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Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 8:22 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

I think this is wonderful, but I wish Bella would realize that Edward loves her also.



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I love that you can tell, even without me having them say the "words" yet... she will soon

Reviewer: Daisy Crazy Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

Aaaaawwwwwww, Edward is going to be the baby's daddy!!!!! YAY!!!!!! :)

Reviewer: LizE7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

Great chapter, I hope the baby will be alright.
I'm glad Edward wants to adopt the baby, can't wait for more. :)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

:)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

I dont get why Edward is still holding back from Bella since she is 18 now.  Why is he still not embrassing his feelings for her?  She feels like he doesn't even want to touch her.  I hope the baby will be ok.  But it will be really, I mean extremely hard to read if Bella leaves the baby there to go back to school.  I mean why cant they get an in house tutor for the girls?????  That would seem to help them so they can finish at least high school.  I know she wanted to go to college but she could take online courses.  Listen to me, talking like its real life, but to me thats how I read the story and I would do anything to help her.



Author's Response:

I promise it will all work out... eventually. Edward doesnt want to feel like he is take advantage, she is a survivior and her only experince of a physical nature is  violence. It will work out

Reviewer: FlSunshine Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

hmmm so where does this leave bella and edward ??  Can they be romantic now, or have you written that off



Author's Response:

I love romance between Edward and Bella and it will not be written off,

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 2:44 PM Title: Chapter 7 Home and Heartstrings

I loved his pov .they are going to work out just great loved it

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 2:35 PM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight

It was so sad but it was great that she told him the truth and I loved the kiss lol

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 2:23 PM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect

I can't belive I am saying this but I <3 Jake that was awesome that he beat up James .I hope when Charlie gets there they can talk .

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 2:13 PM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace

Iam glad Rose told Bella her stoy and that Bella told her a little bit I hope she can lean on her more now.

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread

I love Alice's shirts lol .I can only hope that being there will get Bella to open up after she feels better and after she gets to know the others more.

Reviewer: ldyidori Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

oh i know all about upsette in the house situation.... been without certain utilities that i am not sure are the best idea to have turned on right before a freaking huge snow storm

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul

Esme is the best! I think even though her parents sent her away this might be the best for Bella she can make friends and start to feel better about her self and talk about what happened to her and see it was not her fault and that she will begin to heal.

Reviewer: mayi Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

: )!!!!

Reviewer: halloweenlover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 1:44 PM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence

that was so sad poor Bella I hope evil vile James get's what's comming to him .can't wait to read more I saw this pimped out on fb in a group that I am in

Reviewer: famaggiolo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 1:39 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

I love this story and found it by chance, it has taken me 3 hours to read all of it in one sitting and I cant believe that how wonderful it is, sometimes it is distracting to read the mistake but I have to put it aside and move on.  The only reason I see them is I beta for Just Ginger or Peoplelikeus and Missy. 

Loved it and seriously can not wait for the update!!!

Fiorella

Reviewer: lovingit3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

So wonderful! Love that he will be her daddy!

Reviewer: unicorn_bliss Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 1:10 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

He has been pretty effing cold to her for a while? Eventhough, he said he wouldn't presuade her to make one choice over another. Sounds like he kind of wanted to.

Really sucks that her kid has a serious illness. She is already so young to even be having a kid and taking care of it. Much, much less a kid that needs so much attention and healthcare.

I'm pissed at Esme for giving Edward a stern talking to, to begin with. If she felt it was wrong from the get go she should have warned him before he even moved in and started working with the girls. She had to know in some part of her mind, that Bella is already practiclaly an adult.

And by talking to Edward behind Bella's back was just wrong and uncalled for.

Had she spoke to Bella personally and stated her worries and opinoins, that's a different matter. If she had done that, it would look and feel like she actually valued Bella's opinoin.

If Bella, herself were uncomfortable. That too would be a different matter. But she wasn't. Esme butting in the way she did just screwed things up instead of helping anything.

In fact, it just made her look like a judgmental shrew that believes Bella far to naive to make her own choices. When the girl has been rape, gotten pregnant during said rape and was kicked out of her house by her own mother. I believe naivete died a long time ago and she is more then ready to make choices that's she's comfortable with on her own.

 

On another note, it really is horrible for Bella to have a speacil needs child. If she leaves to live her life and comes back to be a mom. The time would have already passed and the kid would already have made their own mind on what kind of person Bella is. Even if Edward tells the kid otherwise.

 

(This is why it's difficult for me to side with adotpive kids. They don't know the reasons they were given a way and most of the time assume the worse. While it may be like that sometimes. A lot of the time kids who are given away are from young teens who were raped and just couldn't handle raising them.)

 

I really hope Charlies thoughts on Edward adopting Bella's baby aren't negative.

No worries on the update. I know how the moving process is and it's hell. I just moved in 09(wow can't believe it's been that long already.lol) Took 4months to find a job here and the rest to just find a house. The movers dented and broke a ell of a lot of stuff too..grr.. But good luck with the move in general. Hope it's way better then mine.



Author's Response:

where to start...hmm. I believe edward came off harsh, but i dont think he intended to,  I will have to post an outake of the convo of esme and edward. She was concered that it may look like he was taking advantage of a girl who has been done so already. Her heart in the riht place even though some mothers over step thier bounds. I think she see something special between them and no matter how they fight it ... fate has other plans for them. Charlie and Edward want the same things for Bella. They are alot alike and i dont think they will have the same   animosity that they have in the books. I agree with you review alot.  thankyou so much,  for such a passionate review

Reviewer: carebear31374 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 12:21 PM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

wow another awesome chapter - glad edward put his hand up and has given her the options of returning to them - he is so sweet. enjoy your move - cant wait until next update :)



Author's Response:

thankyou so much:)

Reviewer: mldewolf Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

OMGosh!!  I want Edward and Bella together!!  I'm soo thrilled that Edward wants the baby but I know he wants Bella, too.  A Grandma Esme would be nothing but awesome!!

Yes, this chapter was unusually short but I understand and wish you luck in your move.

I sincerely hope Bella can't walk away.  Even to go to college.  There has to be another way.  She could take classes online and go to the college for exams?  I don't know....just something.

I want Bella and Edward inlove, like I know they are and to show it.

Have a great week!!



Author's Response:

Thankyou so much... the holidays are magic for some*wink wink*...lol

Reviewer: mountainlion718 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 10:06 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

Yeah; but he still avoids Bella, he says he gets to keep a piece of her, but he still acts all professional and cold to her

Reviewer: amandaolsson Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 6:28 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

Good Chapter.....



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thankyou

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 6:14 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

OH poor baby I am sure every thing will be alright right????  Did Bella hear all of what Edward said about when she was done doing what she needed to do they would be there waiting for her???????????????



Author's Response:

 She did hear him, and next chapter will reflect on that statement also

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 5:40 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

well that was a surprise. i am glad he wants the chance to be a daddy. it is great because he does have the love to give a baby who needs it. esme will be a great grandma. also he not only wants the baby but it seems he put himself out there saying she was welcome to come homw when she was done with her school. wonder what will happen next. i do believe bella has the right to call off the adoption. it is sad that when people find out that a child needs are more help that they are labeled. there are special people out there for those children and all involved are special.love it



Author's Response:

i agree with you completely

Reviewer: Rayday Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 5:05 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

It's sad that the baby has a heart condition, but I'm sure with Edward's help and love that little girl will be fine. I just hope Bella decides to be there w/ them.



Author's Response:

Thankyou so much,  there will be HEA... eventually

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

Best Parts:

He said a condition like this was hereditary then he asked if anyone on my side had heart problems. I said no and realized that this had to come from James's side. That fucker affected her even from the grave

 

I grabbed Edward hands and put them in mine. The tears had already started to flow uncontrollably. I put his hands on my belly

" Edward Cullen, would you do me the great honor in being her father?"

She must of loved that idea, since she took this opportunity to kick me for the first time and in the palm of his left hand.

Edward looked up from his hands in amazement, He's eyes glistening in unshed tears

" I would love nothing more then to be her Daddy"



Author's Response:

AWW thankyou, those parts were my favorite also

Reviewer: michele_my_bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 5:02 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

perfect.......bella wont leave her...never! i  love this story.



Author's Response:

lmao... we shall see, thankyou so much

Reviewer: leAnn0388 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

Great chapter!



Author's Response:

thankyou

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2011 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 13 The ties that bind

awww esme would make a great grandmother.



Author's Response:

i believe she would also...

Reviewer: mfoxee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Jan 2011 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

I know everyone wants to see Bell and Edward together right now but I think he is doing the right by giving her some space she needs to make her life's decission without his influence plus he is her doctor so its not appropiate,

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 5:30 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

wow i was very shocked to learn mike didn't kill his brother. seems his dad took matter into his own hands, that was a big surprise.  seems james was quite busy. too bad he wasn't stopped long before but he is gone now. this family has alot to get through.

heartbreaking for rose but she did what was right for her at the time. at she will be in the child's life. so not all doors are closed.

well bella seems papa charlie is hoping you make the decision on keeping the child. your mother was the one not wanting to have anything to do with the child. seems charlie has come around and wants bella to make a different decision. maybe she can attend community college and her dad can help. but again she needs to do what is best for her and only she can make that decision. loving it

Reviewer: helluvabell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 5:10 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

Such a great plot! I look forward to the next chapter :)

Reviewer: mrsrpatz Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 3:05 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

It is sad that Edward has stepped back but I really understand why he did it.

Reviewer: ldyidori Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

bah please say it isn't james's parents... Awesome chappy

Reviewer: mountainlion718 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2011 12:41 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

i understand the general idea f what Edward is trying to do, but does he have to be so cold about it? :( so, wow...Mr. Newton did it?!?!

Reviewer: flower123 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

edward wants her to keep the baby and so does charlie but in the end it is her decision. and it will be a hard one update soon

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

I feel so bad for Edward. He loves Bella so much. It must be so hard to see her everyday and ignore your feelings. Bella needs to do some serious thinking. Does she want to throw away Edward  and the baby like her mother threw her away like she wasn't important. Bella has a support system. She is not on her own unless she chooses to be.

Reviewer: FlSunshine Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

So that menas Mr. newton did it in the hospital room with a plastic bag.?>?>?  Edward's stance he has taken upsets me, I am surprised she has taken it as well as she has with hormones and all.  usually when prenant you are emotional crying or horney and now she seems to eb nothing just flat lining thru as you could say.  I meas I understadn what he said and all, but still if he loved her and didn't want to just get into her pants, he could be closer. oh well

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

:)

Reviewer: cullengirl08 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

I'm not happy that Edward took the step back from Bella.   No matter what, they were happy together.   I understand that Bella still wants to go to college, which would take her away from Edward, so I can understand his reasoning, but it still hurts that he is pulling away from her.   Geez, it's only the first chapter, and already  miss the two of them together.   I just want Bella to change her mind where Edward is concerned.   He's a good guy and they really like each other.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

WEll I was dissapointed to find that Edward is stepping back from her.  That was not right.  He just lead her on then put more stress on her because he too abandoned her.  I was shocked it wasn't Mike but oh well.  I think her next visitor is probably Jacob.  Maybe that would open Edwards eyes.

Reviewer: michele_my_bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 4:51 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

after my daughter died, my hubby and i decided to adopt. after having to give to babys back, we were blessed with a son. my heart is so into this story...thank u

Reviewer: Natsar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

WOW! Bella was a little harsh on Edward. He had not even done anything wrong.



Author's Response:

i agree, she needs to keep them hormones in check

Reviewer: mldewolf Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 2:22 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

Great chapter!!

Breaks my heart for Edward and Bella.  I understand but it still hurts.

James' dad killed him, didn't he?

Can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

yes,  it looks like Mr. Newton did off his son... thankyou for your review

Reviewer: lovingit3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

Wonderful chapter!

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 12:12 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

Ya I was sure it was Mike did he give the box to his dad???  Edward wants Bella to keep the baby as theres???  He cant say away from her for very long.



Author's Response:

Yes, Mike gave it to his dad. His dad was going to turn it in, untill he found out about Bella's pregnancy, then he decided to kill his son to keep Bella and His grandchild safe.. I believe in HEA, its just going to take some time, and yes edward cant resist for long

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 12:04 PM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

Don't let Renee set her back, please!  E&C wants that baby and I am starting to want him too!  LOL  James is dead so they don't have to worry about that.  Let Esme and Edward keep the little guy while Bella is at school.  Charlie will visit I bet and stay in her life or he may even retire.  Anyway am so into this story.  I look online for updates all the time.  I have to get ready for work now.  I know this is sad.



Author's Response:

I believe in HEA and it will all work out in the end.. thankyou for the review

Reviewer: carebear31374 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 11:42 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

oh i so love this story - can understand why edward is back away.......i hope rosalie copes ok - good she has emmett



Author's Response:

I am so glad you get why he had to back off from her, rosalie will have a hard time for awhile, but it not like she will never see her son again, and we love emmett

Reviewer: unicorn_bliss Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 8:25 AM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

Hmm..this is such a sensitive topic on it's own. She's already to late to be considering aborition. There is one option out.

(why she didn't simply take the day after pill-the day after she was raped. Is beyond me.)

I guess the biggest issue I have is Bella's whole future revolving around a man to keep her happy. Not just any man, but a docter. Someone who isn't likely to be home often nor be able to take care of the kid as much.

Another issue is her age and career. She had a plan and it got fucked up because she was raped. Most people in her position would wind up resenting the kid from holding her back for her future. Or from holding her back from being able to act her own age.

She now(maybe) has a child to think about and keep first priority. She isn't married and her parents aren't much help. While Charlie is an 'o.k' father. He obviously doesn't know how to raise a kid. How else would Renee feel so entitled to her treatment of Bella? This can't be the first time either.

Charlie's neglact is what has me questioning his character and advice.

Then there is Edward. While he is a great guy and obviously loves Bella (even though he knows hardly anything about her). He isn't the baby's father. Nor is he married to Bella. Though he is pretty content with his life because he was able to live it to the fullest and is ready to settle down.

That doesn't, however, mean Bella is.

She has mentoned multple times how kept she has been. The moment she steps out of line she gets raped. She hasn't been able to lead a teen life or even experience life. Now she is expected to take care of another life. When she, herself doesn't know or have experienced it. (I personally think that's a bit much to ask for.)

Edward shouldn't hope for her to change her plans. He should be encouraging her in another direction. If he wants her to keep the kid. For instance, giving her advice about college online if she wants to continue it.

Though I think it still sucks that way as well. She will be at home either way with no real commincation with anyone besides the baby and maybe Edward. (This is also another reason why/how mother's resent there kids.) She won't be able to go to any college parties or stay up all hours simply chatting and doing homework with friends.

*sigh*

Bella being as smart as she is, why didn't she take the day after pill? (it's free and no docter would ever report it.) It's even mentioned in Sex Ed now in middle & highschool how to get it and everything



Author's Response:

Wow... You are right Bella is going to need her time to experince life. Edward adores her and  despite the age and he's her doc he sees where he crossed the line and is giving bella her space. Charlie  i would say  was rather blind to Renee untill Bella ended up pregnant.  I think charlie always had the best of intentions where she is concerend . he made alot of mistakes. and is trying to make it up. I can understand the resentment  one would feel.  and that wwill be addressed later on... as for the morning after pill. The only thing i can say is during that time, she simply didnt think of it. she was in denial up until the positive  test.  Bella was in the mindset if she didnt think about it.. it didnt happen. Bella will make decsions that best for her.  I thankyou so much for this passionate review, i hope i can cover all your points in future chapters

Reviewer: Hermionerox89 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 7:04 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

i love how edward is pushing her to see her other options and is hopefully only staying away so his presence doesnt influence her decision.  i too hope she keeps the baby.



Author's Response:

Thankyou for getting his intentions. he wants her decsions to be hers and hers alone, no outside influence

Reviewer: amandaolsson Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 6:55 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

Good Chapter......



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thank you so much for your review

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

hmmm  What a way to break it to her eddie.  



Author's Response:

I know...  sigh. tough love

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

well i hope for her sake that she keeps the baby! cant wait til the next chapter 



Author's Response:

Thankyou for your review

Reviewer: Biancarose123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 6:20 AM Title: Chapter 12 skeleton's in the box

i hope she keeps her baby



Author's Response:

thankyou for your review:)... we shall see

Reviewer: Rayday Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 6:11 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Okay, so I can completely understand why Bella jumped to conclussions when it came to what she heard on the phone.

If I had to guess, who killed James, my guess would have to be......Mike.



Author's Response:

you are the only one who wasnt hard on her. thankyou for your review

Reviewer: Rayday Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 5:57 AM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

I loved the gift of the bracelets...that seemed perfect. I hope that Bella stays in Arizona.



Author's Response:

i thought so too,. they have a bond no matter where they are

Reviewer: Rayday Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 8 Poison Pen

Renee is simply the ultimate witch! She doesn't deserve a daughter, especially one like Bella. She also doesn't deserve the husband that she has.



Author's Response:

i agree

Reviewer: Rayday Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect

Will Charlie be suportive? Or will he blame her for what happened?



Author's Response:

thankyou for your review.. it all in the next chapter:)

Reviewer: Rayday Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2011 4:32 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace

I'm glad that Rosalie saw the signs regarding Bella's behavior. I hope they will be able to help each other in the healing process.

Reviewer: LiLi82 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2011 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

interesting!!!!



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thankyou for your review

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Jan 2011 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

well my bet is on his brother. i think his brother was so upset and that this wasn't the first time  james did this and he did not want him to get away with it again. i bet mike might have had a crush on bella and felt bad. just thinking

i so love edward and bella getting closer, hot. rosalie is too cute in helping out bella with taking care of her needs

love the story



Author's Response:

Thankyou. so much for review.. love your ideas:)

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 9:37 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

That was a superb ending to the chapter. This just gets better and better.

Author's Response:

Thankyou

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 9:18 PM Title: Chapter 9 Anatomy of Loss

Had both my sons 10 weeks early (4 years apart) so I know a lot about pregnancy and the complications that can ensue. I had pre-eclampsia on the second, the risks are high and it is thanks to the doctors and nurses that so many babies survive.
You touch all the right notes about teen pregnancy in this story.

Author's Response:

Thankyou.. I have my own experinces to touch on.. I had my first at 16.. my mother had delivered a stillborn and my sister had one pass while in the womb. I was blessed that my only problem had been pre-term at 7 months and had to be put on bed rest. Thankyou for your review

Reviewer: artri Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence

Don't know what to say, at her age and in her situation, I would have jumped at the chance. That is why it takes all types to make the world

Author's Response:

very true... i prolly would have too to be honest... but a good friend of mine didnt, she  went threw with the adoption

Reviewer: lovingit3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 1:09 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

WOW can't wait to see who killed James!



Author's Response:

glad you like it and thankyou so much for your review

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 10:40 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace

I'm confused if Bella is only 2 months gone then surly she has plenty of time to abort or maybe its just a story device???

Author's Response:

yea she had plenty of time.. she knew that but asked her doc not even suggest that as a possiblity to renee. she wouldnt have gone through with it and didnt want renee to force her

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 10:19 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread

Rosalie did the right thing, Bella should have told them all and put James ass in jail

Author's Response:

i agree:).. people do things without thinking sometimes.. thankyou for your review

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Wow, so Edward can't resist anymore and is jumping right in with a teenage pregnant Bella...Can't wait to see what Esme or Charlie have to say about that...and with that being said, at least she had a nice birthday celebration.  Really enjoying your story so keep up the good work.

PS - Glad that Charlie is giving Renee the boot. The way she has treated Bella has been pretty unforgivable in my mind.



Author's Response:

it was a fast and impilsive thing... hormones and tension got into the way... time will progress after this chapter

Reviewer: cullengirl08 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 1:09 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Well, that was no loss for society.  Ooops, did I say that?    Sorry.   I'm thinking Mike was the one who pulled the plug.   He has been extremely angry with James for awhile now and really upset with what he did to Bella. 



Author's Response:

Lmao....  killer will be reveled soon. I dont like to frag things out... thankyou for your review

Reviewer: lmw Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Wow, I wasn't expecting that.  Wonder what Jacob was dong (or even Charlie?).  Can't wait to find out who the "killer" is!



Author's Response:

i may include a small snippit of charlie in next chapter... he is our connection to the case. thank you for the review

Reviewer: mrsrpatz Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Jan 2011 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Who would have killed James??? I wonder if it was Mike or not and how will this affect Bella and Edward's relationship??



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we will know soon, thankyou so much for the review

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Edward told Bella that he was screening things for her. She needs to calm down. Edward loves her. She needs to allow herself to be loved.



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i agree:)

Reviewer: mfoxee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

THe hormones making that girl crazy. Not to sure i agree with them starting a relationship.



Author's Response:

hormones are a bitch.. relationship no, i think its too fast, she has an attraction to him, but at this point he is more into her, shes stubborn and holding on  to her plan she isnt ready for a serious relationship. it may seem like they are heading that way with the touching and  them being intimate... all i can say is people do alot of things caught in the moment

Reviewer: flower123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

omg wow so did not see that coming!who did it? please don't say jacob. its those preggers hormones that drove her to starting fighting with edward like that update soon



Author's Response:

I love jacob.. those pregger hormones are  rough

Reviewer: FlSunshine Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

holy cow??????  hmm wonder who it could have been, mike maybe.  Well about  Bella and Edward i hope they can work out there little trust problem.  Was hoping for another lemon.  Rose is funny a mana bout a rabbit.



Author's Response:

I love rose, glad u liked it, want to cut some of the drama with some humor.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

:)



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thankyou:)

Reviewer: mountainlion718 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

it's gotta be those hormones right, cause she's just way too bitchy (espically to Edward, who loves her) for a simple overheard phone call to cause that kind of reaction. she's gonna have some MAJOR aploigizing to do. I think Charlie had something to do James death or Maybe Jacob had one of his boys do it?

Author's Response:

I agree... she has got some hormones a going.  and need to say sorry to edward. thankyou for your review

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

she can never catch  a break! 



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I am hoping her drama will even out soon.. thankyou for your review

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 3:16 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

couldnt have happened to a nicer guy.



Author's Response:

I so agree.. thankyou

Reviewer: mldewolf Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 3:04 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

WOW!!  GREAT chapter!!  Can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

Thankyou so much

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 2:06 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Oh Good James is dead!

Probably one of his past rape victims!!

Reviewer: michele_my_bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

i want them to keep baby swan.....please :(



Author's Response:

There will be a rocky road ahead, but i believe in HEA

Reviewer: carebear31374 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

does edward want bella to keep the baby - i have notice in this chapter as well as the last just to way he touches her or talks about it.....just wondering. another awesome chapter - can't wait for the next udpate :)



Author's Response:

 He has an attactment to the child... and we will see that  evolve

Reviewer: meadowmate78 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 12:47 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Holy Cow!!! At least Edward didn't do anything wrong-and no whores were involved(hehe)!



Author's Response:

lmao thankyou so much

Reviewer: meadowmate78 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 12:37 PM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

I don't know how I missed this chapter!!!!! Please tell Kayla Happy Birthday:)



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Thankyou for your review

Reviewer: cullenetc Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 12:17 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Still loving this story and I appreciate that you update so often.  I am a little confused and may have missed something though.  I thought that Edward wasn't considering going after Bella because he is her Dr, and the age difference.  Then it seems like all of the sudden he in full make out mode and promising to always give her anything that wants.  It just seemed really fast.



Author's Response:

sine another epov is a few chapters down the road. I will say that yes her age was a factor for him, but she turned 18 and the dr patient thing was a concern but after she spent 2 days sedated, he evaluated his feelings. he has come on a tad to strong. its an intense thing for a minute and then we will get to a realitc pace. He's feeling like he doesnt have all the time in the world and hes feels like he has to move quickly, so that she makes the decsions knowing that there are more options to her now then what she came with... I hope this made a bit of sense. thankyou for your review i appreciate you asking... msg me anytime you have a question

Reviewer: amandaolsson Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 12:13 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Good Chapter......



Author's Response:

Thankyou

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

OMG, I imagine Charlie will be their prime suspect.  Oh sweet justice James don't RIP.  LOL



Author's Response:

Thankyou for your review:)

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

What a wonderful B-day gift wow.  Must remember Bella is very hormonal so she will get away with screeming at Edward LOL.  I cant say I am sad that James was killed but who did it???  I hope they dont blame Jacob for it.



Author's Response:

THANKYOU FOR BEING MY 200TH REVIEW!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 7:41 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Wow I was very happy that Bella got some release BUT.... everything was writtin well until the end of her release then it was like WHAT? did she cum or not because you just faded off there.  Anyway, I am glad that Edward is there for her and she has time at the pond to think.  I am surprised that she is not even considering keeping the baby.  As for James I was shocked that someone killed him.



Author's Response:

 i should been more specific.. but yes, thats what i was trying to say when she described a relief, better next time, thankyou for your review

Reviewer: CarrieLynn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 11 Karma's present

Lcve my rabbit-but would take a Docward anyday



Author's Response:

i agree thankyou

Reviewer: mrsrpatz Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 6:16 AM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

Well I guess that Edward's feelings aren't going to be kept a secret for much longer.....



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thank you for your review

Reviewer: flower123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 4:39 AM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

wow edward making some moves on bella update soon

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jan 2011 12:00 AM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

Bella needs to apply to schools in Arizona. She needs to see all of her options. When she applied to Dartmouth, she was a different person.



Author's Response:

time will move a bit faster after the next chapter. we will se soon

Reviewer: kaybrans Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

:0)



Author's Response:

thankyou

Reviewer: lonely_angie17 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

loved it!!!! cant wait for more!!! :D



Author's Response:

thankyou, hope to have it up soon

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 4:39 AM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

I love this story.  I love that Edward is always wanting to be there with Bella to share everything in her pregnancy.  He seems possesive sometimes and I love it.  He is very protective and I love that too.  Gosh you had to end it when it was getting so exciting.



Author's Response:

Thankyou so much..

Reviewer: FlSunshine Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 3:45 AM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence

i didn't mean that your chapters weren 't long enough, just that for Edward to be right there, and the middle of that conversation, and I know he was going to kiss her.  hope you understand



Author's Response:

oh i know. i hate when i'm left hanging myself... i dont like to do that hopefully chap 11 will make it better cause i didnt like where i left it either

Reviewer: meadowmate78 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 9 Anatomy of Loss

So I am hooked on this fic!! My first child was stillborn-so yeah its REALLY hard. Can't wait till the nextupdate-andfor Renee to become someones bitch in jail:)



Author's Response:

Thankyou it means alot coming from someone who has been where victoria is. I hope i do Victoria's situation justice  some sort of reality to those who have lived it

Reviewer: michele_my_bella Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jan 2011 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 10 Life goes on

me heart u fangs ;)

i luv this edward. he seems like he has his own idea of what their future will be.. cant wait for the update!!! does he kiss her or will they be interupted????i will what, patiently



Author's Response:

awww thankyou so much, hope to get chapter 11 out soon

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