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Reviewer: aelita48 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2016 2:07 PM Title: Chapter 12

Cette fiction deviennent de plus en plus intéressant.

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Date: 05 Feb 2016 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 11

Bella ne peut pas résister à Edward.

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2016 1:13 PM Title: Chapter 10

Maintenant, il  sait, qu'il  va faire ?

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2016 1:01 PM Title: Chapter 9

Bella aurait dû tout dire à Edward.

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Feb 2016 12:35 PM Title: Chapter 8

This Edward is charming. I think that the fire is its vengeance.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2016 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 45

Marcus is insane 

Reviewer: cmg1218 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2016 7:28 PM Title: Chapter 45

Damn...

Reviewer: dnmann Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2016 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 45

Scary implications.

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2016 5:23 PM Title: Chapter 5

his Edward is charming even if he hides something.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2016 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 45

wow  There are so many evil ones in this story.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2016 3:42 PM Title: Chapter 44

hmm wonder if Em will do something on Kim's warning or not.  

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Feb 2016 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 4

Good chapter.

 

Reviewer: cmg1218 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Feb 2016 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 44

Whoa...I wonder if charlie will be back?

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Feb 2016 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 44

Poor Bella 

Reviewer: Plumcrzy62 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Feb 2016 5:54 AM Title: Chapter 43

I get the sense the Edward might be playong both ends against the midde as his strategy.

Reviewer: coulierb Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Feb 2016 12:05 AM Title: Chapter 43

Edward is losing it.  How is he going to handle it when something bad happens to Bella?

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2016 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 43

:) 

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2016 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 43

Ugh Caius is going to be trouble for E. Hope B wont get hurt in the process.

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2016 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 42

Dun dun dun! Can't wait for the next update! 

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2016 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 42

This story is so stressful.  I worry when this all falls apart.

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Feb 2016 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 32

Heart breaking!  

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 42

Yea Alice is gonna get some people killed

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 41

Oh Em you are gonna pay for the trechery.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 6:52 PM Title: Chapter 40

hmm wonder who's side Em is on.....or maybe just on his own side and screw everyone else.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 39

Glad Bella is calling him on his behavior.   Alice is gonna get herself and/or Jake/Jasper killed I'm afraid

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 6:22 PM Title: Chapter 42

:) 

Reviewer: Plumcrzy62 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 42

I hope Edward can figure a way out of this complex web he has weaved, but I think someone will end up hurt or worse.

Reviewer: dnmann Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 42

good chapter.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 41

Emmett's feathers are ruffled.  Good to know Leah has some background in fighting. I'm sad that I'm caught up:(. This story is so addicting. 



Author's Response:

Wow, thank you so much for all your amazing reviews! I had been feeling a little bit down today and you have totally cheered me up. I had so much fun reading your thoughts after every chapter. And it's so helpful to me as a writer to get that chapter-by-chapter analysis and feedback. I learn so much about whether or not we are achieving the goals we intended with the story.

I'll be posting the next chapter tomorrow, and then the others every day or every other day up until chapter 48 or so, and then will switch to posting twice a week. I hope you continue to enjoy the story. I'm going to go back over your other reviews and answer any questions that I can that don't reveal spoilers. ;)

Thanks again for making my day.  You've really made me happy. xoxoxo

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 40

Looks like there are lots of Problems coming.

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Date: 01 Feb 2016 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 39

If they only realized Jacob knows more than they give him credit for.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 3:54 AM Title: Chapter 38

That's probably way better than doing it in the airplane bathroom. Haha

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 3:42 AM Title: Chapter 37

Is Edward going to try & marry her in Hawaii?  That would change things for her application.



Author's Response:

Haha, getting married in Hawaii is a great idea. But it's a little too early for that now... :)

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 3:34 AM Title: Chapter 36

He is totally going to mess with her application.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 35

He is so much more smarter than they all realize!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 34

She still needs to drink her mango shake.  When she finds out about his leadership it's going to be bad.



Author's Response:

I'm afraid it is... :(

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 12:44 AM Title: Chapter 33

I knew he was going to be pissed.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 12:37 AM Title: Chapter 32

Will Jasper know his sister?

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 31

I think it's Emmett & I wonder if Edward is going to be pissed that he gave her weed & alcohol.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 12:19 AM Title: Chapter 30

So it was her spying on him .

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 12:01 AM Title: Chapter 29

Oh my goodness Edward is laughing hysterically inside his head!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 28

I wasn't expecting Emmett to be against him to. 

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 27

I hope it's just Jacob. I forgot to mention in one of my reviews that I loved the way you said "I wanted him like paper wants to burn" that is such a great analogy! I haven't ever heard it before.



Author's Response:

Thanks! So happy you liked our turn of phrase. :)

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 26

Something in my gut tells me she is going to except him more than we expect.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 25

Knowing that his mother suffered and he was there for it only makes everything worse.  It does explain why he zip ties people to chairs.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 24

That's why he couldn't go home.  I also wonder if Kim took a beating and was one of the girls. 

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 10:28 PM Title: Chapter 23

He was very sweet with her let's see if it continues.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 22

I can't get it out of my head that she killed her family. She said her apartment last chapter.  And her having to remember to pay the utilities....

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 9:59 PM Title: Chapter 21

Or did Edward have her family killed....

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 9:49 PM Title: Chapter 20

They are the perfect Bonnie & Clyde!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 19

I'm guessing it's a setup.  I'm also beginning to think maye Bella killed her mom & brother?  Maybe she has mental issues and nobody knows it yet....

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 18

Just what I thought! Brainiac!  Why is Kim still alive?

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 9:18 PM Title: Chapter 17

I really hope he kills Kim!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 16

Oh crap!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 15

Alice's entrance was very comical! Edward has laid out his plan so completely it's honestly insane.  I'm honestly baffled.  To think the stuffed animal even was planned is shocking.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 14

Jacob just found them!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 13

I bet he kills her first.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 12

I almost expect him to have supernatural powers. 

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 11

I really just want him to be good bc she deserves it!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 10

James is making a play for the captains seat!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 9

That's weird why were they in the bushes? Or were they following Edward? Kim & Debra might be found dead!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 7:21 PM Title: Chapter 8

He burned down the fair.  Holy cow!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 7

I love that he will fall for her & I believe he wasn't expecting too.  That prologue you wrote still has my mind reeling!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 6

Bella has good instincts even though she is a bit naive.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 5

I wonder if he wants Bella one because she is being noticed by everyone and two because she fits well with his nerd image. 

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 6:34 PM Title: Chapter 4

I forgot to mention last chapter that I think he made the ladder fall or had some way of helping her get hurt.  After this chapter it makes me think he is a kid who is a genius & is using his brains in bad ways.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 3

It's really concerning how well he hides his gang leadership.

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 2

James is total scum!  I like that Jacob is just a good guy!

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is going to be sooo good!



Author's Response:

So glad to hear that you especially enjoyed this first chapter!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2016 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 41

:)



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for reviewing and I'm glad you liked the chapter!

Reviewer: cmg1218 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jan 2016 12:07 PM Title: Chapter 40

Hmm

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 40

:) 

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 40

Did Bella tel Edward the lie she told everyone about this weekend?  Edward better watch his back. 

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 39

Jacob thinks Alice is crazy lol.  Bella is so good a calling Edward out and gives him a consunce



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review and you are so right. :)

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 4:05 PM Title: Chapter 38

Emmett is going to try to hurt Bella not cool.  mile high club ;)

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 3:21 PM Title: Chapter 37

Edward is playing his part well.  He is so sweet to take Bella away



Author's Response:

Yes, he is. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 36

Jacob is in to help Alice stop this drug. Edward just wants to make sure Bella is close to him.

Reviewer: coulierb Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 10:39 AM Title: Chapter 39

I'm enjoying your stiry.  Glad the take down us in progress.  It's also refreshing to watch Edwards character change.



Author's Response:

Thank you very much for reviewing and I appreciate knowing what you like in particular.

Reviewer: cmg1218 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 12:04 AM Title: Chapter 39

Well this is facinating!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the review and it makes me happy that you enjoy this!

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2016 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 35

He is such a smart guy he needs to fix things

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2016 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 34

Edward is trying to be a good guy

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2016 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 39

Alice is taking a big risk 



Author's Response:

Oh yes, she really is. Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2016 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 38

:)  loving this 

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2016 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 38

hmm wonder what Em will be doing?

Naughty E trying to get B into the Mile High Club

Reviewer: dnmann Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2016 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 38

Good chapter.

Reviewer: Gelsa Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jan 2016 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 37

So glad he's cooperating



Author's Response:

Thanks for your review and I'm glad you're enjoying the story.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jan 2016 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 37

hmm taking her out of town.  Interesting timing



Author's Response:

Haha, all part of the plan. :)

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2016 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 36

alice is going to Jake killed if she's not careful.   Sadly E is right.  you can be smart as a whip but the person with money or connections is always going to get ahead of you.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2016 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 35

oooh now what did E find I wonder.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2016 6:34 PM Title: Chapter 34

Glad he is telling her some stuff.  Sadly he's right about the school stuff.   Too much money to "professional ball players" than to teachers, cops or military people who actually make a difference.

Reviewer: Plumcrzy62 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2016 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 36

I think Edward will help give her an advantage to ensure she goes with him. 

Reviewer: Plumcrzy62 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2016 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 35

Wondering what he found now?

Reviewer: Gelsa Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2016 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 35

Anything leading to James?

Reviewer: dnmann Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jan 2016 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 35

Another twist. Good story.

Reviewer: Gelsa Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2016 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 34

Wow. Quite the conversion.

Reviewer: Plumcrzy62 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2016 5:02 AM Title: Chapter 34

I hope that Edward can find a way out of this as her really is trying to clean up his act.  I suspect she will learn more by a situation out of Edward control.

Reviewer: dnmann Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2016 4:20 AM Title: Chapter 34

good chapter.

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2016 12:19 PM Title: Chapter 33

What is Edward going to do he has them coming at him from all sides now?

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2016 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 32

So sad that aunt needed bitch slaped

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jan 2016 1:35 AM Title: Chapter 33

hmm James is going to regret betraying E and Caius as well.

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