Date: 07 Feb 2016 3:54 AM Title: It's You
Okay, I'm sorry but I have to say, "way to unreal". I'm sorry, but really, if she was rapped the idea of any guy touching her in any sexual way would freak her out. I have read most of your stories but this one part is just way off. I'm sorry and don't mean to be rude but that would NEVER happen in a thousand years. She would be repulsed and to freaked out to do anything for months, if not years; sometimes counseling as well.
Date: 01 Jun 2014 9:05 PM Title: It's You
I think this story started out good, but really floored me.
I think that you should stated in the outline/summary that their is a rape scene in the story. This give the reader a choice to read or not. I myself do not, will not read a story that has rape in it because it is my choice not to read them. This story doesn't even state that their is hurt, angst or drama in the chapters, so to my surprise I was floored and pissed.
As a writer you are free to write as you see and feel. As a reader I depend on the summary to let me know if the story/book will be enjoyable for me. This story I will not finish althoughbn I would like to know what happens at the end.
Thank you for taking the time to write and posting your stories.
I am very sorry that it wasn't put in the summary about the violence that happened in the story. When we started posting the story it was as a weekly work in progress and once it completed, we didn't think to update the summary. I'm very sorry thta you will not be completing the story. I hope that you will skim through the chapters and possibly read to the end. But if not thank you for reading and your review.
Date: 15 May 2013 6:34 AM Title: Forever You
I LOVE YOUR STORY BUT IT DOESN'T FEEL FINISHED TO ME I GUESS I WAS WAITING TO FIND OUT WHAT THE BABY WAS AND EDWARD RETURNING HOME AFTER THERE TOUR. THANKS FOR THE STORY.
there is a sequel.. its called on the road
Date: 14 May 2013 7:20 PM Title: Forever You
YOU KNOW WHAT I FEEL SO BAD FOR EDWARD ALL THE BITCHING BELLA DOES ALL THE TIME ALWAYS SAYING SHE'S SO FAT HE DOESN'T WANT HER SHE UGLY HE WANT TOUCH HER ALL KINDS SO SHIT IT ALL BULLSHIT SHE ACTS LIKE A CRAZY PERSON AND BEING PREGNANT IS NOT A GOOD ENOUGH REASON TO ALWAYS BE TREATING EDWARD THE WAY SHE DOES HE IS DOING ALL HE CAN FOR HER AND AS FOR THE KISS WILL I'D BE PISSED ABOUT THAT TO BUT SHE DOES KEEP TELLING HIM HE CHREATS ON HIM WHEN HE DIDN'T I JUST YOUR BELLA IS A BIG BABY.HOW OLD IS SHE ANY WAYS?
Date: 14 May 2013 4:51 PM Title: Forever You
IS THAT REALLY TRUE ABOUT THE MAN CUMMING IN THE WOMAN CAN MAKE HER GO INTO LABOR? I NEVER HEARD THAT BEFORE AND I HAVE BEEN PREGNANT 15 TIMES I LOSE 12 OUT OF THAT 15 BUT I DID GET THREE LIVE CHILDREN AND I ADOPTED ONE LATER IN LIFE. I'M NOW 68 AND THANK GOD ALL MY KIDS ARE STILL WITH ME I MEAN THEY LIVE NEAR ME NOT IN MY HOME WITH ME.
Date: 13 May 2013 6:58 PM Title: Forever You
I DON'T GET IT WHEN A CHILD IS KIDDNAPPED THE FBI IS ALWAYS CALLED WHY DIDN'T YOU IS IT YOU DIDN'T THINK OF IT? I KNOW CHARLIE IS A COP BUT THAT DOESN'T MATTER IN CASES LIKE THIS ONE. I AM REALLY LOVING YOUR STORY.
Date: 12 May 2013 9:56 PM Title: Forever You
I'M ON BELLA'S SIDE ON THIS ONE EDWARD SHOULD HAVE PUT A STOP TO THE GIRLS BEING UP THERE AND TOUCHING HIM WAS OUT OF LINE HE STOPPED THE GIRL FROM KISSING HIM BUT IT WAS OK FOR THEM TO TOUCH HIS DICK NO WAY WAS THAT RIGHT.
Date: 11 Aug 2012 3:06 PM Title: Forever You
This sounds like a really good story...unfortunately, it is really hard to read. You don't have quote marks where people are speaking, so it all runs together. I really liked what I could read, but I couldn't get very far, it was hard to follow. I hope you can fix this little problem, so more people can read it :) I love "Across the Lines" and am working on reading it now.
Date: 27 Jul 2012 7:35 PM Title: With Any Luck
O.O That was a very big change from the previous chapters. An interesting chamge, that was done really well. I had to look back to see where the are st the party... I mean that was pretty steamy for a fundraiser... ;-)
Date: 01 Jun 2012 2:11 PM Title: With Any Luck
They will together forever, no doubt about it!
Thank you for sharing With Any Luck with us.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 2:08 PM Title: With Any Luck
.... and they embark upon a new life ..... together.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:39 PM Title: With Any Luck
He did lock the door right?
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:38 PM Title: With Any Luck
Guess she has finished swooning......
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:31 PM Title: With Any Luck
Trust me, she does.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:29 PM Title: With Any Luck
WoW. Once she stopped swooning they got right down to business. Well I'm sure they will figure out just how far they want to go soon as they catch their breath.
Before I forget, LOVED the first kiss. Every girl should be so lucky.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:21 PM Title: With Any Luck
Oh Edward you didn't fuck things up at all. Bella is merely twitterpated. She just needs a moment to collect her wits about her.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:18 PM Title: With Any Luck
Such a simple flirtation, so much heat.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:16 PM Title: With Any Luck
Has Bella been reduced to a puddle of goo yet?
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:15 PM Title: With Any Luck
Yes, well, while she is getting a drink I'm just going to fan myself.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 1:13 PM Title: With Any Luck
How can one not smile at this sight to behold. And I don't mean his pants, lol, but rather the look in his eye as he sees her.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 12:47 PM Title: With Any Luck
Well, if she wears socks tonight she is going to have one hell of time keeping them on and that's all I have to say about that. This is going to be sooooo good.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 12:42 PM Title: With Any Luck
Oh how sweet that he has a picture of her and knows she is the one.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 12:17 PM Title: With Any Luck
Oh but he does Bella and you will meet him very soon :)
Date: 01 Jun 2012 12:16 PM Title: With Any Luck
This looks like it will be really good!
Date: 01 Jun 2012 8:37 AM Title: Saving Bella
Bella is quite the talented human in your story. Her mother and step-dad barely qualify as human. I can't believe they would chain her up and leave her that way. What a couple of morons! Thanks to Alice's visions and Edward rescuing her, Bella gets a forever love and a great family! What could be better?
Date: 20 Dec 2011 4:39 AM Title: It's You
well i was scared there for a minute that something was going wrong
I am glad things with Irina seem to go well. even though she is signing her rights for money i am thrilled that she is doing so.
ahhhhh anthony calling bella mom, ahhhh
Date: 20 Dec 2011 4:02 AM Title: It's You
I'm really enjoying your story, overall - lots of drama keeping me interested, not too much angst, etc. but I'm finding it jarring that Bella calls Edward "McScruff" ALL the time, and rarely calls him Edward. Over the course of several updates, I've found myself jolted out of the story from it, though I think it's been the most jarring with the lovemaking scenes. (I think it jolts me because I have to remember who McScruff is, since she rarely calls him by name when speaking to him.) I try not to write nit-picky reviews, and I hope this doesn't seem like one, but I thought if I was a writer, I would want to know that it was happening.
Date: 16 Dec 2011 8:16 PM Title: It's You
Poor Anthony has grown up too fast. Hopefully, the longer he stays with Bella and Edward the kid will come back out in Anthony. He does not need to be so stressed. I hope Tanya will sign her rights away so Bella can adopt him as well.
Date: 28 Nov 2011 5:56 PM Title: It's You
Bella is over sensitive in this story. If Edward says anything that she doesn't agree with she is ready to run away from the relationship. She must not love him very much. This is a very emotional time for both of them. They might not always agree, but running away is not the answer. In this case, that is exactly what Irina wants to happen. She wants to break them up. Bella needs to be sweeter to Edward.
Date: 22 Nov 2011 9:54 AM Title: It's You
Great story, I haven't decided if Im wanting Anthony to be Edwards or if I hope he is not and they adopt him. I think with what's happened if Anthony is Edward's Bella will feel even more insecure since she lost the baby. They have had so many obstacles, it's time for happiness.
Date: 22 Nov 2011 2:46 AM Title: It's You
wow Holy Hell Edward control that mouth son, and Bella he did tell you about Irina... mercy at least they calmed down and stayed....... poor lttle Anthony has been through so much...He needs the stability that Bella can provide for him...still on the fence with Edward and his personality... Love the story though and am very much E x B pairing fan.... this girl has truly been through the ringer...