Date: 06 Mar 2014 8:56 AM Title: Chapter 7
Fantastic story. Loving every word. You've done such a nice job bringing Bella out of her shell and Edward to the realization of their relationship, history and depth of feeling- without sappy dialogue. Nice, sophisticated story, and I'm completely hooked! Also, really appreciate all of the hard work researching the area, the likelihood of such a place and the inner workings. Your effort shows!
Date: 16 Apr 2012 1:00 AM Title: Chapter 23
Oh, I enjoyed this story very much. The way you described the ranch was so detailed that I wanted to go there on vacation, it seemed so peaceful and so very full of life, not to mention the "green" aspect of the ranch.
I liked that you developed all the couples relationships and every individual's characters throughout the story, even if you focused more on Bella and Edward. Hell, I even fell sorry for Tanya in the end.
When Jake died after delivering his puppies to the ranch, you made me cry. I do believe animals have some form of soul, and dogs! Dogs have the biggest of all, they can be so loyal and helpfull and can actually die of sadness... or love lost, like Jake in the story.
All in all, I loved your story very much, and I wish it could have lasted 50 chapters more (at least, lol) just so I could read a bit more about these guys life at the ranch.
Thank you so much for your kind words.
I, too, wish I could visit and stay a while, oh wait, I do everytime I dream.
I fell in love with my Jake (not SM's Jake :) We have a small little homestead of our own with lots of animals and each definatly have thier own personalities, even the chickens. ;-) Jake reminds me of our beloved Wakon Giant Malamute that we lost a few years back, loyal to a fault.
I am working on an epilogue for this story. I can't seem to leave them alone.
Thanks again for taking the time to read and review. Cheers to you! Hugs!
Date: 10 Apr 2012 1:28 AM Title: Chapter 1
Dear, sweet Alice. "What are basic necesities?" The girl really needs the reality check that's coming her way. The saddest part is that there are really people out there spending enormous amounts of money on "stuff" (even if its 'designer' stuff). Edward is no saint and he also needs to straighten his priorities; I'm interested to see what's going to happen wo both of them when they start working for the first time in their lives.
Date: 09 Sep 2011 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 23
Ok, I'm sorry but this is my first review. I started yesterday afternoon and couldn't stop readiing on and off until now. Ive texted a friend several times and bragged and insisted she got to this story immediately when she finished the one she was reading. I have read many stories and I find ones all the time that catch my interrests and I LOVE when I start reading the first chapter and just know without a doubt that I'm going to enjoy the story immensely. I loved the flow and the easy read to your story. The concept to the story was beautifully thought out and everything was perfectly timed and written so that someone like me would feel like I was there witnessing what exactly was happening. I know you said your daughter(?) is on the same track as you wrote Bella, but I need to know if you are a chef? I mean that's just too much research to all that food Bella prepared. You made sound so good, I mean really!!! How else unless you know one of the Iron Chefs personally!!! Also, in the beginning when Bella was on search and she was talking to Jake I kinda guessed early and told said friend above that you went and wrote Jake as a track dog and even though I am a big 'no Jake bashing' supporter I will say that your depiction of their relationship was spot on and I'm ok with him in this story as a wolf because it was great that he was included as such a loyal and loving character and not a monster like so many Ed/Bella stories, so thumbs up on that part.
So I guess by now you realize that I loved reading your story and I thank you for sharing your talent with little ole me! BRAVO!
Hugs, and squeezes, Stephanie
Without a doubt, yours is the sweetest and most positive review I've had. Thank you, from the bottom of my humble heart.
I love that you appreciated the detail. Some people have told me I have gone overboard, but honestly when I read a story I really like to immerse myself and literally almost taste what the author creates. It's an escape, right?
To answer your question; I am not a chef, I wish. However, I do love to cook, a lot. I have made all of those dishes described in the story, although I'm not that fast of a sushi maker. I get by. I do love all the abundant food sources of the Pacific Northwest. Gosh, I feel like destination promoter. LOL
Yes, it is my daughter that is on the same educational track as Bella. We do homeschool strictly for academic purposes. Also, like my Bella, we study using a classical Trivum model. I actually stole the scene of Bella walking her horse around conjugating her Latin verbs straight from our barnyard.
I agree with you on the Jake bashing. I thought it was important that my Jake protected Bella in her lonely years, was loyal and loving, a friend to Edward, and in the end :( proved his commitment to his imprint. I'd have a dozen of those Jakes around if I could.:)
I am so happy that you enjoyed this story and took the time to send me your awesome review. Thank you, thank you, thank you.
Hugs and squeezes to you too,
P.S. I hope your friend likes it too.
Date: 24 Aug 2011 1:56 PM Title: Chapter 23
oh my god I read your stork's straight thru and i must say that it's one of the most extraordinary story's I've yet to read it had me in tears so many times. thank you for sharing it
You're too sweet. Thank you. It has a lot of grammatical errors which I'm hoping to correct soon. I'm also going to be posting an epilouge soon as well. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Date: 27 Jan 2011 3:42 AM Title: Chapter 23
This was a well written, well thought out story that I enjoyed tremendously.
The only constructice crticism I could offer is sometimes the detail were a little too detailed, otherwise, wonderful and very well written. I believe their was a spellcheck error becuase most or your definitely were in the story as defiantly, but thats just spellcheck.
You are a talented writer and your story makes me want to read more of your work, and visit the Northwest!
Thanks so much for sharing!
Date: 19 Jan 2011 1:07 AM Title: Chapter 23
Wow!! As predicted, I have been hooked from the start and have read this straight through. Fantastic story. Might make me a geek but loved all the details about 'growing the business' - even though I have no involvement in the hotel industry. Had thoughts but 'baddies'/motives kept me guessing until just before the were said. Loved it. Don't normally add things that have been completed to my favorites, as I normally on do that to get updates, but will be adding this one to show how much I loved it. Ok, I'll shut up now! :)
Thank you so much. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It was a lot of fun to write. My face is kind of hurting from all the grinning you've caused. ;) Thank you, thank you, thank you!!!
Date: 05 Dec 2010 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 23
I very much enjoyed this story. I was naughty and didn't review each chapter, but I just kept wanting to know what would happen next! I would love to beta for you if you are still looking... I'm not sure exactly what you're looking for, but you can check out my stories on here if you want to see if we'd be a match!
This story was very well written, and I always like the western type stories. :)
Date: 24 Nov 2010 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 23
I absolutely loved this story. It makes me so wish that I could book a stay at Adesse Olympus (or something very much like it.) Which is huge, since I'm not an outdoors person at all. I kept getting hungry while reading the story listening to all the wonderful seafood and other delicacies.
You seem to do a really good job with the grammar of the story (at least I didn't see anything that was cringe worthy) and really only need to find someone to do an extra read through of the story to check the flow and placement of words. I'd love to offer services, but I'm not an author and likely wouldn't be too much help.
I can't wait to read more of your stories. This was just so well thought out and written.
Thank you so much for your kind words. I too, would love to stay there. :P
I'm working on another story right now I hope will be equally good. Keep checking on me. Thank you again. You make it all worth while.
Date: 22 Oct 2010 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 23
I really liked this story. It was really well written considering that English isn't your first language. There were a few grammatical errors and I didn't understand much of the business propositions but overall it was a good story.
Is there a real place like this? Because I would love to visit it lol! I couldn't help but salivate whenever they talked about food. Especially seafood... I love shrimp...
Again, the only problem I have is that Bella was too perfect. She had a good voice, she played guitar, she's a perfect cook, she excels at gun shooting, she has a loyal hybrid dog as a best friend, she has horses saving her life. She's a typical Mary-Sue. That's the only thing I didn't like about this story.
What I did like is that you had typical cliches but you put your own touch to them. For example, you have Tanya try and break up Edward and Bella but you also have her be a victim in all this.
I also like the whole Jake thing. It's sad that he died but he died because his love died and it was a bittersweet part.
Again, enjoyed the story, didn't enjoy Bella, but I do hope that I see more stories from you. Maybe a sequel to this? It would be fun to see their lives in the ranch after this. Maybe a fluff piece of Bella and Edward's wedding and having kids. I can't get enough of Charlie and Carlisle together lol! They crack me up.
Date: 21 Oct 2010 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 9
Nice story so far. I think Bella is totally Mary-Sue. I've taken the Mary-Sue test with lots of my characters and I know the signs of a Mary-Sue and your Bella is definitely Mary-Sue. She's perfect at everything, no flaws, she's musical, and educated and fluent in many languages and how old is she? 21? And let's not mention the giant dog and all the horses that are just absolutely attracted to her. Yeah, you should try and take a Mary-Sue test, I'm pretty sure you'd score high on it.
Other than that, the story is pretty good. I have no business background and I don't get cars but when you said Gibson and Ibanez I was all "hey I know what that is!" Lol! But yeah, I guess this story is starting to get even better. Can't wait to finish reading it.
Thank you for your review. I really enjoyed reading all your comments and I agree with you to a certain extent.
My intent for this characterization of Bella was that, yes, she is highly talented and accomplished but, she does have some subtle flaws, mainly, being a social pariah. She has virtually no social skills. Her characterization came about as a combined personality of my best friend, my daughter, and me. Bella is a high achiever, classically trained, yet very outdoorsy.
I wanted this Bella to have her own identity and talents. I like the idea that she can do all these things, be an individual yet be totally vulnerable to raw love. This plot doesn't revolve around her growth so much as it does Edward's. I just wanted to lay the foundation that she was strong despite being reclusive and socially repressed.
LOL on the Gibson and Ibanez. I actually play a Taylor, but my husband is a shredder on the electrics.
I do hope you give the story a chance. Really, it's not about Bella being so great, but her and Edward being great for each other despite obstacles.
Thank you again so much for taking the time to review. :) Hope you enjoy the rest!
Date: 20 Sep 2010 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 23
WHAT CAN I SAY? BEAUTIFUL!! THIS STORY WAS REALLY WELL THOUGHT OUT AND WRITTEN WITH SOMETHING IN IT FOR EVERYONE. YOU KEPT THE ACTION GOING WITH A FEW SURPRISES THROWN IN FOR GOOD MEASURE , AND I REALLY ENJOYED READING IT. IF YOUR DESCRIPTIONS OF THE COUNTRY AND FOREST ARE ANYWHERE NEAR ACCURATE , YOU SHOULD BE WORKING FOR THE LOCAL PROMOTIONAL COMMITTEE. IT HAS BEEN 40 YEARS SINCE I WAS ON HORSEBACK BUT YOU EVEN HAVE ME WANTING TO JOIN IN THE FUN. AGAIN, BEAUTIFUL, AND THANK YOU FOR TAKING THE TIME TO WRITE IT. SHAZA.
One of the nicest reviews ever! Thank you so much! You make this whole thing worth the while. Thank you, thank you, thank you. And yes, the Olympic Peninsula is everything I make it out to be and then some. If you ever have the chance, you just have to visit and experience. It's never too late to get back up on a horse. ;)
Date: 17 Sep 2010 8:58 PM Title: Chapter 23
I just finished and thoroughly enjoyed it and had a very hard time putting it down. That means I am extremely tired due to lack of sleep. : ) I really liked your take on the characters and how you woved them into the story. I thought it had the perfect amount of drama, suspense, action and lemons! Thank you for sharing!
Gosh, darn, shucks! Though, I'm sorry you lost sleep. ;) Thank you for taking your precious time to read it and for leaving such a nice review. I can't tell you how flattered I am that people actually do that. It blows me away.
Date: 17 Sep 2010 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 23
Fu***** loved this story. Have never been that happy about Jake - but I cried when he died. And the end. Well the whole thing was just perfect. Thank you so much.
I'm so happy you liked it. Your review made my day totally rock. Thank you so much.
Date: 17 Sep 2010 5:09 AM Title: Chapter 23
I am so glad I stumbled upon your story. I don't regret a single moment of reading this. You created such a beautiful story and I cannot wait to read whatever you choose to share next. Take care! Mic
I'm so glad you stumbled upon it too. :) Thank you so much for taking the time and chance on this lowly wanna be writer. You're the greatest.
Date: 14 Sep 2010 2:12 PM Title: Chapter 23
let me tell you i love this story please tell me that you are planing on writing a sequal to this story i also love the part of edward singing brown eyed girl to bella my husband plays that song for me all the time he calls me his brown eyed girl he thought i was crazy last night when i was singing the song and laughing so please let me know if there is a posablility that you are thinking continuing with this story
I'm so glad you enjoyed this story. That's super sweet that your husband sings and plays to you. Mine does too. ;) that's why I put that in there. Gotta love those musicians.
As for continuing, I'm not sure yet. I might do a series of epilogues. I see in my minds eye what happens to everyone, but I'm not sure if it contains enough plot and conflict to flesh out. I still have my thinking cap on, though. I have anther B&E vampire story I'm working on right now. We'll see how it goes.
Thank you so much for reading and for your review. It does make my fingers type faster.
Date: 10 Sep 2010 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 14
That's one way to get her in his tent. I love how accepting Charlie is of their relationship.
Yeah, he had a long time to get used to the fact that Edward was the one. Now, I'm really heading to your story. Muwah!
Date: 10 Sep 2010 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 13
Such a beautiful story and watching their love grow is breathtaking. I love everything. I'm pimping your story to everyone I know and working hard on my own next update so I can pimp you in the a/n.
Thank you for sticking with me. Now you have me curious so I'm heading your site. See ya there!
Date: 10 Sep 2010 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 12
I really needed this laugh today since we attended my husband's uncle's funeral. He was a wonderful sweet man so it was really hard. I read this and couldn't stop laughing. I expect even more laughs once Charlie & Carlisle get together.
I'm so sorry for your and your husbands loss. If he was as sweet as you say, I bet he smiled and laughed his whole life and thus had a wonderful one despite what ever hardships came his way. Bless the sweet old men, they make us all smile.
Date: 09 Sep 2010 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 23
I have read your entire story and I really loved it. Haveing grew up in Washington, I was familiar with all the places and activities you had mentioned. Reading your story made me homesick for the northwest.
Your book had great character developement, good detail and excellent lemons. Lemons that are too graphic can be gross. You were just right to make them very sensual and errotic.
I have put you on my favorates and cannot wait to read you additional work. You have a good understanding of writing. I did notice some typos and grammer errors but I make those on a daily basis and I proof documents in my job.
Keep writing and good luck with it.
Thank you so much! If I made you homesick, that was one of the points. I really wanted to put the NW in a very favorable light instead of dreary and rainy you always hear about.
I was nervous about the lemons, so your compliment means a lot, thank you again.
I appreciate your observation on my typos and grammar and I can't agree with you more. I'm new at this and I don't have a beta or a second set of eyes. Have you ever considered being a beta? I could really use one. PM me if you are interested.
I'm so happy I found this site. You guys are the best readers anyone could ask for.
Date: 09 Sep 2010 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 23
ok ok i guess your forgiven for killing jake by writing a great story
i honestly didn't jump into this story from the summary ranches westerns and the such don't have a big draw for me and i left it open on my cpu for a couple of days before i started reading it but once i did i didn't want to put it down
you told a good story and added all the right things without going over board you gave us sex without pages of details i will read twilight porn for that you told about the meals in short spurts i don't need to know every ingredient and place setting and even the history and culture of the area without it being a lecture
so congrats in giving without the over share
thanks for your time and effort in writing this story
I'm so happy I won you over. I know my summary could use some work. Any suggestions? Thank you for all of your awesome reviews. You make me buzz like a bee.
Date: 09 Sep 2010 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 17
i forgot last chp im soo happy the rents are home
i just knew we hadnt seen the last of tayna she just doesnt know when to die but whats up with bree
edward better watch his back i guess its a good thing jakes gone he might of had to defend edward this time against unwanted advances instead of bella
Date: 09 Sep 2010 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 16
so victoria back first she sets him up at the bar with james i think then she sends riley but what did cullen inc do to her and why edward not alice or carlisle edward hasnt even take a place at the company yet
radvan, I like how you're thinking...but it's not quite right. He he. I hope you enjoy the rest.
Date: 09 Sep 2010 4:02 PM Title: Chapter 23
I just found this story! What a great piece of work! I am definitely putting you as an author favorite and hope you continue to write --- SOON!
Thank you, thank you, thank you. I'm telling ya, with with readers like you, who'd want to stop writing? I'm working on another now. Hopefully, I'll hear from you again. ;)
Date: 09 Sep 2010 12:09 PM Title: Chapter 6
i love the banter! I am going to feature this next week up on recommended fic's :) Hope you get a few new readers it is a wonderful story :)
Thanks for the vote of confidence and that you like it enough to recommend. There's no better compliment. You're a doll. Muwah! I'm standing by a statement I told another reader, you guys on this site are amazing and awesome. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Date: 09 Sep 2010 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh yeah I am loving where this is going! I read slow as I have to work as well as read so don't freak out at long gaps! LOL
Poor Alice I had to laugh though
Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. It means a lot. Yeah, Edward and Alice have had it quite nice and she is somewhat clueless. He he he
Date: 09 Sep 2010 3:50 AM Title: Chapter 23
This was a very good story! I enjoyed it all, well except for when I cried about Jake, but can totally understand (I am a big dog lover, and it always makes me cry when one dies), but you did a nice job!
I loved the mystery, and the angst, and lets not forget the LOVING and HEA!!!
I actually cried when I wrote it. We're a big dog loving household too. I actually modeled Jake after our Giant Waykon Malamute. Thank you for the lovely review. You guys on this site are just too kind. Muwah!
Date: 08 Sep 2010 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 6
Ok, the part about Rose and Jacob refusing to leave her for a second all night...I started laughing so hard I woke up my daughter. Thank God I didn't read that at work!! I will definitely be pimping this story to everyone I know.
This is the first story I've ever written and I just put it on this site today. I'm just overwhelmed with your kindness. Now, I feel compelled to finish another story I was working on. Readers and reviewers like you are bringing me to tears. Thank you, thank you, thank you from the bottom of my heart. Enjoy the rest. ;)