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Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2011 4:07 AM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

Okay this is funny as usuall. Love this story. Love & humor!



Author's Response:

Thank you!  So glad you love it and it's still making you laugh :)   That's my goal!

Reviewer: 2journey Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2011 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

love it!  you were right about Edward needing to work out some issues and love that you are portraying Bella strong but not so strong that it comes off as almost masculine like some writers do.  Perfect balance in the personalities.



Author's Response:

Thank you! Edward had a lot of anger inside and it's good that they talked about it. 

I'm glad you like Bella!  She's strong but still vulnerable.  Thank you so much for the kind words!

Reviewer: cedward2417 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2011 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

OMG...that was priceless.  Couldn't stop laughing.  I just love when these guys all get together.



Author's Response:

Hahah me too! They're such a blast to write as a group! Thank you :)

Reviewer: jbe86 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2011 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

lol that was great! I love Emmett. That picture of his smile mixed with the dildo was soo great. but did I miss the Jasper moment? He kept Jasper names like spider names? am I right? where did I miss that? oh well. this was great. keep up the great work and I can't wait to read more. thanks again bye for now. :D

Author's Response:

Chapter 28, the Emmettake, Jasper had a hard time fitting in the car and Emmett realized he looked like a spider ;)

Thanks for two reviews!  So kind!

Reviewer: FlSunshine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2011 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

omg, rofl !!!



Author's Response:

Hehe so much fun!  Love Emmett's antics!

Reviewer: Caius Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

Nole, seriously, you're going to send me to an early grave! Emmett, the dildo, the ridiculous conversation ... that was some seriously funny sh*t! Do you just think this stuff up, or do you have friends who are actually this crazy? My sides hurt from laughing so hard ... this was brilliant!



Author's Response:

Hehe well I don't want to send you to an early grave, just to make you laugh.  Which I did!  So win for me :)  I have no idea where this stuff comes from, I just knew that if Emmett was going to help Bella move, he'd damn well make sure to "find" things that would embarrass her.  And out it came ;)  It's all from my crazy head, sadly.  Wish I had friends this fun!

Thanks for the review ;)  See you next week with more!

Reviewer: shewoolf Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

Ya GOT to love Emmett AND Rose!!



Author's Response:

I do!  I do!  Next outtake chapter is in her POV, so it'll be fun to explore that :)  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: DarkwardLover Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 8:55 PM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

HHAAHHAHAHA hilariious



Author's Response:

Thank you :) Had a blast with it, as always!

Reviewer: lfcpam Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

OMG that was too funny...Emmett makes me belly laugh! Had tears in my eyes laughing so hard! Great chappie girl!



Author's Response:

Haha I love that you laughed that hard!  Emmett is so much fun to write.  Who knew I had such a prankster lurking in my nutty head?  Thanks for the review hon!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 20 The Offensive Line

Man can I trade my mother in law in for an esme model? Damn that was an awesome first meeting! And yay I was right bella is gonna use eddie's money to buy him that way she doesn't have to share. Heehee

Author's Response:

Haha sorry, I am just NOW getting emails from this site and somehow I missed this in my perusal! 

I think everyone would love an Esme model.  The first meeting went very well, all things considered.  Yeah, she's gonna buy her man! 

Thanks so much for the reviews!  I hope I didn't miss any others!

Reviewer: vickic Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 8:23 PM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

wish I had friends like that when I moved lol



Author's Response:

Right?  Moving is so much more fun with someone like Emmett around.  And hot QBs and funny friends.  hehe

Reviewer: cgooden Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 8:09 PM Title: Chapter 31 Changing Fields

I really enjoy reading this story.  You are a wonderful writer, bb.  I love the antics you have Emmett do but I'm kinda curious as to where you come up with the idea of what he says and does.  I can't wait to read more and look forward to the outtake.  See I read your AN again :)



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you're enjoying it and I thank you for the compliment!  I love writing these guys.  Where do Emmett's antics come from?  The mysterious inner workings of my mind.  I have no idea where they come from, I just knew a few days before I sat down to write this chapter that Emmett absolutely had to stash a big dildo in her drawer and "find" it. hehe I am weird! 

Thanks so much for the review.  And for reading the AN!  Win!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 19 The Rumor Mill

Well that went better than she expected time to meet the parents....

Author's Response:

Haha but of course!  I hope you enjoy them!

Reviewer: DarkwardLover Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

This theory makes me really happy :D



Author's Response:

I"m glad it does :)  Thank you so much!

Reviewer: 2journey Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2011 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

love it... and love seeing that Edward has to deal with crap coming his way about their relationship.  post nxt chpt soon??? 



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you love it!  He's also got some issues to deal with as well :)  It's up!  I don't know why I'm not getting reviews from this account.  So odd!  Sorry I took so long to respond!

Reviewer: 2journey Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2011 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

love it.  the way you write humor into your story is such a welcomed change after some of the other fiction stories.  i was laughing so hard outloud at the chpter with Esmee announcing the boys to the stage that my 17 yearold came out of my room to ask me what i was laughing so hard at.  couldn't read her some of the parts but just told her it was a story.  She said, "Mom... i've never seen you laugh so hard!  hope the author writes more stories like those!".  So... Thank you!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  Sorry it's taken me awhile to get back at you, TWCS was not sending my emails and I missed some along the way.

Love that you were laughing!  I love writing this story and have the best time with it.  I especially love how many of you tell me your family wonders what on earth you're reading when you're reading me :)  Thank you!  I'll do my best to keep you laughing :)

Thanks for the review!  I'll see you Monday with more!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2011 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 18 Post Game Interview

That was awsome! And so fiting for the ultimate guy fantasy! And the cheesy porno shit!? Too funny and oh so true. Heehee em and jasper are gonna be so jealous!

Author's Response:

Thank you!  Em and Jas are going to be jealous.  It was pornish but still sexy I thought.  I loved being in his head for that moment.  Such a fantasy!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2011 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 17 Press Pass

I'm glad that even though she met one asshole in the box the rest of the guys gave her a chance. Time to see eddie's pov of the locker room!

Author's Response:

Finally getting these!  Sheesh!  Most of the guys are pretty cool, but of course there have to be some that are dicks.  Just the law of averages! :)

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2011 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 16 Game Plan

Ok eddie here is the plan for the auction! Give bella your cheque book and let her buy you! Win-win you two get a date and the charity gets tons of your money when bella out bids eveyone else! Perfect

Author's Response:

You got that right, as you have seen :)

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2011 2:27 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

Bella needs to stop being a worry wort. They want to be together, so they might as well be together. Edward should propose soon. Life is too short to not live it to the fullest. Bella is one who will worry life a way. She needs Edward in her life, so she can enjoy life.



Author's Response:

She's not a worry wort, she's a smart girl who has some reservations about giving up her whole existence for a man only 3 months after meeting him.  He'll propose when I'm ready for him to.  No worries.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 11:38 PM Title: Chapter 15 Taking The Field

first play of the game and it was hers! *swoon* i wonder if hubbie would let me get a football eddie?



Author's Response:

Heheh couldn't hurt to ask, right?  Yeah, that was definitely a "swoon-worthy" moment wasn't it?  Melted my own heart! 

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 14 Huddle Up

too funny how dr phil and the rude asshole got eddie to admit his feelings. and bella let it slip first, but love is out there now and they can only move forward from here.



Author's Response:

Haha yes the love is out there.  Rude asshole?  Em was just doing what he had to do to rile his boy up!

Reviewer: shewoolf Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 7:53 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

Good, good story!



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm so glad you like it.  I have a blast writing it!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 13 Two Point Conversion

How can I get a shower like that? And does it come with a football eddie?

Author's Response:

Hahah I think it costs more than most houses do, but you could make it happen.  Football Eddie is a huge upgrade though :) 

Reviewer: 2journey Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 12:41 PM Title: Chapter 21 Upon Further Review

Between Esmee and Renee.. not sure who is the most hilarious!  and have to love Charlie.. crusty butt! LOL



Author's Response:

Heheh I love them all, honestly.  Charlie's "enemy" talk killed me.  We'll have to see if Edward can make him Team Cardinals down the line :)

Reviewer: BlueDiamond Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 10:08 AM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

Heck what could she have reservations about?



Author's Response:

The speed of them moving in together, her father's reaction, word gettting out about that to fellow reporters...plenty of things really.  It's not like she took days to answer him though ;)

Reviewer: janefanatic Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

Aw, I wish you had chosen a different player to be the ass! I love Peppers; I've been a fan of his ever since he played basketball for UNC! Oh well; someone had to be the jerk, I guess, although I would always choose Roethlisberger; no one really likes him anyway!



Author's Response:

HAHAH well Roethlisberger would not be out on the field at the same time as Edward, so that wouldn't really work.  Sorry, I'm a Nole and a Buc and had to deal with Peppers a lot, so it was fun to make him a dick :) HEHE 

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 12 Touchdown

so funny how manly eddie got anxious about doing the deed. and bella wants to marry his fingers, and toungue, and i'm gonna guess his dick!question though..... there was no mention of a condom....



Author's Response:

Hahah yes, I mention in the next chapter that they already discussed birth control.  I don't find it hot to write about it in the moment and because they planned the day, they're protected.

I think guys get nervous about their first time when the girl matters.  Bella does want all those parts and more!

Reviewer: janefanatic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 2:02 AM Title: The Emmettake: Emmett & the Extinguisher

I have nothing to say, except: HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

haha sounds good to me ;)

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Mar 2011 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 11 Team Meeting

have i mentioned i love emmie? the shrine was too funny! eddie and bella are gonna chow down and then it's time to head home for dessert.



Author's Response:

Haha Em gets so much love.  I adore it.  His shrine was pretty awesome.  Yeah, food first and then the all-important dessert!  Yay for them!

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2011 9:15 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

Wonderful chapter, it is good to see them like this.

Especially as you said after the weekend they have had.



Author's Response:

Yeah they needed a good, down time :)  And they got it.  I guess down's the wrong word. hehe Maybe up?  Anyway, glad you liked it!

See you next week with more!  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2011 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 10 Illegal Contact

Alice was awesome! She had everyone wrapped around her tiny finger. Bella and eddie are official. Yay! And I see comments on the steamy commercial in the future....

Author's Response:

She was, wasn't she?  I had a blast letting her loose on the commercial people.  They are official and yeah, their commercial is coming out at some point ;)   I still have to write that!

Reviewer: joice84 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2011 7:51 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

I started read it just a couple few days and I can´t stop!!! is so romantco and hot!!! is perfect and now I can´t wait to a new update, and see what are the reserves of Bella have, I know I have a lot!!! is to much perfec to be real lol just kidding I loved it!!! sorry my bad English, hope you can understand.

xoxo and come back soon ;D 



Author's Response:

Haha I'm so glad you love it!  I update every Monday so it's not too long between chapters.  It is romantic and hot.  Bella's reservations are normal but not a lot of them to be had.  It may be perfect but they do have issues, they just don't run away from them :)

Thank you so much for taking the time to review :)  See you next week with more!

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2011 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

Favorite color? "Yellow" --reminds me of lemons;~D)) And this chapter was deliciously tasty. 

Thanks for the update. Yes, they are moving fast but they are very in love, what about getting married?



Author's Response:

Haha glad I could bring your favorite color out to play, so to speak! 

Marriage is on the horizon, but no rush.  They're right where they need to be at this point.  :)

Thanks so much for the review.  See you soon!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2011 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 9 First Down

I love em! He is awesome and eddie is funny in all his prettiness!
One day I'm gonna have to come out for a read along, I am always way late, though. :(

Author's Response:

Haha I'm glad you love Em.  He's a blast.  Edward's definitely dreamy. 

Sorry you missed it, but we'll have another one sometime hopefully! :)

Reviewer: ju007 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2011 6:19 AM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

love this story!!!!!



Author's Response:

I'm so glad!  Thank you so much :)

Reviewer: ecsc Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2011 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

awwww Edward is so sweet!!! Him rambling was priceless!!! Thank you that was a nice chapter!! 



Author's Response:

Thank you!  The only time he ever gets truly nervous is with her :)  Gotta love it!  Glad you liked the chapter.  Thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2011 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

That was awesome. I am so happy that they are taking the next step..



Author's Response:

Thank you!  It felt right to me so I went with it ;)  Glad you liked it!  See you next week with more :)

Reviewer: macca_99 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2011 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

Tuesday is now officially my favourite day of the week :)



Author's Response:

Love hearing that!  Happy to make a day in the beginning of the week better for us all!

Reviewer: vickic Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2011 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

aww thats just sweet.  That boys got it bad, real bad!  Looking forward to next chappie...miss Emmett really bad lol.



Author's Response:

Haha that he does!  I'm glad you enjoyed it!  He loves his girl.

Emmett's coming!  Never far away :)  Love that you want him!

Reviewer: FlSunshine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2011 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

great lemon reunion !!!!!  glad they are getting together



Author's Response:

Thank you!  They needed some citrusy times!  They're taking that next step!  Thanks so much for the review :)

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2011 9:12 PM Title: Chapter 30 Going Long

Sweet. "home"

 

 



Author's Response:

:) Home indeed!!!  Love that!

Reviewer: 2journey Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Mar 2011 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 14 Huddle Up

LOVE IT!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I love writing it, and hearing from all of you :)

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 10:49 PM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

All caught up. Can't wait to see what happens next.



Author's Response:

Good!  I'll have more for you tonight :)

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 26 Defensive Pass Interference

OMG! Dan is an ass and thngs are going to be interesting...



Author's Response:

Haha he is and they definitely are :)  Hope you like!

Reviewer: 2journey Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 11 Team Meeting

Love Emmett and Rose... really love all the characters ... Alice, jasper, edward and bella but Emmett is the best!  Should be an award out there for the story that illustrates the most funniest Emmett!  You would sooooo get it.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I love writing them all but Emmett is definitely my favorite :)  Love that you want him to get some loving!  We'll see :)  I think he's nominated for one of those essence awards, I'm nom'd for secondary character but it doesn't say which character.  I assume him though :)  Has to be!

 

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 1:22 PM Title: Chapter 24 Forward Progress

These too are too much. I loved the tattoo that is every guys fantasy.....



Author's Response:

Thank you! :)  One day it'll be real!  It is definitely sexy and QB loved it!

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 23 The Game Winning Drive

That was the best thing ever. I can't believe how funny these characters are. You have found a way to take the characters and put a spin on them that is sooooo believeable that it is perfect.... I think that this chapter has outdone all the others..



Author's Response:

Thank you!  This was definitely one of my favorite chapters.  I'm so happy you're enjoying them along with me :)

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 22 Airing It Out

Lauren and Jess were actually great. I almost cringed when they started but in the end it was really great.



Author's Response:

Glad they could surprise you!  I wanted to write a Lauren and Jess that were likable!

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 4:53 AM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

What are mentors for but to keep you grounded, gotta love Buddy. How is Ted going to take the latest bit of new from Bella?

Ronnie was rather quick on the uptake......“I hope you’ve been icing it.” Always good to have people looking out for you.

Seems like Bella and Edward each have their own mess of people and things to deal with since going public. Glad they have a decent group of individuals surrounding them, keeping them balanced and moving forward.

Looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing this interesting storyline!



Author's Response:

That's just what Buddy did.  I think Ted's going to handle it pretty well all in all, so long as he doesn' hear about the sleepover.

Ronnie's a vet reporter with sharp eyes!

Yes, both of them are having issues, but they have one another and their friends to turn to, happily.

Thanks so much for your comments along the way!  I'll have a new chapter for you tomorrow :)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 4:11 AM Title: The Emmettake: Emmett & the Extinguisher

Emmett is off his rocker..........that was hilarious; seeing ghosts, pretending to be a ghost buster, hosing down his superior. hehehehe. Loved it!



Author's Response:

Em's crazy like a fox.  There's a method to his madness and he's quick on his toes.  Good thing he uses his powers for good, mostly :)  Glad you loved it, such a a fun chapter to write!

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 4:07 AM Title: Chapter 27 Roughing the Passer

Nice right hook! Yea, Bella!

The mental beating Dan took from Edward and his partners in crime was sastisfying, yet a good punch would have been nice to finish him off. The dumpster scene would be rather funny as well.

 

 



Author's Response:

Haha she can take care of herself.

A punch would have been nice but created a lot more problems than they needed, methinks!  No dumpster, but some Emmett...hehee

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 3:37 AM Title: Chapter 26 Defensive Pass Interference

Bella sure knows how to attract unwanted attention!

What did Edward mouth to her as she left the practice field?

Guess I need to get back to reading to find the conclusion to your Cliffie!



Author's Response:

Haha well she's a beautiful woman, so bound to happen.

He said "love you" but it was hard to make out.

At least you don't have to wait!

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 3:35 AM Title: Chapter 20 The Offensive Line

I love Esme...



Author's Response:

I'm so glad!  She's so much fun to write ;)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 3:09 AM Title: Chapter 25 Scrum

Previous chapter:

Sounds like Edward lived up to his half million dollar billing!

Loved the article by Lauren and Jessica, nice to read that these two don't have to be typical bimbos or bitches in a story to enjoy them.

Yipeeeeeee, Victoria is finally gone. Will she try and get back at him for dumping her controlling ass...I guess you answered that in this chapter. Such a childish move giving out his number.

Tommy and Carlilse....two little old ladies who seem to enjoy gossip as much as the trio - Emmett, Jasper and Alice.  I think Alice would do a fabulous job as Edwards publicist.

Chapter 25:

Go Alice, just knew she would be perfect for the job; will she be able to let it go when an actual publicist is found?

That's right momma bear will stip up and take out anyone that threatens her cub....go Esme!

Emmett is truely a piece of work.....programming every butt song into Bella's phone is awesome. He did push Jaspers buttons though. Jaspers observations of Hercules and Zeus were more than funny!

 



Author's Response:

Haha I'd pay it, if I had it of course!

Really like writing a Lauren and Jess that are fun and likable.  They overshare and such but their hearts are in the right place.

Victoria is really gone.  She's only got so much she can do without getting sued to high heaven.

Heh, Carlisle likes to talk, doesn't he?

I think Alice will stay a part of his team, but she'll let someone handle the juggling.

Esme rules in many ways. hehe

It was time for one of them to explode on Emmett, but in true fashion, it was over right after it started.  Boys. hehe 

There are so many butt songs....

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2011 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 19 The Rumor Mill

I'm glad Buddy is okay. He is a piece of work, I a so glad that he loves bella the way he does. It was classic that he threatened Edward.....



Author's Response:

Haha yeah I would never kill off Buddy.  He's a great mentor, friend and father figure.  He had fun threatening Edward too!

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 17 Press Pass

Poor Buddy.... It was so great how Bella told Dan off. I love seeing her as the strong woman she is.



Author's Response:

Yes, Bella can definitely handle that kind of male attention at any time.  She's been there before.  I like that about her too!

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 6:22 AM Title: Chapter 14 Huddle Up

Yeah they confessed.



Author's Response:

didn't take too long!

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 12 Touchdown

I really liked that we heard that from Edward..



Author's Response:

He's good :)  Isn't he?

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 11 Team Meeting

I think that was the funniest thing i have ever read......



Author's Response:

I'm so glad!  Love making you laugh :)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 23 The Game Winning Drive

Emmett and Jasper always seem to up the entertainment level.   Riley was such a good sport; Mrs. Fuller even got her hands on Jasper in the end. lol

Ever the suave and debonair Edward Cullen. Half a million of his own money...wow. Guttsy move Miss Swan.



Author's Response:

Haha I love writing those two crazy boys.  Riley's awesome and Mrs. Fuller needed a grope or two :)

Bella got caught up in the frenzy of betting.  It happens :)

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 10 Illegal Contact

That was soooo good. Alice is the fucking bomb......



Author's Response:

Haha Thank you!  Alice kicked some major butt, didn't she?

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 3:42 AM Title: Chapter 22 Airing It Out

I enjoyed the interview......girly, yes, but the questsions seemed realistic enough to not want to hate Lauren and Jessica to much.

Which team members will Jessica and Lauren be set up with? This charity event may prove to be quite entertaining.



Author's Response:

Haha well they're the gossip girls, so of course it's got a girly slant.  I actually really like Lauren and Jess.  They're not your typical fic bitches, Lauren especially.

Haha You'll see! :)  I had a blast with the auction!

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 3:05 AM Title: Chapter 21 Upon Further Review

Thanks for correcting Ted's erroneous behavior.

How can two semi normal individuals have such strange parents.......were they all products of the 60's free love generation? lol

Let's read some more!



Author's Response:

Haha semi normal?  Can't you see where Bella's filter issues come from now though?  Esme/Carlisle are generally not as open as they were with Bella, but Jasper warned them and they were doing their best to make sure she didn't feel uncomfortable in a bad way :)  Renee is definitely out there, but so much fun to write!

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 9 First Down

I can't wait to see everyone together....



Author's Response:

Oh I love writing them all as a gang together :)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 20 The Offensive Line

Who would have guessed that Esme was all about the sexual inuendo. Can't imagine sitting through a dinner with potential in-laws having this kind of discussion. Then to  top it off.....Carlilse applauds Edward for his smooth ride comment.   Almost wet my pants!

Must get back to the story!



Author's Response:

Hahah There's a reason for what Esme did, you'll see in the next chapter.  They may have had a little warning.  I loved the sexual innuendo.  So much fun!

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 8 Flag On The Play

These last few chapters have been great. I read them on my phone and a unable to review. So I just had to let you know how great they are. Emmett is a hoot I love all the crazy nicknames...

I can't wait to see Alice and Bella in the same room as Tanya it should be good....



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I adore writing Emmett.  He's so much fun!

Alice and Bella definitely handle things quite well :)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 1:35 AM Title: Chapter 19 The Rumor Mill

Buddy is a great mentor; too bad every occupation didn't set us up with an experienced employee to bring us on par a little faster.  Loved Alice's threat of legal action if Ted followed thru with his idiotic idea.

Looking forward to the interview with the Gruesome Twosome! Great name for the gossip queens.

Now Dinner with the parents.



Author's Response:

So very true.  Buddy's the best guy she could work with.  Ted was reacting, of course, without any prior knowledge.  He's not as bad as he seems.

Gruesome Twosome...such fun!

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 12:59 AM Title: Chapter 18 Post Game Interview

I like Edward's take on the whole interview 'play' scene.  Hope Bella's writing is up to Ted's expectations.

Any lingering reporters that spied their exit?

Dinner at the Cullens, here we go!



Author's Response:

Hahah Yeah, his mind was so different from hers.  I had a blast with it.  Very much the porn fantasy come to life, plus he was hugely impressed with his girl's mind.  Love that.

Nope, they're safe, for now!

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Mar 2011 12:19 AM Title: Chapter 17 Press Pass

Need to check for any out takes of this story!

Dan is the quint essential good looking, puffed up ego with enlarged cranium, jack ass! Loved how Bella put him in his place. Nice to see Ronnie playing the protective guardian for Buddy.

Go get your game on Bella! (interview and all) lol



Author's Response:

I've only done one so far and it's attached to the story, chapter 28 as a matter of fact.  You'll see, soon enough :)

Dan is definitely one of your stereotypical male chauvenist reporters, but Bella's used to handling those types.  And she has Ronnie in her corner.

Game definitely on :)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2011 11:46 PM Title: Chapter 16 Game Plan

How Cute is that....waiting in the hall for him. Then again the rewards are worth it!

Edward squirming under the gaze of his mother was palpable. 'Can she read my mind', how many kids have had that exact thought?

Look forward to reading the event where all the girls and their guys get together with the Cullens. Laughs will definetly follow.



Author's Response:

Haha how could she not, after that sexy dedication.

Esme definitely knows her boys.  I'll get the gang altogether soon ;)

Reviewer: Irish_charm Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2011 5:08 AM Title: Chapter 2

That was a really great meeting for both couples.



Author's Response:

Thank you :)  I like how into one another they are from the start!

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2011 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 15 Taking The Field

Thought the boys banter was funny......but Alice leading the conversation with Bella and Rosalie is even better. Glad the girls are becoming thick at theives. Just love your characters!

Only Alice would buy out a sports team store at the stadium. Could you imagine an away game road trip with Alice? You would have every item ever made with the team logo on it. She would be great to tail gate with. lol

 



Author's Response:

Haha I'm glad you enjoyed the gals bonding.  Of course they had to.  Alice and Bella saw that Rose was a little left out and they sought to bring her right into the fold.  Won't be long before they're as tight!

An away game with Alice would definitely be an adventure.  So much fun, how enthusiastic she is without being annoying (at least that's what I was going for).  She'd definitely be great to tailgate with, and she orders awesome food. hehe

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2011 1:14 AM Title: Chapter 14 Huddle Up

Bella's conscious streem of thoughts, or verbal diarrhea as she refers to it, is absolutly fabulous.

Jasper and Emmett calling each other, like women do, to plan an attack on Edward is priceless. I have heard that guys talk about relationship as much or more than women do but these two take the cake. lol

Happy that the 'I Love You's' have made an appearance.

Need to get back to reading. Have I told you that I really, really am enjoying this story. If not, here it is:  I am really, really enjoying this story!



Author's Response:

Haha thank you!  I love her verbal vomit.  It's so much fun.

Jas and Emmett are total girls when it comes to gossiping. I love writing them that way.  And throw in Alice and you know no secret is safe ;)

The I love you's are out in true Bella fashion.

I'm so happy you're enjoying it :)  Thank you for your kind words!

Reviewer: cedward2417 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2011 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

I figured that something was said about Bella by Peppers to piss Edward off that much.  It makes you wonder how much of that kind of stuff really goes on out their on the field.I am totally upset that I am caught up and now have to wait for updates for this awesome fic...*sigh*.



Author's Response:

You're all caught up, but you don't have too long to wait.  I do update every Monday so not long now.  Love how into it you are.

Peppers definitely got to Edward but so did the whole weekend, of course.  He needs a break and I'll give him one :)

Reviewer: 10of15 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2011 1:48 PM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

just found this recently.  Love it!  laughed so much, especially at Emmet's antics.  Can't wait for the next chapter. 



Author's Response:

I'm glad you checked it out and are enjoying it!  I'll have more for you soon.  Em's a true joy to write :)  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: cedward2417 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2011 6:43 AM Title: Chapter 21 Upon Further Review

I couldn't help but LMAO throughout this entire chapter.  However, I am VERY concerned about what Emmett was doing with Bella's cell phone!



Author's Response:

Good!  I love making you laugh ;)  Poor Em, always a suspect *giggles*  We shall see!

Reviewer: cedward2417 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Mar 2011 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 15 Taking The Field

I love this story...i haven't done much in the last 24 hours, however. ;)

At this point I think Bella is scared.  I think it's more than "the bubble" bursting that has her gun shy to go public with their relationship.  I thinks she's afraid  that some possible negative press may make Edward think twice about her and he'll run far far away.  Silly, Bella!



Author's Response:

I'm sure that's part of it, but mostly it's the thought of that eye focused on both of them and all the women and jealousy and everything else weighing down.  She's wrong, of course, and she's not running away, just taking it slow :)

So glad you're still loving it!

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

Yeah, I had a feeling that the one thing to get to E. would be ribbing about Bella. His achilles heel. Let's hope he figures out a way to deal with that before word gets out about his weakness.



Author's Response:

Yeah, definitely, but of course, he had a tough weekend with the Dan situation as well. I think it was all too much for him.  He'll get it under control :)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 12 Touchdown

Wow, not really the time to disengage the filter..........Bella justs lets it fly. Glad that Edward enjoys trying to figure out her scrambled thoughts.

First time together was perfectly written, for as strange as they are while interacting, their bodies seem to meld immediately as one. Well Done!



Author's Response:

Haha she just can't control that filter when he's around.  She wants to, but out it comes.  Lucky for her, he loves her crazy mind!

Glad you liked their first time!  They do have a perfect chemistry together and there are no issues with the physical stuff! :)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 11 Team Meeting

Emmett, Emmett, Emmett, you crack me up!

Liking Rosie's protective side. She make a great allie.

The girls going to the game together sounds like a receipe for giant laughs.

Need to keep reading.....Bella's appetite for hot dogs has not been sated yet!



Author's Response:

Em is my pride and joy.  I have the best time with him. 

Rose is very protective and loyal, much like her man, but a bit scarier on the whole.  She's also kind of shy, which I really like exploring.  Sometimes the prettiest girls have a hard time having real girl friends.

I had fun with them at the game, hopefully you will too!

Haha darn right, hot dogs ahead!

Reviewer: lizutte Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

Damn.... I thought I was lucky enough, that my "slowness" of reading would be rewarded with an update...... put it looks like I wasn't slow enough.

Just to put it out there - and I have yet to read the other reviews - LOVED IT.



Author's Response:

Haha I update every Monday, so you don't have too long to wait :)  Sorry bout that!  I'd be faster if I could but my real work gets in the way, which I highly disapprove of, let me tell you!

I'm so glad you loved it!  Thank you :)  I'll see you next week with more!

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 3:39 PM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

I am glad her boss explained to her that even though she can take care of herself she needs to allow Edward to take care of her. He has that need. He loves her. Bella also needed that pep talk about not giving up. It has only been 1 week. She can't give up her dream because of idiots.



Author's Response:

She knows that, but she's more worried about his career than hers.  She doesn't want to be a distraction, but you note, she never thought of walking away from him.  She wouldn't even consider giving up her dream were it not for him, but he wouldn'tw ant that either :)

Reviewer: bammers Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

OMG I hope thats the last of Dan if not he has a death wish thanks for sharing this a I pray for FB season next year....I am friends with Del Rogers he retired from the 49'rs and he says it doesn't look good at all from who he has talked to but he hopes they will work something out Crossing fingers........



Author's Response:

Yes, that's the last of Dan.  I think it'll get done at some point, just maybe not right away.  That's my hope anyway.

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

ohh good to see Bella is okay.  I do have to say that the football commentary is a little boring, but I have a reason, it is only because I don't understand it and I am Australian.  It would be the same for you is I spoke about Rugby Union or AFL.  But I just skim it and move on.  

But wonderful chapter apart form that. 



Author's Response:

Bella's just fine, always!

Sorry you don't care for the football, but for me, it's a huge part of the story since it's what they both love and work with. 

Thanks for the review, glad you liked everything but that.

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 6:04 AM Title: Chapter 10 Illegal Contact

Once again.....Alice is a force to be reconned with! Assistant Director - lol.

Thanks for giving Edward his balls back so he could send Tonya on her way.

'Girlfrieind', so cute.



Author's Response:

Hahah She is a total blast to write.  She took right over and got things done.

When didn't Edward have his balls? I am confused, but okay!

Girlfriend was adorable, I thought ;)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 5:09 AM Title: Chapter 9 First Down

The shoot will be an interesting event.  Hope Alice is in full force, watch out Tonya.

Can't wait for Alice and Bella to meet Emmett and Rosalie.

Now the count down begins........Friday night will be full of fireworks!



Author's Response:

Haha it was an interesting event!  Alice is definitely in Alice form!

Em and Rose are coming up very soon.

Friday night indeed :)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 8 Flag On The Play

Kickin' it up a notch with lunch deliveries and oh so hot texting, too bad  Tonya has to make and appearence.

I absolutely adore your Alice!



Author's Response:

Haha That I am!  Worry not about Tanya, she's there for a purpose.  Bella's got some insecurities about her and it's best to get rid of them now instead of later.

I'm so glad you like Alice.  I really wanted to write a good one :)

Reviewer: cedward2417 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 3

Awe man, it's a good thing the first chapter has been read otherwise I would really be stressing about now.  Talk about "misunderstanding"!



Author's Response:

Haha No worries! This is about as angsty as this one gets, I promise!

Reviewer: Moltz Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 7 Second Down

The locker room conversation between the three guys was hilarious. They are more like girls during a sleep over. Only thing missing is nail polish and baby doll pj's.

I feel for Bella, can she have anything go her way when it comes to being around Edward. lol  Her verbal diarrhea is more than entertaining, its priceless.



Author's Response:

Haha they are gossipy girls, at least Jasper and Emmett are.  I have the best time with them!

Bella gets so nervous around him that out comes the worst possible things.  He finds it endearing though :)  So glad you like it!

Reviewer: cedward2417 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 1

“Oh, that’s how we’re playing it?”  I arched an eyebrow at him and he smirked yet again.  “Yes, Ms. Swan, I had a very good night.” - that line makes so much more sense once you get to the end of the chapter.  I had my suspicions that they were "together" already when Bella asked, "“Do you want me to rub it?”  because no journalist would be bold enough to ask a quarterback that if they weren't already aquainted. 

But, I knew for sure when Edward said..."They’d take their time, memorize every inch of that delectable little package you present, savor all your flavors, before sliding gently into you and making love to you all night long.  Does that sound about right, Miss Swan?” and Bella thought, "I smiled; remembering a recent night just like that, a night where I’d felt like a princess being worshipped for hours on end." 

I think I'm gonna love this story! ;)



Author's Response:

Thank you for checking it out!  I'm glad you saw my little clues!  Not many did :)  I hope you enjoy how they got to that point and beyond! ;)

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 1:28 AM Title: Chapter 6 Kick Off

Oh, Alice is a hoot........ tears streaming down my face with laughter.

Absolutely love Bella's inner monologue. What no filter? lol

The dinner was cute; two strange strangers who just happened to find each other. Poetic.

Must read more.



Author's Response:

Haha Thank you!  Alice is so much fun to write!  And I love making you laugh!

Bella's filter doesn't work around Edward and well, you'll see, she comes by it honestly!

Loved their first date!  So adorable together.

Thanks again!

 

Reviewer: Moltz Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2011 12:39 AM Title: Chapter 5 Game On

My first review for this story......can't remember where the recommendation came from. but glad I book marked it.

Your characters are great, not only do they have some depth but your setting gives way to delightful banter and humorous shinanigans.

The weight room scene was priceless, laughed so hard I fell off my chair!

Must get back to the story.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm glad you decided to check it out and are enjoying it!

I love each and every one of my characters which makes it a joy to write them.  So glad you're having fun with them too!

I love the 3 boys together.  They are so great :)

Thanks for the review!  I'm glad you like it!

Reviewer: Julz04 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2011 4:34 PM Title: Chapter 4

I'm an angst whore but I like happy too, so.  I like my visual of Edward.  The manip in your banner is pretty good, and I hope you don't mind me saying, I like your Bella.  She's very pretty.  (don't know if that was your request or not).  Got to go but look forward to catching up on your story later. 



Author's Response:

Thank you!  There will be issues here and there, I just don't intend to have them run away from one another because of them.  In my real life, couples talk about their problems and that's what'll happen here.  I'm trying to make an unreal situation feel real, I guess. 

That Bella is Olivia Wilde, who coincidentally presented with Rob at the Golden Globes which gave me much glee since it was like the banner coming to life in a way.  Glad you like her!  Yes, I wanted an older Bella, I don't see KStew as this Bella.

Thanks for the reviews and I look forward to seeing what you think as you go!

Reviewer: Julz04 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2011 3:38 PM Title: Chapter 3

Nah, I like the angst.  Makes it interesting. 



Author's Response:

Haha there's some drama ahead but no real angst I'm afraid!

Reviewer: Julz04 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2011 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 2

So, he likes meeting her.  I half way expected him to be a stuck up ass.  I'm waiting for her to blow his socks off lol!



Author's Response:

haha nope, this Edward isn't stuck up.  Now my Edward in a couple other stories...hehe 

Reviewer: Julz04 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2011 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 1

Hot start.  Took me forever to catch on that they already knew each other.  I wondered why she would have unprotected sex with a guy she just met.  ;D

Do you already know these stats or do you have to research your butt off to sound so natural. 

Really enjoying the story.  (I'm already on chapter two.  I just can't review on my phone and came back.  I know you authors love your reviews :)

 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Glad the twist could surprise you a bit!   There were little clues but yeah, it was pretty hidden.

I know the stats, or well, I make them up.  I know the game very well, it's one of my passions!

I'm glad you're liking it so far!  I do love reviews and reply to all of them, as you will see :)  Thanks so much for reading!

Reviewer: team rob Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2011 12:06 PM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

:)

read this last night at work but then the phone died...

love the story and your knowledge and use of football...

good advice from buddy



Author's Response:

Ahh well thank you for coming back to review!  I'm so glad you love it and my football.  I love writing the game into the chapters now and then!

Buddy definitely was right and knew what Bella needed to hear, which is why she went with calling him.

Thanks for the review and I'll see you next week!

 

Reviewer: amber133 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2011 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

awww, such a cute chapter!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you, I"m glad you liked it!  I'll have more for you soon, including a lemon!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Mar 2011 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible

So good! Sweet & so hot. sigh.. I need a shower LOL

 



Author's Response:

Haha so glad you liked it!  I'll have more for you very soon that will hopefully require another shower!  haha Thanks for the review!

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