Date: 12 Mar 2010 9:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
You may call it jacked up what went on up there but i call it brilliance. That was fantastic! It may have seemed a bit rushed but I was thoroughly entertained in that short bit of time. I can't in good heart blame her for her being with James. This handsome stranger walks in and literally sweeps you off your feet. Charming and clever is what he is was. And she was vunerable. She had no bearing, she was just trying to stay afloat after being left alone and thrusted into adulthood by the lost of her parents. Her lifeline..
She offers her love( maybe from her perspective) and protection. Who wouldn't accept there was little to consider. But as we saw this was just a lure. He showed his true colors eventually. But she started to grow as Alice and Rose enetered her life and became apart of her own lifeline which I think she thought included him. But guess it was him or nothing at all.
If and when she opens up again I hope with caution she'll give E Cullen a chance.
My only regret is that there wasn't more of this.. It may sound greedy but hey..girlie it's your fault for this awesome piece of work...
But I am grateful for this bit...
Thank you! It was just a lil something I needed to get out of my head. I think there is an author that is going to expand this story for me.
Date: 17 Feb 2010 10:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
wow....it was amazing....I was all excited cause it looked like it would be a really happy cheerful oneshot....and then it wasn't! haha! But it was brilliant!
You captured her grief perfectly, " I felt like my entire world had been pulled from under my feet" I loved that line!
The time went by really well, and it was really really well written! I loved reading it....can yu believe when I heard the words blonde handsome guy, I thought Jasper??? I thought you may have decided to bring him into a story....but no...LOL...I'll do the Jasper for both of us!
It was wonderful bb! Really great! One of the best one shots I've read in a while!
Date: 16 Feb 2010 10:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
Sad it only one Shot.Really
good job u did..)
Date: 16 Feb 2010 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
Was this supposed to be a one-shot? Because so much happened in such a short period of writing time, that's all, it just felt.... kinda rushed, that's all I'm saying. I feel like you could have fleshed it out some more over several chapters so we could feel Bella's angst.
You are correct. It was kinda rushed but I literally wrote it as soon as I woke up and ya know the dream was way faster than what I wrote. It could be fleshed out and who knows what I may do! Lol
Thanks for reading!