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Reviewer: twirob13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 May 2014 2:55 PM Title: Epilogue: Seasons Part 2: Winter Lands

absolutely AWESOME story even the second time around but still waiting for the other epilogues and the o/t ;) its been quite a while so i hope you are well and return asap ;D

Reviewer: cpan Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Oct 2012 1:21 AM Title: Epilogue: Seasons Part 2: Winter Lands

Loved your story! Are you still planning on posting the last two epilogues?

Reviewer: Alybethed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2012 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 25: Everybody and His Brother

hahahahaha "Al, you’re not chugging Red Bulls again, are you?”

Imaginig Alice the Hyper-Pixie on Red Bull? PRICELESS!!!

 

Reviewer: Alybethed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2012 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 24: A Jury of Our Peers

lmfao!!!! XD i literally fall on my butt laughing with tears on my eyes!! you girl!!!

Reviewer: Alybethed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2012 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 23: Just Add Water and Stir

FINALLY!!! And here I thought that they were gonna keep going at that 'noble' pace!! Jesus! But DAMN!  let me tell you, that was HOTT! *_*

I love how your stories map out, it fantastic. You are a great and awesome writer. Have you ever thought of publishing?

Well need to go and  buy a pepper spray! Someone show that they work wonders!!!! Shhhh! oh and the baby shampoo!! :D

Reviewer: xxlovexx Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Dec 2011 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 44: Just Desserts

Almost halfway through the story and they still haven't consummated their love yet?

I don't know, I'm not being impatient it just seems like the story if full of useless

fillers and now it feels like your dragging it out. Does the story even have a major 

Plot? The edu. Obviously isn't an important factor seeing as we know nothing about

their classes other than the occasional I have a term paper due, what direction is the 

Story going in other than b/e wants to have sex but everyone else prevents them 

By interrupting then asking for details later. will the story finally end once they have 

Sex or will Bella's dream come true, I'm not asking for a plot outline just a reason 

To look forward to reading the story other than cockblocking because right now it just 

Seems like a waste of time to continue reading.



Author's Response:

Actually you are MORE than halfway through the story and they haven't consummated their love yet. Bella just broke things off with Jake a week ago and isn't ready to hop into bed with Edward yet. Some fics are about the slow burn and the chase. Kind of like Twilight was...you read four books to get to ripped pillows and feathers everywhere. This story actually follows some of that same progression. But I tried to tell a story that was how real life might go. With humor. With fluff. And a relationship developing. And sexy lovemaking, when the time is right. I'd like to think there is a plot. Bella's safety is threatened. Edward is forced to deal with past demons. There are some major difficulties to get past and that is coming up. But what do I know? I'm not an actual writer. If you're looking to read actual penetrative sex, without any further character development or relationship development or plot twists between now and then, you should just jump right to chapter 60. And that event actually takes place just three weeks after they first met; two weeks after the break up with Jake.  

Reviewer: lmking Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29 Nov 2011 2:14 PM Title: Chapter 1: Putting The Move On

Just finished reading "The Transfer".  I LOVED IT!  You have a great talent in writing.  It was such a good story, I was sad to see it end.

Would love to see a mini (or longer) story about Rose/Emmett, and Alice/Jasper.  Show us what made them the couples that they were.  

 

Reviewer: LanaLee1248 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Nov 2011 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 71: Prepilogue: Same Window; New View Inside

This review covers all seventyne chapters. Gosh, I felt like I was back in college. It is a fun and exciting story. The love scenes are beautifully done, the emotional struggles are very well written and I have fallen in love all of your characters. Thank you so much for writing this lovely tale.

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Nov 2011 4:43 AM Title: Epilogue: Seasons Part 1: Fall Leaves

agh! loved it!

Reviewer: pixiewriter Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Oct 2011 11:31 AM Title: Chapter 71: Prepilogue: Same Window; New View Inside

Oh I googled the anthurium...It absolutely was the perfect flower for Emmett to find.  I did like how you had him do the roses though.  Incredibly sweet.  Looking forward to the epilogue!

Reviewer: deecie72 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Oct 2011 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 69: Facing the Future

Absolutely ADORED this story.  one of those that i'm so sad to send end.  you are very talented!  so lucky!

Reviewer: AlliSweets Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Oct 2011 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 69: Facing the Future

I absolutely loved this story! It bad everything..romance,comedy,pain,lemony goodness,&Love! Thank you for writing such a great story & i can't wait for more from you! =0)

Reviewer: pixiewriter Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Oct 2011 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 69: Facing the Future

I have totally enjoyed this story all the way through!!!  I loved how you incorporated things from previous chapters here....you know to what I am referring.

 

Awesome job...I look forward to your epilogues, but I will miss borrowing Jasper and his kilt...



Author's Response:

Hi pixiewriter!

I have been absolutely horrible with the review replies. Too much going on. But I have really enjoyed all your reviews over these many chapters. I will certainly lend you Jasper with or without his kilt becaue you always returned him in such good condition when you were through with him. Each and every time. ;) I think you will really enjoy the next few epilogues---they will really feel like a continuation of the story...they do somewhat pick up where this leaves off, I just don't take you through every single day as I have before.

Thanks for the love, bb!

-bannerday

Reviewer: janell Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Oct 2011 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 34: A Change in Plans

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Date: 02 Oct 2011 12:01 AM Title: Chapter 33: Rocking Her World

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Date: 01 Oct 2011 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 32: Rocking His World

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Date: 01 Oct 2011 10:03 AM Title: Chapter 31: Expect the Unexpected

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Date: 01 Oct 2011 9:20 AM Title: Chapter 30: Leave Them Wanting More

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Date: 01 Oct 2011 8:46 AM Title: Chapter 29: Mood Lighting and Ambiance

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Date: 17 Sep 2011 3:50 AM Title: Chapter 28: Weekend Plans

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Date: 17 Sep 2011 2:00 AM Title: Chapter 27: Comparing Notes

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Date: 17 Sep 2011 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 26: Points of View

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Date: 16 Sep 2011 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 25: Everybody and His Brother

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Date: 16 Sep 2011 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 24: A Jury of Our Peers

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Date: 16 Sep 2011 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 23: Just Add Water and Stir

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Date: 16 Sep 2011 3:54 AM Title: Chapter 22: Non-date? Nonsense!

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Date: 15 Sep 2011 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 21: A Black Day For All

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Date: 15 Sep 2011 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 20: The Movie Fades to Black

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Date: 15 Sep 2011 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 19: This Might Be Working Out

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Date: 14 Sep 2011 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 18: Plunging Into the Deep End

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Date: 14 Sep 2011 4:14 PM Title: Chapter 17: Stepping Off the High Dive

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Date: 14 Sep 2011 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 16: It's Not Always a Picnic

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Date: 14 Sep 2011 12:58 PM Title: Chapter 15: Dawn of the Dilemma

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 14: Partial to the Blush

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 3:34 PM Title: Chapter 13: Your Place Or Mine?

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 12: Just Let Go

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 11: Movers and Shakers

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 10: Cookies Anyone?

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 9: Restless Night

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 6:09 AM Title: Chapter 8: One Step Forward

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 5:38 AM Title: Chapter 7: You Call That Dancing?

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 6: Starting to Squirm

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 4:34 AM Title: Chapter 5: Reorganizing

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 4:07 AM Title: Chapter 4: Ground Rules

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 3:42 AM Title: Chapter 3: Shaking Things Up

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 3:18 AM Title: Chapter 2: Settling Down, Settling In

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Date: 13 Sep 2011 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 1: Putting The Move On

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Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Sep 2011 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 68: Moving Forward

Young guys, so emotional.

 

I think James needs a trip to the nut house. THose pictures show premeditated plans. Not all made in the same day..

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Sep 2011 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 67: This Is Not the End, Part 2

has anyone stopped to think what has happened to Bella. James stalks her Edward fights him off after he is trying to kidnap her. Now after a stint in the hospital to fix said injuries from kidnapping. Edward shuns her...........

 

SCREW MEN.

Reviewer: clemm Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Sep 2011 12:49 PM Title: Chapter 68: Moving Forward

frickin awesome story!!!! I love it so much.

And Edward, god.... *swoons*

please update asap! I live it when they talk. You're a great writer. Their chats seem so real.

Reviewer: jennlen522 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Sep 2011 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 67: This Is Not the End, Part 2

i love this story and it is sooo time edward got over this shit  just cant wait to see what romantic moves he pulls to get forgiveness for being a stupid ass man

Reviewer: pixiewriter Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2011 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 67: This Is Not the End, Part 2

God I missed Jasper and his wacky way of wording things!  I really liked this chapter though I wish Edward hadnt let things get so bad, but then I guess he wouldnt really be Edward then would he?

 

Good job, can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: jennlen522 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Sep 2011 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 66: This Is Not the End, Part 1

love this story  this cullen group is so much fun  looking forward to update

Reviewer: naughtynati Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 01 Sep 2011 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 12: Just Let Go

Poor deprived Eddie. I hope he sees some loving soon.

 

Reviewer: naughtynati Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Sep 2011 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 10: Cookies Anyone?

 

Morning wood, finally some action ... I don't think Edward can wait a few more chapters.

Reviewer: naughtynati Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 31 Aug 2011 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 2: Settling Down, Settling In

I like the similarities, but I hope Edward isn't an uptight virgin in this story.

Reviewer: naughtynati Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 31 Aug 2011 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 1: Putting The Move On

Nice start....can't wait to see what happens next :)

Reviewer: almoncla Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Aug 2011 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 66: This Is Not the End, Part 1

good chapter, I know its not going to be easy to get over everything that happened. Hope Edwards not going to flip out!!

Reviewer: Wascas Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Aug 2011 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 66: This Is Not the End, Part 1

Aww so the next ch the last one?...... :,( so sad
This story really has gone by super fast

This ch. is so sad though it really does happen to the best people I mean I'm siting here in my living room w/ my iPad crying my eyes out!
because Edward is just so sweet is such the gentelman i realy feel terible that he is blaming himself and I don't know how Bella dosen't see that? but I just have this nagging feeling that something is wrong........ I meen it's very unlike Edward to not text her at all? :( ........ I probably just worry to much though

~wascas

Reviewer: nicole1962 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Aug 2011 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 65: Post Traumatic Stalker Disorder

bella will be ok i hope edward too:)

Reviewer: nancy123k Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Aug 2011 4:38 AM Title: Chapter 65: Post Traumatic Stalker Disorder

EDWARD DEFINETLY NEEDS TO TALK TO A THERAPIST.  WOW SO MUCH GOOD BUT SO MUCH BAD!!! I HOPE THINGS ARE LOOKIN UP FROM NOW ON!!!! GREAT UPDATE!!!

Reviewer: almoncla Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Aug 2011 3:54 AM Title: Chapter 65: Post Traumatic Stalker Disorder

good chapter, glad Bella was not hurt anymore than she was.

Reviewer: pixiewriter Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Aug 2011 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 65: Post Traumatic Stalker Disorder

A very emotional or angsty chapter for our Edward here.  Poor guy needs to give himself a break.  I really liked the small Jasper/Edward bonding moment at the end there.  It gave it a little lift before Edward dragged it down slightly.

 

Good job once again!

Reviewer: the real teacher Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Aug 2011 7:24 AM Title: Chapter 64: The Bubble Bursts

ok....so that wasnt so bad

Reviewer: dax Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2011 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 64: The Bubble Bursts

I can't wait to see how this continues. i love the story thank for a new chapter can the nextone come soon please.

Reviewer: inge15 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2011 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 64: The Bubble Bursts

ooh mann!!!! please hurry and ud!!!!

Reviewer: Alabastdelf Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2011 12:56 PM Title: Chapter 64: The Bubble Bursts

That was intense to say the least,but extremely well written.And I can only have hope and trust your skillfulness.So I`ll wait patiently.Thank you.

Reviewer: pixiewriter Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2011 11:53 AM Title: Chapter 64: The Bubble Bursts

Oh My God!!!!  I'm so glad you didn't go down the kidnapping route.  Been there done that.  But I did enjoy this chapter.  I loved Bella's comeback with Emmett...so perfect.  Can't wait for your next chapter!

 

Oh yea, and is there any chance I can borrow Jasper again this weekend?

Reviewer: nicole1962 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2011 9:18 AM Title: Chapter 64: The Bubble Bursts

too much crazy peopels on streets

Reviewer: Wascas Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2011 5:01 AM Title: Chapter 64: The Bubble Bursts

Whooooo...I think it's time for a few calming meditation breaths.............

Ok now that that's taken care of.....holy hell bannerday that was some intense Edward right there and then I was getting toards the end and I was like if we have another cliffy I'm gona b pissed man..... But no your just to nice for that so thank you

Wow that was some really sexy possessive Edward there .... My girly parts were tingling lol

Can't wait for an update
~wascas
Can't wait for

Reviewer: almoncla Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2011 3:58 AM Title: Chapter 64: The Bubble Bursts

OH WOW!!! I didn't know what was going to happen when I started this chapter. Crap what a cliff hanger... I love this story, please dont make us wait to long to see what happens!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Wascas Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Aug 2011 6:38 PM Title: Chapter 63: Reality for Better or Worse

Omg you cliffy mean-e I can not wait to c what happens.....although I'm sure Bella will c james down by Edwards car then Bella will figue out that Edward was keeping things from her. :( silly Edward, the longer you wait to tell the worse it gets :( anyway really ah .....intreresting ch. ......Edward is just so......creative lol :)

Reviewer: almoncla Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2011 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 63: Reality for Better or Worse

NO..not a cliff hanger!!!!! Great chapter loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: nicole1962 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2011 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 63: Reality for Better or Worse

dont tell me he got to bella:(

Reviewer: Wascas Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jul 2011 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

Awww bb it's so cute there little "sapling" has grown into a strong thriving citrus fruit bearing tree!
Great chapter It was so ironic when Bella was like "You're not some fictional character in a romance novel?" lol well it looks like she may have caught on bb. We've been discovered but not for infringing of course :D
~wascas
Ps. Oh by the way did u get my email?

Author's Response:

Hi Wascas!

No I didn't get your email.  :( Did you send it off of my profile? Wonder what happened there. Give it another whirl, maybe.

Glad you liked the strong and thriving citrus tree. ;) And my "your not a fictional character..." line. Sometimes I just write things to make myself laugh.

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: almoncla Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jul 2011 3:12 AM Title: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

so great , love the end of the chapter!!



Author's Response:

Hi almoncla!

I've been positively wretched with the review replies lately. thank you for continuing to read. I'm glad you liked this chapter. and the ending...where Bella contemplates marriage and talks with Edward about his parents and hers, it gets me every time I read it...and I wrote the damn thing. ;) I'm glad you liked the ending. It's an important ending.

Thanks for the review and for continuing to read!

-bannerday

Reviewer: BellaRoseBelikov Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2011 12:34 AM Title: Chapter 61: Orbitting Celestial Bodies

wow. you've been a very busy girl this week - thank you :)



Author's Response:

Hi BRB!

I'm sorry i didn't reply to this sooner. I've been on vacation. glad you liked chapter 61. I hope you like 62. More sexy because you just can't get enough of Edward and his sexy. ;)

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Wascas Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jul 2011 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 60: Supernova

Hey bannerday I'm all caught up now in my fanfic readin and rl seams to have calmed down momentarily so I think I leave u a very nice in depth review First off I just want to say mm mmmhhhhhhh......yum.....Edward.....this Edward is just so cute I'm just such a fan of dorkward <3 to be honest I was a little woried that this ch. Would be kind of disappointing because of my crazy high expectations but it was still really good I did kind of wish u had an epov in there but it's still really good Now it might just be me and the fact that I kind of rush when I read but when Edward was undressing Bella I was kind of confused because I thought she already had the bra off and then Edward started taking it off off her and......I was really confused but alls well that ends well and that undresind defiantly ended well I mean how could Edward undresing someone not end well lol ;) ~wascas



Author's Response:

Hi Wascas!

I am so behind on my review replies. I'm hoping over the next few days to get caught up.

I love a sexy dorkward. He's sexy when it matters most and he's dorky when it's appropriate. Just the perfect guy! The EPOV...comes next chapter. I think you'll like it. ;)

And no, Bella had her underwear on---both panty and bra, when he twirled her to get the full effect of the special undies set she bought just for him, just for this night. Maybe I should have stated that more clearly. And then Edward slips her straps down her arms, unhooks her bra in back, and voila! BOOBIES! ;)

I'm going to post chapter 61 today, so look for your EOPV!

Thanks for the review!

-bannerday

Reviewer: pixiewriter Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jul 2011 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 60: Supernova

Thoroughly worth the tortuous wait!  I loved the Emmett moment as you called it at the end....  It's going to be very interesting to see what happens once they return to school....

 

You're doing such a good job, keep up the good work!



Author's Response:

Hi pixie!

Sorry i fell off the reply bus. I've been busy and then on vacation. Glad you liked the "FINALLY!" chapter. ;) Turns out Edward has some Emmett humor hiding within him. We've just never gotten to see much of that because of all the angst and emoness he's been hiding under for so long. But yes...Edward's a silly boy, much like his Big Bro and Resident Advisor. ;)

Thanks for the review. hope you are continuing to enjoy.

-bannerday

Reviewer: pixiewriter Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jul 2011 11:09 AM Title: Chapter 59: As the Stars Align

Ahhhh!  So close, yet so very very far.  I could have sworn this was THE ONE.  Oh well...I did really like this chapter.  I think my favorite was Edward forgetting that they would need to eat dinner...haha, such a guy mistake. 

 

Can't wait for your next chapter!

Reviewer: almoncla Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2011 3:39 AM Title: Chapter 59: As the Stars Align

oh loved it, cant wait for next chapter

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Date: 09 Jul 2011 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 58: Part of the Build-Up

Oh geez banerday I was all happy and giggles during the chapter then I got to the a/n and I feel like it's almost the last day day of classes and I have to say goodbye to all my friends (all the characters) :'( that may sound a little crazy but I really feel like iv gotten to know all the characters and this is goodbye :'(
Edward forever in my heart,
Wascas

Reviewer: deecie72 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Jul 2011 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 58: Part of the Build-Up

can't wait for the next chapter...but BOO for the end...thanks for the warning tho!  MUAH!

Reviewer: Hannah411 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 09 Jul 2011 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 9: Restless Night

i really am loving this story!!! its so good!!

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Date: 07 Jul 2011 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 57: So Near and Yet So Far

Hey bb this ch. Was so funny I kept rotfl
"Where do you keep his scowling half-naked gang of homeboys" well edward i could tell you where I would to want to have them but you don't have one of those so.......;)
By the way your new story sounds really good and totally sexy but I hate waiting for updates (I'm the kind of person that can just sit down and read a whole book) so I usually try to wait until story's have like 20ch published and the plot is fairly developed to start reading the begining

speaking of that that about how meany ch. Do u think are left in this story?....... Just curious
~wascas

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Date: 06 Jul 2011 11:59 AM Title: Chapter 57: So Near and Yet So Far

nice charlie:)

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Date: 06 Jul 2011 3:51 AM Title: Chapter 57: So Near and Yet So Far

oh loved this chapter, the scene in the woods was great and with charlie!!

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Date: 06 Jul 2011 12:46 AM Title: Chapter 57: So Near and Yet So Far

I just continue to love and enjoy this story so much.  To see how far Edward has come...the relationship between he and Bella is so real.  Would that men like that truly existed!  Can't wait to see what happens on their "First Night!"

Reviewer: Coleen561 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2011 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 56: Flirting With the Long Arm of the Law

Great chapter!  The shopping trip was funny, the dorm meeting well done, but the scenes with Charlie were the best!  From cleaning his service revolver to suddenly needing a glass of water after going to bed, it was perfect!  I just love being in your Edward's head.  Hilarious!



Author's Response:

Hi Coleen!

Glad you liked 56. I love the idea of Bella going lingerie shopping with Alice and Rose...you know those two want the deets! Emmett comes through in the pinch...he can be serious when he has to, thank God. But I loved writing the whole section with Charlie and everything that was running through Edward's lovely head...all policey and criminally minded and such. ;) Poor Edward. He is his own worst enemy.

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: inge15 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2011 3:39 AM Title: Chapter 56: Flirting With the Long Arm of the Law

loved it, as always :)



Author's Response:

Hi inge!

Glad you loved it, as always. i appreciate the review...as always. :)

-bannerday

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2011 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 47: Good Times Then and Now

What a great party for all of them



Author's Response:

Hi t!

Glad you liked the party for Esme. You just know she's happy as a clam to have all her kids home and have their significant others, and that even broken little Edward has a significant other. ;)

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Coleen561 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2011 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 54: Out of Left Field

You said it was a hard chapter to write but it turned out GREAT!  From the frottage in the morning to the creepiness of James' conversation with Bella it was an exciting and suspenseful chapter!



Author's Response:

Hi Coleen!

I thought I'd balance the creepiness at the end of chapter 54 with the cuddliness at the beginning. I had a hard time making James creepy yet not over the top. I just wanted him to kind of slither in and then slither out. I figured her classroom would be rather unexpected. I have very little bad guy experience, so it wasn't too familiar to write. Glad you thought the chapter was GREAT. THANKS!

-bannerday

Reviewer: Wascas Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2011 2:48 AM Title: Chapter 55: The Waiting Game

Cute ch. But I play colege softball and love the game to death so my opinion may be a little biased.....
And of course i love Edward to death so .........yes definitely a little biased........
he would be welcome to slide home on my field any time and slide home other places.......
~wascas

Author's Response:

Hi again, Wascas!

Glad you liked the baseball chapter. Over the Line is a great game if you've never played it. It's fun for people who have no real skills and people who do. I'm not sure I explained it well, but you could always... Google it...if you were interested.

And Edward in a baseball uni...oh. my. freakin'. HOT!

Okay. Gotta go take a cold shower now.;)

-bannerday

Reviewer: trixielou Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2011 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 56: Flirting With the Long Arm of the Law

Love It, Love it, love it....

 

I am sure Charlie is not done with him yet.... But I am sure he will go to bed with a smile :D

 



Author's Response:

Hi trix!

Thanks for the storylove!

There will be a smile on that boy's face when he goes to bed...I can just feel it, can't you? ;)

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Wascas Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jul 2011 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 54: Out of Left Field

I can see y u felt the need to re-wright this ch over and over. on one hand you don't want Edward to seem like a stalker but it has to show that he cares a lot because he does. And James can't step over a certin line or the police will be forced to get involved and james knows that so it really is a rather difficult balance. However I think you did a very good job with the chapter:) on a lighter note, if u ask me Bella should just get a restaining order :) from James the creeper

~wascas

Author's Response:

Hi Wascas!

See, you got the problem. It's hard to figure out how to make James creepy enough but not go over the line. and Edward has to keep himself in check too. And then that whole baseball game, I thought that was maybe confusing, but I wanted it in there...they can't spend their time worrying about what might happen...they have to live and have fun, but I didn't want it to seem too frivolous, like they weren't taking the stalking seriously, you know?

Thanks

-bannerday

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jul 2011 10:11 AM Title: Chapter 46: The Business of Appetites

What a wonderful day and very refreshing LOL.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you felt refreshed upon reading chapter 46. I know I felt refreshed. Perhaps not as refreshed as Bella and Edward, but I was refreshed, nonetheless. ;)

Thanks for the giggle.

-bannerday

Reviewer: almoncla Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jul 2011 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 56: Flirting With the Long Arm of the Law

great chapter, it's always funny with charlie around.



Author's Response:

Hi almoncla!

I think it must be Charlie's mustache...it's all-powerful and the boyfriend knows it. ;)

thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: pixiewriter Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jun 2011 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 56: Flirting With the Long Arm of the Law

I think my favorite part of this was Edward's stressing over meeting Charlie.  I loved that he managed to break Jasper's rules before even officially meeting Charlie!  So funny, but poor Edward because he didn't even start it.

 

Thanks for letting me borrow Jasper again... He was on his best behavior...well that being a relative thing, you know?  Hope he doesn't mind if I borrow him again next month sometime, with your okay of course.

 

Great chapter!  I love this story so much.  Can't wait for your next chapter!!!

 

~pixiewriter :-D



Author's Response:

Hi pix!

Edward didn't even git in the door at charlie's and he was breaking all the rules Jasper had laid out do thoughtfully for him. ;)

I'll keep Jasper on the shelf here, waiting for you. Just let me know. He can be ready at a moment's notice. just throw the kilt and a few pairs of socks in a overnight bag, and Presto! (Notice I didn't mention underwear...need I say more?)

Thanks for the Storylove!

-bannerday

Reviewer: Wascas Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2011 5:04 AM Title: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

Whooooooo! Stalker twist and a cliffy! Nice one bannerday!
~wascas

Author's Response:

Hi Wascas!

Glad you liked that stalker twist cliffy! Thanks for the review!

-bannerday

Reviewer: Wascas Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2011 9:06 PM Title: Chapter 51: Surprise, Surprise, Surprise

Oh yes bb I am right hear and James is just such a baster I just want to .......I dont know exactly......... everything I think of does't sound bad enough but I will make him suffer.......a LOT
Lol
Well on to the next ch......
~wascas

Author's Response:

Could James be any more creepy and gross? You go get him, my feisty little Wascas! Give him hell! lol

-bannerday

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