Date: 15 Jul 2016 7:01 AM Title: Parts of life
If there was ever a stupid Jacob in a fanfiction story, yours takes the cake! Number One all the way! He is with a Mafia gang, a Mafia family and he sleeps with a capo's wife! Yeah he was young but I think one of the first rules that would be mention if not automatically known was the no sleeping with wife's , and Nicole now understands more than she probable ever wanted too. I feel for Bella, she will be the only one who will ever mourn the kid, he was nice to her, a friend and I even feel for Jasper because he had to finish a nasty job that was done in Edward's club, it is just a good thing that Edward was more worried about getting to Bella and than slapping around the idiots for doing this in his club!!!
I loved!!!! Your humor between Aro, Edward, Carlisle,Emmett, and Dam about being a father and what that details, ESP. For them! I was drinking something when I read the line about Carlisle biggest job will be keeping Hannah of the pole!!!! And being a lunatic Edward's kid will only have half a chance of being normal!!! These guys have not been around Bella too much, the kid stands no chance at being normal! Poor Soony! I wonder why Edward changed the name they decided on, was he in such a fog that he totally forgot on what they decided? Well since I know there will be two sons, we know what they will name the second child!!!! Great story! Can not wait for the birth. I know what you mean, I wanted Bella pregnant so bad and than I wanted her to already have the kid! Because you made her real! You made her whiny and a brat and that is what a lot of women get when they are expecting a kid, ESP., when they have a husband who buys them lots of gifts to keep them happy and also to say sorry I messed up again!
Date: 14 Jul 2016 8:12 PM Title: Helluva Day
I can not believe people wanted you off FF.Net!!!!!! Are they stupid???? Brain dead???? This is my very first Mob story that is in parts I have ever read ( thank yo to Carole Long from England, who insisted that I read this, now you can not tear me anyway) what is so terrible about this story? I have read hotter, more steadier sex scenes in Ff and this is a Mob story, what did people think mobsters do? Go to clubs and play Candycane Land or twiddley Winks??????????
i have to tell you I was so mad at you when you first started this chapter but at the same time I kept thinking something is off! Bella's right, something is wrong, Edward is all over the place, could not stick to one subject matter. What's wrong and when he admitted he did a few lines of coke I went ohhhh! He better decide and decide right now to leave that shit along or he will do something he will regret for the rest of his life. He could hurt Bella really bad while coming down off the drug, no wonder Aro was staying around and getting in between Bella/Edward/Jacob, someone was going to get hurt and maybe deadly hurt! He knew, he'll he probably saw Edward do it or been around enough of the crew or done it himself to know what was going on.
I saw a documentary from about a black man who in the seventies and eighties became the richiest drug lord in the Harlem New York area and nobody could understand how he remained at the top and in the documentary he said, the secret in dealing with drugs is you sell them, but you do not do them!! His downfall, was meeting some young thing that did drugs and got him to do them and like Edward told Bella there was someone waiting in the back of the line, wanting it all and turned on the man and he went down and the new guy went up!
one thing I will have to say you keep things honest! In most fanfiction stories I read the couple will have wild sex til the baby is born and I would think how? And for the woman who may love to feel sexy, how can you feel sexy when you are eight and a half months pregnant? No woman feels that sexy when she is that big, the biggest thought is, get this baby out of me!!!!!!! GRET story, keep them coming!
Date: 15 Jun 2016 2:31 PM Title: Prove It
I feel like I should report this story........ For being AMAZING! I've been reading it in my spare time all week! I don't know how I've missed this story in the past. It's so captivating and always makes me want to read more.
[Report This]Date: 14 Jun 2016 12:10 AM Title: Bebella
I'm back for the 3rd time this year! 2016
Date: 06 Jun 2016 3:07 AM Title: A Bitch Named Karma
This chapter broke my heart! And Bella saying I did coke and drank,,,, I killed it! I cried right alone with her. I feel for both but Carlisle is right, even though Edward doesn't want to hear it. He is way too selfless right now to have a child or children. It he thinks it isn't safe for Bella because he has pissed off the wrong guys, do you think they will think twice about hurting his children? They were willing to kill Bella. This SC game that includes these Russian guys, I do not trust one bit and I sure would not trust them with Edward's family. I know they will try for a child, right away, usually women who have had a miscarriage want a baby as soon as possible, to take the empty feeling out of them. Bella said it herself, she feels empty.
as for her parents, I am with Edward, they put her into a heavy stress that could have started the miscarriage. I think I am with Edward, maybe not kill him but I think the man and his right hand Man Sam and even Renee need to be taught a lesson and they need.to be told their presence there did not help, it might have been the cause of it.
I hope Bella let's Edward call Emmett! He needs to know, she is close to him and he could possibly give her a comfort that Edward just does not understand but Emmett does as he was with her when she went through the first miscarriage.
i did not for one minute did misunderstand Carlisle's talk with Edward! In my mind, Carlisle all but told him he did sleep with that girl but I have a feeling it might not have been the one Edward thinks. He is a pig! But he does have his good qualities! I just would not want him for a husband, he will drive Esme crazy all during their marriage.
great chapter. Although it is a sad one!
Date: 03 Jun 2016 12:59 PM Title: The Trouble in Little Odessa
Reading this and I thought this was a good chapter, and yes it was violent but it is a Magia story and if you are going to write one that is as real as you can make it, than there will be violence! The Mafia Families are violent and they protect their families and there terrority as good as they can!
what I do not understand and hopefully someone can explain it to me! Why go after Bella? It was explained in this chapter that the wife's and children are never touched! It is the rule of all families! Is this some kind of rogue team or is this a plot to really get Bella and not Edward. Does someone want Bella gone? I do not know but I fell this is more than what it seems.
one thing I do know is that if the BOSS ever gave the order for Bella to be hit/killed, Edward would kill everyone before he would let anyone else kill his Bella. And I am sure if Bella did die by the MOB or just a car accident or some other just plain accident if they did not have any children before she would die, Edward would follow her. He would kill himself in a second, he could not live without his Bella.
Date: 29 May 2016 9:00 PM Title: Icing on the Cake
trying to review, but not working
Date: 29 May 2016 8:53 PM Title: Bebella
okay it took me 10 DAYS to read this. Could have read 5-8 fics in that time. Damn this was looong. [And, yes I now have to read the sequel]
I don't like fics about mobster, or sports, but I finally broke down and read this. Been in my TBR list for years. It was compeling. Hooked me on the first chapter and kept me readin until 2am many nights. Hardly have done any housework in these last 10 days.
I know nothing of that life style, and have only seen all 3 Godfather movies, nothing else no GoodFeelows, Sapranos, and def not Scareface. But you wrote this as though you had some insight into the whole mob life. I say Bravo and it was a fucking great read.
THANKS
Date: 27 Apr 2016 6:51 AM Title: Leaving Plattsburgh Outtake of CH13
I was on twifanfictionrec.com looking through some fics and noticed it said this was going to be published. The Storm Series are at the top of my favorite fics and so I was wondering if you plan to remove it once it's published? Is there somewhere it can be downloaded to pdf if that happens. I can't imagine not being able to read Bebella and The Skip. I have to agree this series should be published. It my opinion you are one of the most talented authors I've come across. That includes all of your fics as I am currently reading The Story Of Us for the second time. Best of luck with publishing and please let me know about the pdf.
Date: 19 Apr 2016 9:54 AM Title: Round One
Holy cow! What a chepter! He doesn't know it and she doesn't either but they are very much in love with each other, Nanny saw it the first time they met her! I do not know if the illness is true oe Nanny is pulling a fast on on them but I have a feeling this is the beginning of a epic union and Edward is going to show all those cheating men including his father and half brother want a real man is like! They do not cheat, they stay true to one woman because he never wants to betray her and break her heart! As of now all I see is misery for Esme! I do not know how that marriage is ever going to survive, they may love each other but Carlisle is going to destroy Esme, if he doesn't wake up! And Marcus is not going to be too happy about his unhappy daughter! Edward on the other hand I think he wil be a 90% good husband! you got to take ih his and her stubborn tempers, they will have some dosy fights to come but like Jasper said make up sex is great! Can not imagine it being any better for them, it is powerful right now!
Date: 18 Apr 2016 3:57 PM Title: The Game
Another great chapter! They have it bad and both are going to fight this every step of the way! I wonder what it is going to take to make Edward realize he loves her? I think it will be easy for her to know but Edward fights his feelings,bad! Maybe Nanny will make him see, or will Bella have to be in some sort of danger or wreck and nearly dies before it hits him over the head how he feels about her! I am so glad she didn't do his dirty business, I could not believe he was putting her in harm's way! It only takes one little thing to go wrong and it is over. I can not wait to see how he handles Bella's parents, esp., her father! No one is going to disrespect Bella, not even her own father! It his a must for any relationship, to be respected and in a Mafia marriage and family being disrepectful can get you killed!
Date: 18 Apr 2016 3:02 AM Title: The Wedding Part Two
Ok I have to admit a FB friend I just met from England Carole Long begged me to start reading this saga and I admitted I hem hawed about it, I mean it is like four or five stories and I love sagas but they take so much out of you! But you have me hook, line and sinker!
And nd not till the wedding was I sure about this story! Esp., this chapter! I thought Bella was acting a little slutty, needing money I understand but to pimp herself out to the scumbag Carlisle! Thank God Edward saw her FB page and was intrigued! Oh Edward, she has you, hook, line and sinker my friend and you will walk happily into that church waiting for the "one your Nanny has been telling you about since you were a little boy!
I hope Bella can make Alice a little more refine but who knows! These women walk right into this line of business, with their eyes wide open. They have too, if they didn't they would be killed right away! Bella understands a little, she probably understands more with the job Edward is giving her tomorrow! I think he will be a nervous wreck! It will probably be her last job from him. He will not risk her anymore, esp., when he realizes his true feelings about Bella! I think he will be true to her, please make him true to her, once they are a commited couple. I could not bare to see her being disrespected by any man but esp. Not Edward!
I once saw a show where the actor who played Carlisle said he was the compassionate vampire, did nothing really stunning! Well you my friend have made him a total douchbag! I hate to think him and Esme will have children and if they are boys how they will treat the women in their lives! I hope you make him grow the hell up!
Last thing I am going to say! nanny is a hoot! I love her and at her age I know she will not be around for all the stories! I will hate to see her go but what a profound statement she told Bella and I hope she gives it a lot of thought before she marries Edward. I think he will not cheat on her, in fact I think all the other men will think something is wrong with him for being faithful to Bella! But the good lord and you have ways of cursing men like Edward in his bachelor days, they are called daughters! If he and Carlisle have daughters they will lose their minds! To know their are men ot there who are or were like them and they are out on the loose with their daughters running around! Edward will have a heart attack by the time his daughter reaches her twenties! I am looking forward to that! Great story!
ii.
Date: 10 Apr 2016 9:47 AM Title: Round Three
So! This popped up when I was trying to type a review. I really love this story. I love the way Edward's whole life is changing. How he gets all frazzled and even crys with actual feelings over her!
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Date: 09 Apr 2016 11:59 PM Title: Round Two
Maybe these two will finally realize that they do love each. My parents married each other after dating only 3 weeks! They were together until they died, 6 months, they were in their eighties! God I miss them! When you know it's right you just know it!
You are such an amazing writer! I'm loving this story! Thx for writing this amazing story, luv!
Anita (Atwiggs
Date: 28 Mar 2016 4:29 PM Title: Aruba
Oh Carlisle is such a little boy! He better let Esme have a little Kinkery before She goes looking around!
Date: 28 Mar 2016 3:19 PM Title: The Game
Oh Lexi, I am truly loving watching these two fall in love or is it friends ;). You are an amazing writer luv! So glad I found this story!
Date: 28 Mar 2016 7:20 AM Title: Something in the Water
Loved it! Yay they made up!
Date: 27 Mar 2016 10:44 AM Title: Diplomatic Immunity
Loved it!
Date: 27 Mar 2016 6:39 AM Title: Quick Like A Cat
Loved it!
Date: 26 Mar 2016 4:52 AM Title: Boxed In
Loved it! Stupid Alec and Jane!
Date: 26 Mar 2016 2:41 AM Title: Bella Cullen and the Mafia Prince
Loved it!
Date: 25 Mar 2016 11:01 PM Title: Wrapped Around my Finger
Excellent chapter!
Date: 25 Mar 2016 6:08 AM Title: When Shit Rolls Downhill
Loved it!
Date: 25 Mar 2016 4:57 AM Title: A Bitch Named Karma
Loved it! Poor Bella and Edward!
Date: 25 Mar 2016 3:58 AM Title: Antipasto
Loved it! Poor Bella!
[Report This]Date: 22 Mar 2016 10:12 AM Title: Leaving Plattsburgh Outtake of CH13
Love this story. It's always in the back of my mind during the day, and something I look forward to reading - truly a guilty pleasure!
Date: 22 Mar 2016 6:06 AM Title: Bebella
Oh god this was so funny with poor "horny" Bella trying to get her freak on while drunk!
I have to read more now!
Date: 19 Mar 2016 4:11 AM Title: The Trouble in Little Odessa
Loved it!
Date: 15 Mar 2016 10:45 PM Title: Epilogue
I love you. You're awesome.
Date: 23 Feb 2016 8:22 PM Title: Leaving Plattsburgh Outtake of CH13
Just finished rereading Quite Storm for the fourth or maybe fifth time, and I still really love it. So thanks for writing such a great story with brilliant characters.
Date: 21 Feb 2016 8:46 PM Title: Bad Taffy
Loved it! Go Bella!
Date: 21 Feb 2016 9:09 AM Title: Lousy Day at the Slots
Loved it!
Date: 20 Feb 2016 4:42 PM Title: Light my Fire
Excellent chapter!
Date: 20 Feb 2016 1:03 PM Title: Decision/Draw
Loved it!
Date: 20 Feb 2016 10:29 AM Title: Round Three
Fantastic chapter!
Date: 20 Feb 2016 9:25 AM Title: Round Two
Loved it! They are perfect for each other!
Date: 18 Feb 2016 12:08 AM Title: The Wedding Part Two
Carlisle is just unbelievable.
Date: 17 Feb 2016 11:24 PM Title: Bella
Another great chapter.
Date: 17 Feb 2016 10:32 PM Title: Bebella
Oh boy I'm rereading this story and I guess I just forgot how funny your Bella was great chapter really love this story.
Date: 11 Feb 2016 7:52 PM Title: Wrapped Around my Finger
I don't ever comment on stories, but this chapter had me rolling. Bc it's exactly how I act with universal and Harry Potter. Seriously I spewed water out of my nose. Good job.
[Report This]Date: 10 Jan 2016 2:47 AM Title: Helluva Day
1-9-2016
Hi, this is probably my 30th time reading this series. I love your works.
[Report This]Date: 09 Jan 2016 10:23 PM Title: Oobotz
1-9-16
This is about the 50th time I'm reading this series. You did an excellent job!
[Report This]Date: 09 Jan 2016 9:45 PM Title: Skip's Day Off
1-9-2016
I have to let you know that this is probably my 50th time reading this series. I love them so much. Your writing talent is spectacular!
Thank you so much!
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2015 5:08 AM Title: Quick Like A Cat
I love this two
Date: 22 Nov 2015 12:24 AM Title: Bebella
i have read this story on the fan fiction site once before, then it was taken off that site. it has taken me quite awwhile to find it again. howerver ican tell you for me i can't read it too many times. the whole series is just great and i think you are a wonderful writer. i hope that you will continue writing. thank you for putting your stories out there for us who don't write to read and enjoy. than you thank you. 11/21/15
Date: 04 Nov 2015 12:27 PM Title: Bebella
That was hot. You've got me hooked:)
Date: 30 Sep 2015 4:11 AM Title: When Shit Rolls Downhill
I'm reading this for the second time because I wanted a good series to get into and it had been a minute since I read it. Still fucking great. :) Just wanted to let you know.
Date: 28 Aug 2015 3:27 AM Title: Aruba
OMG!!!
I think this may have been one of my favorite chapters yet...
Poor Esme...
Carlisle is such a slime ball...
And I'm loving Edward and his NOT knowing self...
AKA... Cluelessward...
Date: 24 Aug 2015 2:07 PM Title: Bebella
I love this story so fucking much and it's freaking long ass story too but you know what it doesn't matter because it's so fun and the story is never boring. I don't know how you do it but i can always expect some random shit that can happen and also your Bella is funny as hell! I'm almost done with the story so i'm going to read the sequel right away! lol Thanks for sharing this story and your talent! :D
[Report This]Date: 23 Aug 2015 2:31 AM Title: Bebella
DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
They were SO right about this story!!!
It's addicting as hell and this is just the FIRST chapter!!!
OMG!!!!
How will I ever get anything else written or read until I finish this....
UGH!!!!!!!!!!
I'm SO Loving this...
And if the 1st chapter is this good, than the remaining must be "FUCK HOT" as Be-Bella would say... LMAO...
Date: 15 Aug 2015 7:37 PM Title: The Wedding Part Two
Loved it!
Date: 15 Aug 2015 6:38 PM Title: The Wedding Part One
Loved it!
Date: 21 Jul 2015 2:36 AM Title: Bebella
I'm gonna be honest.I've lpost count of his many times I've read this .I just absolutely love it .All of it .From the awkwardness to the crime...it's like a version of twilight that I actually want to read. I Dont know if you're still around or not...but I heart your words .
Date: 17 Jul 2015 3:34 AM Title: Edward
Loved it! Fantastic story so far!
Date: 13 Jun 2015 11:56 PM Title: Epilogue
Maybe one day you'll write it as an outtake.
Date: 03 Jun 2015 8:33 AM Title: Bella Cullen and the Mafia Prince
This chapter was scrambled couldn't read it. It needs to be fixed.
[Report This]Date: 25 May 2015 2:33 AM Title: Edward
I was feeling a little down and as always I had to re~read one of my favorite stories to feel better. You know it's a great story, I know it's a great story so continual reviews aren't necessary this time.♥ READ YOU SOON.
Date: 22 Apr 2015 2:23 PM Title: Stars in the Sky Outtake
I love all these extras. This is the 2nd time I have read this sfory. I love it.
Date: 07 Feb 2015 1:07 AM Title: Bebella
Starting on this story once again for my 3rd time! Yes! It's THAT good!
Date: 24 Jan 2015 4:32 AM Title: Epilogue
I thoroughly enjoyed your story!!
Date: 06 Jan 2015 12:57 AM Title: Antipasto
hey guys whats the chapter when edward got his tattoo
Date: 04 Jan 2015 12:23 AM Title: Stars in the Sky Outtake
wow
Date: 02 Jan 2015 1:23 AM Title: Something in the Water
the story: Scars and Souvenirs by ashma0407 is no longer up. Do you any other sites it might be on? love your story. nelisabeth68@yahoo.com
Date: 03 Dec 2014 3:36 PM Title: Quick Like A Cat
Second time reader here!! I love it, each chapter makes me laugh or cry as if I was there!!
Date: 21 Nov 2014 8:35 AM Title: Bebella
Absolutely awsome. I read this a few years back and it still makes me laugh as hard as the first. Love Mr. FuckHot and Bebella!!
[Report This]Date: 14 Nov 2014 4:25 PM Title: Bella
Your story is so enjoyable and at times I find myself in a full on belly laugh! Bella is so quirky, and Rosalie is funny with her pinching and on the sly comments. At times I can see cannon Bella's personality come through just a bit.
Interesting how you have Carlisle and Edward as half bros in this story; and had it not been for the banner with the two of them with Aro, I would have the blonde Dr. Carlisle in my minds eye, nice that I have a reg brown hair Carlisle to put to your story instead.
I look forward to diving back in to your story.
Date: 06 Nov 2014 1:39 AM Title: Every Dog Has Its Day
OMG Lexy, I am reading this story for the millionth time and I have been laughing so hard! I am also so very drunk, since I always read the chapters with a glass of wine, however, somewhere, I just had half a bottle! Laughs weere needed in my life today ajd uou are just so very talented! I was in Brooklyn this year so now I hear their accent in my head, wich I love! I really hope and pray that such a beautiful and extraordinary talent gets share with more people, either piblishing your own book or on a tv series. Luv ya gurl!!
[Report This]Date: 30 Oct 2014 2:05 AM Title: Stars in the Sky Outtake
Woah! The first time I read this story I did not read this Outake. It is so strange now to read about Ray Rrook FCI. I travelled from FL to NY to visit my brother in Ray Brook FCI this past summer. Many things were different from what you wrote, but of course, that's fiction for ya...
[Report This]Date: 24 Oct 2014 7:50 AM Title: Round Two
I am reading the series again because...well, because I love your stories. I read a quite a bit of FF, as well as continuing to read published works (kindle, hard/soft cover and listen to audio books). I probably consume about 8-10 books/stories per month. And, yes, I work full time at a job that is a hour commute (hence the audio books). I have been reading this much for a couple of decades - I love fiction. Your sroties are some of the best I have read. You caracters are incredible and way you weave a tale just blows me away. i am constanly impressed by the development in the plot and of each of the characters. The people grow and change - they have feelings that are so real and complex and you do such a good job of communicating that to the audience. i love them and hate them, cry and laugh with/at them. i even get so angry at them and feel disappointed in them. I feel all of it and that makes a great story. Thank you again for sharing you talents with us.
[Report This]Date: 20 Oct 2014 8:29 PM Title: Epilogue
So much love for this book. Not my first time thru, and since I rarely ever re-read, that's a statement right there. These characters are so gritty and sometimes so silly I can't help but love them. The action scenes and reactions are great fun without being too vulgar with the violence. Love all the swearing (altho I rarely swear, but I did nic name my neighbor's yappy dog 'little fucker') and the NY vernacular - actually wish there were more r's dropped along the way in the text. Bella & Damion's silliness make me want to squeeze them too! Loved Aro and Jacob and Alice and Esme and OMG!Carlisle. Thank you for sharing your brilliance!!
Date: 07 Oct 2014 10:21 PM Title: The Wedding Part Two
Love this story so, so much. I rarely read a fic more than once but this one appeals to me again. Thanks for sharing your true brilliance!
Date: 07 Oct 2014 10:19 PM Title: The Game
Love this story so, so much. I rarely read a fic more than once but this one appeals to me again. Thanks for sharing your true brilliance!
Date: 04 Oct 2014 1:01 AM Title: Edward
Love this world you're creating - these characters!! They're crazy and wonderful.
Date: 03 Oct 2014 2:58 PM Title: Bebella
Best first chapter ever! Love this silly girl and this tough boy.
Date: 22 Sep 2014 9:41 AM Title: The Wedding Part Two
loved it!
Date: 22 Sep 2014 7:51 AM Title: The Wedding Part One
busted! Loved it!
Date: 04 Aug 2014 10:10 PM Title: The Trouble in Little Odessa
Cant believe it took me this long to read this story, im surpirsed at how much i like it, i admit i couldnt really get into it at first and now i cant seem to stop! so happy to know sequels await me!
Date: 26 Jul 2014 7:51 AM Title: Epilogue
A different take on Edward and Bella enmeshed in a mobster existence. More Sopranos than Twilight. I guess this just wasn't the right story for my sensibilities. Appreciate the author taking them out of a typical setting and finishing the story, but the characters lost their intrinsic appeal when thrust into this setting. They really aren't sympathetic or relatable.
Date: 30 Jun 2014 3:02 PM Title: Lousy Day at the Slots
This:
I nodded. My stomach a jumbled mess. "I wish I could go down there—she's probably a mess. She'll want me to squeeze her." I sobbed, hugging myself. "I know she's hurting...Carlisle, my Bebella isn't okay. She might not be hurt, but I know she's—she's upset. When she's upset, I squeeze her—we hold each other together, you know?"
Is probably one of the single most cuteest things I've ever red in fanfic. Thank you for that 'aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwww!!!!' moment :)
Date: 30 Jun 2014 1:38 AM Title: Epilogue
Wow! I've read many a story here and other sites, this story by far a top favorite of mine and look forward to reading the sequels. Love how you write. I giggled/laughed a lot through out this story. Loved it! Thank you! :o)
[Report This]Date: 05 Jun 2014 12:22 AM Title: Something in the Water
Dang. Bella is killing me. I'm really staring to dislike her. I understand her desire and need to get pregnant. But, she is treating Edward like shit!
I love this story. And it's not my first time to read it. But it's getting harder and harder to cheer for Bella.
[Report This]Date: 15 May 2014 11:05 PM Title: Bebella
I love Bebella, she is hilarious, I always have to read Quiet, I love this story.
Kisses.
Great story!
Date: 12 May 2014 5:37 PM Title: Under Pressure
I can tell you that I've read this story what feels like a hundred times, but every time it gets better and better! All of them do! I appreciate your gift!