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Reviewer: Bumblebree Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Mar 2021 9:42 PM Title: Chapter 5

I am obsessed with this story!!!

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Date: 28 Feb 2019 12:04 AM Title: Chapter 33

I loved it thank you 

Reviewer: lamelurker Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2016 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 33

Thank you for writing and sharing your story! I really enjoyed reading it again.

Reviewer: twirob13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2015 3:34 PM Title: Chapter 33

WOW!!!!! amazing sory!!!! i loved your universe ;) i loved bellas powers ;) as you can tell i LOVED this story ;) thanks for posting it on here ;D

Reviewer: Stina91 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2014 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 33

You write the kind of stories I lose sleep over.  Thank you for keeping me highly entertained! Loved Written in the Stars as well. ;)

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2013 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 33

Nothing is ever perfect, but this came pretty close! Everyone is together with who they're supposed to be, and the future looks very promising. Makes me wish is truly was! Thanks for another great story!



Author's Response:

YOu're welcome! i'm glad you enjoyed it! I enjoyed reading your reviews. :)

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2013 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 32

Bella outsmarted them all, she's queen of elves and humans and Victoria is queen of vampires.  A neat and tidy solution for all concerned!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2013 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 31

The damn elves are really bad trouble makers! Bella really didn't want to kill anyone, except Jinx and Brady, and maybe Aro. This could get Jake killed  and then Nessa would be inconsolable.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2013 2:11 AM Title: Chapter 30

Hated to see Jake left to deal with a bunch of angry elves, but Nessa really needs to get to Victoria if she can. Maybe there's a chance she can talk to her before any more killing happens!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 29

It was a hell of an effort, though! They nearly made it past the Volturi and I can only hope they make it through this in one piece!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 28

Circumstances seem to be pushing Bella to her destiny, whether she wants to or not! Frankly, I don't care how it happens, as long as she and Edward are together in the end!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 27

I wonder what they think they could do to rescue Bella and Edward from the Volturi?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 26

Probably not the way they wanted to meet the Volturi, alone and unarmed! The idea of sending the serial killer to Det. Yorkie to confess his crimes was genius, especially planting Tanya's name in his memory! That should get the cops off Edward's neck, provided they make it out of this mess!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 10:11 PM Title: Chapter 25

I'm so impressed with how well they all worked together to rescue Nessa! Like Jake , I'm sad  that elves died because of Jinx thinking he has to manipulate Bella into fulfilling the elvish prophecy!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 24

The vampire blood bar was an interesting experience, but not nearly as interresting as Nessa and Jacob. Why is it guys think they have the right to decide things for our own good? Guess they think we poor fragile females can't think for ourselves!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 11:11 AM Title: Chapter 23

Now what do they do? Jinx has certainly lived up to his name, and screwed up everything! Esme did take it rather well, considering what has happened to her only child. I'm glad he and Bella cna be together forever now. If they make it through this damn war Jinx has forced on them, that is!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 10:57 AM Title: Chapter 22

Edward seems to have taken to his new life like a duck to water! Everyone is just happy that he's not really dead, forever, that is.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 10:42 AM Title: Chapter 21

Oh please let Edward be turned to a vampire! I'm so damn glad Bella tore Tanya to pieces!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 10:30 AM Title: Chapter 20

That crazy bitch Tanya is out of her tiny vampire mind, if she thinks Edward would have her as a gift! Bella will do her best to get her husband back. The sword must be for chopping off heads and now Esme has shown her how to use a firearm.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 10:12 AM Title: Chapter 19

What the hell does Emmett mean, Edward's gone?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 9:52 AM Title: Chapter 18

Well, now we know Jinx doesn't mind telling things with his own personal slant. He'll lie to get the results he wants. I sure was glad Nessa came to Jacob's rescue with Esme. Edward had no doubts to begin with, that's complete faith in a friend for sure! Bella's powers were pretty damn impressive too!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 17

I figured that was Jacob's problem, he wants someone of his own, like Edward and Emmett do! I hope he doesn't turn into a drunk like his dad because he's sad!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 9:12 AM Title: Chapter 16

Interesting chapter, what with Esme's party being crashed by Tanya and her holy water. Jake's reinstatement went about the way he thought it would. The scary part is Jessica sucking up to Alice. That can't be good!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 8:52 AM Title: Chapter 15

Edward might as well resign himself to his mother's plans to show off her new daughter-in-law. He and Jake will just have to be on guard, in case Bella does something unusual. They better come up with a plan to counteract Tanya, Lauren and Jessica, too!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 8:35 AM Title: Chapter 14

What is Jessica up to, holding a picture of Bella and Edward's notes on South American vampires? Something is not quite right here. Bella's reaction to Leah was kind of a surprise to everyone. It wasn't real funny when Bella ran into those jerks that Paul tried to save her from.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 8:10 AM Title: Chapter 13

Looks to me like Jinx is trying to force Bella's decision, in favor of the fae. Edward better hold on tight to his Bella . Even vampire goddesses need some help sometimes.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 7:48 AM Title: Chapter 12

Kind of a mixed up mess, with Tanya pregnant with Jasper's baby and him and Alice in love! Other than that little dust-up, they sure had a good time at Tuneville. Now for what the hell Jinx is doing in Edward's apartment!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 7:28 AM Title: Chapter 11

Good Grieg! Could Tanya be any more obvious? That's only the oldest trick in the book! Hopefully Edward is not going to fall for this crap!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 10

Bella's powers are a big help when it comes to getting out of tight spots! The confrontation with Tanya was the icing on the cake, consisting of the thunderstruck Emmett and the trip to Edward's place! Esme's reaction to Bella was just hilarious!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 9

Edward's pretty happy, but Rose sure isn't! Who knew she wanted Jacob? And what's up with him, being so sensitive about not wanting her to be a one-time thing? Could he really care about her? Hmm!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 8

Kind of feeling like Jake here, I'm just happy for Edward and Bella! This whole chapter was darling! Especially the explanation of the condoms!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2013 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 7

I don't trust Jinx either, something about him doesn't set right. He seems to have his own agenda. Edward is growing closer to Bella, in a lot of ways! I like that!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jun 2013 11:21 PM Title: Chapter 6

I kind of have to agree just a little with Edward, it's weird getting into a shipping container and going home by freighter. This is quite the adventure they're having, and will only get better when they get back home!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jun 2013 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 5

Very different role for Rosalie to play , sort of a vampire servant, specializing in illegal paperwork! The information she has imparted to Jake is fascinationg, too. Bella won't like being a mere vampire and not a goddess. Wonder when she'll find out she's married to Edward.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jun 2013 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 4

I had to chuckle a little over Edward's trip to WalMart. Buying things for Bella was an ordeal for him, I think. Rosalie's reaction to Bella was interesting, as was her question to Edward about his feelings towards marriage.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jun 2013 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 3

This must be such a confusing situation for Bella! I can't imagine sleeping for a thousand years and waking up to the twenty-first century and all the stuff that goes with it!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jun 2013 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 2

Wow, a traditional vampire at that, one who will burn in the sunlight! Edward and Jacob have got themselves into something really weird. It ought to be fun watching how they try to get out of it! If Edward's watch is lying in the tomb, their all in the soup!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jun 2013 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 1

OMG! These two intrepid explorers have opened up another form of Pandora's Box, just with a vampire in it! This is really getting good!

Reviewer: dragonfly06 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 8:16 AM Title: Chapter 14

Omg why does Jessica have a photo of Bella. Is she stalking Edward?

Reviewer: dragonfly06 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 12

Oh, I love My Chem!

 



Author's Response:

She was originally supposed to sing "Celeste Aida" as a nod to Anne Rice's The Mummy, but I changed my mind. :)

Reviewer: dragonfly06 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 11

Bullshit! Ok. Maybe she's pregnant but the baby it's not Edward's.

Reviewer: dragonfly06 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 10

Tanya was still there? The nerve..

 

Reviewer: dragonfly06 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2013 6:28 AM Title: Chapter 9

I thought that Jacob loved Bella as well. He doesn't?



Author's Response:

Not in this version. In this version, he's attracted to her intially, but he backs off as soon as he realizes how Edward feels about her. He comes to love Bella as a close friend but doesn't have romantic feelings for her.

Reviewer: Remi_Capulet Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jan 2013 6:08 AM Title: Chapter 32

this chapter as well is black



Author's Response:

How odd...

 

Thank you for letting me know.

Reviewer: Remi_Capulet Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jan 2013 5:23 AM Title: Chapter 30

i just wanted to let you know that the font is black on this chapter...i believe its chapter 30...great story btw

Reviewer: littlelizruth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Nov 2012 7:36 AM Title: Chapter 33

Sigh I love it. They all got some happiness.

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Nov 2012 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 33

:)

Reviewer: littlelizruth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Oct 2012 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 32

Go make flowers! Line of the week! Bad ass is all I have to say!

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Oct 2012 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 32

Congratulations on  your book.  Thanks for the update..

Reviewer: debslmac Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Oct 2012 8:04 AM Title: Chapter 32

:)

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Oct 2012 5:18 AM Title: Chapter 32

I got this chapter yesterday and already sent a comment. Now I got another notice for the same chapter. Strange!



Author's Response:

Perhaps one of them was from Fanfiction and the other one was from this site. I update in both places.

Reviewer: littlelizruth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Sep 2012 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 31

Hear wrenching and massively awesome chapter. I hope we can get jake out of that mess.

Reviewer: lirock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2012 1:33 AM Title: Chapter 31

Oooo.....this is getting exciting! Can't wait for more.

Thank you.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2012 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 31

OMG the political situation makes the Italian one seem simpler in comparison!

Reviewer: littlelizruth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Aug 2012 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 30

I hope jake is ok. This is seriously the only story I have ever read where I like his character.

Reviewer: GrandeDame Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2012 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 30

This chapter was completely blank...nothing showed up except the dedication at the top to "The Count". Please re-post!!! Thank you!!!



Author's Response:

Try it again, hon. It's showing up for me and I'm getting reviews from it. It might have been a momentary glitch in the website.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2012 7:01 AM Title: Chapter 30

"come what may".

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Aug 2012 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 29

good chapter.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Aug 2012 2:12 PM Title: Chapter 29

:)

Reviewer: littlelizruth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Aug 2012 6:24 AM Title: Chapter 29

THis is all crazy! And it looks like jake is getting some, woot! Good for him

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Aug 2012 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 28

yea Bella and Edward.

Reviewer: lirock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2012 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 28

Thank you. Cannot wait for more!

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2012 10:16 AM Title: Chapter 28

:)

Reviewer: GrandeDame Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2012 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 28

And the plot thickens...

Fabulous story, so far. I absolutely loved "Written in the Stars". You are a very talented writer. :)

Can't wait to read the next chapter!

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2012 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 28

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"Fuck you," Bella said and extended her ring finger.

Edward snickered. "No, honey, it's this one." He showed her.

"You cannot fight us," Aro snapped. "You have no powers now."

Bella shrugged. "I kill you regular way."


"I choose my destiny," she said. There was a flash of silver as she swung the blade and Brady crumpled into a barely noticeable pile of ash on the forest floor.


Bella swung the sword up. "I no Queen. I am Goddess." She brought it down and Aro's ashes rained softly into the leaves that littered the ground.

Reviewer: lirock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2012 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 27

Another awesome chapter!

Thanks Lissa. Mwah!

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2012 7:25 AM Title: Chapter 26

:)

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2012 6:05 AM Title: Chapter 27

ugh.. Bella could have just zapped Aro.. Perhaps she should have.

Reviewer: flavia Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2012 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 27

Love it!

Reviewer: flavia Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2012 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 26

Love it!

Reviewer: skyhopper Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jul 2012 7:24 AM Title: Chapter 25

I found this story today. :) I'm usually on fanfiction.net and am new to this site :-) I'm lovin this story

Reviewer: janefanatic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2012 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 25

I loved this chapter being in Jacob's POV; he is one of the more well-rounded characters, and hearing his internal voice is always a bit more natural than some of the others. I guess I mean that the reader can empathize more with a likeable yet flawed human than with a 500 year old vampire/goddess. I'm very glad that Nessa is safe, and I appreciated Jacob's regret over the (necessary) deaths of the elves. Oh, and "Give us the halfling, she-elf!" was hilarious! I also enjoyed the Zombieland reference.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jul 2012 7:13 PM Title: Chapter 25

:)

Reviewer: flavia Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jul 2012 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 25

Love it! Hope jacob stop being afraid and give a chance to nessa.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Jul 2012 8:19 AM Title: Chapter 24

Poor Nessie, she must feel awful.  Jake, oh my.

 

 

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2012 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 24

:)

Reviewer: purplemischief Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2012 3:20 PM Title: Chapter 24

I like this version better than the original. And sigh possessive Edward is sexy.

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2012 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 24

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"She not stop me," Bella said quietly. "Both Brady and Shinx. They die."

Jacob turned to Bella. "Honey, maybe we'd better not go."

"You not have to go," Bella replied. "But I go."

"Honey ..."

Bella spoke to Nessa. "You call Queen and say I come. I not hurt her if she not try to stop me. My power greater than she know. She not win if she try fight me. You sure tell her that."

"I ... I will," Nessa said. "But, Bella, it won't be just Victoria you're up against. The Volturi -"

Bella patted Nessa's hand. "I no want kill them, but I will, if make me."



A few of the male vampires cast Bella admiring looks. Edward glared at them and edged closer to her. It seemed that becoming a vampire had also intensified his possessive streak.

"Not you need to know," Bella retorted.

The bartender held up his hands. "Sorry! Sorry. Just curious. Do you guys know what you're looking for?"

Bella nodded. "Edwurr hungry."

The bartender chuckled. "Of course he is. Fledgelings always are. You want a live donor or bottled?"

"Edwurr?"



"He mine,"Bella hissed. "You go 'way."

"You can join in, too," the woman shrugged.

Bella turned slowly in her chair. She looked up at the woman through narrowed eyes, and her voice was low with menace. "I say go 'way."

The woman's eyes widened and she scurried off. The bartender handed Edward the receipt and a pen., "She didn't mean no offense, lady," he said to Bella. "Most vamps don't mind sharing."

Bella smiled at him. "Goddess do not share." And with that, she plucked the paper bag from the counter, and led Edward out of the bar.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jul 2012 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 23

:)

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Date: 01 Jul 2012 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 22

:)

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Date: 01 Jul 2012 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 21

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Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jun 2012 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 23

He is not saying much about Bella. This is not her fault. All Tanya and his mother.  Well his mother for the darn party.  Then she blames Bella. Bella seems to be the brunt of this.

Reviewer: flavia Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2012 9:10 PM Title: Chapter 23

Love it!

Reviewer: axadams Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2012 6:05 PM Title: Chapter 23

Don't go to Italy, IT'S A TRAP ! Oh, why does nobody ever listen...

 

Another great chapter, thanks. 

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jun 2012 5:31 PM Title: Chapter 23

They are going to Victoria after they were the ones trying to start a war?! Are they touched in the head?

 

 

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Esme drew in a shaky breath. "You were such a gift, Edward. God gave me such a blessing when he sent you to me."

"I'm glad you were the one He chose."


Detective Newton snorted. He had the look of a man who'd been served a shit sandwich on stale bread at the banquet of life, and was convinced it was everyone's fault but his.



"Oh, look," Newton mocked. "If it isn't another armchair attorney, someone who knows aaaaall about the criminal justice system after watching a few episodes of Law and Order. Where did you get your legal degree, cupcake?"

"Stanford, actually." Rose whipped her wallet from her purse and withdrew an American Bar Association membership card. "And they taught me some very interesting things about the probative value of unauthenticated video tapes."

Newton's face turned purple. His fists were clenched tightly at his sides and he quivered with rage.

"Now, if that's all, we must be going." Rose tucked the card back into her wallet.

"You aren't going anywhere!" Newton snapped. "You can't leave town while we're investigating - "

"Wrong again, cupcake," Rose interrupted. She looked like she was enjoying herself, if the small smile tugging at the corner of her lips was any indication. "Unless Dr. Cullen is under arrest, or you have a judge's order, you cannot prevent him from going where he pleases. Perhaps you need to watch a few more episodes of Law and Order yourself, Detective."



Nessa laughed again. "Not terribly observant, are you, Detective? Try actually looking at the picture. They aren't even touching. And while you're digging for clues in the National Enquirer, you might want to note the photographer's name. That will give you a big clue as to the kind of person you've chosen to believe."


"Oh, good," Rose chirped. "More billable hours!"

Reviewer: lirock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2012 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 22

I had to chuckle when Edward discovered he wouldn't have mismatched socks anymore.

Will he have a dayman? daywoman? Can Emmett be it?

Another great chapter!

Thanks Lissa.



Author's Response:

Hello,

No, Emmett isn't a dayman. He's just an ordinary human. Edward probably won't ever have a dayman of his own; he's too reclusive for that.

Reviewer: flavia Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2012 3:01 PM Title: Chapter 22

Love it!

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Date: 27 Jun 2012 12:16 PM Title: Chapter 22

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He smiled to himself as he dressed; for the first time in his life, he knew what color his socks were.


He realized that he'd have to start learning to match the colors up to their names. He chuckled as he thought that he probably ought to start watching Sesame Street with Bella.


"Mrow?"

Edward set the empty bottle on the coffee table and bent to pick it up. He was careful to simply scoop the cat up on the palm of his hand, afraid if he gripped it, he would crush the cat's ribs. The cat's green-gold eyes bored into his own, eerily sentient. Edward was surprised with the connection, the recognition, that he felt.

"Little panther!" Bella said in English. She had seen them on television, but had never encountered a house cat in the real world. She reached out and stroked the cat's velvety soft ears. It purred and butted her hand with its triangular head.

"Cat," Jacob corrected. "Where did it come from?"

"It was Tanya's cat," Edward told him.

"Ugh. The poor creature has suffered enough." Jacob scratched under the cat's chin and it purred louder. "We'd better take it with us, since Jinx and Brady are gone."

"I don't think Felix likes house pets," Edward said.

"You only say that because he tried to put Noodles in the neighbor's moving van that one time."


Edward turned back to the woman to finish the instructions he had wanted to give her. "You're going to go back to school," he said. "You're going to get out of this life, because you deserve better. And if you need help, you'll call this number." He recited his cell phone number to her, and the woman repeated it obediently.

"You won't forget it," he insisted.

"No, I won't forget."

"Good. Take ... take care of yourself."

He took Bella's arm and they left the alley, crossing the street into a nearby park.

"That was very kind of you," Bella said, her eyes soft and luminous.

"I felt I owed her more than money.

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2012 11:20 AM Title: Chapter 22

well I am still remembering him telling Tanya he loved her.  That is sticking in my mind.



Author's Response:

He only said that so she would think he was under her control. He wanted her to drop her guard so that he could try to escape.

Reviewer: axadams Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2012 8:40 AM Title: Chapter 22

Oh wow, I wondered if he had been 'vamped' but didnt think there was enough time, got caught out there ! 

I wouldn't fancy being Jinx right now, or Victoria. E&B, along with their human 'posse' are going to be a force to be reckoned with !

 

Great chapter, thanks.

Reviewer: marycullenblack Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2012 4:45 AM Title: Chapter 22

I got so excited when i got the alert, I really love your story

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2012 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 22

Well, one thing is for sure, your vampires are much less dangerous than the ones in the Canon mythology ...

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2012 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 21

he better open his eyes or we will all be crying!

Reviewer: Cullensbabymama7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2012 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 21

THANK GOD TANYA IS DEAD THAT NASTY LITTLE BITCH.

I HOPE BELLA KILLS JINX, THAT RAT!

EDWARD! THANK GOD HE OPENED HIS EYES.

Reviewer: lirock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2012 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 21

What the????????????

Did Tanya's venom make him a vampire?

Great chapter!

Please don't make us wait too long, kay?

Reviewer: axadams Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2012 3:23 PM Title: Chapter 21

I did actually GOL (gasp out loud !) at that last line. Where they literally magic words ? Was it a trigger set by Jinx before he left ? Is Edward truly 'alive' or something else ?

Great chapter, can't wait to find out what's going on with Edwurr.

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2012 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 21

I am glad that Tanya is dead.

 

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Her new boots seemed to glow under the light from the street lamps. She'd refused to wear any of the shoes in her closet because they were all made from "dead skin" and they'd had to make a quick stop at Walmart. Bella's feet were so small that they ended up having to shop in the children's section. Jacob had tried to gently dissuade Bella from her choice, but Bella had set her jaw stubbornly and said, "Want these!" And that's how the Dark Goddess ended up setting out on their rescue mission, wearing red rubber rain boots with a grinning red puppet with googly eyes on the toe.

Rose, who'd been waiting in the car for them, had to bite her lip when she caught sight of Bella's new footwear. "I should have known Bella's ass-kicking boots would have Elmo on them."


"Shinx," Bella said.

"Goddess?"

She nodded toward her friends. "Tell them what happen when we break promise to fae."

Jinx frowned slightly, but he complied. "Promises made to the fae are binding. If you break it, you die."

She met his eyes squarely. "I swear I kill you, Shinx. You die screaming, I promise."

A gust of breeze passed through the kitchen. Jinx was startled and unsettled by Bella's words. He regained his composure and bowed. "If I must sacrifice my life to restore the balance, so be it."


. She laid it on his chest and brushed his hair back from his forehead one last time. "Love you, Edwurr," she said.

Edward opened his eyes.

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jun 2012 10:59 AM Title: Chapter 20

:)

Reviewer: stupidlamb2010 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2012 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 20

Holy shit balls. Poor Edward I hope they find him and bring him back soon.

Reviewer: Humble Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2012 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 20

Bella's gonna cut a bitch with her sword!!!

 

 

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Her despairing eyes met Jacob's. She closed them for a moment and a tremor went through her. When she re-opened her eyes, they were hard and cold. "When I find out who take my Edwrurr, I kill t'em. I kill t'em all." As though to punctuate her words, there was a crack of thunder and lightning split the sky.

"I'll help," Jacob vowed.



"Need sharp," Bella said.

"What?"

Bella pulled a knife from the block by the cutting board. She spread her hands to indicate a greater length.

"A sword," Jacob said. "I don't know where to go to get one, honey. It's not like you can pop down to Walmart and pick one up in the 'archaic weaponry' aisle."



"You not fail," Bella said firmly. "You not know everyt'ing."

Felix smiled slightly. "Thank you, Mrs. Cullen."

"Bella," she corrected. "You family."

Felix nodded, his smile gentle. He gave Bella a small bow and exited the room.



"I never hurt Edwurr," Bella vowed. "I love Edwurr. And I get him back."

Muvver smoothed Bella's hair. "I know you will, my dear. And I know you'll make them pay for what they've done."

"T'at a promise," Bella said grimly.



Author's Response:

LOL

That could be a very funny scene: "Let him go! I not want have to cut a bitch."

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