[Report This]Date: 14 Nov 2013 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
Excellent, tension from the begining until the end.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great story, please tell me there is more to come (pun intended)
Date: 15 Apr 2013 6:11 AM Title: Chapter 1
I LOVE this one-shot and would love for there to be more. Maybe a sequel?
Date: 20 Oct 2012 2:11 PM Title: Chapter 1
Hey! Loved the lemon near the end, very well written indeed.
She couldn't help it. He was very attractive no matter how creepy he was acting. Time seemed to stop every time his eye locked with hers. It was as if the entire world fell away and it was just them. Heat crawled up her cheeks and ran down her neck. Her palms would start to sweat and her heart would race. Then he would wink and smile his patented little half-smirk. By this time, she was nothing more than a puddle of goo. She had to force herself to get a grip, to look away. He was like a magnet, drawing her in against her wishes.
This part was one of my favorites! You have quite a way with words! I think you should listen to your readers and continue this.
Date: 14 Jul 2012 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
Hello, i really liked your stry and i would wish that you would write another chapter. I totally get it if you want to keep it as a one-shot, but with an ending like that I'm left wanting to know if Bella really does kick Edwards ass when she's a vampire. Also, i wasn't sure if her friends were changed as well or if they were just the night's meals. I mean if Alice was Jasper's mate then why was he so tempted by Bella. Carlisle too.
Anyways, just some thoughts. But seriously i really enjoyed reading it. Even the gruesome bits :)
Author's Response:
I have thought about writing another chapter or perhaps a sequel. I have so much on my plate as it is. But it is always there in the back of my mind. If inspiration strikes, I will sit down and bang out another piece to this story. I like to think that Jasper and Carlisle are attracted to Bella because she has another more subtle power than her shield that we all know about. Think about it, Jacob is drawn to her, mike Newton, Felix in New Moon. It makes sense that she might have another latent gift that attracts others to her, be it purely platonic or something more. It is something that will be explored in more depth if i ever get around to making a follow-up. Thanks for reading.
[Report This]Date: 08 Jun 2012 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow! Jaw dropping. Two enthusiastic thumbs up. I am begging for another chapter...
[Report This]Date: 07 Jan 2012 7:27 AM Title: Chapter 1
I really loved this. Thank you for sharing.
Date: 03 Nov 2011 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
HOT, HOT, HOT! There aren't enought dominant Edward stories out there! I loved him trapping her in the crypt! I hope there is much more to come of this, training newborn Isabella maybe???
Date: 01 Nov 2011 7:47 AM Title: Chapter 1
OMG! You ended there...you got me hooked and left me hanging. Damn girl, thanks a bunch. LOL
Date: 01 Nov 2011 3:38 AM Title: Chapter 1
This isn't a one-shot is it? I hope it is a multi-chapter story.
Date: 01 Nov 2011 1:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
I love your writing... Oh so good
[Report This]Date: 31 Oct 2011 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very creepy. you've got the makings of an ironic classic here--if you expanded on it and took the old horror movie cliche`s and twisted them as the girls get their revenge for being forcibly mated, it could be very funny! But this one is all about the horror and you did it very well.