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Reviewer: Petralouise Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2017 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 1

You should keep going with this 

Reviewer: Sevendevils Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Aug 2013 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 1

I liked it but I don't think there was an explanation about the conversation edward over heard the first time when Bella seem to have been talking to someone. Above all I liked it.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for reading.

Reviewer: Snow one Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2013 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 1

Enjoyed the story. Would have liked to know more about the conversation he over heard. 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading. This one was just tricky for me. Maybe I will try and add to it at some point, thanks for the feedback.

Reviewer: sandras Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2013 4:04 AM Title: Chapter 1

that was hot i am so horny!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading

 

Reviewer: Cullensbabymama7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Aug 2012 5:37 AM Title: Chapter 1

this was just wonderful!!



Author's Response:

Thank you. Sorry about the lateness of my response Gmail sent all my reviews to my junk mail.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2012 8:17 AM Title: Chapter 1

While I'm sure this wouldn't be my cup of tea, if it makes them happy, why not? Different strokes, and all that.



Author's Response:

LOL, yup. thanks for reading. Sorry about the lateness of my response Gmail sent all my reviews to my junk mail.

Reviewer: fangrl Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Dec 2011 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 1

Enjoyed the one-off. I can see how this could have been a much longer story, but it was still good in a condensed version. Cheers!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for reading.

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Oct 2011 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

wow good job you should try again maybe reverse rolls



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading. i don't know if I'll do another bdsm, but I guess never say never.

Reviewer: 1918 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2011 6:57 AM Title: Chapter 1

You said in your a/n that this was your first attempt at BDSM; I thought it was great!  :)



Author's Response:

Thank you  :)

Reviewer: HeartOfDarkness Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2011 1:01 PM Title: Chapter 1

oooh wonderful! great job on this sweets! I know I'd be struggling to write a BDSM story, so congats on doing such a great job on this xx



Author's Response:

Thank you so much

Reviewer: mesmerizeme Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Jun 2011 11:46 PM Title: Chapter 1

Beautifully written! You did an absolutely wonderful job on this story. I think you have a good knack for writing this ;) From reading, it seems like it came naturally, even if you thought it was hard. 

I loved Edward's tough demeanor while at work, yet his willing to completely give over in the bedroom. And Bella's shy demeanor at work, but her commandingness in the bedroom. They both know just where to give and take. 

I felt bad for him when he thought Bella was playing him. But her willingness in the contract was a huge sign of commitment :) I loved it.

You did awesome, hun! I adored it and you wrote it beautifully! x

Reviewer: Silverspoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jun 2011 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 1

Well that was a fun introduction into the world of BDSM for me. You may have created an addict.

I especially loved the end of this - in essence, you made the dirty about love overall, which somehow makes it even better. Great work. A pleasure to read for The FFA Read Along.

 



Author's Response:

Yes, for me it always has to be about love. Glad to have you on board the smut train! LOL

Reviewer: twilightobession Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jun 2011 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed reading this. I just have to ask a few questions. If Bella has a really nice and large house what is she doing working as a waitress? Plus she has high end toys. Also, I thought that when they went to Bella's house the first time that they rode in her car together and talked. But then Edward left in his car. I was a little confused. Also, I thought that he had changed into a more causal attire before he met Bella back at the bar, but it said that he removed his jacket and his button down shirt, like he was still in his suit.  My BIG question is.....Does Jasper know Bella? It seemed like to me that Jasper was pushing Edward to go back over to the bar and meet with her again....kind of like they (Jasper and Bella) had been talking and maybe knew each other. That was just in the back of my mind as I read your story. Thanks for sharing with me.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading. I'm sorry it took me a couple days to get back to you , because I wanted to re read and see if I could explain. You were right about the car, and I went back and changed that. Having them talking in her car and then he gets the directions, and follows her there.

Edward takes off a jacket yes, but I never intended it to be a suit jacket, just a summer jacket is what I pictured, and he is more causual but still in a button down, cause i think that's sexy. LOL

 

Bella is working as a waitress but she more than likely owns shares in the place, which is why she has expensive toys and such.
And no, she didn't know Jasper.

 

Hope that clears some things up. Thank you for such a thourough review. I like to be able to fix those continuity errors.

Reviewer: TwiAggie94 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 May 2011 1:10 AM Title: Chapter 1

Very nice. Sad it may be your only of the genera
. You did well!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much. It was just really hard to write, maybe I'll just sneak some light bondage in my other fics. LOL

Reviewer: shewoolf Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Mar 2011 8:23 PM Title: Chapter 1

Good story, but I'd like to see a LOT more of it.



Author's Response:

Thanks. I really love the genre but find it very hard to write. Maybe one day.

Reviewer: queenbee311 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Mar 2011 3:18 AM Title: Chapter 1

Hey Mama, I enjoyed this short storie very much. Thank you. I hope you do this again!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much, it was fun...and scary to write.

Reviewer: ccaajjaa Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2011 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 1

Interesting start particularly with Edward as the sub.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for reading.

Reviewer: Lori 94 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Mar 2011 12:26 AM Title: Chapter 1

I have a few comments.

1) I enjoyed the story very much and there were no misspellings or gramatical errors that I'd have to read around.

2) The one problem I have is that part of the reason she sent him the package was to address the reason he left without saying anything to her that first night and she didn't address that at all. She just said that it will never happen again. If he didn't explain himself, she would never understand.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your comment. I understand what you mean and I sort of wished you had been my pre reader now. LOL. There should have been a bit more discussion about why he left, you are right.

 

Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2011 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 1

:)



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: kitkatr Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Mar 2011 4:59 PM Title: Chapter 1

Very, very hot! Loved your story! Hope there will be more to it!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much, I think this will be the end of that one. As much as I love reading BDSM, writing it is hard! LOL

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