Reviews by Stargirl888
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella's first assignment as a journalist is to uncover the truth about Christian Polygamy. Dr. Edward Cullen is a small town doctor who lives his life by his own sets of rules. Edward and his wives live a lifestyle that many may not understand. After Edward treats Bella he invites her into his home, where Bella learns more than what she bargained for. How will her first assignment impact the rest of her life?

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Non-Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward, Edward/Alice, Edward/Rose
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 162668 Read Count: 153025
[Report This] Published: 09 Feb 2010 Updated: 01 May 2020
Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning Of The Truth

Certainly one of the most origional and interesting stories I've come across so far.

 

Looking forward to see where this goes.

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 2: What Happens Behind Closed Doors

Woohoo! Spanking! Lol, I'm so pleased you included this, since it really fits the story. I love the way you so clearly show how much Edward truely cares for his wives, and also respects them for being individuals.

 

I will say that when I first started this chapter I was a little aprehensive about Alice and Rosalie with Edward, since they're not my favorite pairings but I'm starting to get into it now.  



Author's Response:

Don't worry I know how weird it is I am a big Edward/Bella fan. But it's sort of fun to write naughty characters.

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 3: The Most Basic Facts

Oh, I love them catching Rose and Ed going at it - it's great to see Alices reactions since it really gives you a great sense of their family dynamic. And thank you for being true to the origional characters personalities as far as possible.

 

 

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Family Ties

Oh yay, for once its Alice and not Rose who's responsible for being caught in compromising positions - I think we dont see this side of her enough. Edward had a point about the clothing.

 

I liked Edwards backstory. I never knew that some American Indians had a tradition of polygamy - facinating, I'll have to look that up. (I've always been interested in learning about polygamy but the Christian/Mormon aspect always puts me off (I'm not Christian and for some reason find it annoying).

 



Author's Response:

I took a class at Temple University that dealt with polygamy in both ancient and modern society and always found it interesting.

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Money Problems

Okay, well first I like the idea of Alice pinching his leg to get his attention, and the way you stressed the whole time how much Edward truely cared for his wife and made sure he was not causing her lasting harm- its an important point that people tend to ignore.

 

Go Alice for letting Bella watch, and not being embarassed, I think it was important for Bella to see that, and also to see that it was her choice.

 

I do however feel the punishment was a little too sever - maybe only over panties, then bare, then the belt and leaving off the over clothes would have been better - just my opinion. I liked that he spanked her thighs as well (sorry I'm focussing on such small details - my fics generally contain spankings so I notice these little things and have very specific preferences)

 

Anyway, cant wait to find out Bella's reactions

 

 

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Explaining The Pain

I liked how Alice tried to distract herself with fashion ;) THANK YOU SO MUCH for a proper and well thought out explanation to the DD lifestyle!!! And it's so typical of Alice to already have a room ready for Bella.

I love the character dynamics you've created between them all, and that the you haven't let the DD stifle Alice's personality (like when she scolds Edward about guilt tripping Bella), and the Rosalie lemon at the end was also an interesting insight.

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 7: A Woman's Perception

Wow, intense! That was really painful and graphic but i'm pleased you put it in and allowed us to get to know Rosalie's past, and this also allows the reader to distinguise the different between abuse and DD.

 

There was also a few rather disgustingly creative abuse methods in there and I'm curious if you had reserched/ read about them or just come up with them yourself?



Author's Response:

I lived in Philly most of my life and have meet some very interesting people. I know a women that lives a DD lifestyle and got some tips I guess you could call them from her.  

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Getting Personal

Thank goodness i'm reading this after the next chapter has been posted or I would be complaining about the cliff hanger right now.

 

I can guess what a session means, but I'll hold onto my suspicions for now.

I meant to mention this a few chapters back: I love the fact that Bella is just sort of taking Alice in her stride - I mean if someone told me they had redone a whole suite of rooms and brought me a new wardrobe after only knowing them a couple of days, I'd be heading for the hills wandering what type of mad cult I was about to be inducted into. (not that the Cullens are a cult, just, its strange behaviour).



Author's Response:

I love the whole cult thing, maybe I could use that for a dark one shot....LOL 

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Emotions Involved

Oh, that was a nice chapter - you spoke about instense things but it wasn't overwhelmingly emotional. I can understand why no one knew about Rose's abuse, but I'm just curious, which such a large family, how did people not find out from one of his other daughters or wives?

 

Then again, I suppose, since that has been known to happen, even in such large families, it's not that unbeleivable..



Author's Response:

I am a victim of sexual abuse and it went on for years before I finally couldn't take it anymore and told my mom. You can't imagine how easy it is to hide things when people arn't looking for them. No one wants to believe that they know anyone that is capable of doing horrible things especially when children are involved.

Now in Rose's case sometime people are so use to abuse that they start to believe that that is the normal and they don't see anything wrong with it.

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Out In The Open

That was touching. I think it was good that although Rose wanted to fly into a rage upon seeing Edward and Bella she didn't - I dont think that would have worked out well. And I liked how Alice was there to support Rosalie

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Suppression

Great Chapter. I think Edward handled that really well, both the emotional bit and her attitude at the end.

And the sex scene in the pool was HOT!

I know I said something similar but I'll say it again - I love the fact that Alice is the one with kinks for once! & learnt something new with the baby oil.



Author's Response:

Alice is just so out there I would just imagine that she would be that way about sex too right.

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Taking Charge

Thank goodness there's still one more chapter before I have to wait for an update!

 

Strangely enough I didn't see anything wrong with what Edward did - but then I didn't really view it as a full punishment; they were more like warning slaps to get her to stop the behaviour. That said, I can understand why they would consider this to be a big deal in their marriage.

 

I'm just curious... the way you described Alice's upbringing made it sound like her parents are monogamous, but isn't that one of the reasons Rose says Bella would not be comfortable in their lifestyle? It was nice to get Alices back story though

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Flashback

Oh damn, I thought they'd have the meeting in this chapter - guess I'll just have to be patient.

 

I think you should do shorter chapters more often, but longer chapters less often is also fine.

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 07 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Revelations Before The Fire

My goodness, you've really been having a time of it lately - I congratulate you for getting even this chapter out. I completely understand the delay and hope your life calms down now.

Woo hooo!!! Bella and Edward are going to give it a real go. I was going to complain that there was no family meeting yet  but I think that the end of this chapter was important to do first.(I'm really looking forward to the meeting - I think any of the girls POV would be better than Edward for the meeting - I particularly like your  Alice POV, but its just a suggestion). For some strange reason I love reading about Alice and Edwards sex life more than when he's thinkng about the others girls, and i like the fact they indulge both in 'pleasure' spankings and punishment spankings (I think it's rare for stories to acknowledge that people can use both in a relationship without confusion).

 

Anyway, it was a great chapter and I am really looking forward to the next update.



Author's Response:

Thanks.

I'm glad I was right that people wouldn't mind me pushing the meeting back one more chapter. I promise that it is coming up next. It may even have two chapters dedicated to it. And Rosalie's POV is up next, i have already started it. It may be a few chapters before we hear from Edward next.

 

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 19 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Fire's Blazing

And you leave us hanging??? lol, I cant wait for the next chapter to see how things work out. I liked seeing Rose's talk with her sisters and it was interesting how Rose was ok with what Edward did when both he and Alice were having issues with it, though I understand why she was ok and agree with her. For the meeting itself, the content seemed a little out of the blue to me, though I suppose since we are sort of walking into this family, in the middle of their lives it makes sense that there are all these other issues we weren't aware of until now. Well done Rosalie for keeping her temper (for the most part anyway0 and I enjoyed her teasing Edward in the office.

Looking forward to the next update!



Author's Response:

Sorry I couldn't help myself... lol

Sorry it seemed out of the blue. I tried to put a little bit of it in some of the previous chapters but I wanted it to as much of a shock to you as it was to Rose.

Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed
Date: 17 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Risky Business

I liked the office sex, and didn't think it was too much. As always another great chapter. I'm just curious about this whole Edward making the ultimate decisions i,r,t, dating - does this extend to taking on a new wife? Generally I agree that in most cases Edward should be the one to make the final decisions but I'm torn when it comes to dating - I get Edward being the one to decide when he dates, but I really think his wives should get more imput in it since yes, he is the one attracted to Bella and the one who will have sex with her, but dating is a prelude to marraige and if they marry, Bella will be marrying all three of them - now I doubt Edward would force a wife on them, but technically could he if say Rose refused to accept Bella and Ed really put his foot down - would Alice support him in that senario or would she feel Rosalie shouldn't be forced into marrage? (I doubt this situation would occure but just supposing it did...). Idk, maybe I'd just feel better if Rosalie was more like 'I don't agree but I'll support it and we can see how it goes' rather than 'I'll agree because you're the final decision maker' - I just felt Edward could have tried to convince her more first, rather than just being 'this is the way it is' - he could always have reverted to that if trying to convince her didn't work.

 

Anyway, just some random thoughts. It was a good chapter & I look forward to the next update.



Author's Response:

Ok I am going to try to answer your questions. But before I do I want to make it clear that I am no expert, I have taken 2 classes that discussed polygamy, I am friend with a woman that is a active polygamist, and I have done some research on my own before starting this story. So please don't take what I am saying as law, because I am not. So with that being said here goes.

Different religions see polygamy differently. In Islam (again not all believe this but there are a few that do.) they believe that no man or woman has the right to deny someone their god given right to polygamy. So while a man should consolt his wife before engaging in polygamy, she does not have the right to deny him his god given right. There are rules to this that are not seen in christian religions. For example a man is to take no more then 4 wives, and he does not need permission to do so. But he must treat each wife the same, no wife can have more then another. This is the same for all who practice polygamy. And the main reason it is allowed is to protect orphans and widows. Christians who practice polygamy believe that there are passages in the bible where men had multiple wives. Both King Soleman and King David are said to have many wives and concubines. So those who practice say that if it is in the bible then it can not be wrong. No where does it start that a woman has any right to protest their husband taking another wife. I know this is a very basic answer, but that about sums it up. Some rationalize polygamy by saying that because women outnumber men it is necessary for a man to have more then one wife. Also they say that it stops divorce and protects the wife. There are a hundred different reasons and I could go on all day, but I wont sorry about rambling, but I wanted to let you know what I was basing this story on.

Now Edward/Rosalie/Alice live a dd lifestyle. That means the Rosalie and Alice have given over the head of household role to Edward. He is in charge of his famlies well being and it is his job to do what is right for them all. This means that he has the final say when it comes to decisions. By mixing these two lifestyles and how they are handles it would be said that while Edward should consault his wives on all major decisions the choice is his.

Now what Alice said about her not wanting a say in the chosing process there are many reasons that wives do not want to be in that process. My friend had explained it to me this way. What if a wife helped to pick a girlfriend and things did not work out. This could cause negative feeling between the husband and wife, so with that thought in mind she would want nothing to do with chosing of the girlfriend. It has also been said that by giving the wife the choice she could never agree so that she could have control over the marriage, where in polygamy they believe that the man is responable for the family.

This is what I went with when deciding not to have Edward ask permission if he could date. I really gave it a lot of thought and just thought that it would go better if he didn't ask, but was open with them about it. I thought that it would be underminding his authority as the head of household. Now with that being said he would not marry anyone if his wives were 100% against it. I am going with the fact that Edward would never do anything to hurt Rosalie or Alice so if they couldn't accept Bella then he would not force them to accept her as a sister wife. He strongly feels that Rosalie is just scared and that once she gets to know Bella that she would know that she belonged with them.

Alright sorry if this was TMI but I wanted to get things as clear as possible. Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'm really glad that you felt comfortable enought to ask.

Denise

 

Summer Job by Dennycullenlutz Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]
Summary:

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Eighteen years old Bella Swan got a summer job that is going to change her life forever when she met twenty two years old Alice Brandon.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Alice
Genre: Femme Slash
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read set 2
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3524 Read Count: 1481
[Report This] Published: 09 May 2010 Updated: 09 May 2010
Reviewer: Stargirl888 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 10 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this, and it had a great build up story, I especially liked when they were in the pool ;) . Hope you decide to do more femslash in future.



Author's Response:

HI! Thank you so much for your review!! :) I'm glad that you had like my story. In fact, that was my first attempt in FemSlash and I really enjoyed the way readers had responded. I'm working on another story involving these two, so stay tuned ;)

You can also visit my profile on FF.net http://www.fanfiction.net/~dennycullenlutz


Thanks!!

XOXO

Denny