Great chapter... I think it has Edward thinking....

Hmm... What's Edward have in mind??? :)

Maybe Edward does have a chance to really be different and get to know Bella :)

I am so glad that Edward came to save Bella.  I can believe he beat him up, though.  James will take that out on Bella.  Can't Edward take Bella home with him now???

Poor, poor Bella :(  Is there any chance that Edward could be a nice guy???

Who will save Bella :(  They are such pigs.  I feel Bella's hate!!

She has to go through a whole year of this???  I can't believe Vicki went along with this!!

Can't she run away??????

What happened to the special guardians set up to Bella through the lawyer??  Did she fall through the cracks??

FOR THE LOVE OF GOD.....SHE FINALLY GOT HER MOUTH TO WORK & TELLEDWARD WHAT HIS FATHER HAS PLANNED FOR HER....TO SODOMIZE HER.

THIS has been one of the hardest stories I have ever read. I've not skipped any chapters....I've read it all....& I can not believe the gall of Carlisle & how he has raised his sons' & then buying them wives AFTER they have been trained to satisify them sexually !!!!!

I just about took up biting my nails again in this chapter. It racked my last nerve.

Well, I'm off to read the rest.'

Thanks muches for sharing your story with me.

Jamie Crabtree (Messenger)

Amazing! I love your writing style and can't believe you haven't been published sooner. I hope you are planning on finding a way to put this story to print; your world is too dark and beautiful not to share. I would be honored to follow you as you fulfill your plan to tell the backstory of 'Esme' and 'Renee', as well as any other characters you'd like to tell us about. Only request is that one femme fatale manage to kill her 'trainer' & escape, only to find out how truly encompassing is the program. I think the idea was set here, but one could only actually understand it through living

Well this is the second time I've read this story and in the furture I'll read it again, and again, and again... It was so beautiful and heartbreaking. Definitely one of my favorites. 

I finally finished!  I know I said I'd flounce but I've never done that with a story. I just didn't know how to do it.  I started at the end and made my way back and skipped the gruesome details.  It worked.  I'm glad you gave Bella time to process.  It wouldn't make sense for her to marry Edward before she healed herself.  I think though that a future take with Edward and how he continues to heal as he experiences fatherhood and the challenges of being in a "normal" family might be interesting to explore.  I'm also glad you touched on Esme and the potential to blame her for not doing enough.  You didn't exactly absolve her completely but giving us the perspective that Renee never really "got away" either.  She was enjoying artificial freedom.  They were both imprisoned except one knew she was and the other didn't. Evil Carlisles are always difficult for me because Canon Carlisle's compassion and his search for atonement was so strong and ingrained in the Twi series that it's hard to see that name associated with evil.  It's like when someone uses James or Tanya or Victoria as characters, I can almost hear the dun dun dun in the background.  But all the characters in this story were difficult to process. (I mean, while emotionally I wouldn't want Jasper, Emmett and Edward to be serve jail time because of their part in human traficking, justice still wasn't served.  They got away with it and even ended up benefiting from their crimes.). I can't say I "enjoyed" the story but I do think it's provocative.  I certainly won't forget it. Thanks for sharing and I will check out your other stories.

After seeing TPW mentioned on FB I thought I would check it out I'm glad I did I really liked the story. Glad you wrote it dark as it was I enjoyed it. Thanks :) 

Ladies. I just reread your story again. Still so dark yet good. Miss your writing. Take care. 

Nooooooo :('

lol, in a way it was, but I loved every minute of it.

Thanks.

This left me completely sobbing.

But Edward knew what he had to do.

He has done it once. He knew from Japser too.

Carlisle or Marucs is who I fear, but for the love of God I hope it is Edward.

I sobbed my way through this chapter.

I think I have just fallen in love with Edward. He has just proved that he can keep his word to Bella and that he will do anything to keep her safe, although I understand why she can't fully forgive him just yet.

At least he is talking it through with her now.

Hopefully they can get through it.

I just hope he can keep Carlisle's Edward at bay for Bella, cause Carlisle will use Marcus as Demitri to get to him.

This is coming to the part I am dreading.

Please Edward stand up to him.

I have to say, I have read some Carlisle's that I hate, but this one tops the list.

Oh no,

If Carlisle finds out Bella is no way safe alone again.

Esp now Demitri is coming.

I wonder if he has made a start at voiding the papers.

I am sure he has something up his sleeve.

Oh god, I am not liking where this could go.

I really, really hate Carlisle right now.

I hope that this would put a spanner in the works for Carlisle plans, but I am not so sure.

He needs to remember what he said, you would do anything for the one you loved, and that is exactly what Edward will do.

Carlisle makes me sick, I want to tie him up, chop of his dick and balls slowly and chock him with them.

Yeah I knew Embry had something to do with this.

Poor Bella, she it doesn't look like she will ever be free from Carlisle.

She so needs to trust Edward, before Carisle tries anything.

I don't think it is going to be that easy, but this chapter brought me misty eyed.

It was just to presious.

Yeah, it is going to take time for both of them.

But there is hope.

I am still dreading when they go home though.

Oh Edward!!! I have a big smile right now.

But I am dreading them going back.

I think that maybe Jasper and Emmett may come in even more handy now, on how they balance it all out.

I'm glad she told him...now Carlisle better not get ahold of her :/

Wow.

I know one person that wont be happy, but loads that will be very very happy.

Bella seemd to push the right buttons here.

God, that had me sobbing.

Two down, one to go, but he seemed to be thinking about it for a while.

I am glad Esme has never given up hope.

She has been to hell and back, I am also glad that she has been there for Rose, Alice and Bella.

Oh that was crafty.

Every chatper I HATE Carlisle even more.

I just want to shake Edward, that voice is getting to him. I can't wait till they move out. Will Carlisle manage to get Bella on her own before this.

Wow, that came rather sooner than expected.

Now he needs to put it into practice, but with out Carlisle finding out.

Will it be that easy????

I think he will still stuggle, Carlisle will still be there in his ear.

I can only imagine what Edward will do if he finds out about Carlisle, which I hope does happen.

Oh dear. Is there any hope for Edward??? It really doesn't look like it at the moment.

But I blame Carlisle, like Jasper said, it does appear he was much harder or Edward.

He had some shocking moments in the club, can he put them all together and finally make some sense of them.

Really not liking Carlisle.

So he hasn't given up on the idea of having Bella.

Oh Edward, I really wish you would listen to Maddie and your brothers.

I can see it getting worse in a sense before it gets better for Bella.

Wow I'm not sure how I feel about Edward right now...

Wow I never thought Charlie would be written this way...it's definitely different. :( poor Bella....

Yeah, to tell you you need to do something about Bella's behaviour.

I do feel for Edward right now. He has been told this is the right thing to do and has thought that his brothers do the same.

He is kind of having the carpet riped from under him in a way.

His brothers and a patients relatives telling him on thingm the he has Carlisle in the other ear.

I hope Jasper is right and he figures it out it time.

I practically wanted to bang their heads together in this chapter, both thinking the same of the other.

Glad the girls are there to help her through it.

I am sure Emmett and Jasper will work wonders with Edward over time.

I do hope that Carlisle is no longer interested npw that someone else have volated her, I hope that puts him off.

Maybe he is just waiting, who knows.

Looking forward to seeing how this will progress between them all.

Uh oh, looks like you have broken your promise again Edward.

Whats the betting this whole thing was conducted between James and Charlie.

Ok, so I almost cried in BPOV, I did with Edward reclling the events.

My heart broke.

I think Carlisle is delibratly pushing his buttons, part of me thinks he wants Bella to fail, so that he may be able to get his hands on her and 'teach' her.

Well, she has Rose, Alice and Esme now to help.

Yeah, I am not trusting Carlisle.

Yeah, not liking Carlisle just right now.

But then maybe he is more sus of James, and was hoping to prove that he has popped her cherry.

Edward is not too bad at the moment, but I think when he starts the training he may get worse.

He very much wants perfect.

He gets more brownie points for dealing with Tanya and putting her in her place.

I liked getting a few snippits into Edwards head.

I so hope James gets his, and I sure hope he is found out.

It appears that James and Edward do not get on.

Not sure that is a good thing or not.

These people are sick.

Not too sure on Edward yet, it is how he has been brought up.

So Carlisle is preping Edward, as he said he was not ready yet.

It is a shame that they know no better.

I do wonder if the accident was not such an accident, or was the next one Charlie got set as next in line for Edward???

I refuse to skip.

It is so wrong on so many levels.

But credit to you writing, you capture it perfectly.

Wow, yeah, slightly hooked.

Poor Bella.

I have to say, I know you are covering a serious topic, but it makes a change to read an evil Charlie.

I have a feeling seeing she has ended up with Charlie and James that the Lawyer was somehow involved with them.

Already put some in my favorites!

Author's Response:

Thank you. I hope you enjoy.

well I officially dislke this edward along with all the other characters. sigh.

have to keep reading to know what happens next