[Report This]Date: 03 Sep 2015 3:00 PM Title: Emmett & Rosie's first meeting
awesome couple of o/t ;) i hope you can come back and complete some more asap as wel as the lh sequel ;D
[Report This]Date: 31 Jul 2012 8:01 PM Title: Emmett & Rosie's first meeting
:)
Date: 11 Jul 2012 1:21 PM Title: Drunken Cowboys
oh my god,i am nearly crying with laughter!the visual of Edward in the kitchen,naked as a jaybird,tipping his hat politely to Bella...
btw,are all other birds clothed?why is it that only the jaybird is called out on it?;)
Date: 30 Mar 2011 11:46 AM Title: Drunken Cowboys
so in that way edward get dirty:))
Date: 31 Jan 2011 7:47 PM Title: Drunken Cowboys
A drunk Endward is so funny.
[Report This]Date: 01 Oct 2010 9:59 PM Title: Drunken Cowboys
I can see that happening. The stories about Bella and Em are funny.
Date: 04 Sep 2010 12:30 AM Title: Emmett & Rosie's first meeting
aww so cute! but how is Alec involved in this story? please explain!
[Report This]Date: 03 Sep 2010 3:06 AM Title: Drunken Cowboys
Hahaha one of my favorite scenes ever!
Date: 02 Sep 2010 3:30 PM Title: Emmett & Rosie's first meeting
That is cute Emmett so shy.
Date: 02 Sep 2010 12:35 PM Title: Emmett & Rosie's first meeting
:)
Date: 02 Sep 2010 12:22 AM Title: Emmett & Rosie's first meeting
Thanks for the outtake! I really enjoyed it.
[Report This]Date: 01 Sep 2010 10:01 PM Title: Emmett & Rosie's first meeting
That was such a cute first meeting! I love the "what kind of man do you think I am" line. As a woman there is only one type of man in my opinion as they are all the same!
Date: 24 Aug 2010 8:52 PM Title: Drunken Cowboys
Hilarious! Carmen and Eleazar add to the insanity ~ those boys are too much!
[Report This]Date: 24 Aug 2010 7:17 PM Title: Drunken Cowboys
a279;I absolutely LOVE it! That was awesome! I don’t know which part I laughed at the hardest between Carmen throwing the boys outside, Jasper having a heart to heart with the goat or Naked Edward and the cow incident. That was just great, it made everything fall in place, from Bella witnessing what she
thought was the boys making fun of her to Edward running around naked. You are beyond awesome and amazing!!!!
Date: 24 Aug 2010 6:54 PM Title: Drunken Cowboys
Lol, this was so funny!!
Date: 24 Aug 2010 7:20 AM Title: Drunken Cowboys
I think that was great I did a lot of giggling.
Date: 24 Aug 2010 6:42 AM Title: Drunken Cowboys
I really enjoyed this chapter. I love a drunk Emmett, Edward and Jasper, I laughed myself silly.
Date: 24 Aug 2010 2:40 AM Title: Drunken Cowboys
Fun outtake! Thanks for writing this.
One correction: all verbs in a sentence (and in the same paragraph) should be the same tense. Mixing verb tenses can cause what I like to call "mental stumbles" for your reader, as the shift in tense makes them pause in their reading to try to figure out what is happening.
Example from this chapter: "she sure is pretty and she had great breasts" should be "she sure is pretty and she has great breasts"
I've seen this a few times in your chapters, so you might want to be on the lookout for this. Also, in a verb phrase the helping verb determines the tense. Hope this helps.