Date: 16 Nov 2014 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 8
see?
24 hrs? thats all it takes?
this is silly. irl, i am sure it would take a hell of a lot
longer to either come to terms with it or not...
but i suppose this is not rl....but fictional life...
sorry, but edward is enjoying himself with esme way too much
for my liking....
Date: 16 Nov 2014 11:55 AM Title: Chapter 7
yes, tanya has him by the balls,
but he doesn't have to enjoy it so much.
i would be so disappointed if bella just up and forgives him...
it's just disgusting, imo...
just think...he has his mouth and tongue in her vagina and wherever else
and loving it then goes home to his love, bella?
come on...he and his father are really f'ed up!
i can't even imagine my man kissing another woman let alone the
"other stuff"... ewww
Date: 16 Nov 2014 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 3
edward is a sick sick boy!
if he wants to be with bella, truly, he best stop being a whore.
what is wrong with him...
oh, we know, mommy issues....
Date: 21 Jul 2013 12:38 AM Title: Chapter 3
Wow what a family...I just have to say why be married?
Date: 21 Jul 2013 12:24 AM Title: Chapter 1
Interesting plot,,,,
[Report This]Date: 19 Oct 2012 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 10
Thanks good chapter
[Report This]Date: 19 Oct 2012 3:24 PM Title: Chapter 10
thank you for the update............That Tanya is a HOT MESS she knew that Keegan was Edward son, he looks just like his father..what's her game?....it doesn't matter, Edward will ruin her and if he doesn't Bella will...........thank you I loved your story.....very entertaining.....WELL DONE
[Report This]Date: 19 Oct 2012 12:18 AM Title: Chapter 10
:) loved this story
[Report This]Date: 11 Oct 2012 8:41 PM Title: Chapter 8
thank you for the update.I must have miss a chapter... I have to go back this one didn't make any sense to me
[Report This]Date: 11 Oct 2012 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 8
Yea! About time! Now if he can just keep it in his pants! Except for Bella of course... Although, I think family holidays will be very strange for awhile...LOL!
[Report This]Date: 11 Oct 2012 2:30 AM Title: Chapter 7
Not really sure how he can blame Tayna for everything when he seems to have a pretty good time fucking Esme. I think he is just upset he got caught. I also don't believe he loves Bella because if he did, he might go through the motions with other women because he was being blackmailed but he wouldn't enjoy it so much... Thanks for the update! :~)
Date: 09 Oct 2012 12:20 AM Title: Chapter 6
Bella would have to be a complete dumbass to actually stay with Edward if/when she finds out about Esme. In all honesty, she should have just stayed with Jacob considering Edward's idea of love doesn't seem to differ much. I don't understand why he is even bothering with her, other than the baby ofcourse, when the sex is so good & he "sees the sun for the first time" with Esme & he questions whether he loves her? I mean, yes he's a whore. Bella obviously accepted that fact but I think the whole "mom" factor exceeds Jacobs betrayal by far. I know I wouldn't want my child anywhere near that f*cked up family.
Date: 23 Sep 2012 5:18 AM Title: Chapter 5
I'M SO GLAD THEY ARE TALKING ABOUT LOVING EACH OTHER I HOPE EDWARD SOON KNOWS IF HE LOVES BELLA. I HOPE YOU SOON HAVE ANOTHER CHAPTER UP I REALLY ENJOY READING IT.
Date: 23 Sep 2012 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 4
HE SO HAPPY ABOUT THE BABY I HOPE TO HELL SHE ISN'T PLAYING HIM AND THE BABY END UP BEING MR. BLACKS. I THINK THAT WOULD REALLY HURT EDWARD TOO MUCH.
Date: 23 Sep 2012 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 3
WELL I HOPE EDWARD DOESN'T FUCK ESME ANY MORE IF HE WANTS TO BE WITH BELLA HE SHOULD GIVE UP THAT JOB ASAP. AND DAMN WHAT HAPPENS IF CARLISLE FINDS OUT IT WAS EDWARD THAT FUCKED HIS WIFE ALL SHIT COULD HIT THE FAN FOR SURE. I LIKE YOUR STORY A LOT I TAKE IT AS IT ISMENT TO BE A STORY NOT REAL I READ ALL KINDS OF STORYS EVEN SOME OF YOUR FIRST ONES DO YOU REMEMBER ME? WELL YOU HAVE MORE UP ON THIS STORY SO I'M OFF TO READ THEM
Date: 23 Sep 2012 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 2
OH SHIT IS SHE GOING TO MAKE TROUBLE FOR HIM NOW MAYBE KEEP HIM FROM BEING ABLE TO GET WITH BELLA?
Date: 22 Sep 2012 8:37 AM Title: Chapter 1
IT'S GOOD SO FAR
[Report This]Date: 20 Sep 2012 3:34 AM Title: Chapter 5
You really scared me with him and his dad. I was sitting here almost throwing up about tanya doing that too them. I love bella came to the aide of edward. I wonder what she will think when she finds out it is esme. WHat the heck can edward get on tanya and get out before he looses out on the promotion and job he has always fought for. Will there be a HEA for bella and edward together.
Date: 22 Aug 2012 11:40 AM Title: Chapter 4
he needs to stop being with esme before bella finds out!
Date: 22 Aug 2012 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 4
Wow, great chapter! Glad that Esme and Edward are going to (try to) stop having the sex with each other....this family is quite convoluted with Edward's half-sister being married to Bella's full-brother (did I get that right). ;)
Wonder what Jake wants with the country house? Guess we will have to wait and find out...I don't think I would get too upset settling for $50 million and a condo.
Date: 18 Jul 2012 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 3
In a weird way, I like it!!!! Hope Edward will get his dream family :)
[Report This]Date: 18 Jul 2012 12:09 PM Title: Chapter 3
Tell her to fuck off! You can't seriously want to have a relationship with Bella and still be a whore....
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2012 1:22 AM Title: Chapter 2
Thanks good chapters
Date: 22 Jun 2012 9:42 PM Title: Chapter 2
Interesting start. Thanks for writing.
[Report This]Date: 22 Jun 2012 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 2
Great chapter, update soon
Date: 22 Jun 2012 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
Thank goodness that would definitely make this a greater Greek tragedy. Carlisle found out about Esmes little tryst?
Date: 22 Jun 2012 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
Esmes pregnant was well?
Author's Response:
Not likely, she's like 52. It may be possible, but I doubt it will happen. Thanks for reading.
Date: 22 Jun 2012 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 2
I think you have great potential as a writer-but it's kind of a stupid storyline. edward is too unsympathetic to feel any connection too and the women are all spinless or vile, the nature of their cahracters made me lose interest in the story. on the bright side, I admire you for giving fanfiction a go and you do create clear characters and a poltline in a short period of time-that's hard to do and you've done it.
Author's Response:
Hmm... well, first, thanks for the complement on my skills as a writer. I'm not really sure you're completely understanding the story line. It's a little harsh to call something stupid that only has two chapters posted. We've not even really got going yet. I don't see Edward as unsympathetic at all, he's actually the total opposite. He loves to please his women. He's a gigilo with a heart of gold. I don't see how you think the women are spinless, or vile, we've barely met them. As far as plot it's only just beginning with many more twists in store. I think your review is a bit harsh and premature. But good use of the sandwich method, you know good, bad, good. LOL Read it or not, either way I'm having a good time writing it and there's plenty of people that are loving it. Thanks for the review!