Date: 06 Dec 2010 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 6: Bella - DAY 3 PART B
thanks
Date: 06 Dec 2010 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 5: James - DAY 3 PART A
normal prick as always - love it
thanks
Date: 06 Dec 2010 2:39 AM Title: Chapter 4: Bella - DAY 3 PART A
thanks
Date: 06 Dec 2010 2:19 AM Title: Chapter 3: Bella - DAY 2 PART B
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Date: 06 Dec 2010 2:02 AM Title: Chapter 2: Bella - DAY 2 PART A
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Date: 06 Dec 2010 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
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[Report This]Date: 05 Dec 2010 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 78
thatw as an awsome story loved it.so glad james got what was coming to him he deserved everything he got.glad victoria got through it all n ended up happy with her baby.n really glad that bella got her happy ending with edward n the life she deserves.
Date: 03 Dec 2010 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 71 - James: Day 23 and 24
SOMETHING... There, I said it. You know, that was actually pretty nice to say ;D
So now's Laurent dead... SWEET! Couldn't stand the fucker. I do hate James more than him though. A plus for you guys 'bout the little cannon things.
I've started reading yesterday and I'm almost finished! Can't wait for the grand finale! (Or for the grand orgie!) (Right? I mean, you guys are going to give me one, right?) (Pwease with a chocolate covered strawberry on top?)
My girlfriend and I really like this. We're getting some ideas out of it, too. Who knew that a spanking on your uhh... privates... could be THAT satisfying?
Purry love,
lovebird17
Date: 02 Dec 2010 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 32: James - DAY 12 PART B
That's just f*ckin creepy...
Date: 22 Nov 2010 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
Where to begin ??? I wasn't sure at first when I began to read this story ... because can I be serious, this was torture - and no woman, even deep in love would have accepted it the way Bella did. But the writing was good and the plot just great ... I couldn't stop . And then I kept reading, and enjoyed it very much.
Thanks for sharing.
Sam
Date: 21 Nov 2010 9:03 PM Title: Chapter 7: James - DAY 3 PART B
amazing writing ! can't stop reading ! x
Date: 13 Nov 2010 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 78
For the love of GOD!!!! Please tell me there's going to be a sequel. I absolutely love this story. I can't believe how much I cried while reading it. Truly a wonderfully written piece of work. I even have it as a 'Recommended Reading' on my website.
Amazing story and I hope there's more to come.
Author's Response:
Thank you.. and never say never... we are not sure, we are concentrating on Volturi Order at the moment.. and one of our original stories has a small element of this story in it.. but yeah never say never.
I am glad you like it..
thank you for your kind review
TSO xxx
[Report This]Date: 11 Nov 2010 1:51 AM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
wow, I love this story. You are an amazing writer.
Date: 09 Nov 2010 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 78
f**ing amazin!! wow i'm impresed i never though this could be so good :P thanks for writting it and posting i loved it a reaaaal lot:D
Date: 08 Nov 2010 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 23: James - DAY 8 PART B
shesh!! i'm so f.... pissed with jams!! wth? i dont really like Victoria usually but here she's cute.. what i canno understand is how someone meaning jams can expect her to obey him when he hasn't asked for it and 2 how can he collar her when he hasnt explained what he is doing i just really hope that carlisle will realize this soon.. and one other thing that he want her (bella) to suffer more!?!? put HIM under the cane let's see what happens:P anyways awesome.. coundt stop reading yesterday and 2day will be the same.
hope reading more from you in the volturis.. :P take care!!
Date: 07 Nov 2010 11:28 AM Title: Chapter 78
wow this is a very good story thanks
jo
Date: 04 Nov 2010 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 78
wow what an awesome story my fave are of course the edward and bella moments :)
jules
Date: 03 Nov 2010 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 78
thanks for the story it was a wild ride!
Date: 03 Nov 2010 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 65: James DAY 22
knew it lauren you b$tch!! james is out... watch out
Date: 03 Nov 2010 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 63: Edward DAY 21 & 22
poor bella but jasper is a good guy he thought you wanted to be there and wouldn't have done any of that if he had known. they are right carlislie need to get in some kind of trouble for this.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 60: Rose's Retribution DAY 21
i still love your rose!!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 11:45 PM Title: Chapter 59: Carlisle DAY 20 & 21
i love you rose!!!!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 8:22 PM Title: Chapter 57: James DAY 20 PART C
karma james karma..........i love you rose i love you emmett!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 55: Bella DAY 20 PART B
ok i have been snarkie i admit but they deserved it....
Date: 02 Nov 2010 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 54: Carlisle DAY 20 PART A
ok yeah!! i take back the prick comment......maybe. it was nice to get is POV to see he isn't as evil as we think he is.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 53: Edward DAY 20 PART B
ok thank for for someone who actually used there real head and not ther other head!!! dam thank god for emmett and rose.... they best people int he story. Not sure trust carlislie that much that was a sudden turn around. He is still jealous and wants edward!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 46: Bella DAY 17 PART B
i am soooo sick of your weak ass bella it makes me vomit in my throat. how can someone have no courage or backbone to stick up for themselves at all it make me SICK!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 45: Edward DAY 17 PART A
carlislie is the biggest prick and as in the interview he doesn't give a dam about bella he just wants edward for himself. PRICK!! and now edward has joind the stupid club along with bella and carlislie he is not president yet but gaining.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 7:02 PM Title: Chapter 40: Bella DAY 16 PART B
stupid bitch it was her turn to stand up and say and now she will be tortured and multilated i really don't think i am going to be able to finish WHY would you make her soooo stupid!!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 39: Edward DAY 16 PART A
what a prick carlislie is he is sooo jealous he want edward to himself.. butt head i don't trust him at all... he won't figure out james...
Date: 02 Nov 2010 6:52 PM Title: Chapter 38: James DAY 16 PART A
please let carlislie put aside his jealousy and see what james reallyis i really can't take his stupidity for very much longer.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 37: Bella DAY 16 PART A
jealousy esme and him want edward and he knows edward likes her he did that on purpose... .poor bella... she can't be with james!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 1:05 PM Title: Chapter 34: Bella - Day 14
no bella you want edward repeat and repeat until you believe!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:44 PM Title: Chapter 31: Bella - DAY 12 PART B
that's right bella you want edward not james!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 3:50 AM Title: Chapter 29: James - DAY 12 PART A
ok reneee don't believe him try to find bella please expose this prick for what he is
Date: 02 Nov 2010 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 28: Bella - DAY 12 PART A
esme a little jealous... sorry he is not yours..... he will be bellas hahahaha!! mike i hope edward catches you and does some damage!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 3:39 AM Title: Chapter 27: Edward - DAY 11
oh jasper you are making my girl parts shiver...... i am so jealous of alice to have you and edward!! agian edward repeat after me you must have bella and no one else repeat.....
Date: 02 Nov 2010 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 26: James - DAY 11
you only want victoria you only want victoria..... repeat repeat
Date: 02 Nov 2010 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 25: Bella - DAY 11
hint hint bella not thinking of james don't need james keep saying it. i hope they are smart enough to figure out james and help bella... i need to submit so i can see what will happen...haha
Date: 02 Nov 2010 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 24: Edward - DAY8 PART B
hope he doesn't get in trouble for it. i love me some edward. wake up bella you should love you some edward too
Date: 02 Nov 2010 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 22: Bella - DAY 8 PART B
ok bella let me explain it to you again. you do not want james you want edward... how did he make you feel tonght? oh you say the best you have ever felt....hint hint..... i know what i am talking about believe me....
Date: 02 Nov 2010 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 21: Edward - DAY 8 PART A
oh edward..... you and esme not what i want you and bella is want i want. i guess i should submit so i can read some more.....
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:55 AM Title: Chapter 20: James - DAY 8 PART A
come on carlislie figure it out you can do it use that dom brain for something other than dominating!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 19: Bella - DAY 9 PART A
ok i am getting a little preturb with this when are the going to realize she didn't agree to this and didn't talk to james about it.... so dumb if they are professionals why are they so dumb. ok i now have to read about dumb ass bella and dumb ass school i am so unhappy!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:46 AM Title: Chapter 18: Edward - DAY 7 PART B
edward you big stud!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 17: James - DAY 7
yuk what a f$ck head he is.... doesn't carlislie know she didn't agree to this! he seems like a smart man i guess he isn't. i hope they find out what a butt hole jame is and soon.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 16: Carlisle - DAY 7
carlislie you big stud!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 15: Edward - DAY 7 PART A
ok just skip james and just give me edward... just edward!!!
ok i just have to laugh like i did when i was reading another d/s story the button submit just makes me laught out loud hard!! i push it and i submit..... hahahaaa ok i must "submit" my review
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:12 AM Title: Chapter 14: Bella - DAY 7
james is behind that i know it sick asshole he is training her to be a slave. you are a stupid stupid girl!!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 13: James - DAY 6
no you didn't repeat it correctly ONLY victoria NOTbella. you don't learn correctly james. i hope carlislie gets pissed at you!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 1:43 AM Title: Chapter 11: James - DAY 5
that's right james you want victoria not bella say it for me again... you want victoria not bella
Date: 02 Nov 2010 1:13 AM Title: Chapter 8: Bella - DAYS 3 & 4
bella repeat after me no james no james butthead butthead stop thinking of him you dumb butt
Date: 02 Nov 2010 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 7: James - DAY 3 PART B
ok bella repeat after me james is a butthole, a cheater, a sicko, and you are STUPID!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:50 AM Title: Chapter 5: James - DAY 3 PART A
bella the stupid on how could you like anyone like james i hope you get your head out of ass when it comes to him,....you are sooo dumb
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:46 AM Title: Chapter 4: Bella - DAY 3 PART A
gee bella you need to suck it better you big loser!!!! jasper is sooo disappointed in you ... stupid heffer! i am sure emmett and rose are going to get a go with her too,...
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:36 AM Title: Chapter 3: Bella - DAY 2 PART B
what's edward doing there... she really needs to ditch james.... come on bella he is a big huge as$hole!!!! figure it out!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:27 AM Title: Chapter 2: Bella - DAY 2 PART A
again stupid bella.... get the hint that james is an as#hole? hello i hat studpid woman.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:19 AM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
you are sooo stupid... i don't think i can live through a stupid bella
Date: 30 Oct 2010 2:07 AM Title: Chapter 10: Bella - DAY 5
Having a different idea about james and a homecoming! As in gonna slit his neck from ear to ear for leaving me to these vile nasty strangers!! Are we to imagime that as many people these animals expose themselves to that they have no std's not aid's no herpes? Really! I would never expect a man that would want me to have me exposed to so many ways to have any aray of nasty rotting illnesses. No protection for anyone , no thought for pregnancy?? Please.. Not happening . Not even in this world . At least I would have test or be tested for all such and be known to be on some form of birth control. have a nice day!!!
Date: 28 Oct 2010 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 8: Bella - DAYS 3 & 4
Charlisle the man you love to hate!! Damn , what a job.. I see a bad moon a rising..Bella and Eddie will cause a fuss, bet ya..
Date: 28 Oct 2010 2:02 AM Title: Chapter 6: Bella - DAY 3 PART B
Poor Edaward.. I figured that was him in the eating area.. I do and I don't see the point in controling the need to release yourself. Yes learn control, but to what end??Tried to fathom the possibality of such , but what's the whole activity for except to have a sexual release??
[Report This]Date: 27 Oct 2010 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
(gulp)
Date: 22 Oct 2010 7:14 AM Title: Chapter 78
Omg, I can't believe it's over. I absolutely LOVED the story! Definitely one of my all-time favourite D/s stories. Dom Edward = HOT!!
The ending was amazing but I wouldn't mind reading an outtake (or more) on bella and edward's sexcapades.
Keep it coming and thanks for writing the story! :)
Date: 18 Oct 2010 8:22 AM Title: Chapter 78
bloody brilliant story! more!!! please as their relationship developments, desperate here!!
Date: 13 Oct 2010 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 71 - James: Day 23 and 24
wow.... greatuse of that microchip in the story line,
Date: 12 Oct 2010 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 57: James DAY 20 PART C
Omg, Finally, he gets his. this is the one punishment im looking forward too. the cat of nines will work just fine on him. uggh i hate james and every other man like him out there who does this to women, well written.
Date: 11 Oct 2010 1:33 PM Title: Interview with the Master
this was so funny. ha ha
Date: 11 Oct 2010 6:14 AM Title: Chapter 78
sniff sniff I can't believe it's over !!!
WTF we need an outtake - I mean 1 scene in the playroom where it's consentual wouldn't kill ya would it? heheh
Date: 11 Oct 2010 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 32: James - DAY 12 PART B
james is evil. loved it when charlie called him a wanker, too too true. what an ass.
Date: 10 Oct 2010 4:48 AM Title: Chapter 22: Bella - DAY 8 PART B
this was a great chapter. this story is fantastic but very intense as a large so this helped bring me down from the high. love, love, love this story. way diferent take on these wonderful characters, shocking but i cant turn away.
Date: 09 Oct 2010 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 4: Bella - DAY 3 PART A
This is my first fanfic on this site and now i see what all the hoopla is about, very, very and i mean very sexy, this is a different take and yeah i cant turn away like its an accident. well written and yeah did i say very sexy. You ladies can write some yummies tough i have to say Jasper could have been more polite and said that more quiet so as to not make her feel ashamed. those damn men.... love em but damn....
Date: 28 Sep 2010 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 78
That was a completely brilliant way to end this story though I wish I had more of this Edward and Bella. I mean it-amazing ending.
[Report This]Date: 23 Sep 2010 11:17 AM Title: Chapter 78
I have to say WOW!...just WOW! It has been a very entertaining ride through a wonderful, fabulous, flawed school. Hmm can you get me in there...LOL...Just wanted to let you guys know that you have an awsome fic here. I am kinda confused as to the last a/n notes though. Is there going to be more or not.
Anyways the only thing I could think to tell you to improve would to be to double space your paragraphs. It would make it incredibly easier to read. Some of the chapters were like this and some were not. I think it just helps alot and would have loved it if every chapter was written this way.
Thanks for the awsome ride. Can't wait to see if you have more stories. And if you have a sequel or are thinking about it I would love to read it!
Author's Response:
LOL glad you enjoyed it. With the double spacing you have to apologise! We pretty much copied and pasted it in a rush as we had so many chapters to put on here after it got taken down from FF.net. sorry about that! We are writing another fic called Volturi Order, you should check that out. And is there going to be anymore of this? I am not sure. Maybe... we keep changing our minds :) When life calms down more we might get the urge so never say never :)
Date: 14 Sep 2010 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
I love this!
Date: 09 Sep 2010 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 75 - Bella
Nicely done ladies. Thanks for the fun read and for James getting his come uppins.
Author's Response:
HE HE HE.. I love that you read it... now.. go find some other good ones... If you need a few recs let me know...We have another on in the works.. It is about a cult..HAHAHAH.. Thanks for reading.
Date: 06 Sep 2010 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 78
Wow, I mean... wow! I've spent the last 3 days putting everything off to read this story. I almost abandoned it several times getting frustrated that Bella wouldn't say something. I'm glad I stuck with it becuase the end was worth it. Great details, the complexity kept me on my toes! You took a wonderfully long time to build, a beautifully long to to bring it around but such a short time with the happily ever after. My only wish is that this story didn't end so soon. I sooo wanted to see Edward & Bella have a HEA!
Author's Response:
We are writing the original version of it.. it will be very different but similar in circumstances. (Should not be as frustrating this next time around too LOL I am changing a little how I did that..) We had a lot going on with the site at the time so I needed to end it.. I have had a few requests to extend.. and Although I know what I would write I am going to save the ideas for the original version. :)
So next year it should be on sale through our publishing house. :)
Thanks for reading..
TSO
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 10:32 AM Title: Chapter 14: Bella - DAY 7
The St. Andrews Cross is so much fun (oops, you didn't hear me say that)
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 10:22 AM Title: Chapter 13: James - DAY 6
James truly is a villian, isn't he? insinuous bastard
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 10:12 AM Title: Chapter 12: Bella - DAY 6
*scratches head* I think Roslie is wierd
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 10:04 AM Title: Chapter 11: James - DAY 5
CHEATER, just had to say it
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 9:55 AM Title: Chapter 10: Bella - DAY 5
It's interesting, watching this forced submission you have created from Bella, she wants this, but she doesn't want to want this.
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 9:46 AM Title: Chapter 9: James - DAY 4
James is an evil bastard
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 8: Bella - DAYS 3 & 4
I'm going to say it just once, Bella's screwed, literally
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 7: James - DAY 3 PART B
Poor James, NOT
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 9:20 AM Title: Chapter 6: Bella - DAY 3 PART B
I'd say it was Stockholme Syndrome, but that isn't it, Bella's just a natural masochist
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 9:13 AM Title: Chapter 5: James - DAY 3 PART A
James is an ass, just saying
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 9:06 AM Title: Chapter 4: Bella - DAY 3 PART A
I say again, POOR BELLA. Evil Jasper
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 8:26 AM Title: Chapter 3: Bella - DAY 2 PART B
*thinks to myself* poor Bella
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 2: Bella - DAY 2 PART A
It is interesting reading how you wrote this story. I don't know how I agree with this line of thought as BDSM is supposed to be about trust and the desire from both sides, but well done nonetheless
[Report This]Date: 02 Sep 2010 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
Well done on the chapter, this is an interesting take on BDSM
Date: 25 Aug 2010 7:47 AM Title: Chapter 32: James - DAY 12 PART B
So, can you really chip someone? I'm sure the technology exists, but is it used on people?? I think it's so cool that you used it in this fic.
This is really a great fic, I'm down for it... don't know if it's finished or not, but I'll be reading it until it's complete.
Thanks for writing.
Author's Response:
LOL oh yeah it is finished.. I am glad you are enjoying it.. I am currently writing an original version of it.. which is way better.. but you have to unfortunetly wait for that one :)
Date: 25 Aug 2010 6:10 AM Title: Chapter 29: James - DAY 12 PART A
I don't usually comment on fics when I start reading them and there are still so many chapters to read, but I just have to say at this point that you've developed a really pathological character in James, he's really quite frightening. On the flip side, I love your version of Edward, so far he's been so caring and nurturing with Bella, it's really cool. Sure hope when I get to the end of this fic that B and E are together. I'm sure they are, or this story would be rather pointless. One other thing, you don't seem to make much use of the various implements that are typically used in the BDSM world... although I like what you've written a lot, your portrayal does seem sort of vanilla for that culture.
Anyway, love the fic... thanks for writing...
Date: 20 Aug 2010 5:07 PM Title: Chapter 78
I loved this story. It made me cried, laugh and go all goey with love for our Bella & our Edwardone of my fav D/s stories i have ever read. Keep up your wonderful work!!!
[Report This]Date: 18 Aug 2010 6:36 AM Title: Chapter 78
I am so bad I have waited till the end to review (maybe I need to be punished lol) I never thought this sort of story would have entralled me so much I just loved it well done.
Date: 18 Aug 2010 2:48 AM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
I just remembered that Victoria has the microchip. So I guess that James is going to be a "tracker" now.
I feel weird that I am kind of enjoying the story. Does that say something about me?
[Report This]Date: 18 Aug 2010 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 76
OMG that was so great. I tihnk it would be great to write a story just about James' experiance with Aro. That would be sometihng i would die to read. :)
Date: 16 Aug 2010 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 78
This was an amazing story. You both did such a wonderful job with it. I loved all the aspects. The only thing that I would have changed is the repetition in the POVs. I know that it was important to see the other person's POV, but I found myself skipping over a portion of that to get to the new stuff. I plan on checking out your other stories also. I love TWCS. I found a lot of great stories here.
Date: 15 Aug 2010 1:41 PM Title: Chapter 22: Bella - DAY 8 PART B
Ok, I haven't reviewed until now because I haven't wanted to take the time before going on to the next chapter. This story is freaking awesome! This is my favorite chapter so far. Edward was so sweet to her, that I cried. When are they going to figure out that she didn't consent to this. James is a giant asshole. I think that Edward is going to figure it out. I'm surprised Carlisle hasn't yet. Great job. Can't wait to read on. I am so glad the story is already complete so I don't have to wait for updates. Lucky me.
Date: 12 Aug 2010 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 64: Bella DAY 22
Enjoyed it. I hope that Jacob is able to help and won't be a pain in the butt. :)
[Report This]Date: 12 Aug 2010 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 78
THIS WAS AN ABSOLUTELY GREAT STORY. I LOVED IT!!
Author's Response:
Awww thank you We are glad you enjoyed it :)