problem might be Akiak, who may begin to shift at any time, if Leah is reading the signs correctly.I noticed the chapter title was Fate and I think you hit it spot on! More drama at the wedding, I guess!



Author's Response:

Chapter titles are so hard.  When I started writing, I only used the numbers, but I needed something to differentiate one from the next, so I started adding them.  As hard as they are, I love it, because it's given me practice at coming up with titles, either for chapters or stories, so now it's not so tough.  In this story, I'm trying to keep them all one word.  I've thought about writing a story where every title was a song, but I know I'd probably get stuck listening to music more than writing.  

It's almost as if Kyle and Leah had to have the "sex talk" with Seth.   

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2014 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 18 Family

The connection between Seth and Ahnah was surprising and a bit worrisome, what with the distance between their homes. Luck, or fate, take your pick, I'm sure everyone will work it out! The wedding looms and I can hardly wait to see how it goes! The shifting practice has been really interesting, with the animals they all chose being so different. Of course Seth would choose a squirrel, to kind of show off for his big sister! I was really glad to see Leah and Emily become closer as they were before Sam imprinted on her! See you next time!



Author's Response:

A lot of the imprints in the books seem to be really weird matches.  Two of them were toddlers, and one split up an engaged couple.  I have a reason for that later in the story.  Seth and Ahnah probably have it really hard, because they're almost mature adults, but not quite, and they've got all those teenage hormones to deal with as well.  The shapeshifting is something that interests me.  I wonder why they always go for wolves.  Maybe it's because they usually shift under stress, and it's the easiest for them.  Kyle is trying to show them how to shift when they're calm, so they can choose a new form.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2014 9:34 PM Title: Chapter 18 Family

Very interesting considerations about the nature of shapeshifting.

Confused  about a wedding is about the bride and groom giving presents to the guests instead of receiving them. You have to be rich to afford a wedding!



Author's Response:

The potlatch is a Native American ceremony that accompanies some special events.  It would normally take great wealth to pull off something like this with as many guests as Leah has coming to her wedding.  But her mother has been planning this for years, setting aside gifts and keepsakes a few at a time.  Most are simple and hand-made, like knit scarves, handkerchiefs, woven baskets, etc.  For the needier guests, Sue is giving more expensive gifts, but they're still within reason.  

Since the community is relatively poor, weddings are done differently.  Much of the work and preparation is done as a gift to the bride and groom, like the alterations to her dress, and the food preparation.  It's not uncommon for friends and family to volunteer to serve food, tend bar, play music, print the invitations, take the pictures, and arrange the flowers.  The event will be simpler, and involve more people.  In this way, it's possible to have a big wedding, with a lot of fancy touches, that doesn't cost a lot of money.     

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2014 9:29 PM Title: Chapter 17 Smack-down

Rosalie covered in mud and madder than a wet hen, now there's a sight I would have paid to see! The play-by-play from Edward and Alice was hilarious and I had to laugh through that whole scenario! It was sweet of Kyle to come back and apologize and I think Rose really appreciated it! Thank heaven Leah has the casts removed, now we can get on with the wedding!



Author's Response:

As I was editing this, I hit on somthing that has changed since I wrote it four years ago.  Most people carry phones, and most of the new phones have screens and can capture video.  Jasper could have easily filmed the fight, and sent it back to the house.  I thought about changing it, but then I thought how much fun it was to have Edward tuned in to Jasper's mind for the play by play.  It's no fun to have vampire powers if you can't show 'em off.  

Rosalie is a character I just love to write.  She's so complex, and yet few people capture more than her b!tchy side.  Keeping in mind that there's a reason for her tough exterior, the roll in the mud was fun, but the apology did a lot to redeem Kyle and men in her eyes.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 May 2014 8:17 AM Title: Chapter 17 Smack-down

Well, it is going far too well. Is the other shoe going to drop?



Author's Response:

You know how I write.  This is one of those stories that could have used a bit more conflict.  I was so bent on writing a HEA for Leah, I almost made it too happy.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 May 2014 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 16 Teasing

The teasing of Seth was such fun, except for him getting poopedon, that was kind of gross, though I had to laugh at him! Sue getting ready for the potlatch sounds like lots of work and planning, but I love stuff like that! Leah helping her mom ready all the gifts should keep her mind off the healing for a bit. It should be interesting to see Kyle showing the pack how to change to different shapes, he was good at teaching Leah! p.s., I apologize for the "album /cliche" remark, I really meant no disrespect, it made me smile, was all!



Author's Response:

Working backward here; don't apologize for an honest comment in a review.  I've got on my big girl panties, and I can take it.  That's very mild as far as criticism goes, and it didn't bother me.  I do take criticism seriously, because my goal is to improve.  They say that there are no new things to be written, and everything is just rehasing what's been done before.  I'm bound to hit on a few cliche`s now and then.  I've found, especially in romances, that cliche`s are accepted and often loved.  Looking at photo albums may be cliche` today, but it's likely to go out of style, as the digital age takes away film, and we share our pictures through email or facebook.  I have dozens of mini-albums, full of pictures of the kids, up to the point when my husband bought a digital camera.  Now no one prints out the pictures.  I really miss it.  

I had a lot of fun with the sibling relationship between Seth and Leah.  I love Seth being a somewhat bratty younger brother, who loves pushing her buttons.  Kyle couldn't let him get away with something that hurt Leah's feelings.  I did a bit of reading on Native American celebrations, and discovered the potlatch.  It's a traditional celebration, where gifts are given instead of received.  Many of her gifts are hand-made, and she's been collecting some of them for years.   

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Apr 2014 8:42 AM Title: Chapter 15 Memories

Nice take on Sam. Boring



Author's Response:

I've written Sam a few different ways, since he's one of those minor characters that didn't get much development.  He's the one who hurt Emily, but he's also the one who found Bella in the woods.  He's the one who helped Jacob and the others deal with their change, but he's also the one who wanted to kill Nessie.  I think he sees himself as a leader, since he didn't submit to Jacob's authority.  I wanted to portray Leah as being vivacious and fun, before she met Sam.  So many make her out to be a bi...not nice person.  Take away the anger, and she's got a wicked sense of humor.    

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Apr 2014 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 15 Memories

Very nice of Leah to invite the Cullens to the wedding, out of gratitude no doubt. Looking through the family albums was so cliche, but kind of sweet, too!



Author's Response:

I'm going to accept the negative of being cliche` since this was my first fan fiction.  In reading back over it, I'm seeing so much I would have done differently if I wrote it today.  Learning to write has been a journey with a lot of trial and error.  I like to tell my kids that I've got some great blackmail pictures of them when they were little.  I'm sure the last thing they'd want me to do is take out my photo albums in front of a significant other.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2014 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 12 Hurt

If you want you can send me Italian sentences in advance radlau@gmail.com



Author's Response:

I'm really glad to have the offer.  But I decided not to add in language I'd only have to translate in author's notes.  I'm pretty sure the few words and phrases I added will seem odd to you.  Even if I can find the right words, the sentence structure in English is subtly different in Italian.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2014 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 1 Free

I have recced it on What the fic on A different forest



Author's Response:

Thanks.  I would have killed for such a rec. when I first wrote this.  As a brand new writer, I had no clue how to get people to read, and the lack of traffic felt like painful rejection.  I'm so glad I did fan fiction before I tried to write my own original novels.  An ego that fragile would have destroyed me.  

BTW, in the next chapter of MDD, I'm going to mangle some Italian words, phrases, and sentence structures.  Feel free to blast away, set me straight, or laugh if you like.  I tried to minimize it, but I felt the story needed a hint of the seasoning.  Sadly, Google translate is not very fine-tuned for what I needed, and my own knowledge is even worse.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2014 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 14 Recovery

I am liking the story so much. I am going to pimp it around.



Author's Response:

Wow, and thanks.  I think it's benefitting from some much needed editing.  That's what's keeping me from moving all my stories over here.  I feel like this site deserves my best.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2014 8:39 AM Title: Chapter 7 Connected

I womnder what explanation you will come up with to explain the shapeshifting.



Author's Response:

You know me; I do have a plan!  I was a little dismayed when I reread this story, and discovered my explanation wasn't as original as I'd believed.  It seems I'd unconsciously borrowed the shape-shifting aspect from a Star Trek series.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2014 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 3 Shifter

Wonderful . and rooted in Canon!



Author's Response:

At least early on, I tried to stick close to canon.  Over the years, my memory has started to fade, and I haven't reread the books to refresh the details.  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Apr 2014 4:51 AM Title: Chapter 2 Wild

Hi, this came as a surprise, I didn't know you were posting this at the same time. I was so upset by the cliff hanger with the Volturi that I surfed and found a story about Leah. Such an intewresting character!



Author's Response:

Wow, talk about surprises, I didn't expect to pick up new reader/reviewers on this one.  This was my first fan fiction, and it's a little....naive`.  The need to give Leah a HEA drove me into fan fiction.  I've had so much fun with her character in several of my stories.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Apr 2014 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 14 Recovery

That was a scary deal! Poor Kyle, thinking he had to die to be with his Leah! Good thing she's a stubborn woman and forced him to recognize the fact that she is alive and healing! I wonder if Carlisle is subtly telling Leah she might be out of plaster by her wedding day? I'm just glad it's looking  so much better for both Leah and Kyle!



Author's Response:

This one was a hard sell for me.  I didn't buy all the crazy hallucinations in canon, and I didn't want to put such things in my story.  But... added to precedent, there's imprinting, mind reading, pack mentality, and Native American legends.  So, against my better judgment, I gave Kyle a little catatonia in his grief.  I think Leah would have done something even more radical if he hadn't snapped out of it.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Apr 2014 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 13 Help

Reading all this, I can't get over the change in Leah's attitude towards the Cullens! Seperating herself from Jacob's pack certainly has had some interesting sideffects! It was sad, though to hear her fears of her injuries effects on Kyle, their wedding, etc. I guess when you're recovering from that much trauma, your mind wanders that way! Had to chuckle, though, over the Cullen women doing their thing to make Leah look good for company!



Author's Response:

I sort of think a lot of Leah's bad attitude came from the feeling that life had taken a crap on her.  I've seen people who have had one bad thing after another happen, barely catching their breath before they're hit with another trial, and it changes them.  Being a shape-shifter has gone from being a curse to a blessing, and she's having to reevaluate all of her attitudes around that change.  She also wants to be worthy of being the woman Kyle loves.  I know a few people with attitude issues, and somewhere along the way, they give themselves permission to be that way.  You have to choose to be confrontational and abrasive, and let it fly no matter who you might hurt.  Seeing that her words have the power to hurt someone she loves, makes her reconsider that choice.  I'm also thinking that the quiet stillness of Alaska has had an affect on the chaotic noise of her life.  What would be fine at home, sounds like noise pollution in the middle of nowhere.  She doesn't have to yell to be heard.  Dang it, I wish I'd put that into the story.    

Reviewer: Merit Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Apr 2014 8:37 PM Title: Chapter 12 Hurt

PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!! LOVE THIS!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the review.  I'm back from vacation, and working on the next chapter.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2014 6:18 AM Title: Chapter 12 Hurt

Poor Leah, she was so close to having everything go just right and then all hell breaks loose! Of course Kyle would protect her, or die trying, and she had to reinjure herself to save him. The only good things to come out of this were finding Kim's grandmother and Leah breaking free of Jacob! I sincerely hope she and Kyle don't have to be wheeled down the aisle to be married!



Author's Response:

There's a lot that has to happen here before Leah can really enjoy a happily ever after.  She's got a few issues to confront within herself, or else she won't be happy, even with a great guy like Kyle.  Thanks for reading; I'm working on the next chapter.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2014 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 11 Ice

I always like to see how a rural area or small town deals with a weather emergency like this power outage. It's the way our ancestors did it from pioneer times to now, neighbor helping neighbor! Seth was totally impressed to see Kyle shift to a bald eagle and Leah change to a silver fox! Now he's excited to see if he canlearn how to do it! Funny Leah can't see how m uch Charlie likes her mother!



Author's Response:

I almost forget to respond to the reviews on this story, since you're the only one who leaves them  I'd imagine on the reservation they have fewer resources for weather emergencies.  In a lot of rural areas, neighbors have to look out for each other.  I'm not sure if the reservation can count on county or city amenities, but I'm sure there's enough poverty there, that they'd be some of the last ones helped.  I think Leah can see Charlie likes her mom, but she doesn't want to see it.  Before, she would have been rude about it, but now she's just trying to ignore it.  The idea of a step-dad, replacing her beloved father, is going to take some getting used to.  Thanks again for your comments

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2014 8:16 AM Title: Chapter 10 Plans

As soon as Kyle brought that painting to show Sue, I knew it would make the difference in how she felt about him. The age thing was a bit daunting, but nobody said a word against shifting. I wonder if Leah is going to tell everyone about the various animals she can change into now? I bet it thrills her mom that Leah wants to wear her wedding dress! That's so sweet and doesn't always happen. Can't wait for the wedding!



Author's Response:

Leah's keeping the shifting a secret.  She's waiting for the right time to spring it on everyone -- she still likes drama.  The age issue seems like a big one, and I'm glad Sue didn't fold without a fight.  Many of the imprints have crazy age gaps, where they have to wait for their "true love" to grow up.  Personally, I find this a little creepy -- okay -- a LOT creepy.  It sounds too much like grooming to me.  I've tried to write it as if it's the young girls who get to do the grooming, while their imprint becomes what she wants and needs.  It's still creepy.  I've never liked those "you complete me," romantic relationships.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2014 7:24 AM Title: Chapter 9 Alpha

Kyle kind of spaced out and went into possesive high alert there for a while. Oh well, at least it introduced her fiance to the Cullen family, in a very unique fashion! Looking forward to seeing Sue's plans for Leah's wedding!



Author's Response:

I just had a response I wrote for this, then discovered I was reviewing the story.  Some day I won't be so technologically challenged ... coffins are pretty low tech.  Kyle had an issue here with being an alpha male, confronted by two other alphas with connections to Leah.  Leah had to get him away from Sam and Jacob, before he decided to tear them apart.  She intentionally gave him a distraction he couldn't ignore.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Feb 2014 8:39 AM Title: Chapter 8 Expectations

I felt kind of bad for Kyle when he took Leah to meet his sister, she has to hide his real identity from her children, and I'm guessing that may pain Kyle! I'm excited for them to be going to La Push for him to meet her people. Speaking of whom, I wonder who drove that old truck to pick them up?



Author's Response:

It's probably a double-edged sword for him.  On one hand the Inuit roots run deep, and they've lived in the area for generations.  But it means it's not easy for him to pick up and move away, like vampires would.  There are reasons why he's the only one, but it doesn't make it easy for him, having to stay seperate, and change who he is so he can stay in contact with his loved ones.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Feb 2014 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 7 Connected

Sorry to hear of your illness, and hope you are better now. This was a great chapter, not only because Leah and Kyle are getting married , but because Leah is going to research the shape-shifting! Her theories are fascinating! This has been a really good story so far and I look forward to more of it!



Author's Response:

Oops, I just discovered I've not responded to your reviews -- shame on me.  In editing this story, I'm discovering how simplistic I wrote when I first started.  Unrealistic dialogue, and not enough real problems.  I'm trying to tweak it as I post it.  Any time Kyle startes to look like he belongs in a soap opera, I know I've got to fix it.  Thanks for reading and reviewing; sometimes I wonder if you're the only one.  

Reviewer: Ketia Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2014 2:48 AM Title: Chapter 6 Transformation

Am I the only one waiting for another chapter? (lol)



Author's Response:

I think there might be two of you.  Thanks for being patient, and thanks for reading and reviewing.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jan 2014 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 6 Transformation

Really good chapter! Leah changing into a golden eagle was unexpected as well as exciting. Sure got Kyle's attention along with his anger. I thiunk it scared him that he may have lost her and he said the first thing to his tongue! Sure pissed off independent Leah! I do have a feeling, however, that they are going to work out an equitable arrangement, since they love each other!



Author's Response:

I think imprinting has to be one of the worst kinds of love.  To have your whole being wrapped up in someone else, with no choice in the matter would be torture.  Whether he likes it or not, Kyle is all in, and anything that threatens that is going to be painful and scary for him.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jan 2014 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 5 Lake

Leah really has had the short end of the stick for so long, she's afraid to trust herself and her feelings. The bond between her and Kyle has been so strong and so sudden, I guess it's understandable she questions it. I think it's so cool that he's teaching her to change into different animals. I'm also glad that Leah was brave enough to tell Kyle she loves him. Now he just needs to work on her accepting his proposal!



Author's Response:

Everything about Leah is being challenged with her relationship to Kyle.  She's had a lot of walls and defenses up, and she knows she can't keep them up and let him in at the same time.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jan 2014 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 4 Imprint

Guess that twenty year old painting confirms the possibilities of the supernatural existing! It would explain why Kyle called Leah his tikaani woman, he's longed for her all this time! Now that she has told Jacob what's happened and asked for her things to be sent, I'n concerned that Kyle hasn't returned to his home! What if something has happened to him while he was a wolf?



Author's Response:

It's funny, magical "soul mates" is an idea I personally hate.  But I find I like to write it--go figure.  Maybe it's the nature of love, that we want the fantasy, and want to believe it's out there, attainable with the right amount of searching or patience.  The reality is, that humans come with human faults and frailties, and nobody's perfect.  Maybe the goal is to fall so much in love, that the faults don't matter?  Anyway, I had a lot of fun with these characters.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2013 3:45 AM Title: Chapter 3 Shifter

Good heavens, Leah! Quit complaining and embrace the fortune you have found! This amazing man is your soul-mate, when you thought it would never happen to you! I look forward to the next steps in this getting- acquainted situation!



Author's Response:

The challenge here was keeping Leah still Leah.  She's got some things to learn and changes to make, but I didn't want to rub off all the rough edges just yet.  Ever notice how some people get stuck in a rut with their behavior, and the glass is always half-empty?  Leah's so used to getting the short end of the stick, she can't just relax when something good happens.  Thanks so much for the review and kind comments.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Dec 2013 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 2 Wild

By no m,eans is Leah slow-witted, but it's funny she hasn't figured out what's going on with all the different species having that same earty sweet scent! He seems to be able to shift into almost anything he wants to! Can't wait until they meet as humans! This is going to be good!



Author's Response:

Leah only has experience with the wolves.  Not only that, but she's not fully wolf, even after so much time has passed.  Wolves trust their noses, but humans trust their eyes.  I'm glad you like the story so far.  I had so much fun writing this one.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Dec 2013 1:43 AM Title: Chapter 1 Free

How nice to see Leah happy, after all the grief she has gone through! Sam and Emily's wedding sounded lovely, part modern and part traditional. Noe I look forward to Leah's adventures.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing!  It was my goal to keep Leah in character, and give her reasons to let go of her anger issues.  When I was a little girl, I did a lot of reading about Native Americans, so Leah naturally fascinated me.  I don't know what specific tradeitions the Quileutes would follow,, but nature and ancestors were common themes.     

Reviewer: Ketia Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Dec 2013 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 2 Wild

I like the story. It's interesting! :)



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for taking a chance and being the first to review.  I hope you like the story as it unfolds, since it was my first fan fiction ever.  It's needing a bit more editing as I post it here; I've learned so much since I wrote it.  

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