[Report This]Date: 17 Nov 2011 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love the character of Victoria, however I think if you could try to bring more of the misunderstood side of her personality out that would help. Then explain how she turned to this Femme Fatalle that would help.
Date: 28 Apr 2010 4:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
It kindof makes you feel sorry for her, she lost her love and everything, and by drinking human blood she's just being a normal vampire. Edward was going to kill himself when he though Bella was dead, she wanted to die also. It makes sence. If only she didn't have to cause so much trouble, if only she could just go to the Voultri like Edward. If only.. well, I like the way you wrote her charactor. I haven't read much of anythink from her Point of Veiw, so it was interesting, and I'm so glad that the silver streak was a newborn vampire and not Edward haha, it would be to soon for him to come back if it was.
Date: 01 Feb 2010 9:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
That's a decent set up for Victoria. Interesting how she seeks out Laurent for help, though she still despises him. Nomadic vamps, indeed.