Date: 13 Apr 2022 7:23 AM Title: El Jardín's Truth
This was excellent
Date: 13 Apr 2022 7:23 AM Title: El Jardín's Truth
This was excellent
Date: 08 Aug 2021 1:46 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Interesting storyline
Date: 05 Aug 2021 12:50 PM Title: The El Jardín Paradox
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Date: 23 May 2018 8:27 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Brilliant and completely immersive story. Like nothing I've read on here, the ending was genius and while I'd figured out who the endless was you still managed to surprise me with more of their true nature. Well thought out and excellent pace made for a real adventure that I know I'm going to revisit over and over.
Date: 22 May 2018 4:45 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Oh my gosh! It's over. I don't know what to say. It's been a fantastic ride, and again it doesn't matter to me where the inspiration for this story came from, it was your storytelling ability that made this all come together so well in a readable format and you should pat yourself onnthe back for a job fantastically done.
I saw your question about what could've been taken out, and honestly that's extremely hard to say. Everything you put in lent to something else, be it foreshadowing, world building, or some form of necessary development. Even things in the very beginning chapters have connections til the very end. This story never felt drawn out or exasperating, the pacing was great so if you changed anything it might make things confusing or skew the balance.
This was extremely enjoyable, and I'm glad that I could help you in my own small way, I'd happily lend my support a thousand more times! Although this adventure has come to an end I look forward to the next. May you be blessed with many plot bunnies and sources of inspiration.
xo T
Author's Response:
You have an ability to make me blush! Your praise is very welcome as it's not often readers really put into words how a story makes them feel! Your kind reviews always make me smile, so thank you for that!
You always brighten my day
Date: 20 May 2018 1:49 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
great story
Author's Response:
Thank you! :-D
Date: 19 May 2018 2:41 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Awe, shucks, it t'wernt nothin. Thanks for the shout out. Reading was the easy part. Getting caught up in the mayhem along with these characters was the exciting part. You did all the hard work of weaving them throughout this intriguing storyline.
It was a great ride.
Looking forward to more of your creative writing.
Author's Response:
I appreciate your support so much, and not only on this story! It's readers like yourself that keep writers going, and that's why you deserve a shout out :-D
Thank you for sticking around through it all!
Date: 19 May 2018 1:55 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Man I am so sad it’s over but I really loved it thank you
Author's Response:
I'm sad to let it go, too. It's been a very wild ride for me as well, and it feels rather empty now that I don't have it, but we must all move on, I guess! Lol
Thank you for your support!
Date: 19 May 2018 1:11 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:) loved this story. Going to miss it
Date: 18 May 2018 11:39 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Cute, sweet, satisfying, romantic ending. Congratulations on finishing your wonderful story.
Date: 18 May 2018 11:39 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Cute, sweet, satisfying, romantic ending. Congratulations on finishing your wonderful story.
Date: 18 May 2018 11:39 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Cute, sweet, satisfying, romantic ending. Congratulations on finishing your wonderful story.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I am HEA to the core, so for me it couldn't end in any other way ;-)
Date: 18 May 2018 3:30 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 18 May 2018 2:34 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I'm not sure a simpler way to tell this story would have worked. Each character filled in a necessary piece of the puzzle. Maybe leaving out the anarchists but they helped with the time travel aspect. Yes, this was a wild ride, but a fun journey none the less.
Date: 18 May 2018 2:34 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I'm not sure a simpler way to tell this story would have worked. Each character filled in a necessary piece of the puzzle. Maybe leaving out the anarchists but they helped with the time travel aspect. Yes, this was a wild ride, but a fun journey none the less.
Date: 11 May 2018 10:11 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I think She should choose option 3...
Date: 11 May 2018 8:09 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 11 May 2018 7:00 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Oh my freaking goodness what will she choose I know the last one is the right one but I want her to keep all her friends but damn I don’t know
i loved it
Date: 10 May 2018 9:27 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
All three options call for the destruction of something Bella holds dear. Her existence may be of short duration but she has had a huge impact on everything surrounding her.
If she is part sentient being from Kaanu, what is keeping him from recreating her after the earth is fully restored? Sending her back to earth to as she is known now be with her friends?
Date: 05 May 2018 5:05 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
nice update
Date: 05 May 2018 5:53 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Oh my goodness first it’s sweet and romantic than bam the end of the world now how will they stop him
Date: 04 May 2018 3:43 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
So the endless has perished. Does that mean Edward is alone, or the endless out lived them all? Her efforts were futile in the long run.
Is Bella Carlisle's daughter? Is that why her memories from a time prior to the island have faded?
Date: 04 May 2018 1:12 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 01 May 2018 12:59 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
nice update
Date: 28 Apr 2018 4:40 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Cullen is always one step ahead of them.
Date: 27 Apr 2018 6:32 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Great chapter. I am glad that Jane is dead. I can't wait for Carlisle's end.
Date: 27 Apr 2018 5:20 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Nice. (:
Date: 27 Apr 2018 12:44 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I loved it but how will they find the missing piece and get the heart back
I totally thank it was a wedding heheheheh
Date: 26 Apr 2018 10:49 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 25 Apr 2018 6:01 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Hello I have been reading this story every chance I get I love it please update fast I need to know what is next
Date: 23 Apr 2018 9:31 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
nice update
Date: 20 Apr 2018 2:59 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 20 Apr 2018 7:57 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
(:
Date: 20 Apr 2018 7:57 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
(:
Date: 19 Apr 2018 11:37 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Will Edward make Bella some kind of ring?
Will Jazz be okay eventually?
That battle scene with Cetus was awesome.
Date: 18 Apr 2018 4:25 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
nice story so far.
Date: 14 Apr 2018 10:16 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Three heads against my tiny army of brave babes doesn't seem fair. What if they just let him eat the other half? I mean it would accomplish the same thing and they wouldn't have to try to kill Cetus. Also I'm glad that the issues each individual has faced and kept with them all this time is working themselves out. Although I will say that I'm with Edward, Bella not being presemt in the courtroom makes me think that their future doesn't align, and I have a few theories as to why it wouldn't... As always, I'm looking forward to reading more of this crazy tale.
Date: 12 Apr 2018 11:21 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 06 Apr 2018 5:28 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
What a wild ride. So Bella being thrown into time and space is messing with the time space continuum... meaing that Endless Bella must've been impacted by this? Butat least the whole gang made it through, and although Bella seems to be the glue of the group, their bonds should be strong enough by now to get through all this.
Date: 06 Apr 2018 2:55 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
My head is swimming with all the shifting rifts.
Date: 05 Apr 2018 9:42 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 31 Mar 2018 6:34 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Hm. Cool. Thanks, looking forward to the next update!
Date: 30 Mar 2018 3:29 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
The Endless knows what does and doesn't seem to work, so why are the Catalysts still going through the same actions? What is different from the 2000+ times before?
Date: 30 Mar 2018 12:46 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 29 Mar 2018 7:13 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Awe man! I'm all caught up!!!! I'm loving every update!
Date: 24 Mar 2018 8:01 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
The amount of cliffhangers is enough to cause cardiac arrest. Solid chapter, and I didn't think Rose was dead, I still remember the cave with old Bella. Is that who's walking towards us?
Date: 23 Mar 2018 3:14 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Almost all together again.
The verdict on James is still out.
Date: 22 Mar 2018 10:42 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 21 Mar 2018 5:31 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I'm livingall the mystery!!!!!!
Date: 21 Mar 2018 5:10 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I would trust him!
Date: 21 Mar 2018 3:55 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I'm glad I waited so long to start reading.... I'm so intrigued!!!!
Date: 21 Mar 2018 6:33 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
(:
Date: 19 Mar 2018 9:59 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:) Congratulations
Date: 19 Mar 2018 5:52 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
The only way Alistair can redeem himself is by taking down his father.
Is Rosalie somehow stuck in Cullen's web working on the computer programming?
Date: 17 Mar 2018 5:20 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Could things possibly be looking up the the Catalysts?
Date: 16 Mar 2018 10:38 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Doesn't matter what verison of Victoria it is (though I believe it's an equally married mixture of them both in there) as long as it's Victoria! And she still has to be alive for the cave thing to have worked, so I'm betting on myself with this one.
Another great chapter, thank you!
Date: 15 Mar 2018 9:12 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 11 Mar 2018 6:35 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
This story is so fun. I'm only worried for Tanya at this point. We know Victoria is alive, maybe her and the Island Spirit are just going to turn into the ultimate power couple... literally. The only thing that would be cool is if Emmett wound up befriending a dino.
Date: 09 Mar 2018 4:23 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 09 Mar 2018 1:54 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
As a hand slowly creeps up in the back corner, I timidly ask, "'Ma'am, I'm not sure I know who The Endless is ?" I strongly think that Bella was right when The Endless can change to whoever you are. I'm not sure though, at all. Such supernatural/adventure I have never read. I read the chapters voraciously as soon as I see a chapter has been added.
Date: 09 Mar 2018 1:49 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
As a hand slowly creeps up in the back corner, I timidly ask, "'Ma'am, I'm not sure I know who The Endless is ?" I strongly think that Bella was right when The Endless can change to whoever you are. I'm not sure though, at all. Such supernatural/adventure I have never read. I read the chapters voraciously as soon as I see a chapter has been added.
Date: 09 Mar 2018 5:10 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
The intrigue continues.
Date: 09 Mar 2018 4:40 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
As a hand slowly creeps up in the back corner, I timidly ask, "'Ma'am, I'm not sure I know who The Endless is ?" I strongly think that Bella was right when The Endless can change to whoever you are. I'm not sure though, at all. Such supernatural/adventure I have never read. I read the chapters voraciously as soon as I see a chapter has been added.
Date: 09 Mar 2018 3:16 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
As a hand slowly creeps up in the back corner, I timidly ask, "'Ma'am, I'm not sure I know who The Endless is ?" I strongly think that Bella was right when The Endless can change to whoever you are. I'm not sure though, at all. Such supernatural/adventure I have never read. I read the chapters voraciously as soon as I see a chapter has been added.
Date: 08 Mar 2018 3:42 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I knew it! Bella is so boss. I love it. Now we just need to set this weirdass timejump island straight.
Date: 03 Mar 2018 7:39 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Time travel, warped futures, and literal dead ends have shaped this bizarre storyline into a journey of deception. Will the plan inevitably fail?
Date: 03 Mar 2018 7:39 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Time travel, warped futures, and literal dead ends have shaped this bizarre storyline into a journey of deception. Will the plan inevitably fail?
Date: 02 Mar 2018 12:34 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 25 Feb 2018 6:49 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
That was action packed!
I'm on pins and needles waiting on the outcome.
Date: 25 Feb 2018 6:49 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
That was action packed!
I'm on pins and needles waiting on the outcome.
Date: 25 Feb 2018 4:01 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Hm. So I was right? Knowing the future only changes the when/where/how aka the outcome, not the happening of the event in general. So now I'm interested if this particular split up is what sets the sadder events in motion like Rose, and Edward's events. And since Leah took Alice out that makes her death by Cullen a question if I'm right.
Date: 24 Feb 2018 11:26 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 23 Feb 2018 7:52 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Cool chapter. I think the story is easy to follow, I just don't know how Bella will change these future glimpses because so far she hasn't even though she's changed the outcome in Victoria's case, Vicky us still going to die eventually when the heart takes over. So what's the point of knowing the future? The only thing I think about is The Endless. Part of me believes that it's Bella actually. She's most likely to be given all that we know currently.
Date: 23 Feb 2018 3:19 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Is there a chance that Alice will turn on the arachnid soldiers? Could she possibly fulfill the earlier vision where she defies Cullen?
Or did I not remember that correctly?
Allister has longed for his father's approval from the beginning and Cullen has used that against him. In the end Carlisle Cullen is Only in it for himself and future glory.
Why would McKenzie still be after Edward? The world is over as he knows it and he is free from the guilt of his traitorous ways.
Date: 23 Feb 2018 12:59 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 17 Feb 2018 8:18 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
So what chapter was it when they braved the volcano catwalks? Yeah, they were launched into the future that they heard over the comm system. Hopefully they figure that out. It would make sense that this particular future happened due to the choices they've made so far considering that you derived this story from an app called choices and that future paths are based on choices hence the idols' power to display a future outcome.
Nice chapter.
Date: 14 Feb 2018 11:30 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:) Good luck with your audition
Date: 14 Feb 2018 10:59 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Another idol stuck in the lava?
Date: 12 Feb 2018 7:12 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Does Bella have any more chances of seeing their future or week links in Cullen's past? Where is Alice?
Date: 11 Feb 2018 5:57 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Congratulations on your nomination. You totally deserve it!
Date: 10 Feb 2018 7:17 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
love love love love this story! Read 20 chapters in 3 days! cant wait to read more!
Date: 09 Feb 2018 5:25 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 09 Feb 2018 3:09 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Damn
Date: 09 Feb 2018 1:22 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Oh hell..... I can't stand Carlisle.
Date: 05 Feb 2018 9:32 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
But like... you will be whole again Island Heart Spirit, you just gotta stop trying to kill the ones who will help you. Good foreshadowing stuff makes me feel confident in this assessment. Lots of good stuff in this story. This is like a super cool epic fantasy tale. Idk what that app is, but you should put more belief into your storytelling abilities. You have a real talent here.
Preview response: Alistair, my dude, y'all left your new friends and immediately almost died, I'd say Iris' tale was 100% part of a trap even if it turns out to be true.
Date: 04 Feb 2018 5:59 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Don't they have cellphones? You don't need reception to use the built in flashlight
Date: 02 Feb 2018 11:46 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 02 Feb 2018 4:27 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I hate that Alice got away. And I still hate Carlisle with a passion.
Date: 02 Feb 2018 4:03 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Still not sure who's side Alice is on. Will she met her end as Bella's vision suggested?
Victoria is an entirely different sort of trouble. She may have to stay behind with the island.
The Yeti creature was interesting.
Edward can't go home.
Why is it Alice's job to protect this group? From what and to what end?
Date: 02 Feb 2018 4:03 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Still not sure who's side Alice is on. Will she met her end as Bella's vision suggested?
Victoria is an entirely different sort of trouble. She may have to stay behind with the island.
The Yeti creature was interesting.
Edward can't go home.
Why is it Alice's job to protect this group? From what and to what end?
Date: 26 Jan 2018 3:03 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
I never did trust Alice.
Date: 26 Jan 2018 2:43 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Bella's suspicions regarding Alice have been confirmed on two occasions. She cannot be trusted. Will she find a way to inform Carlisle of the groups whereabouts? Edward and the gang need to find a way to detained/imprison her. Then make their move.
Date: 26 Jan 2018 2:43 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Bella's suspicions regarding Alice have been confirmed on two occasions. She cannot be trusted. Will she find a way to inform Carlisle of the groups whereabouts? Edward and the gang need to find a way to detained/imprison her. Then make their move.
Date: 26 Jan 2018 12:31 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Poor Leah
Date: 20 Jan 2018 7:19 PM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
The people who need to get some answers concerning the passage yard they should come here. When they come here then they have to scrutinize this kind of blog they ought to got some Rotterdam Escort in London. So look for this is awesome and strong after them.
Date: 19 Jan 2018 3:05 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
It seems more and more like they can't trust anyone.
Date: 19 Jan 2018 2:15 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)
Date: 12 Jan 2018 6:37 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
Still don't trust Alice and I never will trust Carlisle or any of his machines......
Date: 12 Jan 2018 12:12 AM Title: The Mystery of El Jardín
:)