Reviews by Ren68
Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4248]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1254866
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 18 Sep 2014
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Love this story, the entire story is flowing very nicely. It seems well thought out and keeps me guessing. If I had one question that I not only found with your story but others as well, it would be, why outside of play time does Edward want to punish her for the things she does wrong. I understand the rules such as eating and sleep, but if she doesn't get 8 hours it is usually his fault. The other things such as behavior and thoughts I really don't understand how he can punish her for behaving badly outside of the playroom, I mean that are not Dom and Sub, they are Edward and Bella. I'm not sure if you have the answer but perhaps someone else does?

Again wonderful story can't wait to see where it goes.



Author's Response:

If you don't mind I would like to keep that question for the OT and let Edward answer it for himself...I'm sure he can explain it better then me... :) Thanks for reading and I have a teaser for you....lml

 

“You know what I think?” He raised his eyebrows “No I don’t but I would love to know love to hear it”

 

“I think you are wrong …“ Edward raised his eyebrows in disbelief, but I went on to explain before he could interrupt my train of thought. “ …about us needing to go to the club more often just to let people see us. I think we should go as you have already planned but not any extra times just to appease your adoring public.” Edward got that perplexed look on his face again.

 

“Think about it. All anyone really knows is that I showed up one night with Aro’s card. You yourself were kind of intrigued about how I knew him.” Edward nodded

 

“Your right I was, Aro doesn’t give them out.” I went on with my theory, while Edward’s hands moved down to rub my bottom.

 

“Then the next thing anyone knows is that sometime within the next week, you and I got together and then when they see us I’m sporting your collar around my neck. Now in order to justify why that happened they come up with all sorts of circumstances that would explain it. Which is alright but then like an arrogant child who is looking for attention from their daddy, they start spouting it to others, knowing it’s going to get back to you”

 

“Is that the psychologist talking? Because let me get this straight. They…” he pointed to my computer “… are the arrogant child and I am the daddy, and they are doing this to get a rise out of me?” I nodded.

 

“And it’s working”

 

Reviewer: Ren68 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 26 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I absolutely love your story.  I think you are doing an incredible job writing it. Having said that I have read alot of stories on these fan sites that deal with D/S relationships and although I do not practice this lifestyle and I know you do not either I had some questions that maybe one of your readers could answer. When I read these stories I get very angry when it comes to punishment, it really seems to be one sided. When she does something against his rules she is punished no matter what she says or does. But when he breaks the rules which he has done several times he says 'sorry' and everything is okay. I also hate the fact that she has to open up and tell him or write in her journal her personal thoughts, but he doesn't extend the same curtousy. None of this seems right and don't get me wrong your story is not the only one that does this. Once agian I do like the way you are handling your story all of my question are just my curiousity.



Author's Response:

What rules did he break?

He only has two rules....to take care of her and to be monogamous...(how he takes care of her is strickly his own conscience and his sense of right and wrong) Now Edward has a high standard when it comes to that, and he felt that he left Bella down by not caring for her emotional needs immediately, but he did do it (and not long afterwards either) so give him some points for that....Also being the top has it's perks but also a lot of responsibility and the greatest punishment a Dom can get is for his sub to lose trust in him,,,once the trust is gone there is no getting it back and that is a relationship ender....

The other thing is that he promised was to stay monogamous,,, and he has and i can garentee in my story he will remain so...

And he is open with her, any question she ask. He answers with honesty and fully. Edward didn't tell her about all that Caius said  not because he was trying to hide something he just (at the time) didn't think it was important. (at the time) his concern was in reassuring Bella of his confidence in her and her submission to him. Then other things happened all through the week (it was a hell of a week for them) the collar missing, Bella missing , the phone, the punishments. Alot of things were going on and he still doesn't think that Caius is any danger to Bella (he has no reason to think that, at least not at this point) ...

As far as Bella needing to devulge her past ...that's a give me...he is going to be pushing her to go deeper in her submission he needs to know her triggers and how she reacts to them...There has to be complete honesty and openness. and if he ask her a question, she can't beat around the bush or tell him half of the story...no no no...full disclosure and had Bella asked him exactly what Caius said, Edward would have told her...But she didn't ask and to him it was all bullshit and he felt (and still does) that it was an attack directed towards him....

Hmmmm anything else or if you need more clarification, I would be more then happy to answer your questions....thanks for reading and the comments ...lml

Summary:

Bella is a Master's student who is forced to take a freshman class because her counselor "forgot" to make sure she took it. Edward is a last minute teacher added to the class Bella needs to take. The relationship between the two quickly transform to something more than just teacher and student. Photobucket 23-1 Backgrounds_zpsb05b9cc0


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 55188 Read Count: 49800
[Report This] Published: 10 Jul 2011 Updated: 16 Apr 2017
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 23 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Great story so far. Interesting how you got them all together. Can't wait to see where it all goes. Wonderfully written.



Author's Response: This story will only get more funny...

Arms by Virginia May Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 173]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Competitive shooter Bella Swan had an Olympic gold medal and dreams of another before witnessing the brutal murder of both her parents.  Now living under a new identity as a high school student in tiny Forks, Washington, she must learn to cope with  the loss of both her family and her future.  When she meets the local math teacher and her older "foster-brother", Edward Cullen, things are complicated by an instant and unexpected attraction.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Erotica, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012, Stories I've Already read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 158957 Read Count: 88750
[Report This] Published: 01 Sep 2011 Updated: 03 Oct 2018
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed
Date: 29 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Love this story, but I see it's been 7 months since you've updated, are you planning to continue at some point. It is rather good and I would like to see what happens.

Taken by loopylou992 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 70]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward makes one mistake, and soon learns he must pay for it. Forced to lie to his family and Bella, will be manage to survive being Taken?

Rated M for lang & Lemons.

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 51 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 153918 Read Count: 28170
[Report This] Published: 13 Dec 2011 Updated: 08 Jun 2014
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Confrontations

Great start, you've got me hooked. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

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Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him? 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, To Read , Misstoria's Stories to Read, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed, Read
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 325411 Read Count: 263165
[Report This] Published: 12 Jan 2012 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed
Date: 21 May 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: The Legal Side of Things

Excellent story. Can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  Each week I read the reviews for like the first 3-4 hours to see what kind of questions you all want answers to, and this time there are hardly any questions at all. 

So I thought we could touch base on some comments.  We have gotten a lot of Great chapter, sad ending, but it was needed...stuff (and it was needed).  ‘Edward had to allow the pain to flow out instead if keeping it locked inside of him.’

We have had a few diabolical people suggest that Edward would maybe recognize Sue and Charlie Swan, or Harry Clearwater.  ‘This is an interesting theory.’

A lot of you would love to lynch Sue.  ‘But first she has to make an appearance.’ 

Some of you have noted that you for see Gina as being a problem.  ‘Ummm…YEAH!’

A few have wondered if Tanya and little Edward are in fact dead and buried.  ‘In the graves in Port Angeles are in fact the bodies of Tanya Denali, and her son known to all as Edward Anthony Masen Jr.’

The comments people have made on the complexity of our characters though is what I want to touch on the most.  The fact that we have made the characters so out of character in most cases is what I am enjoying so much.  I personally love Alice in the books, I think she is WAY underplayed in the movies.  I love Alice she is one of my favorite characters, but to make her this unlikeable character is hard, yet I think it really gives so much to this storyline.  Alice will learn some very valuable lessons in this story and that old saying a leopard can’t change his spots, does not apply to Ali-cats. 

I like Rose and if I (Kasi) had to compare myself to a character from Twilight that I am most like it would be her.  I am not a royal bi*ch, but I am pretty outspoken and tend to say exactly what is on my mind, and that is how I see Rose in the books and movies.  The Rose in this story though goes above and beyond the snippy, and stuck in her ways bitchy Rose from the books or movies.  Our Rose is a downright spoiled rotten mean girl, who will never grow up because she wants to remain that rich girl who has everyone surrounding themselves in her light to better their standings.  Edward could have married the high class daughter of some billionaire tycoon, and Rose would have issue unless she bowed down to Rose. 

Jasper in this story is one of the most in character, characters we have.  Very smart and laid back, goes with the flow and yet is always there to help calm matters that need attention. 

Emmett, God I love Emmett.  He is so fun loving and wild, but he is so very smart and he can step up and show it when the time is called on him to do so.  You will be seeing a lot more of this intellectual and loving Emmett as the story progresses. 

I hope that you have enjoyed this little insight we have shared with you this week.  Feel free to join us on Facebook, where there are tons of discussions and theories shared daily.  Just search for TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction and it will pop up.  Thanks everyone for making us feel so great, we are proud to bring this story to you and so happy you are enjoying it.  Thanks for reading and reviewing, Kasi (& Nikky).

 

Chapter 20: Snow Storms Teaser...Subject to changes during beta process.

Emmett has filed papers with the court, getting Bella temporary custody for Seth and Leah.  Angela, Ben’s wife, who is a social worker, is making case notes on Bella’s behalf.  She is also talking to each of the kids, and doing a home study to make sure that they are having all of their needs met. 

It was not an easy task to get Bella to agree to all of this, but when Emmett explained that if her stepmom came back, she could take Seth and Leah and Bella might never see them again. He also explained that because Bella was now of age, she could keep it from happening by letting us help her.

I didn’t like scaring her, but it worked.  She thinks that if her mother gets them, she would not allow her to see them anymore.  She is afraid that Sue would then leave them with someone else, and they would end up getting hurt.  She said she would rather be there for them to keep them safe, so she finally agreed to sign the proper paperwork.  We all told her there was no way that she would lose the kids. 

Angela sat her down and explained to her that with her support system, it would be in Seth and Leah’s best interest to become their legal guardian.  It took us all a while to convince her that, since she was now a legal adult, and she had been taking such great care of them, that the court would be on her side.  Carlisle, Rev. Weber, Jasper, Peter, Marcus, Samantha - who is another worker at Jasper and Peter’s office, Chas, Esme, Aro, Zafrina, and myself, were finally able to convince her.  So far, quite a few people from the church and Sunday school program have written out statements, all in Bella’s favor.  Aro and Zafrina have documented files that they have kept; all of which have been copied and sent to Emmett.  Aro has documentation of all of the work she has done over the years.  With Aro’s help, and Bella’s social security number, I have paid all of her back Social Security taxes, so she has documented earned income. Bella is also now a real employee of the college. She is no longer paid under the table. 

Because Bella has had no education, we have set up a verbal IQ test for her to take. Since she is so smart in mathematics alone, I know her scores will be quite high.  Once she can fully read, we are going to have her take the GED test and get her a diploma.  Angela said that because the kids are in school, her inability to read will not be held against her.  Angela was also quick to point out, that with the substantial support system that Bella has, DCFS would recommend that the children be placed with her at this point anyway. 

Emmett says that at this point, he is ninety-nine point nine percent certain that Bella will be granted full legal guardianship of Seth and Leah in court. Until the hearing, there is a temporary order of guardianship filed, and unless they take Bella to court, neither Sue nor Harry can come in and take the kids away from her.  The case has been booked for the second week in February, which gives us eight weeks to prepare.

Wisp by judo_lin Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 871]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward wins more than he bargained for at what was supposed to be a friendly poker game. AH.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 63 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 304154 Read Count: 221078
[Report This] Published: 06 Jun 2012 Updated: 23 Nov 2014
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed
Date: 06 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Great story so far. Very intriguing and engrossing. Can't wait to see what happens.

Summary: Past Featured Story

It was just a long weekend in Vegas, so how did eighteen year old high school senior Bella Swan end up married to thirty one year old movie exec, Edward Cullen? This is the story of their awkward life. 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Can't wait for an update, To Read (Geddy), Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 118398 Read Count: 324370
[Report This] Published: 07 Jun 2012 Updated: 02 Nov 2013
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 09 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - Our Family

Great story, I am enjoying this wonderful story. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Night From Hell by ebs45 Rated: NC-17 [Reviews - 2]
Summary:

Jasper goes to a club with his friends hoping to have fun when he runs into a boy named Edward. This night soon becomes the worst of his life.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Emmett/Jasper (slash)
Genre: Horror, Slash
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3254 Read Count: 316
[Report This] Published: 18 Jun 2012 Updated: 18 Jun 2012
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed
Date: 19 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I think you captured this horrific experience with class. What an awful experience for your friend and I am sorry that he had such a disgusting introduction to sex. Rape is the worst crime and I wish no one had to experience such an act. It's nice to know that your friend is a survivor. My only critism about that story would be that you used Edward as a rapist... I know, I know, one of them had to be, but Edward... really. LOL! I was sad to see this was a one shot because I would be interested in knowing what happened, such as did Jasper report it? And, how he coped and moved on afterwards. Beautifully written, congradulations for the way you handled this subject.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review. It means a lot to me. It just kills me that there is so much evil in this world. I know I was taking a leap when I put Edward as the rapist, but if it makes a difference, I love Edward with all my heart lol. This is just my one and only story of him playing the bad guy. I even winced a little putting him in the story like that.

Thanks again

Ebony

Wild Child by FluffyLiz Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 756]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Just months away from inheriting a fortune and the family business, 17 year old orphan, Bella,  is out of control – a wild child with a platinum card and a killer bod.  Can Edward, as her legal guardian and CEO of Swan Publishing, rein her in and prevent her from ruining everything he’s worked for?  AH.  Rated M for a reason.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed, G8or Favor8s Read, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!
Chapters: 39 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 212285 Read Count: 153181
[Report This] Published: 25 Jun 2012 Updated: 29 Oct 2012
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 23 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I call bullshit. I know you are trying to make Bella more mature then her 17 years, but I'm sorry, no 17 year old is that mature. I think she would have thrown his phone at him and demanded an answer cause that's how 17 year old girls are. She wouldn't just go off and lick her wounds, she would yell and scream and demand to kown what the hell was wrong with him and who Jane was. But that's just my opinion. LOL. 

Great story. Keep up the good work.

Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward was 19.  Bella was 13.  They were next door neighbors.  Charlie was the chief of police.  Carlisle was a doctor at the local hospital. 

Edward’s little sister Alice was also 13 and Bella’s best friend. 

While home from college for the summer, Edward spent time with his little sister and her best friend so their parents could all go out for dinner.

Over the next several years, Edward and Bella became good friends, until the summer she turned 16 when she transformed before his eyes.

 

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AH, ExB, Mostly EPOV, sort of coming-of-age, hopefully a little poignant, with a splash of angst until Bella's at least seventeen.  Mature for language, eventual lemons and a very spunky Bella.

 

Banner made by yours truly!

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance, Young Adult
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 77808 Read Count: 67190
[Report This] Published: 31 Jul 2012 Updated: 08 Jan 2014
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 13 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Playing Field

Good story so far. You have got my attention and I'm certainly intrigued about what happened in the past and how they will get together in the future. Keep up the wonderful writing.



Author's Response:

I'm really glad you're liking it so far.  I hope I don't let you down.

Thanks for reading!

Offbeat by SexylexiCullen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 323]
Summary:

He's a cop. She's a student. A missed connection during a traumatic time leaves them both longing, until fate brings them back together again. Romance, humor, slight drama. Canon couples. OOC. AU. This is my version of Copward, and this is a working summary.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories Read by CNYBella, Completed Stories
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 92614 Read Count: 42684
[Report This] Published: 20 Sep 2012 Updated: 19 Oct 2012
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed
Date: 06 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Disorderly

I'm rather shocked that you would use episodes of Third Watch word for word. Just because you add to them does not make these stories yours. Miss-leading your readers this way is not right and you should give credit were credit is due. It's one thing to use someone's characters and essence of a story, but it is quite another to use their words too that's called plagiarism. 

Visually Challenged by Velley Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 133]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Everyone in town views Bella as the perfect teenager. She never gets into trouble and always seems to do the right thing. What happens when she starts falling for the towns visually challenged recluse? How will her strict parents react?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 51475 Read Count: 24098
[Report This] Published: 25 Nov 2012 Updated: 15 Mar 2016
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2013 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11

Wonderfully written so far and can't wait to see what happens.

Summary: Past Featured Story

The awesome banner is by Mina Rivera - feel free to ask if you would like her to create a banner for your story.

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Edward Cullen is a movie-star, born into the life of fame and fortune, but always wishing for something else. When his girlfriend Bella publicly humiliates and hurts him, he eventually finds the opportunity to look for something better; something that deep down he always wanted. Rated M for adult scenes (slash).  

Disclaimer: I do not own any of the Twilight characters, but am merely borrowing them for this story.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Edward/Jacob (slash)
Genre: Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 119640 Read Count: 11557
[Report This] Published: 24 Apr 2013 Updated: 12 Jul 2013
Reviewer: Ren68 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 11 May 2013 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I've been following your United Trilogy and loved that, so I thought I would give this one a try. Another great story so far. Hate where this left off, but I will return when there is more. Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. I'm glad you're enjoying the United saga as well as this new one. Edward is in for a tough time back in LA but at least he knows Jake loves him now. I'm updating regularly, once or twice a week :)