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Reviewer: dixiechickie72 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2020 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 9 Epilogue

Ungh. I don't have the words....beautiful, just beautiful.



Author's Response:

Sorry it's taken so long to respond, and thank you for reading and reviewing.  I haven't been on this site in ages, and I wondered if anyone was reading Twi-fanfics.  It always feels good to see a nice comment.  

Reviewer: BridieM Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Sep 2017 11:07 PM Title: Chapter 9 Epilogue

Powerful characters and plot. I very much appreciate your enhancements

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading!  It's been so long since I've had a review on this site, I forgot how to log in.  Thanks for your kind words and rating. 

Reviewer: v3rut Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Aug 2015 2:40 PM Title: Chapter 9 Epilogue

Hey! i love your story! much more credible than the original version.. thanks for sharing!



Author's Response:

Sorry it took so long to respond.  Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.  I loved writing this story.  It was one of those that took up all my time, demanding to be written.  When I was finished, it amazed me how well it would have fit in with canon.  

Reviewer: desdemona Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Apr 2015 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 9 Epilogue

enjoyed the story but i do think that bella should have been a wee bit pissed with having been lied to about his being a virgin and about his past with rose ... not that it mattered because it was so long before she was even born but that she was lied to when she asked straight out about the matters.  



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!  There were many times in the original story I thought Bella should have been more pissed about a lot of things.  She gets miffed, but I don't think pissed is in her make-up.  Especially when it's Edward; she'd forgive that boy anything--including murder, and abandoning her.  Sometimes keeping the characters true to canon is the hardest thing about fan fiction.  I'm thinking that in the long run, that lie will have some consequences.  It proved that he's capable of lying and keeping things from her.  Trust had to have taken a hit.  

Again, thanks for reading and for the review and rating! 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2015 12:38 PM Title: Chapter 9 Epilogue

I love this last chapter. All my feelings for this subject are left here. As always you are the best. I am still team Bella, I think I just might like Edward and Rose better now that I used to.

 

I lost my computer in this story. It sets there so quiet. My husband had a new one the very one I borrow to read on. He grumbles and I tell him he is selfish. LOL I love retirement we just have to wait to replace things. :-)

Thank  you



Author's Response:

Yes!  (fist pump)  I had this in mind all along.  I wanted to show how Edward's past had shaped him, and how well matched he was with Bella.  We'd expect our spouse to tell us of any significant partners in their past, but here it was so far back, bringing it up at the time could only hurt.  Edward was caught between being honest and forthcoming, and keeping his promise.  I like the complexities of Rosalie.  She's shallow, vindictive, and selfish, with a tendency to rewrite history.  But she's also damaged, pragmatic, driven, and passionate.

Edward had a lot to learn, and a lot of growing up to do.  I sort of think of this relationship like one rooted in high school that doesn't make it.  Like the song Broken Road, he needed to suffer losses to see what was real and true.  

Losing your computer sucks!  I never wanted one myself.  But a few years back I got a laptop of my own, and now I couldn't live without it.  Okay, I could live without it, but days when I can't use the computer, I feel like I've lost a best friend.  My penmenship is horrible now, and writing longhand is pitifully slow.  I never realized how often I went to google for research.  I hope your wait gives you what you want.  I bought my little Toshiba online during a Black Friday sale, and it fit my budget, and works great.  

See you later, and thanks again for reading and all the reviews.    

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2015 10:15 AM Title: Chapter 9 Epilogue

Loved the banner, loved the story and especially loved that he told her everything! She took it like I always knew she would. Bella loves Edward beyond anything in this world, same way he loves her. It's always wonderful to read about that! See you next time!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for all your encouragement and comments!  I'm still working toward my goal of writing and publishing my own work, so it's good to know I can gain loyal readers.  It's even better when those readers are thoughtful and articulate.  I'm currently working on one about Stefan, one of the Romanian coven who was barely mentioned in the books.  I had fun writing it, but the editing has me confused.  I'm trying to reorganize it for clarity, and make it a more linear flow.  I'm also still going to finish Crimson Rose, but with the move looming, my time for original writing is slim.  

Thanks again for reading; that's the whole reason I write.

Reviewer: jlove34 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2015 7:12 AM Title: Chapter 9 Epilogue

I was seriously confused when I opened this chapter, at first. I said to myself, "how'd we get from Italy to Ness's wedding?" I went back to the previous chapter and shrugged, still confused. Then I said, "To Hell with it " and read the whole thing. Boy was I surpised to find the rest of the story after the wedding. It was great, even though I'm dumb. I can make banners, but apparently I can't read worth a damn. Lol 😄

Now, I'm thinking about how to make a banner for the Carlisle/Bella story. As one of my favs, it needs a banner, too! Want another?



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, and sorry for the confusion.  I did something here I usually don't do, which is rely on what readers know from the original.  Since I wanted to take this story through Edward meeting Bella, I did write the early part of their relationship.  Bue I didn't want to keep repeating history and retelling what happened in canon.  I did make a big leap.  Even worse, I intended it to be confusing at the beginning.  I'm crazy in that I like to keep readers guessing, even at the end of a story.  I wanted there to be some ambiguity about the wedding, where it looked like it was Bella--not Ness.  

You're awesome at banners.  I had to get my son to help me with this one.  Between one site messing up the instructions and my own tech dead-zone, it might never have made it.  He didn't do it your way, but it made it!  If you want to make one for Cold Fragile Hearts, I'm certainly not going to complain.  I think people have a tendency to read those with covers, and skip those without.  

Thanks for reading, and for the great five-cup rating!       

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Mar 2015 6:26 AM Title: Chapter 9 Epilogue

Indeed, the truth makes you free.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your comments, and especially for reading the story.  It's always nice to see familiar "faces".  

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2015 10:55 AM Title: Chapter 8 Torn

There is a contradiction when Rose first says Bella wouldn't move on and, toward the end of the chapter that she will eventually move. Otherwise she was very convincing.



Author's Response:

Good catch on unclear word choices.  I was trying to say she would eventually have to move on, but she would never let go.  Trying to describe what she was doing with Jacob, while ever ready to fall back into Edward's arms.  Thanks for the heads up.  I was trying to edit out some of the redundancies, and I might have sacrificed clarity.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2015 9:29 AM Title: Chapter 8 Torn

This chapter sounds almost as if it might be the last. I really hope I'm wrong, since your version of this story has been so interesting to read. Hope to see you again!



Author's Response:

I'm getting ready to post the epilogue.  I had my son give me a hand with a banner someone made for this story, and I didn't want the last chapter to go up before the beautiful banner.  

Reviewer: jlove34 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2015 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 1 First Love

This is wonderful, so far. Though all his trials with false love, I can see just how easily Edward became attached to anyone who might love him. His telepathy is a blessing and a curse. He sees so much in the deep, dark reassesses of other people's minds that he doesn't take the time to form meaningful relationships, nor does he relate well to others. Not that he doesn't have meaningful relationships with his family members, but that why Bella is such a perfect partner for him. He's forced to get to know her, fall in love with her. I think, outside of her blood, that Edward would've overlooked Bella had he been able to read her mind. Seeing her POV in the books, we know that, outside of her slight maturity, she's still merely a teen—with the same, thoughts, lust, and desires of any girl her age.

I enjoy all of your stories, my favorite was the post-BD Carlisle/Bella story. Would you like me to make you a banner? I love playing with Photoshop, and I'm ecstatic when I get to make someone something to add to my favorite stories. If you're curious about my work, you can see my banners on my page (some of them are older, and I've gotten better since I began. My newest is An unfortunate Sept.), or go to photobucket under jstoaks, where I've made many more for other authors.



Author's Response:

Sorry it's taken me so long to respond.  I'm in the midst of packing and getting ready to move, and I had too much to do at the time.  I've also been giving them a week to simmer, so I don't squee if it's good, or lash out if it's not.  I really appreciate someone who takes the time to review like you have.  Of all the "superpowers" to get, I hope I'd never get mind reading.  I don't know what would be worse, seeing what people thought of me, or seeing how little the subject even crossed their minds.  I agree, if Edward had been able to read Bella, I doubt he'd have given her a second look.  This story sort of sprang from the idea of how mind reading would really affect someone.  Plus, I couldn't resist making Edward a typical seventeen year-old boy.  

I'm glad you enjoy my stories.  I think my Carlisle/Bella story was in my top two.  This one practically wrote itself, so it's a favorite of mine.  As to a banner, I would love one!  Even as I say it, I'm intimidated.  I don't know the first thing about adding an image to a story.  This old dog was born before computers, and they're still counter-intuitive to me.  I've written a couple original novels, and I'm stuck on the "What do I do now" part of publishing.  It must be nice to be able to work with that softwear and come up with something that makes you proud.  

Thanks for taking the time to read and respond. 

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2015 11:06 AM Title: Chapter 7 Hope

Strange how much these two have in common. Neither seems to think rationally about the other! She disregards the danger he poses, just as he dismisses the possibility of his protection being needed by her forever! Almost makes me want to bang their heads together, except I want their happiness, too!



Author's Response:

It's funny you mention it, since in the next chapter Rose almost does the same thing.  I guess this story was my way of explaining what brought Edward and Bella together.  I didn't see enouh reasoning in the story; it was all about how he looked, and how much he craved her.  I didn't see any foundation for that kind of love, so here I created it in their similarities.  One more chapter to go!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2015 7:17 AM Title: Chapter 7 Hope

I knew this was coming. I just wish she would get over him and find someone else that perhaps could love someone so obviously Not as Beautiful as Rose.  I guess of all of the characters Rose is the one I like the least.  Bella has a crappy family life and she struggles to be happy.  This is the point I hate the most of the story of Twilight. I guess this is the point most fan fiction uses to make changes. Changes that clearly need to be made in the original story.



Author's Response:

I think the whole reason I read Twilight, was because Meyer thought so different from me.  I couldn't tell where the story was going, because the characters behaved in ways I thought were completely irrational.  Bella's crazy, deep love of Edward seemed to bloom out of an affinity for "Bronze colored hair", and little else.  I think we're supposed to believe it's some kind of magical, once-in-a-lifetime true love.  I'm too old and cynical to buy that.  When I write fan fiction, I tweak the characters and give them reasons for the ridiculous way they act.  Rose is such a negative character, she took a lot of tweaking to explain her witchy ways.  I never saw Rosalie as particularly beautiful; the description is too plastic for me.  I think Bella believed she was beautiful, because she was everything she wasn't.  

Bella may be seeing a bit of that old-fashioned poise women used to have, in the Cullen women.  Women were taught to carry themselves in a certain way, they dressed, fixed their hair, and did their make-up even if they were going to be doing chores.  They had good pusture, and modulated their voices when they were speaking.  It's easy to feel like a country bumpkin if you're in the presense of someone who has it, and you don't.   

Bella's family life was dysfunctional.  Her mom was flighty and irresponsible, and her dad was uncommunicative and distant.  Bella also somehow took on the aspect of a 1950's housewife.  I think Meyer's religious beliefs colored the story a lot more than I liked.  Bella never showed religious inclinations, but it slapped me in the face over and over again that the writer had them.  I know my own beliefs creep into my stories, so I can't call the kettle black on that one.  I guess my own beliefs run counter to the Mormon religion.    

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2015 1:22 AM Title: Chapter 6 Truth and Lies

See you look at Bella differently than I did. I see her in my mother grandmother eyes. She is a child left to raise herself.  She read the classics and thought that maybe love was like that. She never saw it at home. She clings to people that she either idealizes like the Cullen family or that support her like Jacob. Charlie is too busy leaving to be a father. He is either at the station or fishing. He has a teenage daughter he needs to pay attention to. I would never leave mine that much. THey always tell you what they want you to know. So you dig and watch to keep them safe. Not accept the rubbish they feed you to keep you in the dark like a mushroom. LOL 

You are a good writer much better than SM. You make sense of things and when you tie it together it makes sense.  I agree on everything you said except Bella.



Author's Response:

I was itching to answer this when I fiirst saw it, but I was too busy.  I like your perspective of Bella.  The only problem with it, is that it's not as she was written; you've improved her in your mind.  I think this is what fan fiction is all about; we all do it.  I can't stand Bella as she's written, just like Rosalie is the pretty princess, and Alice is the shallow, shopping pixie.  I could Watch Buffy go after them all and cheer.  I didn't fall for Twilight, I fell for the unrealized potential of Twilight.  It's the stories not written that attract me.  Your Bella wasn't written.  

My criticism of Bella could easily fall under the heading:  Normal Teenage Girl.  She's not any worse than any other teenager out there; in fact she might be better than a lot.  But she's not a paragon of virtue either--except in the minds of readers.  I can read a lot into her character just by the facts of her life:  Child of divorce, uncommunicative father, flighty mother, only child, lower middle class, average student, average looks, average abilities, and a keen sense of observation.  It's easy to see her the way you see her--it just never made it into the books.  What made the books was her fixation on Edward that bordered on obsessive.  She was in love with him before she knew anything significant about him, and it was either based on intuition or his looks--which Meyer expounded upon at great length.

Through several of my stories, I've tried to make Bella closer to the way you see her.  I've tried to expand on several angles in this story, especially her honesty and need for the truth.  I also sort of see her as somewhat invisible.  She believes she's average, and she tries so hard not to draw attention to herself, almost like she wants to walk through the world invisible.  Part of her shield is a "Don't look at me," defense.  I think deep down she thinks she's responsible for her parents' divorce--and maybe global warming.  She's so afraid of dreaming of more from her life, though she's a dry sponge soaking up everything she wants and needs.  Many criticize Edward's controlling nature in the books, and he IS controlling.  But Bella needs and craves it.  She's been left completely on her own for so long, this must feel like coming home to her.  He's not just her boyfriend and first love; he's also her mother and father in some ways.  Then there's the flip side, and he has a hard time seeing that she's a strong, independent young woman who can make up her own mind.  

The things we all see vary widely from what was actually in the books.  Some see her as whiny and wishy-washy, and some see her as strong enough to stand up to vampires.  Some see the ugly duckling and some see the swan.  Some see her as being a witch to Jacob, and some see him as the one taking advantage.  Most of what we see wasn't written.  The best and worst criticism I saw of her was from a critic who called her "Pants, because anyone can put her on and wear her."  With the story in first person, it's funny that we didn't learn who Bella really was inside--except for her devotion to Edward.  It's almost like her identity was erased, and she didn't start living her life until the moment she spied Edward across the cafeteria.  

It feels like the story was conceived first, and the characters came along as plot devices to make it happen.  That doesn't mean it's bad, but it's left a lot of what makes a character a real person, unrealized.  It makes the Cullens too perfect, the humans too bland and boring, and the main characters two-dimensional.  As they're written, there's not a lot to them.  We the readers supplied a lot with our own imaginations.  It's why Edward and Bella's love story is considered so amazing, because we all remember our first loves, and we filled in all the blanks with our own imaginations.  In a sense, Bella really is a pair of pants, and we've all put ourselves in her shoesa and imagined how we would handle each situation.  That you can see her as a granddaughter is a credit.  Most see her as an imperfect version of themselves.              

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2015 7:11 PM Title: Chapter 6 Truth and Lies

It was most likely providential that Emmett came looking for Edward. It started the relationship of caring and brotherly feelings that were the solid foundation of the Cullen family! It made things so much better for them all. I really like that you had Alice tell Edward love would come to him if he could be strong enough to resit the bloodlust!



Author's Response:

Edward and Emmett were close, though in the original it's hard to even see why.  I sort of see Jasper as being both part of the family, yet still not quite sure of his role.  These tw were tpgether longer, and since they're close to the same age I'd imagine they'd have a lot in common.  I actually think Jasper and Edward are more alike.  I've also wondered how much Alice shares with Edward.  Wtih Edward reading Minds, I've written that she can hide her visions, even from him.  Since alice is the first to accept Bella, I think she saw them together long bevore they met.   

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Feb 2015 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 4 Wild Rose

okay.. madly in love with Rose. Okay now she is on hurt over why Carlisle made her.



Author's Response:

Rosalie is complicated, and selfish.  She wants what she wants, and doesn't care that part of it is a fairy tale.  She learned a long time ago that men will do whatever she wants, because she's beautiful.  It's not that Carlisle changed her for Edward; that's just an excuse.  She feels like everyone is using her for their own ends, and Edward went along with it.  She's also a bit in denial over her feelings for Edward.  This isn't how her life was supposed to go, and she doesn't like feeling out of control.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2015 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 4 Wild Rose

This is really sad, because I feel sorry for all concerned! It came so close to working out the way Carlisle intended, but the truth will come out, whether you want it to, or not! The segment where Rosalie helped Carlisle with the birth was exactly what might have happened, to heal the breach between them. I'm beginning to get the feeling that Edward can't catch a break when it comes to love! Looking forward to the next chapter, probably Rose stumbling across Emmett? I enjoy you looking at our favorite characters from a different perspective. It will be very interesting to hear her thoughts when she finds him.



Author's Response:

Thanks again for reading and reviewing.  Like I've said before, I can't understand why Edward and Rosalie never looked at each other as possible mates.  At seventeen, she would have had to shut him down hard for him to not even try.  I don't think at that age boys have enough sense to look beyond the physical beauty.  More likely, he could hear her thoughts, and didn't like what he heard.  I don't like to think of anyone as all good or all bad, so I'm trying to give her a little more depth than just being the beautiful b!tch.  Her trauma really defined her, and in some ways she's trying to make up for what happened, and paint her life as a fairy tale.  Carlisle is also learning.  He's been alone for so long, he doesn't really know how to deal with his new family.  He's got a lot of ghosts to put to rest as well.    

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2015 4:18 PM Title: Chapter 3 Kindred Spirits

I have not read this even though I love your work. I hate him wanting her and having a relationship with her. She is so beautiful over and over it has been said. He is so beautiful and Poor Bella is used a the ball to kick through the fandom.  I guess I am team Bella by fault.

 

I know just a story.



Author's Response:

Even my favorite authors write some stories I can't read, for whatever reason.  No problem.  I did write an affair between Edward and Rosalie, but in this story it's a learning process for him.  He does fall for her, but he's still a teenage boy at this point.  She's going to teach him that beauty isn't enough.  Rosalie is still Rosalie, and Edward has a lot to learn.  I'm careful to be respectful of the canon relationships.  It's easy to bash Bella, and I've fallen into that trap a time or two.  She's no better or worse than any other naive teenage girl.  If I'm bashing her, it's because so many want to hold her up as a paragon of romantic virtue.  I think she's shallow, and she fell in love with Edward because of his looks.  I'm also not a fan of the "One True Love" theme at the center of the story.  

When I wrote this story, I was surprised how well it fit with canon--if you can accept that Edward lied and covered it up.  It actually explained a lot of his behavior toward Bella.  It really explained why he left her, and why he didn't want to change her.   

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2015 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 3 Kindred Spirits

That was really a great moment between those two, and something that was very necessary for them both. Rose needed to learn that all men were not like the animals who abused her so badly. Edward had that  hormone driven need to explore our sexuality that seems to affect us all, vampires included! I noticed that Rosalie's "type" sounded a whole lot like Emmett McCarty.  Probably means that Edward will be replaced in the near future. Oh well, at least he's not lusting after Esme now, which should please Carlisle. Now it's time for them to go back and face the music, so to speak.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the comments.  I really wanted to explore the relationship between these two while still considering their future.  At this point Edward is still a teenage boy, and his experience and maturity haven't set in yet.  He's got a lot to learn.  He's learning the difference between infatuation and real love.  There's a lot of story still to tell.  

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2015 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 2 Little Brother

okay. I love your writing. I hate he loves her or will. Don't ask me why. I just have always disliked Rose because of this never ending how beautiful she is and how everyone wants her BS.  She is never beautiful in her actions so she is tainted to me.



Author's Response:

I didn't like Rosalie either, so I had to write about her.  Sometimes just seeing how people became who they are, helps me appreciate them.  Rosalie might never be my favorite character, (though of the Cullens she just might be,) but it's my hope to make her realistic, and even a little sympathetic.  I don't like it when everyone fawns over the beautiful people, but that sort of happened to Bella as well, and it definitely happened to the men of the story.  Beauty is never an excuse, so in this story I'm hoping to give some real reasons for their actions.  It still doesn't whitewash Rosalie; she's always going to be a spoiled girl who gets what she wants.  But at least she doesn't suffer for some of her bad choices.  Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2015 7:28 PM Title: Chapter 1 First Love

this is a normal thing for a young man to do. Fall in love with his teacher or his older cousin.  Perhaps not his mother. This is quite different thrown together and the age thing.



Author's Response:

I never understood why Edward never fell for any of the other women he encountered.  Sure, his mind reading would make it tough, but come on--he's seventeen!  Considering becoming a vampire erases so many flaws, I can imagine a 26 year-old Esme would be hard to resist; especially since she's the first woman in the family.  There's a lot of "squick" in this story, since it's such a different angle from what Meyer wrote.  But I always write as if the characters were my own, and maybe that will help readers get over the idea of different relationships.  

Reviewer: Snow one Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2015 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 2 Little Brother

Just found this story. Very nicely done. Looking forward to more. 



Author's Response:

Thank you, new reader!  Some people are either turned off by this one, or they really like the different angle.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Feb 2015 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 2 Little Brother

I sincerely doubt that Carlisle would want to end Rosalie, especially after what was done to her. Sure she retaliated against the monsters that did that to her, but she never drank from them, so perhaps he'll give her a pass? If not, I'm betting that Edward will defend her as Esme did him. This is a much more fully realized Rose and I must admit to kind of sympathizing with her thinking, more so than in the saga. This version of Edward is intriguing, also. Thanks for appreciating my reviews, but be warned, it could lead to rambling(on my part) in the future!



Author's Response:

In this story, they've all got their issues.  This is before Bella, and a hundred years before they were living as a family.  I like the rough edges, and knowing that perfection didn't happen miraculously.  Carlisle is old, and comes from a time when a woman's virtue wasn't hers to protect.  He's also the son of a preacher, and a former vampire hunter, so the idea that they're  monsters is always in the back of his mind.  This story popped into my head and wouldn't let go until I told it all.  When it was finished, it helped show how things might have happened, and why the Cullen's behaved the way they did with Bella.  I did come to appreciate Rosalie in this story.  I had to make her deeper, because in the books she was just a spoiled beauty--blech!  

As to rambling, no worries there; I do it myself quite a bit.   

Reviewer: tushka Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2015 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 1 First Love

A new storyline that I've never necountered before - I love it!  Easy to see why Edward would "fall in love" with Esme - she was beautiful and not much older than him, a vampire and available - she seemed to be somewhat interested albeit as a "mother" but 17 year old's develope crushs like this all the time - Can't wait to read more!  Thanks!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading, and especially thanks for the rating and review!  I loved the way this story is completely different from Twilight, yet it could fit without changing the original.  It was hard for some readers to accept that Edward might have lied to Bella.  But he's a vampire and a mind reader; he has to lie all the time just for survival.  Anyway, I don't want to spoil the read; thanks for giving something new a try.  

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2015 12:24 PM Title: Chapter 1 First Love

So, that's why he did it! I'm of course assuming he will soon find Rosalie and change her, thinking to make a companion for Edward.  Can't wait to see where you will take this little family next! Sure is different from Crimson Rose of Texas!



Author's Response:

I get a silly grin every time you review one of my stories.  I think Stephen King calls such fans, "Constant Readers."  He can probably number his in the thousands, but I'm happy with those I can count on one hand.  I'm glad you think this is different from Crimson Rose.  Writing from the first person POV is my favorite, but I've got to be careful it doesn't sound like me, or sound like the same character.  This story almost wrote itself when the idea popped into my head.  At the time, I was writing another story, so I had to keep up with two chapters a week.  This one was only supposed to be a three or four part story, but it kept growing.  

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