Date: 28 Nov 2010 2:35 AM Title: Chapter 8
Best part:
"Yes, I suppose your right. You did marry first but you took a man that wasn't yours, though I should thank you for that. If you didn't I would be living the miserable life that you are now." Isabella fired back. "How does it feel to be second best Maria? You know that he wouldn't have married you if Uncle Peter didn't force him. Alastair wanted me and still wants me." Isabella laughed and bit the bottom of her lip. Maria's face grew red with anger. "The catch is, I don't want him. You are more than welcome to him. He is your husband after all, debts, addictions and all. What hurts me Maria is that fact you betrayed me. I'm your family. I would have never done this to you, but you have always proven yourself to be just as low as those woman from the brothels-"
Isabella was cut of her tirade by Maria's hand striking her cheek. It stung and she knew that there would be a red mark there for a few hours. She contemplated striking her back or taking her head and dragging it through the store window but decided against it. She didn't want to cause more of a scene than there already was. People were staring and gawking at them, including Renee and Charlotte. The latter looked as if she was the one slapped and she certainly was not pleased about it.
"I would strike you back Maria but once again I am going to prove to you that I won't stoop to your level." Isabella got extremely close to her cousin and leaned in toward her ear. "You're not better than me. But I am certainly better than you. I hope you and Alistair are very happy together." She began to walk away but once she got near her mother and aunt she turned at said. "You have my blessing."
Date: 19 Nov 2010 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 7
Al is a sicko ha ha I want to see Edward or charlie or even Peter beat him with in a inch of his life. :0) The way Edward and Bella were talking it doesn't sound like it'll be long before they are engaged. Great job!
Date: 19 Nov 2010 3:50 AM Title: Chapter 6
loving the story and not bothered by the pace at which things are happening so don't worry. :0) I love how Bella stood up to her cousin and the ex. I also liked how she when she was feeling hurt Edward was there to hold her. I even liked the little moment at the end with Charlie. Great job!
Date: 18 Nov 2010 11:42 PM Title: Chapter 7
i love what you have going so far! I didn't get update notifications for the last two chapters though.....good thing I checked TWCS!!!
Date: 18 Nov 2010 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 7
That was incredible! I loved every bit of it. Can I please seriously injure Alistair?
Date: 18 Nov 2010 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 7
hmm al will make a move and edward will punch his light out! or maria will make her move and bella will punch HER lights out!!!!
loving it!
Date: 18 Nov 2010 12:10 PM Title: Chapter 7
Wow, so Maria and Alistair are complete jerks. I'm glad the rest of the family seems to have at least an idea of how they are. It's a shame that their selfish choices have had such an impact on everyone.
I'm glad Edward was able to make Bella feel better about everything. Hopefully Maria and Alistair will leave soon.
Date: 18 Nov 2010 11:11 AM Title: Chapter 7
THE NERVE OF THEM.
Date: 18 Nov 2010 8:37 AM Title: Chapter 7
well i do hope they all pan out. al would have to take her by force because she obviously does not want him anymore
Date: 18 Nov 2010 5:19 AM Title: Chapter 7
Great chapter. I really hope any plans, Alistair and Maria make blow up in there face.
Author's Response:
It's more of Alistair's plans than Maria's. Maria is bitter because of what Alistair has planned. It might bring some insight to why she is such a bitch.
Date: 18 Nov 2010 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 7
Great chapter! I hope Edward get to kick Alistair's butt, but not kill him... he deserves life with Maria!
Date: 12 Nov 2010 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 6
Your best friend is sorry she is lazy. I loved it. Bella drowning Maria in a pool of blood? I might steal that.
Date: 09 Nov 2010 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 6
Updates updates updates:-) I'm in bed sick, so imagine how good a surprise it was when I saw that this story had an update I haven't read - YEAH.
Date: 08 Nov 2010 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 6
I am so glad you are not going to include all of the boring stuff...lol Thanks for the update! :~)
Date: 08 Nov 2010 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 6
That was incredible :) I really loved it so much! Bella is responding in the same way I wish I could to relatives with annoying mates. Really cannot wait to see more :)
Date: 08 Nov 2010 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 6
Well I love it at the pace that you are setting! Just like Goldilocks, not too hot - not too cold - juuuuust right! (Don't let anyone tell you any different!)
great chapter!
Michele (plu)
Date: 08 Nov 2010 8:38 AM Title: Chapter 6
loved it. let them all be pea green with envy!! please update soon
Date: 08 Nov 2010 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 6
love it! i am absolutley in love with historic fics-though they are kind of hard to find sometimes nonetheless this story is amazing and i cant wait for the next chapter! lol alistairs crooked nose made me giggle a little :-}
Date: 08 Nov 2010 4:42 AM Title: Chapter 6
I love how Maria and Alistair are so obviously tolerated at best by all of the family. Good for Bella for letting them have it.
Date: 08 Nov 2010 4:33 AM Title: Chapter 6
Oh yeah...can't WAIT to see this dinner. And the rest of the family is going to see Edward as handsome and loving....and "the newlyweds from hell" are going to be so jealous!!! (PLEASE....let Alistair just TRY to say something or better yet make a pass...)
Date: 07 Nov 2010 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 5
loved it!!! Bella is so funny and dramatic and scandalous!!!!
Eagerly waiting for more
Date: 06 Nov 2010 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 5
Looooooove it
Date: 05 Nov 2010 10:26 PM Title: Chapter 5
I love,love,love this story!!!!!! I cannot wait until the next chapter.
Date: 05 Nov 2010 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 5
Wonder how long it'll take till Bella's begging to wear Edwards ring??? :0)
Date: 05 Nov 2010 5:22 AM Title: Chapter 5
Great chapter. I love the fact that Bella, keep's Edward on his toes.
Date: 05 Nov 2010 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 5
OH OH OH I have a feeling that's going to be a hard promise to keep Edward, specially if Bella decides to seduce you!!!
Date: 05 Nov 2010 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 5
I love how feisty this Bella is.
I can't wait to see where things go from here!
Date: 05 Nov 2010 2:02 AM Title: Chapter 5
Another great chapter. Thank you for the quick update :)
Date: 05 Nov 2010 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 5
I like Bella fiesty but hope she doesn't push it to bitch. Nothing is as annoying as bitchy Bella. Thanks for the update. :~)
Date: 05 Nov 2010 12:46 AM Title: Chapter 5
Wow, that was amazing! I really loved this. Even though there won't be lemons for a while, I completely understand :) I really cannot wait to see what happens next :)
Date: 05 Nov 2010 12:46 AM Title: Chapter 5
Bella is a hoot... does she even know what she wants? Love it, I look forward to more.
Date: 05 Nov 2010 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 5
I loved it...their banter is just fabulous! I love the fact that this Bella has a damn good back bone!
Date: 03 Nov 2010 6:26 AM Title: Prologue
Edward had his dreams, the ideas of what life should be and bring. He works hard, he wanted to provide for his family. Be a loving, caring, understanding husband. Sadly his wife had other ideas, so they drifted and mistakes where made.
He has turned bitter and angry, which is understandable, but not the best way to live. Will he really turn his back and forget? Or will he in the future try to figure out who it was and maybe even the why?
Author's Response:
Exactly. Edward is bitter by Tanya and you pose very good questions. His feeling for his dead wife and how he deals with them will come to play a big part of the story, later on. First I need to build the relationship between Edward and Bella but the ghost of Tanya (not being a real ghost but you get my drift) will be brought up again. I don't want anyone to think I forgot about her or Kate because it might be a while before I bring them up again.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 9:21 PM Title: Chapter 4
well, I loved the lemon but ti was sooo fast....I'm not complaining about it...but hot damn...in those times she will either be swept up by edward and held on to for dear life or shunned as a slut!
I am hoping for the first one!!!!!!!!! HAHA!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 1:40 PM Title: Chapter 4
Oh, E-Gutt. DAYUMMM!!! I didn't know you had it in you,girl! Your first lemon was great. I'm a little proud knowing that I corrupted you, good grasshopper. :D
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 2
i love it! I love her personality....awesome job thus far!!!!!!!!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 9:53 PM Title: Prologue
well...its bad enought that he was married to the stupid slut...so good for him to spit on the whore!
Date: 31 Oct 2010 5:30 AM Title: Chapter 4
I loved this chapter! Can't wait to read more :)
Date: 23 Oct 2010 2:30 PM Title: Chapter 4
first of all, you did great for your first lemon, honey! I love this story so much. I can't wait to see what you have next for these two.
Date: 23 Oct 2010 6:39 AM Title: Chapter 4
Wow I was just hoping to see them get to dance together at the ball and maybe steal a few kisses. Definitely didn't expect the lemon. (not complaining) That was hot. I like that he called her "my Bella" at the end. Would Bella call that courting or just talking??? ha ha Great job!
Date: 23 Oct 2010 12:27 AM Title: Chapter 4
You got my attention, keep updating asap. And about the other story I recommend you that you further this one first and then to the other. You are doing a great work
Date: 22 Oct 2010 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 4
Remember the time of this.
Date: 22 Oct 2010 1:38 PM Title: Chapter 4
Great chapter! I'd love to read a darker vamp story!
Date: 22 Oct 2010 12:36 PM Title: Chapter 4
loved the chapter. thought you did very well with your lemon
Date: 22 Oct 2010 10:16 AM Title: Chapter 4
Wow, that was unexpected but HOT! B is really daring in this story. Thanks for updating.
Date: 22 Oct 2010 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 4
That was amazing! I really loved it. Just a little note, when you say "He lifted her skirt up to her waste", it should be "He lifted her skirt up to her WAIST", not waste. I know spell check didn't catch that because it is a word but it is not the correct word for this context. Hope that made sense :) Anyway, I really loved it all so much :) I am so happy Edward will be the only one to call her "Bella"! Cannot wait for more :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the catch. I try and go through and fix my mistakes but sometimes I don't catch them all. I went back and fixed it.
Date: 22 Oct 2010 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 4
wow suprised she was a virgin. was not expecting that though it was a nice change
Date: 20 Oct 2010 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 3
Nice story so far.
Date: 18 Oct 2010 10:48 PM Title: Chapter 3
and now we have Uley's ball and the visit of Maria and Alistar to look forward to. :0) I like how Edward came up with reasons to talk with M.Swan just so he could see Bella. :0)
Date: 18 Oct 2010 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 2
Bella seems like quite the character. I like how she is with her mom. ha ha
Date: 18 Oct 2010 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
Well now maybe meeting Bella will help keep Edwards mind off of Rose and Emmett. :0)
Date: 18 Oct 2010 3:29 PM Title: Prologue
Poor Edward. I'm very interested in reading this story.
Date: 17 Oct 2010 11:39 PM Title: Chapter 3
I like period stories, so, I'm liking your story. A few misspellings and wrong word choices but the plot is entertaining. Look forward to the next update!
Date: 17 Oct 2010 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 3
I so love where this story could go. I started to read it based on a reccomedation by one of my favorite authors, peoplelikeus. I have to agree with Michelle about the banner. It is fabulous, and it does entice one to take a chance and read story. Again, love it. Patiently waiting for more.
Date: 16 Oct 2010 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 3
Wow, that was amazing! Your first sexual scene was amazing :) I really loved this chapter. I am glad Isabella agreed to be with Edward, now I just hope Charles will let Edward court her!
Date: 16 Oct 2010 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 2
That was amazing! I really am enjoying this so much so far :) I cannot wait for more :)
Date: 13 Oct 2010 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 3
Loved the dialogue in this chapter... very engaging. Can't wait for the next chapter. Update as soon as RL allows.
Date: 12 Oct 2010 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 3
thank you for deadlines.
Good start.
Date: 12 Oct 2010 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 3
ah mazinggggggg
Date: 12 Oct 2010 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 3
Very good job! Thanks for the update! :~)
Date: 12 Oct 2010 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 3
Hi there,
I loved this chapter - Bella is wonderful - Love her - i hope that you don't mind but I'm going to rec your story in my next chapter (up Sat). i love it and I want everyone to read it!!
Thanks again for a great chapter.
Michele (peoplelikeus)
Date: 12 Oct 2010 11:28 AM Title: Chapter 3
I love that Charles saw right through Edward's "reason" for coming by and called him on it. It's nice that they apparently approve of Edward. I love the chemistry between Edward and Bella. Can't wait to see where things go from here!
Date: 12 Oct 2010 8:23 AM Title: Chapter 3
i liked it. hope the nexty update is soon
Date: 07 Oct 2010 2:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
wow ah mazing chappy though i hope bella is still s virgin i wouldnt want her to lose it to aligross (alistair)
Date: 07 Oct 2010 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 2
wow. great update. plz update soon
Date: 06 Oct 2010 5:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
oooh that was wonderful! She is so funny and she obviously tickles Edward's fancy! I really enjoyed this chapter - you are spoiling us!
(I love it!)
Date: 06 Oct 2010 10:25 AM Title: Chapter 2
B gets more interesting each time she opens her mouth. I love speculating what you have in store for E & B.
Date: 06 Oct 2010 8:39 AM Title: Chapter 2
loved the chapter and was so happy to see another posted. can't wait fof the next one
Date: 05 Oct 2010 12:11 PM Title: Chapter 1
I am very intrigued! Can you tell me what year this story takes place?
Author's Response:
1837
Date: 04 Oct 2010 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
absolutely in love with this chapter
Date: 04 Oct 2010 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
I loved it and I hope that you do update faster - would you mind if I rec'd your story at the end of one of my chapters? It may not be this week but perhaps next week? Are you planning on updating on a regular basis - like once a week or so?
Just let me know then I will pass that information on when I rec your story.
I really think that you have the makings of a really great story here and I can't wait for more.
Michele (peoplelikeus)
Author's Response:
You can rec. my story, of course. I would never object to that. I am planning on updating on a regular bases but it really depends on my work schedule but I am going to try to update every other Sunday, at the latest. I would like to do once a week but like I said..real life gets in the way. And thanks for the rec. I have big plans for this plot line.
Date: 04 Oct 2010 2:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
Sooo cool. I want to read more, hehe, she has a temper, will he control her IDTS
Date: 04 Oct 2010 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
Good chapter! The scandal! In her corset,shocking! And now, he must have her! Loved it!
Date: 04 Oct 2010 12:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
I know edward was not happy about rose and emmett but he has to understand not all ppl are like tanya .they will be happy together i hope he goes home for the wedding for her and his family.I love how bella just ran into the room i loved it i can't wait to read about the fight she was having with renee and see what she thinks about edward love this story its very good
Date: 04 Oct 2010 11:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
good chapter. Update soon.
Date: 04 Oct 2010 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
loved the chapter. cannot wait for the next update. PLEASE make it sooner. 2 weeks is too long!
Date: 04 Oct 2010 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
great update. plz update soon
Date: 04 Oct 2010 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 1
Intriguing! I'm hooked... I look forward to more. Thanks for the update.
Date: 04 Oct 2010 3:06 AM Title: Prologue
looking forward to more
Date: 03 Oct 2010 8:32 PM Title: Prologue
Great start! A few minor typos, but one stood out more than the others. I thought you might want to fix it: while Edward with drawled from everyone . . . shoud be while Edward withdrew from everyone . . . At least I think that's what you were trying to say. Hope this helps! I'll put this on alert.
Date: 03 Oct 2010 7:25 PM Title: Prologue
I think the summary for your story sounds interesting. I can't wait to read more!
Date: 03 Oct 2010 6:44 PM Title: Prologue
Ouch, he spit on her grave! That was painful, poor guy. What a great start! I'm ready to turn the page and keep reading! Well done!
Date: 03 Oct 2010 4:31 PM Title: Prologue
What a good beginning.
Date: 03 Oct 2010 2:07 PM Title: Prologue
Woah! Intense. Can't wait for chapter 1.
Date: 03 Oct 2010 12:48 PM Title: Prologue
OMG I love the way you write and I can tell this will be a good story. I really hope you continue it. It is so frustrating when someone starts a really good story and writes it so well but then stops and never completes it. i pray that you do continue it and that you update soon every time. i am hooked
Author's Response:
Thank you. I am going to try and work very hard to complete this story. I am posting chapters as I write them and feed back always helps a writer with their stories. If I know people really enjoy the story then I am more motivated to write.
Date: 03 Oct 2010 7:30 AM Title: Prologue
I'm intrigued. I usually shy away from period type fics, but this one seems really interesting. :)
Date: 03 Oct 2010 6:59 AM Title: Prologue
I happened about your story this morning, and I am so glad that I did!! I can't wait for the first chapter - I think you've got a winner here! Great chapter.
Author's Response:
Chapter one is almost complete..I know where its going. You get a glimpse of Bella but she does not really make an appearance until chapter two.