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Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2016 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 11

That was sensual and erotic and beautiful more please 

Reviewer: Marnie Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2016 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 11

Ich  liebe  diese  Geschichte  und  kann nicht  warten ,  für  dieFortsetzung



Author's Response:

thank you! ♥

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2016 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 11

Right up until Bella said how good it felt, I forgot about how good it felt when my milk would let down. My ex and I never considered having him drink from them ... but I bet it would feel REALLY good during sex. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 11:23 PM Title: Chapter 11

ah, I see! poetic license! your chapters are short, but always pack quite an erotic punch. I love reading you...



Author's Response:

i love writing for you! lol hugs!♥

Reviewer: GinnyD Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 11

are you going to use more images to the story?

it's so good that you are improving your story...

 



Author's Response:

its my trademark! definitely! lol

Reviewer: eschoenh Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 11

Great chapter :)



Author's Response:

aww thank you!

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 9:15 PM Title: Chapter 11

:) 

Reviewer: shaztastic Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 11

Lol would love my own Edward look forward to next update x



Author's Response:

I would love one too! lol...thank you!

Reviewer: tff Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 7:39 PM Title: Chapter 11

good

Reviewer: Petralouise Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 11

Please keep going and post soon

Reviewer: sweet2you Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 6:11 PM Title: Chapter 11

I'm excited...cat wait to see what all happen  next.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 11

oooh E is def a lucky dude!!!

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 10

Your reply to my last review had me chuckling. If you only knew how my brain worked you would be shaking your head.
You write intriguing scenarios and most often plausible outcomes. They engage my mind and ask it to come play with your characters. Too much fun!

The feel of this rewrite is a bit more methodical in dealing with the extenuating circumstances surrounding Edward and Isabella. Laying the best possible groundwork for their continued success in the future.
Slow and steady wins the race, says the toirtise. 🐢
I remember how much Edward enjoyed this special treat from his little girl in the previous version. Will he need that extra workout to keep the calories down? Hehe
So far they have a good balance between communication and desire.
What will be their first hurdle to jump together? Her move in day?

Author's Response:

oh no...u surely remember...blow job class ! laughs....yeah this isn't going to sit well with Edward at all...

Reviewer: eschoenh Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 10

:)

Reviewer: Petralouise Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 1:52 AM Title: Chapter 10

Love this story  the  first time I read it and I think this new one will be just as great.. Please post soon the wait kills me 👐👐👐👐

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 12:44 AM Title: Chapter 10

Hot damn that was sexy more please 

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 10

:) 

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 12:05 AM Title: Chapter 9

:) 

Reviewer: tff Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 10

good

Reviewer: tff Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 11:01 PM Title: Chapter 9

good

Reviewer: sweet2you Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 11:01 PM Title: Chapter 10

What the hell....you stop now!

How many chapters do you think this story will have.

 



Author's Response:

Laughs  I wished I knew the Answer....I don't write the way most do but I am adhereing to 3-4 pagez a chapter that is all I know for now...I will update soon promise!

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 10

oh my! how unique of her? how is she able to do this without just having given birth? hormones? what man wouldn't like that? the pic you used for her body is nice and curvy. like a real woman....



Author's Response:

I will write a little about that in answer to ur questions in the future lol thanks in glad u like it...

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 10

Love it. I hope you update again soon. You spoil us so, giving us two updates in one day. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.



Author's Response:

I am glad you are enjoying it...I love this Edward..hes the ideal Daddy Dom !

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 10

oooh wasn't expecting that twist.  Interesting.



Author's Response:

Neither was Edward! laughs.....

thanks! I am glad u enjoy this!

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 9

I really enjoyed the chapter. I'm looking forward to Edward's response to Bella's question at the end. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 9

I'd balk on seafood too.  Blech.   Glad he is being strong though

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 8

Good thing they have Carlisle and Ben as role models for him and Ang for her

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 9

There it is.........Bella's ready to put the pout into full affect to get herself situated in his bedroom.
Based on Edward's firm stance on waiting until an agreement is signed and his insistence on her living arrangements, I think she would reserve the pout for a battle she might win. Haha.
Lovin the rewrite.

Author's Response:

I am so glad you are enjoying it the second time around! Thank you!

 

I Love the very interesting reviews u leave...I think you are in my head sometimes....

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 9

Good for him! His reasoning seems sound. I'm glad she agrees. I'm having a great time reading this again!



Author's Response:

grins! me too!

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 9

Edward is starting off doing great he put a stop to her and set the rules and explained why this the right way I loved it 

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 7

Good first meeting and date. 

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 8

Full steam ahead or cautiously proceeding?
Learning from each other is how most relationships establish a firm foundation. A true partnership. Knowing full well what the other requires and when to relinquish the reigns of control.
Ebb and flow, push and pull. Balance.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 6

Glad he was able to make their date 

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 5

Glad he's reading up and not just playing by ear 

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 4

Ah so she doesn't know Carlisle... Interesting.  Love how open and up front she is 

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 7

They are rapidly sorting out the identifiable and very compatible qualities between them as a Dominant Daddy and Lg.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 3

Great introduction of our kiddos. Wonder when Carlisle will come back 

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:38 PM Title: Chapter 2

Carlisle is def dropping him in the deep end of the pool.  Lol

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 6

I have noticed an ease of flow in your rework of this storyline. The transitions between settings and character ideas is more detailed.
How far do you let them physically go at on this first date? Will Edward put the breaks on calling on his new role as Daddy?

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:33 PM Title: Chapter 1

Welcome back to TWCS!!!! 

I didn't get to read last time Round.  Looking forward to it

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 5

Edward is already in over his head.
Will Carlisle be of any assistance?
Bella being the one to molkd him may noit be exactly what they need. She may find out her way of manipulating Edward is detrimental and not team building.
Edward needs a mentor.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:15 PM Title: Chapter 4

Bella's decision to seek a daddy figure is far deeper than the absent sperm donor her mother found. Then again that relationship has not been expounded upon. Maybe it was mom's fault that daddy dearest was missing from their lives.
None the less, this is a part of Bella's pursuit of emotional well-being and happiness.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 3

Can he find the attributes in himself of the perfect Daddy to offer himself up for the job?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 2

Edward's minbd is reeling yet he feels drawn to the activities surrounding him.
Will the green eyes assist his curiosity?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 6:52 PM Title: Chapter 1

I was enticed by your first version of this story.
I can't wait to see the nuances of a seasoned writer as you retell this delectable tale.
We all welcome you back. You are a huge part of this fandom and we appreciate all you offerer up from your gifted heart.

Reviewer: BOBBYSGIRL76 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 8

: )   READ YOU SOON.

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 8

I loved it so sweet and sexy now when will they start playing 

Reviewer: Tammy9901 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2016 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 8

I need more. 

Reviewer: Zorantha Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Mar 2016 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 8

Let me say that I love your writing.  You have some of the most inventive and creative stories I have read.  Your writing has steadily improved as you have had more practice.  When you first started you had a problem with homyns but you have vastly improved on that front.  Having said that, please don't be offended by my correction; "my interest was peaked" should be "my interest was piqued".  

As I said, please don't be offended.  It was meant in the kindest way that constructive critisism can be meant.  I'm a big fan of your writing.  Please continue.  My hope is to see you move into being a published author, because I think you're that good.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 8

:) 

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 8

You are changing this quite a bit, I think. I know you've said this, but since I don't remember details of the old version, it is difficult to really tell. I read 46 chapters before and only remember the generalities of the story. This just feels different. Good, but different. I like that you are putting your life experiences into the story. It only makes it seem better, more real...thanks!



Author's Response:

Yes it's changed quite a bit...not the story but my writing...i tend to repeat alot and I am trying to stop that... My writing is long enough I don't need to make it longer ...I'm going on my own here also my beta is still with me but she never worked on this with me before this was all me....we will see how it goes when I it up the first lemon those are my biggest issue right now...i seem to be unlike myself anymore..I'm just going to write it and let go.... Crosses fingers....

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 8

And I am so reading it while they re doing it!!! :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: tff Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 8

good

Reviewer: flyrbrd Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 8

Thanks! I am so glad this is back ;)

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 8

:)

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 6

Good for you! I'm proud you can identify with babygirl/sub.

 

Here's to hoping you have a gentle, but firm, loving Daddy/Dom!

Reviewer: Petralouise Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 12:56 PM Title: Chapter 8

👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 4:10 AM Title: Chapter 7

I have to tell you I shocked myself when I found the idea of DD/ls so intriguing. I am not, nor will I ever be capable of being a serious sub, except for maybe in the bedroom/playroom. The very thought of letting someone have that much control over me enrages me. LOL :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 4:03 AM Title: Chapter 6

I'm not in the BDSM lifestyle, but I'm always interested in people who are. Thank you for giving me a glimpse into what it's like. I've learned a lot through your writing. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 3:50 AM Title: Chapter 5

I am really looking forward to more of this. You are one of the best, Monkey. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 4

Poor guy has no idea what hit him, does he? She is truly the one with all the power here and he will just be along for the ride. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 3

I'm sensing that this will be the beginning of something big. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: SarcasticBimbo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 2

I can't wait to see who Edward meets. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

Reviewer: BOBBYSGIRL76 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 7

It's so good to look forwardto where you left off.  😊 Read You Soon.

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 7

I loved it its like they were ment to find each other so great more please

Reviewer: kittap2 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 7

I'm loving this story.  So glad you're back!

Reviewer: dreamkeeper1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 9:18 AM Title: Chapter 7

I love this story. Welcome back

Reviewer: tff Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 7

good

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 7:24 AM Title: Chapter 7

:) 

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 5:40 AM Title: Chapter 1

I am so glad you have added this one back on!  It was was one of my faves from you!!! I am looking forward to reading it again!  Thank you!  I have missed your stories! 

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 4:36 AM Title: Chapter 7

So good. She's a bit of a tease, isn't she? I think he likes that.

Reviewer: Petralouise Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 7

Happy to have another chapter

Reviewer: MaluTara Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Mar 2016 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 6

I like the changes! It's like reading something new but familiar ;) 

great chap! Continue please :)

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 6

What happened to the person that was Beta-ing for you before? I do notice that this doesn't seem as familiar as it once was, but can't pinpoint the changes. I am amazed at your growth as a writer, but I shouldn't be and don't mean anything derogatory about your previous writing. I am enjoying this story a lot. I am enjoying very much having you back in the FF world, writing, again!!

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 5

This has a definite allure to it. Not for myself, I'm not a baby girl, not at ALL, but the dynamic  here is fascinating! Thanks!

Reviewer: BOBBYSGIRL76 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 6

Sweetie all you did was improve your magic. Truly worth the wait but....PLEASE! don't keep us waiting too long. READ YOU SOON  : )

Reviewer: Petralouise Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 6

👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

Reviewer: BOBBYSGIRL76 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 6:34 PM Title: Chapter 1

I worried you'd come back once it was too late for me to enjoy all your stories to completion. Thank You  for coming back I'm sure it was a difficult decision to return but maybe it's what will make you smile again.  I missed you as I'm sure many other readers have as well. READ YOU SOON.

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 6

I love it even the changes and for it not being beta it's really well written thank you 

Reviewer: cmg1218 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 4:21 PM Title: Chapter 6

Great so fat

Reviewer: tff Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 3:42 PM Title: Chapter 6

good

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 3:39 PM Title: Chapter 6

:) 

Reviewer: bba628 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 1

So great to be reading your stories again, Thank you!

Reviewer: winterfae22 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 11:07 AM Title: Chapter 1

Loved it!

Reviewer: btlmotormouth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 7:36 AM Title: Chapter 5

love it!!! can't wait for more!!!!

Reviewer: mommymac0508 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 5

Oh I love it she knew just what you say to him so sexy

Reviewer: tff Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 2:30 AM Title: Chapter 5

good

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2016 12:01 AM Title: Chapter 5

:) 

Reviewer: snowtiger Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 5

pleased your back really enjoy your writing, patiently waiting for more plz

Reviewer: Petralouise Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 5

You have me hooked all over again I keep looking to see if you posted another chapter 

Reviewer: Romana973 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 5

He didn't get her phone number!  Thanks for writing!

 

 

Reviewer: FanofAll Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 5

Its so nice to have you back

Reviewer: angelskiss Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 5

I have missed them and you so much!

Reviewer: sweet2you Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 4

Great start. 

I keep reading about previous stories.  We new readers want to read them too.

Please reload your older stories for us to enjoy. ...Or at  least where can we find them. 

 



Author's Response:

If you are on face book friend me and I will add you to my group where alot of my stories are posted...even some that have never been published online...

here is the link to my facebook and the group link

 

https://www.facebook.com/R0bsHandMonkey

 

https://www.facebook.com/groups/318493874836042/

 

Reviewer: KAWhitlock Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 4

I am so excited to see this up and going again!  Can't wait for more.

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 4

Carlisle spanked Chelsea? I don't remember reading that. Guess I missed it, but I don't ususally miss things like that.  I like that she seems to be intelligent along with being sexy. The way she explained the meaning of fetish told me that. I'm guessing he might like that also.



Author's Response:

Garrett spanked Chelsea....lol....♥

Reviewer: judyblue95 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 3

I love that you  use KS for your Bella. So many writers don't, these days. For me there is nobody else to picture as Edward and Bella blut RP and KS. Lovely introduction in this chapter!



Author's Response:

In my world there is no other Edward or Bella but Robert and Kristen...otherwise to me they aren't Edward and Bella...I agree with you...

Reviewer: Cynthia24cat Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 4

Oh my GOD!  You are amazing!  I have loved all  your stories and this is setting out to be no different.  How do you do it?  So perfect.  Can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

aww thank you!

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 4

This lady knows what she wants, but does she know "who" gets a trial run, too?!

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 3

So.... they met;)

I think its awesome how much chemistry they have right from the start

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