[Report This]Date: 09 Oct 2017 4:27 AM Title: Chapter 7
i love to write long chapters but the longest chapter i wrote in here was 7 page chapters, please give me love , be kind and be nice just hit review and say something kind or just smile:):)
[Report This]Date: 09 Oct 2017 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 2
when i read a new story i try to put myself in shoe of the main charector , victom here is seems is edwards , our heart is with him but real victom is bella
[Report This]Date: 09 Oct 2017 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 1
HI .
i DONT HAVE beta and english is not my first language i am using grammer website and dictionary to improve my writting please dont judege it read it , you will love the charector after while.
[Report This]Date: 09 Oct 2017 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 12
thank you rob , i know she is harsh , every bad thing we do comes what we dont have and we want to improve it by something
[Report This]Date: 09 Oct 2017 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 13
i care for you , dont you know , it is hard not to see you and i miss you , but time will heal the pains , oh it is very hard , you are struborn and i am like you , i lost my trust , you hurt me so bad , my feeling hurt this story is all about hateness i have towards you . how i can punish you how i can hurt you the best i can do , is hold it in my head, put it in myself dont say it dont speak out. no one will lessson people think is easy but is not . your pain is your pain and you affected mostly becuase it is yours only :(
[Report This]Date: 25 Sep 2017 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 7
thank you for writting this story i appreciate it
[Report This]Date: 25 Sep 2017 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 6
do you know i love how she push him over edge
[Report This]Date: 25 Sep 2017 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 12
i love your story , please keep up dating faster i love to know why she is evil , is she dom , why she is behaving like that
[Report This]Date: 25 Sep 2017 4:45 AM Title: Chapter 11
interesting chapter i thought he could leave from her home , wow , toy gun funny if he knew the gun wasnt real
[Report This]Date: 25 Sep 2017 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 10
i love it , dark bella your story very different from what i read before
[Report This]Date: 23 Sep 2017 12:22 AM Title: Chapter 12
who like bella being evil ??
Date: 22 Sep 2017 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 12
Really enjoying the story, but Bella is vile! X
[Report This]Date: 16 Sep 2017 2:22 AM Title: Chapter 11
Edward is sissy , scared of a littile humilation and tourure emmmm, she is mad very mad . breaking to her office what he was thinking
[Report This]Date: 16 Sep 2017 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 10
pocket vagina or flashligh i was reading in amazon that most wife are buying it for their mens so when they travel they can enjoy themself. interesting avoid cheating :D:D
[Report This]Date: 16 Sep 2017 2:19 AM Title: Chapter 9
THank you rob- love happy you enjoy it
[Report This]Date: 16 Sep 2017 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 1
THank you for reviews, gosh writting is hard espically when English is not your first language and you love to write but i will do it . you guys can clean it in your head .:D
[Report This]Date: 13 Sep 2017 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 6
Now that is just brilliant. I know a few of you fit this description, and that’s a wonderful thing
[Report This]Date: 13 Sep 2017 10:02 PM Title: Chapter 9
very interesting part wearing skirt while cleaning bathroom , smile
[Report This]Date: 13 Sep 2017 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 6
i re read chapters sometimes i forget story line
[Report This]Date: 13 Sep 2017 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 3
why he need the money , so many question i have
[Report This]Date: 13 Sep 2017 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 8
Thank you for writing this wonderfull story
[Report This]Date: 13 Sep 2017 9:59 PM Title: Chapter 9
love to read more , and love your new banner .
[Report This]Date: 13 Sep 2017 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
she is very wierd , i wonder why she is doing it i, punishing him
[Report This]Date: 13 Sep 2017 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 9
thank you for the update...This Bella is a little crazy, what happen to her to make her act like this? Poor Edward
[Report This]Date: 11 Sep 2017 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 4
UP GRADE FASTER , I CANT WAITTTT
[Report This]Date: 11 Sep 2017 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 8
FANTASTIC DREAM , YOHOOOOO WE WILL SEE MORE ACTION I FEEL , YOU WILL COME UP WITH IT
[Report This]Date: 11 Sep 2017 12:54 AM Title: Chapter 7
POOR EDWARD , WHY SHE IS SO CRUEL , BUT I LIKE TO KNOW MORE ABOUT IT
[Report This]Date: 11 Sep 2017 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 6
I LOVE IT , LET SEE WHAT YOU HAVE
Date: 08 Sep 2017 8:09 PM Title: Chapter 1
This story seems very interesting but you grammar and spelling leaves a lot to be desired. I recommend looking into getting a beta reader.
Author's Response:
THank you for suggestion last time i use BETA , SHE DID NOT GIVE EDIT VERSION OF CHAPTERS AND I CANT ASK ANYONE BECUASE PEOPLE ARE BUSY AND THEY DONT CARE ABOUT HELPING OUT. SO I DECIDE IT TO USE WHAT I CAN DO BEST , MOST CHAPTERS ARE GREAT IN SHAPE . I READ A LOT OF STORIES IN THIS SITE THAT WRITTEN WORST THEN MY WRITING .HOPEFULLY PLOT LINE GIVES PEOPLE THE BOOST TO KNOW HOW THIS STORY GOES ON
Date: 08 Sep 2017 5:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
Did you have this posted before? It is SUPER familiar and i remember being so sad it stopped being updated. It was named slightly differently too. Anyway glad to see it and cant wait for more.
Author's Response:
Hi Dear
i actually re posting it and i am going TO finish this story . THIS WEBSITE delete the stoy so im slowly trying editing most of chapters and tell story of so you can know how my plot line will go through. Thank you for reviews
[Report This]Date: 06 Sep 2017 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
Thank you for writting this story :)
[Report This]Date: 06 Sep 2017 5:52 PM Title: Chapter 5
i cant wait to see how this story will go , how she will do furture , to see about it . i have to see
[Report This]Date: 06 Sep 2017 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 4
i cant wait to read more of it , i am happy you are writting this story , it would be great and it would be nice
[Report This]Date: 06 Sep 2017 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 3
it would be interesting , how he agree for it , why he needs money what is up with it
[Report This]Date: 06 Sep 2017 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 2
cant wait please post more
[Report This]Date: 06 Sep 2017 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
wow, new story and new plot line , this is first for me to read dark bella
Date: 05 Sep 2017 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 1
Every one has secret and baggaged they just hide it so you dont know what is it
Date: 04 Sep 2017 12:30 AM Title: Chapter 3
What a switch