Date: 20 Jan 2016 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 32
Edward didn't have a chance at normal. Bella is a mess. She is doing everything against the way she was raised. It is more than rebelling.
Date: 20 Jan 2016 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 31
Shit is going to hit the fan. Emmett is more evil than Edward thought.
Date: 20 Jan 2016 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 30
He set her up to find out
Date: 20 Jan 2016 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 32
ooh Em is going to pay for this I hope. Jerk.
Date: 20 Jan 2016 3:33 AM Title: Chapter 31
Bella is being reckless again. I don't know about Emmett. Something seems off. Edward better protect Bella and get rid of Caius.
Date: 19 Jan 2016 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 32
Another good chapter.
Date: 19 Jan 2016 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 31
Ack Em is going to regret messing with B....as is Caius with threatening B.
Your chapter posted and I got an alert. there was a server issue on the site yesterday.
Date: 18 Jan 2016 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 31
I saw this scenario coming. I hope Edward's super genius can keep Bella safe. Perhaps he'll really work with Alice to bring Caius & co down in exchange for immunity
Date: 18 Jan 2016 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 31
Good chapter. Stong plots.
Date: 14 Jan 2016 2:22 PM Title: Chapter 30
Who could resist Edward?
Date: 12 Jan 2016 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 30
hmm poor B being manipulated.....but maybe that is what she really wants.
Date: 12 Jan 2016 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 29
hmmm Sounds like Alice is gonna break some rules and ruin any chance of prosecution. lol
Date: 12 Jan 2016 5:07 PM Title: Chapter 30
Very good chapter.
Date: 12 Jan 2016 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 29
The Captain must be laughing his ass off on the inside
Date: 10 Jan 2016 2:06 PM Title: Chapter 29
Another twist. Cool.
Date: 10 Jan 2016 9:53 AM Title: Chapter 29
He is a good actor poor Alice is making herself sick
Date: 10 Jan 2016 9:04 AM Title: Chapter 28
So Emmett is evil toward Edward to? this is freaking me out lol
Date: 10 Jan 2016 8:43 AM Title: Chapter 27
He is having someone watch her? She wants to be in the dark.
Date: 10 Jan 2016 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 26
She is more ready for Edward than he thinks
Date: 08 Jan 2016 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 28
hmmm now who is Emmmett really? undercover fed? or just a kid trying to get out of a bad situation. hmmm
Jake really needs a temper control.
Date: 08 Jan 2016 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 28
Very good chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks! So glad you're enjoying it. :)
Date: 08 Jan 2016 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 27
He probably ordered on of his "crew" top stock the groceries. I am thinking the foot steps might be James or maybe Jake.
Author's Response:
Great guess!
Date: 08 Jan 2016 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 27
Oh crap, great chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you.
Date: 08 Jan 2016 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 27
the groceries are a very nice touch. Lemme guess, Jake is following her?
Author's Response:
Thanks! And that's an excellent guess!
Date: 07 Jan 2016 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 26
I hope Edward cleans his act up and becomes legit.
Date: 01 Jan 2016 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 26
hmm I wonder how Bella will react when she finds out. Not to mention her psycho mother.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for your awesome reviews! I always love hearing what you think. :) Happy New Year!
Date: 01 Jan 2016 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 25
oh my Poor Edward. No wonder he wants control.
Date: 01 Jan 2016 3:00 AM Title: Chapter 26
Good set up chapter.
Date: 31 Dec 2015 7:43 PM Title: Chapter 24
Sounds like Edward is the consumate planner.
Date: 31 Dec 2015 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 23
WEll at least he made her first time nice.
Date: 30 Dec 2015 10:32 AM Title: Chapter 25
No wonder he is so messed up what a thing to live through
Date: 29 Dec 2015 1:01 PM Title: Chapter 25
That explains a lot
Date: 29 Dec 2015 2:35 AM Title: Chapter 25
Did he get all 4 of them?
Date: 28 Dec 2015 4:21 PM Title: Chapter 24
A great story with an intricate plot.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your terrific reviews!
Date: 28 Dec 2015 8:17 AM Title: Chapter 24
That was the perfect set up
Author's Response:
Haha. Yes! ;)
Date: 27 Dec 2015 2:30 PM Title: Chapter 24
Interesting. So I'm guessing Edward uses some of his I'll gotten gains for good.
Date: 23 Dec 2015 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 23
He better take care of ger. She is so innocent compared to his world.
Date: 23 Dec 2015 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 22
Bella is a little crazy with all the voices and mood swings. She is going to get hurt by wanting to go to the extreme opposite of who she is. She needs to find a happy medium.
Date: 23 Dec 2015 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 23
They gave all to each other
Date: 23 Dec 2015 6:19 PM Title: Chapter 22
She is moving right along
Date: 23 Dec 2015 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 21
He was going to open up to her.
Date: 23 Dec 2015 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 20
She will follow him anywhere
Date: 22 Dec 2015 7:03 PM Title: Chapter 19
Was that the set up that Edward wanted Emmett to do?
Date: 22 Dec 2015 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 18
He watched her be abused and killed?
Author's Response:
Sadly, yes. :( You can imagine the kind of effect that had on him...
Date: 20 Dec 2015 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 22
ooh Bella went snooping. Interesting.
Date: 20 Dec 2015 2:19 PM Title: Chapter 22
Fab. Can't wait for more
Date: 19 Dec 2015 4:36 AM Title: Chapter 22
Hmmm..... I think Bella's changing too quickly especially since Edward's not really pushing for more physically.
Oh, I know this is random, but please--don't let anything happen to Alice's cat!
Date: 16 Dec 2015 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 21
Jacob really is pushing his luck.
Yes people can delete their own reviews. If you hit delete instead of respond, you could delete them but first you'd get a second screen asking if you really want to delete it. But people can leave a rating without a review too so you would still get an alert, without seeing a review. Once they are deleted, no you can't get them back
Author's Response:
Thanks very much for letting me know. I really appreciate your taking the time to explain things to me. I was kind of freaking out about my review count going down, lol. (I'm a bit of a noob ... ;)
Thanks for letting me know about the possibility of getting alerts. I've now set my preferences to send me an email whenever I get a review (and I assume a rating as well). Good, that will cheer me up if I am emailed about reviews. :)
Is there a way to PM other authors on this site? Thanks and I'm glad you're enjoying the story!
Date: 16 Dec 2015 1:48 PM Title: Chapter 21
Since Edward can't go home tonight, I assume he wanted to be sure Alice overheard. I wonder who else he's setting up. I'm also surprised that holy roller Renee would leave her daughter unsupervised for months at a time
Date: 16 Dec 2015 7:17 AM Title: Chapter 21
I wonder when she is going to start figuring out there are two sides to Edward.
Date: 15 Dec 2015 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 21
I liked it. Keep the good work.
Author's Response:
Thanks! :)
Date: 15 Dec 2015 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 20
So far, sooo good. Loved the story so far! Cant wait for more!
Date: 14 Dec 2015 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 20
hmm B doesn't know what she's saying. I have to go back and re-read. Is her mom dead or just flaky?
Date: 14 Dec 2015 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 19
Wondering if the people knew Alice was there and said it purposefully.
Eric is a jerk. Nice that Jess and Leah made costumes and not just bought them.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2015 6:52 AM Title: Chapter 20
I really am enjoying this story please update soon !!
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2015 4:36 AM Title: Chapter 20
Oh he's gonna hold her to that.......
Date: 11 Dec 2015 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 18
I thought that Edward was on some kind of vendetta. Even so, I feel the only thing that can redeem him in my eyes is if he makes an antidote for 'rapture' and makes it available gratis
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review, and yeah, he is a bad guy, isn't he? No spoilers on his redemption for now...
Date: 11 Dec 2015 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 18
Glad Edward got the drugs out of Bella's office before she had some. hmm we learn a little more about Edward. Was wondering when we'd find out about his motivations.
Author's Response:
I know, that was scary, wasn't it? More about Edward's past will be coming up shortly. Thanks so much for reviewing. :)
Date: 11 Dec 2015 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 1
Love please continue to give us more!!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for the review and I will try to update every day until we're caught up!
Date: 10 Dec 2015 12:20 PM Title: Chapter 17
I don't suppose it's possible that green it is double crossing him any chance that he told Alice and Jasper that the room is bugged?
Author's Response:
Hmmm... can't share spoilers at this point, but interesting guess. :)
Date: 09 Dec 2015 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 17
Hope B will be ok with what got put into her sugar. Thinking Alice and Jasper have messed with the wrong gang this time.
Author's Response:
They really have...
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2015 12:38 AM Title: Chapter 17
Is Edward really into Bella or does he have another agenda
Author's Response:
I suppose it's not a spoiler (since I said HEA) to say he really does care for her but doesn't quite know how to handle it.
Date: 08 Dec 2015 12:12 AM Title: Chapter 16
Dead man walking! Hopefully E holds his trigger finger long enough to learn about Kim. I know this is shocking to some, but I kinda hope her deadbeat mom uses the sugar. And Jazz is badass!!
Date: 07 Dec 2015 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 16
OMG no If Edward finds out people are going to die. Kim is a bitch
Date: 07 Dec 2015 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 16
Go Jasper laying out James. Ugh Lonnie, you've dug your own grave with that move
Date: 07 Dec 2015 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 16
Edward is using Bella's apartment as a drop?
Date: 06 Dec 2015 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 15
He has fallen for her and doesnt know how to deal with that he only uses people.
Date: 06 Dec 2015 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 14
So undercover cool
Date: 06 Dec 2015 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 15
hmm James and Jacob are going to kill each other one of these days. Wonder if Jacob is going to try and get Alice to befriend Bella now.
hmmmE has feelings....interesting.
Date: 06 Dec 2015 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 13
Edward is bad bad boy
Date: 06 Dec 2015 1:33 PM Title: Chapter 14
Continue to enjoy the mistery. Wish the chapters were longer. Is Edward really as evil as he's made out to be? And, is Bella really so aloof? And oh boy, she's got one angry lady with no reason to live angry with her.
Date: 06 Dec 2015 4:39 AM Title: Chapter 14
James is going to regret trying to get one over on Edward.
Date: 06 Dec 2015 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 14
Bella's apartment? Probably Jacob coming out of the bushes.
[Report This]Date: 05 Dec 2015 3:37 AM Title: Chapter 13
Omg love your story can not wait for more.
Date: 05 Dec 2015 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 13
I think bad things are coming.
Date: 04 Dec 2015 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 13
Sounds like Alice and Jasper aren't going to make it to the end of the story. LOL for Bella's attempt at matchmaking. Kim's def going to be trouble.
Date: 03 Dec 2015 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 12
Great story! I look forward to reading more!
Date: 03 Dec 2015 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 12
hmm Hope Bella means more to him than entertainment. That would just be cruel. Jake is def an idiot. Poor Leah.
Date: 03 Dec 2015 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 12
Jacob knows there is something not right with Edward. Edward is going to keep Bella safe.
Date: 03 Dec 2015 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 11
Edward is so suave.
Date: 02 Dec 2015 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 11
Hope she stops listening to all those negative voices in her head. E is going to out himself if he's not careful about the fancy places he's taking her though.
Author's Response:
Bella will be going through a difficult time, but she will emerge on the other side stronger. Edward... is pretty arrogant LOL.
Date: 02 Dec 2015 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 11
He is so cool how could she not fall for that? Her mom is not very nice
Author's Response:
I know right? I'd fall for him... ;)
Date: 02 Dec 2015 2:23 AM Title: Chapter 11
Criminal master mind or not, I'm liking Edward. He sounds genuine in his feelings for Bella. Can't wait for him to deal with James as well as her abusive mother.
I'm curious about Carlisle and Esme. I'm going to reread the chapters but I don't recall them.
Keep up the good writing.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like Edward despite his darkness. He will get better... and thanks so much for the kind comments about my writing.
Date: 01 Dec 2015 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 10
At least we know Edward must care about Bella if he is protecting her.
Author's Response:
Yes! It's the first clue he thinks of her as something different from his usual dalliances. Thank you so much for reviewing today.
Date: 30 Nov 2015 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 10
So good. A bit chilling but very very interesting and I love them both even if Edward is a criminal. But this is just a story and we are allowed
to enjoy something we would not enjoy in real life.
Author's Response:
Exactly! So great to hear from someone who gets it. :) We wanted to escape into fantasy with this one and create something utterly different from our boring, ordinary, very law-abiding lives. ;) Thanks so much for reviewing and cheering me up today.
Date: 30 Nov 2015 4:51 PM Title: Chapter 10
What is James doing behind Edward's back it will not be good for him. I think Kim is going to disapair
Author's Response:
James is definitely going to get into trouble! And what will happen to Kim?
I'd like to let you know I'm very grateful for your reviews. I've been going through a bad time in my life and it always cheers me up to see a comment on this story.
Date: 30 Nov 2015 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 10
Sounds like James is guilty just not of the thing that Edward was asking about. However I doubt Edward is clueless about the other issue.
Author's Response:
James is sure guilty but the question is what exactly does Edward know about it.
And I wanted to say thanks so much for reviewing regularly. It means a lot to me.
Date: 30 Nov 2015 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 9
When Edward finds out what happened to her face there is going to be some hurting people
Author's Response:
Oh yeah!
Date: 30 Nov 2015 10:53 AM Title: Chapter 8
Dont mess with Edward
Author's Response:
oh yeah, better not!
Date: 30 Nov 2015 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 9
Poor Bella. I hope someone gives Kim et al a beatdown. While I rarely say this, I hope Jake and edward can work together to keep B safe.
Author's Response:
Kim is really a piece of work, isn't she?
Date: 29 Nov 2015 8:55 PM Title: Chapter 8
I have to say by far this is the best mystery going. I can't tell who's the good or bad guys thus far. It seems obvious then you add in things like the fortune teller. That gave it another spin. Maybe Bella is going to change Edwards way? I can't believe for a moment he wound let Alice die???
Thanjs for this mystery.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the wonderful review! I'm so happy you're enjoying the mystery. I can't give out spoilers, but don't worry, everything will be resolved. :)
Date: 29 Nov 2015 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 8
Edward is the captain and I presume he's using his internship for access to chemicals. I just don't know yet if he's a good guy playing a role or bad guy. I do know I like this story and can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
I know I like your review :) and I promise everything will be revealed by the end. Thanks!
Date: 29 Nov 2015 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 8
Ooh fair owner made a huge mistake. Aww for the view and kiss
Author's Response:
Big mistake! ;) Glad you liked the kiss.
Date: 28 Nov 2015 4:15 PM Title: Chapter 8
I'd say the Captain ordered the fair to be burnt as payback.
Author's Response:
I'd say you were right. ;)
[Report This]Date: 28 Nov 2015 11:37 AM Title: Chapter 7
That scared the Sh*t out of me! LOL
Author's Response:
Haha, hope it was fun! ;)
Date: 28 Nov 2015 7:47 AM Title: Chapter 7
That was fun who did Edward have to see?
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it and you'll find out later!
[Report This]Date: 28 Nov 2015 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 7
Just picked this up today. Hmm very foreboding chapter
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing and I'm glad you like it so far. We are going to try to update every day for at least a while.