Wow. This story is great. Love how you are writing the characters. I hope you come back to this one day.
Hmm the speech patterns are an interesting twist. Aro's giddiness is too funny. Wonder what Alice will say when B doesn't go back.
Hmm Bella seems to be taking things as well as can be expected.
This sounds very promising! I am intrigued! Thank you!
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Oooh interesting twist to the canon. Can't wait to see where you take it.