I like the story, I like where it's going. Having said that, some of the conversations seems "awkward". I think what is throwing it for me is how they refer to each other as mates when talking to each other, it feels unnatural. I can see it the first few times they speak, but it feels out of place at this point and make the interaction between the characters feel less personal.

Great story, though I need the next one soon.  Thanks.

Leah got off too easy. Poor Seth.   hmm where is jacob in all this?  Leah didn't seem to implicate him. 

Tattoo is a cool idea.  Would think that Eric and Godrics healing abilities wouldn't allow it to stay though.  Wonder who the betrayal will come from.  Alice or maybe that jerk Anthony.

Hope they all work out a great balance.

Guess I need to go back and figure out what she did that was so wrong cause I can't remember it.   If he picks the lion, I'd let the mates kill him after for being overly vindictive.   If I were Jasper, I'd channel her pain to everyone else in the "pride".  Right now I'm calling BS to Daddy's last comment.  

I wouldnt let B anywhere near them after this upcoming battle either.  I'd be making sure everyone knew Anthony's thoughts and feelings as well.   Him and Daddy were over the line.  

Zander sounds like the typical big brother.  SOunds like her father is a wanker.  

Interesting bringing three different types of vampires all together.    

lol for Peter.  Glad B thought of leaving the area. Bet the wolves would be happy about it too.

ugh Victoria is sooooo annoying.

Dayum for the hawt ending.  Happy lemon Dance.

Love the twist to the polyamory so it's one woman. Hee hee

Really really good