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Reviewer: AWinglessAngel Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2018 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 28

Hope you update the story soon - I love this story!

Reviewer: Brittany89 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2017 8:54 AM Title: Chapter 9

Honestly was hoping for some good drama from her past. This was far from angsty. Her so called "issues" come off as silly. It was a let down. I'm trying to stick to reading what's left of this, but not sure that will last...I say that as respectfully as possible. The story had/has great potential and your writing style/descriptions are pretty good. Everything flows well, but as I said, so far it's kind of a let down in the drama/angst department. 

Reviewer: Roxie619 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Oct 2016 7:29 AM Title: Chapter 28

Love your story 

Reviewer: LaPumuckl Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Apr 2016 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 28

Dear Lou,

First I have to apologize for not leaving a review before now, as I think its very obvious how wrongly you got ignored there from others as well... But not knowing how much more there was left, seeing there are already 28 chapters online I used each free moment I had these last 4 days to catch up as fast as possible, though I might get back for it at some point; )

What James was able to do to her was so cruel, but at least he didn't use his time to rape her! On the other side, I doubt Bella will be too happy with how much he "achieved of his work"...

I cant wait to read more of this story, so I conclude this with a big THANK YOU for sharing their story

Xoxo

LaPumuckl

Reviewer: Hina-chan Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2016 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 11

Me! Hope to read the rest. Love it.

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Mar 2016 5:22 PM Title: Chapter 28

I feel so bad for Edward and Bella.  She has a long road ahead.

Reviewer: LeslieE Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 7:53 AM Title: Chapter 28

Great chapter in what has been a VERY good story.  I believe this would definitely be worthy of publication.  You should consider it.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your kind words.  Funnily enough, somebody else has said something similar to me, and once it's complete, I'm going to take a proper look at it and see whether it could work.

Lou xx

Reviewer: Rachael Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Mar 2016 12:27 AM Title: Chapter 28

Just found the story and am really enjoying it!  I am so glad I started reading after all the drama finished so that I didn't have to wait anxiously to find out what happened to bella!  Just hit NEXT!  LOL!  Thank you. :)

 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much, I'm really pleased you're enjoying the story.  Next update may take a little bit of time, as I've got to write it from scratch (I'm all out of pre-written stuff).

Stick with me and you'll have it as soon as possible.

Lou xx

Reviewer: rodeinti Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 28

Thank you so much for the update...I am very grateful that James and his minions will get what they deserve...What he did is inexcusable!!!! I'm glad that Rosalie took charge and got to the bottom of everything that was going on...I love Carlisle and his love for his family...Charlie ain't nothing to mess with.....well done!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for your feedback, I'm pleased that the latest update made a good impact.  The next chapter will be Bella as she starts to recover, maybe a few more suprises for the reader too.

Lou xx

Reviewer: CaptCron76 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 28

Yay!!! That is all :)



Author's Response:

So pleased you enjoyed the latest update. 

Lou xx

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2016 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 5

They crossed a good moment together.



Author's Response:

So glad you're enjoying the story so far. 

Lou xx

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2016 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 3

Petits gâteaux étaient apréciés

Reviewer: aelita48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2016 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 1

Bon chapitre!



Author's Response:

Thank you!  There will be a bit of a delay for the next one as I'm all out of pre-written stuff. 

Lou xx

Reviewer: CaptCron76 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Feb 2016 2:05 AM Title: Chapter 27

Gah! I have to wait for updates now!!! I am completely into this story and am so glad I found it!



Author's Response:

Don't panic, the next chapter is coming in a couple of days.  Just doing final edits on it.

Lou xx

Reviewer: LeslieE Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jan 2016 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 27

I  think  James  could  have  used a few  more  kicks and some more face bashing ,  especially  if  he's  still  able  to  smirk ! 



Author's Response:

Stick with me, you'll find out more in the next chapter.  Edward will be telling the tale, and you'll get some more answers.

Lou xx

Reviewer: anothertwilighter Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2016 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 26

How can someone overcome such horrible experience? She will have scarrs for life!



Author's Response:

Please trust me, it's going to be emotional, but hopefully you'll be pleased wtih how things play out.

Lou xx

Reviewer: LeslieE Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2016 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 26

Wow!  Great chapter !   This  has really been  a  fantastic  storyline  and  you  are  doing  a  great  job ! 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much, I really appreciate your encouragement.  I'm glad that you're enjoying it. Next chapter will be up in about 24 hours time.

Lou xx

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2016 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 26

James is so sick.  He needs to be tortured.



Author's Response:

It's coming, I promise!

Lou xx

Reviewer: rodeinti Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2016 11:41 AM Title: Chapter 26

Thank you for the update..well done..James is one sick puppy..I wonder if the girls were in on what James was going. to do..what about Victoria and her sidekick..can't wait for next chapter  



Author's Response:

Thanks for your comments.  He's way sicker than anyone imagined I think.  You'll get some answers in the next chapter (posting tomorrow) but not everything will become clear all at once.

Lou xx

Reviewer: Bellaashes Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jan 2016 12:37 AM Title: Chapter 26

Not sure how I feel about this chapter. That was a very brutal attack on her and not something you can gloss over in other chapters.  I thought it was well written but just not sure how you can move forward from this chapter. She will not only have physical scars but mental scars.



Author's Response:

This one was always going to be quite a divisive chapter, and I knew it wouldn't sit comfortably with some people.  I have a plan for how things will play out, so hopefully you'll stick with me to see how it plays out.

Lou xx

Reviewer: Team66fan Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2016 7:53 AM Title: Chapter 26

OOh my goodness! 



Author's Response:

I love that I've managed to shock some people with this.  Stay tuned, because Edward's PoV is coming in the next chapter which will post tomorrow.

Lou xx

Reviewer: Plumcrzy62 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2016 5:25 AM Title: Chapter 26

Wow, James is bat shit crazy.  I suspect maybe he was carving his name or something to the effect in her back,



Author's Response:

He certainly is bat shit crazy.  You'll have to wait until Ch28 before you find out what he carved into her back. In the meantime, you'll get Ch27 tomorrow night and it will be Edward's point of view. 

Lou xx

Reviewer: TwilightFann1969 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Jan 2016 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 26

I love the chapter. I hate that I have to wait a week to see Edward's side of things. See you soon.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your review, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.  Next chapter is going to be up tomorrow.  After that you'll have a bit of a wait as I'm still writing Ch28.

Thanks, 
Lou x

Reviewer: anothertwilighter Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2016 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 25

Are you kidding me? Why is Bella so stupid? That just doesn't make sense. I would have gone strait to Edward. And to trust Jessica!! So stupid!!! And to go alone in first place...



Author's Response:

Thank you for taking the time to comment.  This was always the way the story was going to go. Bella isn't stupid, and in normal circumstances she would have gone straight to Edward, but at a public event where his firm is the central focus, she didn't wish to draw any negative attention.  It makes perfect sense for someone who has in the past had all eyes on her when something has kicked off publicly before.  Bella has no reason not to trust Jessica at this point, so there was no reason why she shouldn't accept the offer of help.

Lou x

Reviewer: rodeinti Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2016 3:07 PM Title: Chapter 25

thank you for the update...Amazing chapter.. I wish Bella could have got a hit in...I'm sure Riley has Bella..let's hope security was somewhere around and nothings happens to Bella....I'm sure Rosalie will handle it....lol...until you post again



Author's Response:

I did think about Bella retaliating, but realised she's not the violent type, she'd rather use words to fight her battles.  It's definitely all kicking off.  Next chapter up in a bit.

Lou x

Reviewer: Thirlestane Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jan 2016 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 25

Thank you!

Another great chapter..... Can't wait for the next one!

 

T



Author's Response:

Thanks lovely, I'm pleased you're enjoying it.  Next chapter is going up tonight. 

Lou x

Reviewer: Gelsa Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jan 2016 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 25

Here's hoping she has some hand to hand skills



Author's Response:

Hold tight because the next chapter is going up tonight!

Lou xx

Reviewer: xoxokristen Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jan 2016 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 25

great story! I can't wait for your next update!



Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm just abut to post the next chapter for everyone. 

Lou xx

Reviewer: JMART664 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jan 2016 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 24

Action! Action! I want action!  I guess I'll wait, good chap. Thank you 



Author's Response:

Thank you! Chapter 25 will be up later today, so hope you enjoy it.

Lou xx

Reviewer: LeslieE Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jan 2016 10:38 AM Title: Chapter 24

This is going to be really good!



Author's Response:

I'm hoping people feel that it's how Edward would have handled it.  All will be revealed in the next chapter so you don't have long to wait.

Lou xx

Reviewer: Plumcrzy62 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jan 2016 3:09 AM Title: Chapter 24

Can't wait for the big reveal. 



Author's Response:

Glad you're enjoying it.  Stay tuned as the reveal is coming in the next chapter. I hope people feel that it's how Edward would have handled it.

Lou xx

Reviewer: Gelsa Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jan 2016 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 24

Really  would  love the Denali reaction to Edward's  speech



Author's Response:

That will be coming in the next chapter.  It's already written, and I'm hoping people feel that it's how Edward would have handled it.

Lou xx

Reviewer: detsinbaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jan 2016 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 1

sorry i throught i was going just a little nuts. lol

Reviewer: detsinbaby Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: 01 Jan 2016 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 24

this was already posted



Author's Response:

This chapter was posted on another site last week, but I hadn't realised that I was behind on posting it here.  Apologies for that, but all sites are now at the same point in the story.

Reviewer: Bellaashes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Jan 2016 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 24

I am sure there will be drama and some happiness.  But please post soon I am so excited to see what will happen next.



Author's Response:

Glad you're enjoying the story. The next chapter will be posting over the weekend.  Stay tuned.

Lou xx

Reviewer: JMART664 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Dec 2015 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 23

Yay! The gala! I can't wait!



Author's Response:

Thank you for your comments, the next chapter will be up in a moment.

Lou xx

Reviewer: 2mpix Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2015 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 23

I'm reading on both sites so I can leave reviews both places! ;)



Author's Response:

I hadn't realised that I was behind with posting on here compared to Fanfic & Wattpad.  Shame on me, such a rookie author error.  Glad you're enjoying it though, and Ch24 will be up on here later today, but I'm guessing you've already read this on another site. :)  Hopefully we'll be up to date on all sites by the end of this week.  Stay tuned.

Lou xx

Reviewer: GethrenNZ Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Dec 2015 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 23

Loving this story.  Well written. Can wait for next update



Author's Response:

Thank you. I often wonder if what I'm writing is utter garbage, so it's nice to know when people think my writing is OK.  I really appreaciate it.

Next chapter will be up today.

Lou xx

Reviewer: LeslieE Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Dec 2015 5:45 AM Title: Chapter 23

So glad you are back working this story!  It is so good!  Keep up the great work!



Author's Response:

Thanks lovely, the next chapter goes up today.

Lou xx 

Reviewer: Plumcrzy62 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Dec 2015 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 23

With all that is going on, it is intersting to me the the envelop didn't get more reaction.  It is obviously not something good.  



Author's Response:

Thanks for your comments, the next chapter is going up today and more will be revealed about the envelope. 

Lou xx

Reviewer: rodeinti Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Dec 2015 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 22

thank you for the update...Edward should have kept it moving!



Author's Response:

Thanks! Next chapter coming today. xx

Reviewer: mrsvixter Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Dec 2015 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 22

love this fict

looking forward to next update



Author's Response:

Thanks, glad you're enjoying it. Next chapter will be up today. xx

Reviewer: yagalinus0420 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Sep 2015 2:47 PM Title: Chapter 21

Loving this story so far!!! Next up is Riley...and I get the feeling Renee isn't far behind once she finds out who her daughter is dating....then we can't forget James since we know he ain't done yet!!!

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Aug 2015 6:26 PM Title: Chapter 21

Well, that was a lovely visit with Charlie. And every town has a bitch... Right? 

Great chapter!  Love the story.  More please.

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jul 2015 4:51 PM Title: Chapter 6

I'm glad Bella got support from Kate, I hope it continues.  That was a fun date, it hope she makes him dinner next time... I'll keep reading a find out.

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jul 2015 3:34 PM Title: Chapter 5

I just discovered this story!  I love it.... 

Reviewer: jalee1118 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jul 2015 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 21

Love it and glad that Kate was put in her place!  Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: Thirlestane Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jul 2015 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 21

Thank you... Just joined your readers...loving this story!

Keep the chapters coming. T

Reviewer: Belighted Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2015 5:27 AM Title: Chapter 20

Love it! Hope you are well!
Annie B

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2015 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 15

I'm glad Edward takes care of Bella.  She really needs to keep track of these events.  She can't loose her head or James will trap her in a bad situation. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for your comments. Stick with it, I think you'll be pleased with how things play out by the end of the story. 

Lou xx

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2015 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 13

Great chapter. 



Author's Response:

Thanks! 

Lou x

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2015 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 5

Loved the chapter.  It was the perfect first date.



Author's Response:

Thanks honey, I'm pleased you liked what I did with that chapter. 

Lou x

Reviewer: Louise Clark Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2015 2:53 AM Title: Chapter 6

Wow! That was some kiss! Great job! xo



Author's Response:

Thanks Louise, I'm really pleased you're enjoying the story so far.  I'm working on updating regularly so that readers aren't kept waiting too long between updates.

Lou xx

Reviewer: Louise Clark Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2015 3:58 AM Title: Chapter 5

What a swoony first date! Love the story so far! xo



Author's Response:

Hi there, 

Thanks for your comments, and I'm glad you enjoyed the first date.  I wanted to put things in there that would be my kind of thing and knowing that it worked for you as a reader really helps.  Just to let you know, there won't be much of a wait on Ch21 as I'm currently doing final edits so it should post really soon!

Much love,

Lou x

Reviewer: LeslieE Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jun 2015 7:50 AM Title: Chapter 20

Glad you came back to this one--I really like it and think it is a great story.



Author's Response:

Hi there, 

Thanks for your comments, I'm pleased that you're still enjoying this story and have stuck with it despite my really slack updating schedule (bad case of writer's block).  Just to let you know, there won't be much of a wait on Ch21 as I'm currently doing final edits so it should post really soon!

Much love,

Lou x

Reviewer: mrsvixter Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jun 2015 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 20

great chapter

looking forward to more

well done



Author's Response:

Hi there, 

Thanks for your comments, I'm pleased that you're still enjoying this story.  Just to let you know, there won't be much of a wait on Ch21 as I'm currently doing final edits so it should post really soon!

Much love,

Lou x

Reviewer: GabrielsStarr Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Apr 2015 1:28 PM Title: Chapter 19

Please update this story soon!!! I love it! :D -gives you two thumbs up- 

Reviewer: kissinbuttaflyz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2015 10:00 AM Title: Chapter 1

Loving this fic!!! 

A little confused because I was notified of an update in January 2015 but the updated date shows January 9, 2014. Either way, I'm all in now so I'll wait patiently for the next chapter. Hope this finds you well and sans writer's block :) 

Reviewer: mrsvixter Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jan 2015 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 19

glad your updating again great chapter

rl comes first

well done

Reviewer: CGRN0611 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Dec 2014 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 18

I just found your story and I'm hooked. I was sad to see that it's been awhile since you've updated. I'm tied up in knots wondering what happened. I hope you continue this story, I've really enjoyed it so far. Hope real life is going well for you and you gift us with the rest of this tale. Thank you for your time and the story!

Reviewer: littlelizruth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Jul 2013 9:55 AM Title: Chapter 17

Aw man! You didn't say what's in the ox! So mean. I hope Edward can get Bella out of all this without too much trouble.

Reviewer: mrsvixter Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2013 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 17

really enjoying this story

well done

Reviewer: VickiShy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Aug 2012 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 16

Hi - i found this story and am loving it.  great character development.  great plot.  And the lemons are causing me todrink.  Wow.

Reviewer: darcy Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Aug 2012 6:39 PM Title: Chapter 16

Oh no. The escalation continues.

James' comment about women knowing their places is ominous. Here is a guy with so many issues. He's dangerous and irrational.

Loved Mama Bear Esme!

Great story.



Author's Response:

Interesting that you pick up on his comment to Angela.  I wondered if people would place any importance on that.  He's a loose canon so we'll have to see what happens next.

Lou xx

Reviewer: darcy Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Aug 2012 6:26 PM Title: Chapter 15

The perp is escalating. Bella needs to be very careful. Scissors cutting off tulips is the step below boiling bunnies or horseheads under the covers. I have a feeling things are going to get ugly.

I can't wait for the gala. I'm with Alice. I want to see the Denali's reaction. 

Great chapter.



Author's Response:

Oh I think things will get worse before they get better.  The gala is going to be fun, but before that happens I'm sure there will be a shopping trip for the ladies, with everyone's favourite pixie leading the way! 

Lou xx

Reviewer: darcy Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Aug 2012 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 14

I love that they are smart enough not to fluff off potential danger and that they are keeping a record of potential evidence. If James IS arrogant and prideful enough, he just may be stalking her at work.

Really enjoying your story.



Author's Response:

Glad you're enjoying the story, there's some more twists to come!

Lou xx

Reviewer: samolly Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2012 4:59 AM Title: Chapter 14

would live to receive edward's two lips :



Author's Response:

Bella's on the receiving end of a whole lot more in Chapter 15!  Thanks for reviewing once again.  I'm asking everyone that leaves me a message to recommend me to their friends and to pimp me out where possible.  I'm not above shamelessly begging...so please, please, please! 

Lou xxx

Reviewer: samolly Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2012 3:09 AM Title: Chapter 11

juicy....bahaha ;) oh yeah! 

as far as that shovel....can we wack them on the head first? just askin'

however.... not too sure of that last line.... :)



Author's Response:

I know it's frustrating when they say things that the other isn't aware of.  At least you knwo that they will probably say it to each other soon enough.

Thanks for reading and reviewing,

Lou xx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 14

I was thinking that James has been too quiet lately.  But cutting up flowers sounds like a chick move, so I am guessing Lauren since it happened at work.  And way to spill the beans early Emmett (oops). It's not everyday you find out your boyfriend is a mega rich, part-owner of a successful law firm.  I soooo can't wait for this announcement at the ball and to see Denali's reaction :)



Author's Response:

Thanks, I thought that it would be funny if Em was the one who forced Edward's hand a little, but not in a deliberate way, just in the typical Emmett being Emmett kind of way.  The gala is going to be explosive, and may take up more than one chapter with what I've got planned!  

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.  I'm asking everyone who leaves me a message to recommend BRA to their friends and to pimp me out wherever they can.  

Lou xx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 13

WOW!  They both declare the ILY's and we get a hawt lemon (yea! They finally did the deed).  Such a cute couple!



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed the lemon, it was a total killer to write!

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 12

Bella did a great job paying Edward back on the birthday surprises!  Tanya continues to be annoying and possibly psychotic ( she is like the female version of James not understanding that no means no).  Maybe Edwards very vocal declaration will set her straight ( but probably not).



Author's Response:

Yeah, she's also a thoughtful gift giver.  Tanya isn't scary though, she's just ridiculous and ignorant!  We'll just have to see what happens after Edward's declaration.

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 11

So Vicki would have been loyal and loving had he bought her a ring instead of a bracelet.  Pah-leeze!  Again, sounds like Edward dodged a major bullet there.  And talk about sour grapes, Riley sounds like a winner (not!).  Not that he had a chance anyways, but Denali definitely lost any shot of getting Edward with that hire.  And I would bet anything that Vivki is his paralegal joining him. At least he has his family support, and now Bella to replace those bad memories.



Author's Response:

Yep, she's a real piece of work.  Can you imagine if we put her and Renee in a room and let them duke it out for the title of Grand Bitch?!?! There's soem good times ahead, but ghosts of the past will always be lurking in the background.

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 10:51 PM Title: Chapter 10

I think it's time to hear about Edward's history given his reaction to a name, and time for more B and E time :)



Author's Response:

It's coming, it's coming!!

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 9

Renee sounds like a real piece of work.  Now that she is old enough, I don't know if I could have any sort of relationship with her knowing what she did, especially to Charlie.  Thank goodness she figured out Paul's intentions before it was too late.  Now we need to find out Edward's story...



Author's Response:

She really is a heinous bitch, and she'll pop up later in the story.  The relationship is strained at the best of time, but we'll see what happens when she rears her ugly head.  Edward's story is different, and it will come in two parts.

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 8

Dang, I need an Edward to celebrate my birthday with, those gifts were awesome (tell my hubby I am just kidding).  Ouch at the end, no words you want to hear during a date...



Author's Response:

I know, he kind of went overboard didn't he?  Bit of a passion killer at the end I know!

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 7

Girls night rocks, I love me some Swayze in Roadhouse too!  Awesome that Angela is getting out of James' area and will work foor Kate now.  And Ben is now going to work for Edward, can I predict a future love connection.  And I have to ask:  what the heck is a crayfish and rocket sandwich?  Just curious...



Author's Response:

Yep it most certainly does.  Swayze was pretty much my first teenage crush.  I'm sure Angela and Ben will have the opportunity to meet at some point in the meantime. 

Rocket is called arugula in America.  Sorry it's a British thing, and I sometimes forget that things need to be translated.

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 6

Lauren and James sound like they deserve each other...If only Bella was that lucky... I am glad she told Kate about James, you never know when you will need supervisor support, and Kate seems to really care about Bella.  Awesome promotion for Bella! And very weird case for Edward; given there was an assault, I wouldn't have suspected the perp to be a woman.



Author's Response:

Oh they're definitely cut from the same cloth, although I don't think Lauren is as privelaged as old Creeptastic!  Kate is one of the good guys in my story, and she's got a vested interest in Bella's development.  Edward's case is kind of a background piece, but I wanted it to be a bit shady because of who the opposing counsel is.  

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 5

That was actually a good resolution in dealing with Jane, and a win for Edward getting Siobahn as his assistant.  Love the first date, sounds like total success even with lousy service...and I was wondering if Bella would call him out on his nickname for her since he used it several times during the date.



Author's Response:

I thought so.  There's an outtake written telling people how she was dealt with behind closed doors.  I'm hanging on to it till we're much further into the story and then I'll probably offer it up for one of the Fandom fundraisers.

Our Edward's a bit of a romantic at heart even though he's a bit rusty on that front.  The nickname will stick during the story I think.

Thanks once again!

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 9:43 PM Title: Chapter 4

I agree with Angela, Edward is the perfect lawyer to have on retainer for workplace harassment.  I kind of feel she should have reported the bar assault to the police, or at the very least she should get a restraining order against as a preventive measure.  Love his flowers to her.



Author's Response:

He's an all round good guy to have in your corner I feel.  She didn't report the assault because of working for James' father.  Don't worry though, there will be more stuff that happens and the knock on effects will be interesting for those involved. 

I'm a sucker for a romantic gesture that has a deeper meaning.

Thanks for reviewing this chapter!

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 3

What an awesome gift to start his week off right, and loved his text back to her.  Tanya sounds severely delusional so I foresee her being a thorn in their side down the road



Author's Response:

I got the idea from my own love of baking, and I like to think my Edward has a playful side, which often comes out in his texts.  Tanya will be the thorniest thorn you ever did see as we get further into the story.  Just you wait till you get to chapter 12!!

Thank you so much for reviewing as you read!

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 2

I can't believe he won't take no for an answer, thank god Edward caught him and kicked his ass out.  And he still managed to take care of Bella and slip her his number - smooth!



Author's Response:

Hehe, that's where the original one shot ended.  Ch3 is where it gets interesting!

Lou xxx

Reviewer: manolomel9 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 1

Welcome over from ff.net - I too am so annoyed they are pulling fics from their site, so it is nice to find new ones like yours over here.  James sounds like total creep, Bella is in a hard spot with him being the boss' son.  But that bartender sounds pretty hot (wink wink).



Author's Response:

Thank you for the welcome.  I will continue to post on FF.net till I get reported and removed, but this is a good place for me to also get my work out there!  

Oh that bartender is so much more than you can imagine right now!  Keep reading and you'll find out all about him.  Let me know what you think as you work your way through what's posted here.  Ch15 is in progress with lots of good stuff going on!

Lou xx

Reviewer: jane210 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2012 8:59 PM Title: Chapter 14

Wow starting to get bad with James agin
Keep up thhe good work.

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm working on Ch15 at the mo and he's back with full force (cue evil laughter *mwah, ha, ha, ha, ha!*)

Next chapter should be up in a week.

Lou xx

Reviewer: cullengirl08 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jun 2012 3:42 AM Title: Chapter 14

I'm thinking it's either James or Tanya getting on Bella's last nerve.   But I can't believe they destroyed Bella's flowers from Edward; that's just harsh.



Author's Response:

Interesting theory, throwing Tanya into the mix.  We'll just have to wait and see what happens next!

Lou xxx

Reviewer: shaynap Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2012 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 14

yup i'm thinking lauren and james i hope she doesn't just brush off these incidents i think she should install a tiny wireless camera and just catch them in the act we live in the world of technology she should make some use of it I think its 2 people doing this to her because a women would not send flowers to express jealousy but she would take the time to destroy flowers one by one so a man sent the flowers while a women destroyed them can't wait for the next chap so glad you updated here

Author's Response:

Thanks, I'm pleased that people are enjoying the story on TWCS as well as Ffn.net - it makes the whole writing process worthwhile.  Ch15 is in progress at the mo, I have a plan for how things will pan out, but you never know...technology may play a role in it, then again sheer dumb idiocy may be what trips the guilty party up!

Thanks 

Lou xxx

Reviewer: steffi32692 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jun 2012 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 10

Not many authors take take time to personally ask for constructive critiscism so i decided to do it! Lol i dont know what exactly to say, i prefer to lurk on fanfic sites lol but i love your story!!! so much in fact that i foun it on fanfiction which had more updates! all i can say is keep doing what your doing! I love that edward is such a badass but sweet as well! i love a jealous edward so i hope i see more of that!!! 



Author's Response:

Thanks for your review.  As it's my first story I felt it was important to get outside input which is why I ask for people to comment.  So far everyone has been very supportive of the story, and for that I am very grateful.  I agree, badass Edward with some sweetness thrown in is a lovely combo!  You will definitely be seeing more of him.

Lou xx

Reviewer: Leibeezer Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2012 8:13 PM Title: Chapter 9

I'm so glad that you are continuing with the story over here.  I hate whats going on over at ffn, twcs is very popular now.  I can't wait to read the rest.



Author's Response:

I'm pleased you're enjoying it. The reception on FFn has been amazing but it's a shame that some people are so hell bent on ruining it for the rest of us. I'm hoping to get up to date iwth posting by close of play tomorrow.

There's 13 published chapters on FFn, so only a couple more to go! Chapter 14 is in progress, but it's slow going (read chapter 13 and you'll understand why!). Thank you for your kind words and support!

Lou xx

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