Date: 26 Jan 2017 4:26 AM Title: Beta?
I`ll beta for you. I like the idea and where you are heading.
Date: 19 Jul 2016 2:00 PM Title: Beta?
So are you really not go8ng to write? You did an excellent job on the first chapter. Alot of people wrote stories without having a Beta. I truly hope that you will continue. I am putting this story on alert in hoping that you will continue your story.
Date: 19 Jul 2016 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
Oh I guessing that one of Bella's children got hurt. Hope it is not to bad. This story sounds very interesting. I hope you are going to continue it.
Date: 07 Jun 2016 6:19 AM Title: Beta?
Good Luck finding a beta. READ YOU SOON 💞
Author's Response:
Hi, i found a beta so less grammar errors for you!!😁 😁 thank you!!
Date: 07 Jun 2016 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
Hmmmm! I'm intrigued and look forward to more. You are off to a good start yes there are grammatical errors but it's still legible and that's all that matters. READ YOU SOON
Author's Response:
Hi! have a lot of idea in mind and now with a beta also the grammar error will be less. This week i'll post the next chapter! Thank you!!
[Report This]Date: 05 Jun 2016 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
Hey! I love this story and I hope that you found a beta and will continue updating! (:
Author's Response:
hey! Yes, i found a beta.... i'm writing the second chapter and for the end of this week it will be ready!! :) thank you!
Date: 04 Jun 2016 6:26 PM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
No problem. Great that you found someone.
Author's Response:
Thank you!! :)
Date: 02 Jun 2016 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
I have to say I like the plot and your broken English is very endearing since my grandparents spoke the same way. My son is learning Italian in school and I bought him a book to help him with his grammar that I think will also help you since they give example of how grammar would be used in English and then how the same grammar would be used in Italian. English Grammar for students of Italian by Sergio Adorni. You can get it on Amazon.com Let me know if you can't get the book.
Author's Response:
Hi, l'll go search that book. In italy everything is about english but noone really teach how is best to write. For all the school years they teach only the grammatic aspects such as verbs, articles, but not how to put them together in the correct, english way.
Date: 02 Jun 2016 3:53 AM Title: Beta?
Hi I wish you would continue with the story was looking forward to read
Author's Response:
Hi, problably I found a beta so there is hope...;)
Date: 02 Jun 2016 1:32 AM Title: Beta?
I could beta for you, but if you don't want that, please go forward with the story. I think it has real potential.
Author's Response:
Hy, thank you for your offer!! I found a beta and I'm going to write the next chapters!! I really hope to read your other reviews soon!! Bye
Date: 30 May 2016 11:53 AM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
When will you be updating?
Author's Response:
Hi, I'm looking for a beta. I hope to find one soon so I can update... bye!
Date: 26 May 2016 8:16 AM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
I like the potential it has. However, you seriously need to work on all things grammar related. Also, watch your word choice in certain situations. A couple times the wrong word made the sentence harsh. Still, I'm looking forward to seeing more.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Yes I know, I'm looking for a Beta but I do not have find one yet....
Are you interested? ? I'll post the next chapter soon! Bye
Date: 24 May 2016 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
Promising beginning :-)
I'd love to read more!
But to help with grammar and spelling problems I'd recommend a Beta.
Greetings,
leinchen
Author's Response:
thank you! I'm absolutely going to find a beta! :)
Hope to read your reviews for the others chapthers! Bye!
[Report This]Date: 24 May 2016 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
I like this story want edward and bella to get together thru this story and have an hea at end of story i like reading stories with 20 and more chapters
Author's Response:
Yes, me too. I really think that this story will have more that 20 chapters. And you'll see the ending..... :) you'll be pleased.
Hope to read your reviews also for the other chapters! Bye!
Date: 24 May 2016 12:07 PM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
Interesting so far.
You should try to find a beta to help with the grammar and punctuation. I have to give you a lot of credit for trying to write a story, not in your own language.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Yes, I'm going to find a beta, but I'm new in this site so I don't know how start the research. I hope to improve my writting ability and be able to make less mistakes.
Hope to read your reviews also for the nexr chapters! Bye!
[Report This]Date: 24 May 2016 11:13 AM Title: Chapter 1: Presentations
Sounds great so far... Very interesting ... Please keep it coming
Author's Response:
Thank you! In the next chapter Bella and edward will meet! I hope to have your reviews also for the next chapters ;)