Date: 28 Jun 2015 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 3
OH PLZ THIS COULD BE A GREAT STORY MORE THE 3 CHAPTERS ..????PLZ PLZ I LOVE THIS STORY
Date: 11 Jun 2015 12:27 PM Title: Chapter 3
Day Dream Dreamer did not do a very good job and the storu seemed incomplete although it was a good premise
Date: 02 Oct 2014 10:13 AM Title: Chapter 3
He totally told his family where to stick it!
Date: 02 Oct 2014 9:58 AM Title: Chapter 2
If they ever find out they are married I'm sure rose will poop her pants!
Date: 02 Oct 2014 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is so cute! A nice surprise him being the Prince!
Date: 08 Sep 2014 10:35 AM Title: Chapter 3
Perhaps a couple more chapters? :)
well done...really, 2 more chapters can make this story HEA ;)
Date: 14 Jul 2014 7:02 PM Title: Chapter 3
Great job.
Thanks.
Date: 09 Jul 2014 3:41 AM Title: Chapter 3
Oh my gosh! You have to keep writing! Loved the three shot. Wish it was longer :)
Date: 09 Jul 2014 3:12 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh man I just got so excited to read this!!!
Date: 29 Jun 2014 2:14 PM Title: Chapter 3
Great start keep up the good work!
Date: 12 Jun 2014 8:01 AM Title: Chapter 3
PLEASE CONTINUE THIS!
It was amazing and the idea was so unique.
Please continue <3
Date: 09 Jun 2014 7:35 AM Title: Chapter 3
good. seems like there should be more :)
Date: 08 Jun 2014 5:07 PM Title: Chapter 3
I loved it to only live the dream
Date: 08 Jun 2014 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 2
It is not easy being them
Date: 07 Jun 2014 12:41 PM Title: Chapter 3
I would definitely love to see this expanded to a bigger fic!
Date: 07 Jun 2014 3:45 AM Title: Chapter 3
THAT WAS HOT! LOVED IT, THANKS JJ!
Date: 07 Jun 2014 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 3
Very enjoyable thank you.
Date: 07 Jun 2014 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 2
Awesome chapter. I wonder when Edward and Bella will come clean?
Date: 04 Jun 2014 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 3
A good story. An interesting switch from your other works. However, the three shot has me sitting here in question. Usually you are good at tying up everything and not leaving the reader with Serious questions to be answered. In this case, I feel like there are many. That can be a good thing, as it means there was alot implied, but it also can be a bad thing because it makes the story feel incomplete.
Short fiction is my area of concentration in writing; typically it looks at a single change (or degree of change) within a character. The idea that something happens which causes them to move from their normal way of living or feeling. It usually is small-ish.
For example, a woman decides she wants to go for a high end job. She seems skittish. A short story unfortunately doesn't have the space to allow her to become a rockin' CEO like a novel would. The short story may end up with her not getting the job, but feelling a little bit better because she tried. Or it may end up with her deciding that the job isn't for her and she wants one a little more low key.
What makes this story feel incomplete is the fact that it seems to focus on Bella's change from being upset with going public, to.....????? I'm not sure. She seems to still dispise the idea which means that she has not experienced a change. Is she a little more okay with it? If so, maybe try to bring it out clearer. If the focus was ment to be on Edward, its not clear that he has changed position either.
The Change from a Situation, the Revelation of a Mystery, and the Resolution of Tension each drive short stories (and chapters of a book). For this one, try focussing a bit more either on the Resolution of tension between Edward/Bella or the Change within one of them which occurs. It will give your story a more complete feeling at the end if there is one major issue resolved.
As always, these are just suggestions based off my take. I wish you luck with your further writing my dear. I'm sure it will be fabulous as always.
Date: 04 Jun 2014 9:41 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow, Prince Edward? Awesome.
Date: 04 Jun 2014 2:50 AM Title: Chapter 3
Great short-ish story! It was a joy to read.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 8:42 PM Title: Chapter 1
wow! what an amazing first chapter!
Date: 03 Jun 2014 4:34 AM Title: Chapter 1
Really great
Date: 03 Jun 2014 3:52 AM Title: Chapter 3
Was really good....i could happily read more of it!
Date: 03 Jun 2014 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 3
Loved this and it was so much fun to read. So sad that it's only a three shot :(
Merrily
Kat
Date: 02 Jun 2014 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 3
that could make a great story.. this just left us begging.
thanks
Date: 02 Jun 2014 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
I hope Bella tells him in front of Rosalie that they can't be married etc.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow. That would be something. Harry are you hiding someone? Well
Date: 02 Jun 2014 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 3
Oh man I want more!!!
Date: 02 Jun 2014 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 2
Oh boy this is going to a long road for Bella.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 1
Here we go another ed and Bella roller coaster!
Date: 02 Jun 2014 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 3
Thanks, I really enjoyed it. Left me wanting more, which is not necessarily a bad thing.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 3
No, no , no this had to be full length story, no way is this the end,it's too good. We need the family to accept her and the world to know they r married . Please rethink adding more chapters , please......
Date: 02 Jun 2014 7:51 PM Title: Chapter 2
Omg! I love this story so much! please more chapters lol....
Date: 02 Jun 2014 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 3
loved this. I hope you add to it sometime
Date: 02 Jun 2014 7:02 PM Title: Chapter 3
oh no please continue!!!!
this story hast so much potential
i would love to read more!!!!
Date: 02 Jun 2014 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh my god, and you say this is only onna be a three-shot? I don't see how this could possibly be so short. Can't wait for the next update!