Date: 30 Apr 2010 3:54 AM Title: Conundrum
lucky for her she ran into Esme in the powder room.
Angel
Date: 30 Apr 2010 3:54 AM Title: Chaotic Days and Lonely Nights
Again, fantastic writting
Date: 30 Apr 2010 3:49 AM Title: Secretive Provisions
Beautiful chapter
You are an excellant writter
Date: 30 Apr 2010 3:44 AM Title: Savoring Every Moment
Excellant story
I was waiting for it to be updated on Twilight - glad it is here
Date: 30 Apr 2010 3:11 AM Title: Shaking Off The Dust and Looking To The Future
I love this! So different the other stories.
Angel
Date: 30 Apr 2010 2:36 AM Title: The Perfect Beginning
I was looking for something to read and you had just updated so I decided to start reading tonight only to find that the story was completed. I really enjoyed the first chapter! I can not believe that I have not read this yet....what the hell was wrong with me!
Angel
Author's Response:
LOLOL..I hope you like it. I just completed it last night. Your lucky...you won't have to wait a few months for the return :D
Date: 29 Apr 2010 11:09 PM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
Great ending! You wrote a beautiful story and I loved it! You are truly a blessed writer and I cant wait to read your new story!
Date: 29 Apr 2010 5:39 PM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
what a great story, and a fitting ending!! It's sometimes hard to picture B&E as 40 somethings, but you've done it well here, and the children sound like they would have been lovely individuals. Kudos on this story, and I await an update on Sovereign Fate!! :)
Date: 29 Apr 2010 7:00 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
Thanks for writing. Love this story.
Date: 29 Apr 2010 5:45 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
This was another great chapter that gave this story the perfect ending. My favorite line of the whole story came in this chapter "You're old now, why don't you act like it"...PRICELESS. Those of us with teenage children and a great love for our spouse can relate.
So sad to see another story come to and end. I will be eagerly awaiting your next story while I spend my days reading SF and re-reading FDKK AND BTI.
Thanks for giving us the pleasure to share in the worlds you create for our six favorite characters. You are awesome.
Date: 29 Apr 2010 5:36 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
So sad this is over, but what a great story and journey you took us on with this one. It was full of love and hope. The ending was just perfect, and thanks for giving us a glimpse into their happy lives down the road. The military wives back in those days were truly something else. These days it's not much different. My heart is will all fellow military families. I can't wait to see where you'll take us next. Thank you for sharing your talent with the rest of us.
Date: 29 Apr 2010 4:09 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
Thank you again for such a beautiful story. Happy to know that the "old timers" were still gettin' it on!
Date: 29 Apr 2010 3:48 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
That was beautiful... and I'm crying! I started to bawl when you spoke of Esme dying, and then continued until the end. Thanks so much for the lovely story!
Date: 29 Apr 2010 3:34 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
Beautifully done, Sweets!
Lovely indeed...
Kathie
Date: 29 Apr 2010 2:53 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
this is so bittersweet. this is one of my favorite stories and i'm sad to see it end. i'm happy Cherie is getting married. sad to hear that Esme and Carlisle died (i actually teared up). random thought- my Pop Pop was born in 1946. that means that in 2010 Cherie would be a little older than my grandpa! haha and he was a marine and fought in Vietnam. anyway, enough of my rambling... i really loved this story. it's sweet to see that Edward and Bella's love just keeps growing throughout the years of their marriage. and i was cracking up when Grace walked in on them feeling each other up! hahaha. loved it, really great job!!
Kristi
Date: 29 Apr 2010 2:05 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
I can't believe its over! LOL! Anyway, I totally loved this story from start to finish. I can't wait for NASCAR Bella, but can you like maybe add in a time where she meets Dale Jr. That would like be the perfect story in my opinion. LOL! Just sayin...LOL!
Rhonda
Author's Response:
MY best friend is absolutely IN LOVE with Dale JR. LOL. I'm going to have to put him in at some point just for her :) Glad you liked the ending. I may break down and post the first Breakaway Chapter sometime in the coming week, but I will not be promising regular posts until SF is in the bag.
Date: 29 Apr 2010 1:32 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
im happy the way it ended great story !
Date: 29 Apr 2010 1:10 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
What a perfect ending for this story. I am looking forward to rereading it all together.
Date: 29 Apr 2010 1:09 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
awww awesome ending!!!
Date: 29 Apr 2010 1:05 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
It's been a great ride with these two- Loved the story and so glad you extended it! Looking forward to the new story and more from SF.
Date: 29 Apr 2010 1:01 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
Excellent! Thank you for the epilogue and catching us up with all 4 couples without being too wordy. It was perfect the way you did it!
Looking forward to SF and your next story!!
Date: 29 Apr 2010 12:53 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
booo hooo i am so sad this tory is over i have totally loved it maybe i might go back and start from the beginning
can 't wait to read your new work
Date: 29 Apr 2010 12:50 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
beautiful ending!, great job as always! Can't wait for your new fic! sounds exciting, you'll definately have another popular fav under your belt!
Date: 29 Apr 2010 12:42 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
i'm really truly sad that this story is over... every time i see an update for this story, i drop everything i'm doing just to go read it. now, what else am i going to look forward to?? well, at least sovereign fate is still going on. a part of me is a little glad that this story is done because now you can focus more on SF. i'm really loving it and i want to see how princess isabella handles things.
and your next story is about a nascar driver bella!! wow! i really love that in all of your stories, the female lead is strong and confident and smart. though i haven't read your new story yet, i can just see how sexy nascarbella will be behind her fast, powerful and sleek nascar car..
i also love how you take yourself out of your comfort zone to write your stories. each and every one of your settings is unique and different. i love it when authors such as yourself aren't afraid to do the research to produce genuine results. like with this story set in the 40's and with SF set in the olden days...i really admire your writing and the plots that you come up with. keep up the good work!!!!
Author's Response:
Wow...thank you so much. I'm glad that my effort is appreciated. It's fun for me too. I was nervous when I first gave it a go with FDKK, but the more I do it the more I enjoy stretching out and doing something new and different. I'm sure any true NASCAR fan will see my blunders, but hopefully I can make it realistic enough to help people get past it.
Date: 29 Apr 2010 12:23 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
That was amazing! Great ending for all of them. I like how all of the children's names start with a G (even if Cherie goes by her middle name). Really cannot wait to start reading about Nascar Driver Bella! :)
Date: 29 Apr 2010 12:21 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
i am so happy that you continued this o/s, i really enjoyed it, great job. and i loved the epi, it was a perfect ending for them!!! cant wait for the new story, will it be here and ff?
Author's Response:
Yeah...I'll post it both places, although down the line I may need to edit for FFN
Date: 29 Apr 2010 12:15 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
Thank you for a endearing, captivating story! Your writing inspires me.
I cannot wait for the next one!
Date: 29 Apr 2010 12:14 AM Title: Epilogue: Chicago, May 1966
I can not WAIT till that nascar story comes up because if this one was great the next one will be awesome. lol i loved how that ended and I'm glad it was a happily ever after so to speak. thanks again bye
Date: 27 Apr 2010 10:02 PM Title: It All Comes Together
aww baby number 2! I love it. they are sooo in love its sweet. :D keep up the great work. thanks again bye
Date: 27 Apr 2010 7:51 PM Title: It All Comes Together
I hope we get to see them in the future during the epi. I would love to know whether or not A/J and E/R had kids
That was a very sweet little chapter.
Date: 27 Apr 2010 5:41 PM Title: It All Comes Together
Love it! Can't wait to see what's next!
Date: 27 Apr 2010 4:20 PM Title: It All Comes Together
aww haha that was really cute. i'm glad Emmett and Jasper are home safe. i hope E and B get their baby number 2. and 3 and 4 haha. really great chapter. can't wait to read the epilogue. but then again i can because that will mean it's over :(
Kristi
Date: 27 Apr 2010 4:12 PM Title: It All Comes Together
FANTASTIC CHAPTER
LOVE IT!
Date: 27 Apr 2010 3:57 PM Title: It All Comes Together
Beautiful chapter ! All home safe. Definately the happy reunion I was hoping for. And now that they all have jobs and a bright future....sigh.
I'm sure that little Cherie will be joined by a sibling in the not too distant future.
If I saw the "Cullen Steel" building in person I would probably make a scene too! Thanks for sharing that!
Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:53 PM Title: It All Comes Together
That was a great way to end the story (before the epi)! I really wonder how many kids they will actually have? Will check out the teaser soon!
Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:42 PM Title: It All Comes Together
I am so glad everyone is home safe and sound. That is what happens in a fantasy world that we control. We would have hated it if any of our guys died.
Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:39 PM Title: It All Comes Together
Yippee!!!!
Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:25 PM Title: It All Comes Together
Aww! I'm so glad everyone is home now. But, I'm going to miss this story so much. I truely do love the girl power written in this story. See ya, next chapter!
Rhonda
Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:20 PM Title: It All Comes Together
awwww adorable! I wish them good luck with the creation of baby #2! :)
Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:18 PM Title: It All Comes Together
So glad Jasper and Emmett got back safely - it's weird how invested I got in all their safety considering it's a) set almost 70 years ago and b) fictional but I love it. Fab story and I'm gutted it's ending.
I look forward to your future works - I think you're a very talented writer and are able to make them come alive regardless of era, job or story events. Thank you for sharing your ideas and stories.
Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:18 PM Title: It All Comes Together
Have really enjoyed this story, glad everyone made it home safely, everyone will be together, and life is just good for them. Cant wait for the epi, but sad to see the story come to its end.
Date: 27 Apr 2010 1:09 PM Title: It All Comes Together
So glad all the boys made it home safe and sound. I really hate that we were not privy to the lemon at the end but oh well. I know I'm a lemon whore. Can't wait for the epi.
Date: 27 Apr 2010 12:56 PM Title: It All Comes Together
YAY!!! all the flyboys are home!! great chapter, looking forward to the epi
Date: 27 Apr 2010 12:48 PM Title: It All Comes Together
awww.....they're so mushy cute....lol that's great that they had jobs for the boys.
Date: 27 Apr 2010 2:50 AM Title: A Clean Start
lol ya know if I was bella in a small way i'd kinda be pissed that Cherie's 1st word was "dada" after he's beeen gone her whole life lol
but only a little ;-)
Date: 26 Apr 2010 2:10 PM Title: A Clean Start
Cherie just melted her Daddy and totally wrapped him around her little finger with one word. This was a great chapter. I loved it.
Date: 25 Apr 2010 10:39 PM Title: A Clean Start
Awwww you made me cry, so sweet.
Date: 25 Apr 2010 7:24 PM Title: A Clean Start
What is there to say other than that was a perfect chapter and reunion lemon! It was great and fit the story wonderfully. I hate to see this fic end but am so glad you extended it beyond the one shot it originally was.
Date: 24 Apr 2010 11:29 PM Title: A Clean Start
OMG, you made me cry with that one! "Dada," ---- and I turned into a babbling mess!
Lovely! I can't wait for 26 and the Epi!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 10:37 PM Title: A Clean Start
Their rediscovery of one another was so sweet, and I was happy for Edward that Cherie finally warmed up to him. That scene of him sitting on the floor watching her sleep - so heartwarming. Great chapter!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 8:40 PM Title: A Clean Start
awwwww love it!!!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 1:40 PM Title: A Clean Start
aww... that was so friggin cute when Cherie woke up and said "Dada." So sweet. i loved this chapter, it's like everything's turning into the way it should be. loved it!! can't wait for the bittersweet last chapter. i don't want it to end lol...
Kristi
Date: 24 Apr 2010 12:23 PM Title: A Clean Start
YES!!! that was some wash up!! lol. and cherie, what a sweetie, she just made it all better. great chapter. its gonna be sad to see this end, but cant wait for the rest of the chapters!!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 11:11 AM Title: A Clean Start
ahhh so good, I really wish this one wasnt ending, but they are ready to move on with their lives. This has been a great story and a little bittersweet. I have gotten a chance to experience through your story a bit of what my Grandparents went through in the first few years of their marriage, listened to stories from Grandmother again, really absorbing them , and just before she passed, it was good to remember, and your Flyboy jogged those memories. Thanks.
Date: 24 Apr 2010 10:50 AM Title: A Clean Start
omg "dada" i'm gonna cry......I'm glad they did bring up the "James incident" no need to mar Edward homecoming with bad memories.....
Date: 24 Apr 2010 6:30 AM Title: A Clean Start
This chapter was awesome. I can see how it would be strange for them to be together again after so long. Both of them apprehensive wondering what the other would think. It was so sweet when Edward just watched his little girl sleep. Moments like that are precious and you captured it so well. And, when she called him Dada it made the whole moment perfect. You're so awesome I can't wait for the rest of the story while also wishing it didn't have to end.
Date: 24 Apr 2010 6:22 AM Title: A Clean Start
loved it and i will be sad when this is over
Date: 24 Apr 2010 5:47 AM Title: A Clean Start
There should have been another tissue alert on this chapter. Beautifully written! Bella bathing Edward was so simple and sweet and then lemony too. What more could we ask? Then Cherie falling asleep in his arms. Such a sweet picture.
Thanks for posting it so soon. I'm really going to be sad when this is finished!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 5:38 AM Title: Blessed Revelations
Loved this chapter. |These two are good seperately, but GREAT together.
Date: 24 Apr 2010 4:41 AM Title: A Clean Start
aww!!! i LOVE THIS CHAPTER!! not because of the nice, juicy lemon, but because of how cute cherie was with her father! and she said 'dada'!!! ahh!!!!! i'm so happy for him! so happy for them!!!! thank you for not making us wait for this chapter. thank you for being so quick with your updates!!! thank you thank you thank you!!!!!!! you have no idea how much i appreciate you giving us this gem of a chapter.
Date: 24 Apr 2010 4:26 AM Title: A Clean Start
yes yes YES YES YES lol hot sex and a sweet daddy/daughter moment all in the same chapter. I love it. I'm so ad to see it end but it was a great journey. thanks again bye
Date: 24 Apr 2010 4:15 AM Title: A Clean Start
I love this story so much. your writing is wonderful. It truely brings joy to my life thank you so much
Date: 24 Apr 2010 4:05 AM Title: A Clean Start
awwww i feel like i want to cry an burst out laughing all at the same time that was the sweetest most beautiful chapter yet. i can't believe this story is almost over i am so going to miss it. guess that means i will have to go back to the beginning and start again.
Date: 24 Apr 2010 3:37 AM Title: A Clean Start
Oh my lordy that was perfect! I loved every part of that chapter. It was romantic, and family oriented...just perfect!
Rhonda
Date: 24 Apr 2010 3:32 AM Title: Secretive Provisions
replying more to your comment than the chapter (which was beautiful BTW)
Your writing is really good. It's not choc full of vulgarity or profanity, but it's witty and sweet and interesting. I read FDKK as well, just finished it actually, and thoroughly enjoyed that.
Cheers to you, and keep it up! I love what you're doing!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 3:26 AM Title: A Clean Start
That was wonderful! Thank you for sharing that even while on your trip!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 3:23 AM Title: A Clean Start
Oh that was so good!! Definitely had some tears with Edward and Cherie.
I'm going to be so sad to see this story end. I know real life is crazy and hectic, but I really hope you're going to continue writing. I've gotten so much joy from your stories. I love to read and you are a gifted author. Amazing work! Can't wait to see where the story goes from here.
Date: 24 Apr 2010 3:16 AM Title: A Clean Start
Aww...that was so sweet! Thank you so much! I cannot believe only one more real chapter and the epilouge are left! Amazing job!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 3:14 AM Title: Savoring Every Moment
Oh! I hope he makes it back to her! Please don't kill him off... I don't think I'll be able to take it!
Date: 23 Apr 2010 6:13 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
Bring on the lemon! lol I loved that chapter and yeah I do agree a lemon would have probably been too much especially with the sweet reuniion between father and daughter. i can't wait for more. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
Date: 23 Apr 2010 3:42 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
This was a great chapter. You were right to not include lemons. It would have been too soon especially with his long trip and a cast up to his hip. Let him get cleaned up and well rested for the games to begin.
Date: 23 Apr 2010 8:43 AM Title: The Foreign Familiar
I think this is perfect! My husband is active duty in the military, and we have had to deal with LONG deployments, some of them involved in war...there is always an adjustment period when he gets home...sometimes it is a few hours, others it is a few days or even weeks depending on what he saw/did while he was gone...I think they both sounded just like reality--being seperated is the most difficult thing ever if you truly love the person...but no matter how much you love that person, you kinda live "alone" while they are gone, and it can be hard to readjust when they are back. We have always been very fortunate to be blessed to always have short recovery periods, even when he has been through major trauma and horrible things, but I have known couples who surely were not nearly as fortunate...still I am looking forward to more Edward and Bella now that he's home! Wonderful reunion chapter and several times my eyes swelled up imagining Edward and his reaction to his baby girl--my husband HAS cried over his children before--they weren't infants, but old enough that he had missed so much--you handled this PEREFCTLY! I just had to tell you!
Date: 23 Apr 2010 2:23 AM Title: The Foreign Familiar
sweetest homecoming ever! Cherie will have daddy wrapped around her finger and they will be as thick as theives...lol
Date: 23 Apr 2010 1:55 AM Title: The Foreign Familiar
I loved the pov & reunion!! Have a great mini vacay & happy happy to your little boy!
Date: 23 Apr 2010 1:02 AM Title: The Foreign Familiar
Gosh, Edward's surprise visit was so beautifully written. That was a wonderful way to bring him home. I really felt for them both over the anxiety of their reunion. I don't know if you have or had a husband deployed, but somehow after a year apart those are the exact feelings that come up. It was heartbreaking and heartwarming all at once. :)
Michelle
Date: 23 Apr 2010 12:05 AM Title: The Foreign Familiar
it was so perfect though without the lemon zest though what a wonderful chapter. i so love this story i am going to be very sad when it ends.
Date: 22 Apr 2010 11:17 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
i was hoping it was gonna be e's pov!!! yay!! he's home, bought time, now we just need to get the other 2 home. loved how you protrayed him 1st seeing cherie, so wonderful and powerful!!!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 10:06 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
I am so happy he is home! Love that he compared Cherie to a dog, it was just so funny. So happy he got her a gift too, adorable :)
Date: 22 Apr 2010 8:25 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
I am glad he is home and that they are going to be ok. You better bring the lemonade next chapter though! Between SF and these two being seperated I am feeling quite frustrated!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 8:21 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
That was a great reunion for their family! :)
Date: 22 Apr 2010 8:20 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
Such a beautiful homecoming! So glad that Cherie wasn't afraid of him. Her food mooching routine was priceless.
I can wait for the lemon meringue...but not too long!
Thanks!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 8:16 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
Loved the chapter! It was a very sweet home coming. Cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 6:16 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
Woohoo! Edwards home! I think it's time Cherie gets a new brother or sister. LOL! At least that's what I'd do...LOL! Anyhoo, I loved the POV change, it was great to read how Edward really felt coming home and meeting his daughter for the first time.
Rhonda
Date: 22 Apr 2010 5:35 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
fantastic!! Great update! How amazing it must have been to see her husband in the flesh after not seeing him for almost 2 years!! And Cherie's apprehension with him was very realistic, but I'm glad she warmed up to him in the end... can't wait for more!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 5:31 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
i think you made the right decision about not giving us some lemons in this chapter... it really wouldn't be right... edward is exhausted from his trip and he's feeling very emotional and vulnerable right now. he should get some much needed rest before they go there
but i'm sure some good ol fasioned love will make things less awkward for them as a couple. sex can get rid of a lot of shyness and timidness and awkwardness..
this chapter made me cry. i love edward soo much in here! and cherie!! she was too cute! i love how open and happy she was to see her dad...i was scared about the toddler shyness around strangers but she got rid of it so quickly!
thanks for giving us this chapter early!! loved it lotss!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 5:25 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
So glad he is home.
Date: 22 Apr 2010 5:25 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
Yay they're finally reunited. The reunion awkwardness you described was exactly how my grandfather felt when he came home from WWII. My Mom was 2 and he'd never met her, he was away from my Grandmother for 3 years and barely lived thru the horrors of war. Its an adjustment, but B&E will make it fine. Cant wait for the next one.
Date: 22 Apr 2010 5:15 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
im happy he is finally home! cant wait till the next chapter !
Date: 22 Apr 2010 5:11 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
yay love it!!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 5:07 PM Title: The Foreign Familiar
aww!! he's back!!! i agree, them getting all hot and heavy wouldn't have felt right just yet. this was very realistic, the fears and anxiety and even Cherie not warming up to him right away. really great chapter, can't wait for the next one!
Kristi
Date: 21 Apr 2010 9:12 PM Title: Birthday Party
Great chapter!! Cant wait to see if Edward comes home in the next one!
Date: 21 Apr 2010 1:48 AM Title: Birthday Party
I just started reading this story, its great.
Looking forward to seeing Edward some home.
Date: 20 Apr 2010 5:11 PM Title: Birthday Party
my goodness, why I never read this, I'll never know, but I'm so very pleased to have found it now! Better late than never! Your stories are always great!! :) Can't wait for the update!!
Date: 20 Apr 2010 1:12 PM Title: Birthday Party
I can't wait for Edward to get home. I miss him almost as much as Bella.
Date: 20 Apr 2010 4:59 AM Title: Birthday Party
aww that's ashame that Edward missed Cherie's first bday. hopefully he gets there soon. really great chapter, can't wait for the next one!
Kristi
Date: 20 Apr 2010 1:21 AM Title: Birthday Party
wow, lil cherie is a year old already! poor edward missed all the milestones. i hope he makes it home asap!!
Date: 19 Apr 2010 11:28 PM Title: Birthday Party
HE'S COMING HOME!!! yeah I'm so excited in case you can't tell. lol keep up the great work. thanks again bye