Date: 07 Dec 2012 9:35 AM Title: Chapter 6
this is a really good plot, but some times i feel like you rush through the chapter and don't completely explain why things happen.
also, i am a bit confused as to why bella wouldn't want to be marked by peter. it made sense in the begininng that she was wary of another partner, but then she completely flipped and was all over him.
like i said, it's a good plot and i will keep reading, but i just feel like you should plan out the chapter a bit more, and have a clear direction where you want it to go. x
I write what comes to my mind, i jot down that idea and never try to go over it too much. I find it never reads well when ido. So far i like what i have done.
As for the marking... Simply put, which Bella also said in the story in her words, Peter is mated to them, yes, but he is at the same level as Jasper. they are both submissive to him,basically. but he will not treat Peter, and Bella knows this, as if he isn't a man. There's only one dominant male in their mating andmajor is it. that marking thing shows that is how it is in her mind. the men see where she is coming from and he also does get to scent her and mark her in other ways, so he is happy enough with how it is.
Have you got any stories i could read. i am always interested in reading J/B P/B Paul/B stories.
my chapters always have lots in them. I, unfortunately, cannot please everyone. I have tried and failed many times. It takes my stories and ruins them when i try to write them how others say they should be written. so i end up just deleting the story. i lose faith in my own ability with that story they wish me to write differently so without having the want and drive to continue it and rewrite it to how i like it done, i just delete it and i feel a load better.
horrible, i know, but sometimes trying to please others when i have always written for myself, not others, is never an easy thing. So i do thank you for the advice very much so. I only wish i could please all of you. But it is an impossibility. You have a wonderful day/night,and god bless and merry christmas.
Date: 28 Nov 2012 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 21
love this ch. and i love you name some of your old storys like rush i also love a very dom jasper.and always love your storys keep it up
Hi sweets, thought i would let you know i have some ideas on some B/J fics. but i was wondering if you have a profile on ff so i can docx them to you there. you can choose what one to continue on with for an easy short story. my short stories are no more than 7 chapters long.
my email is email@example.com
Just let me know any time soon, thanks for reading.
Date: 27 Nov 2012 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 20
can't eait for the next ch.
I knew if i left the last part of the epilogue long enough you would review to say something like this. :)
I am putting it up as we speak... type... you know what i mean.
Watch out for other one shots i am putting up later today or tonight.
Date: 19 Nov 2012 10:52 AM Title: Chapter 16
I wonder what the text said.......guess i am about to find out. I am sure I said I was going to leave this and read it tomorrow....oh well I will sleep when I am dead :D
I think we all will when we're dead. lol
Date: 19 Nov 2012 12:30 AM Title: Chapter 2
I have already read some of these chapters on my phone, however, when I read on my phon it wont allow reviews....sorry. So I may not review every chapter but I will definitely be reading every one written
Good on ya' darl'.
Hope you enjoy them
Date: 19 Nov 2012 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 1
Enjoyed the 1st chapter
thanks babe, for reading it.
I do apologise for taking them all down from fanfic.net, but they were becoming impossible. when i only had three chapters of ROCK CHICKS up they reckon the story content is above the M rating. they dont have any higher a rating to use. lol
So i took mine down after they repeatedly kept taking a particular group of mine down, and i am slowly putting them up on here.
Date: 18 Nov 2012 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 15
i like her as a newborn dont you
This version yes. It isnt the bloodthirsty violent type nor the i am in complete control type.
I wanted something slightly more real, but with a little control.
Glad you are enjoying it.
Date: 18 Nov 2012 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 12
and the brun begains good times.
Did you mean, 'fun'?
And if yes, then yeah, it will begin. Once they realize they are doing what they shouldnt be doing. because it makes her feel as she does.
Date: 14 Nov 2012 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 2
oh ya keep that up and i will have to have a cold shower don't stop now pleaseee
I might... ;)
But you are going to kick all three of their asses at one point or another yet, before they all settle in to a nice life.
Date: 13 Nov 2012 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
I hoping you get this review. The last couple of times I've tried to review it hasn't let me.
LOVED it, can't wait for more!!!
I got this one.
Thanks for reviewing. Will be putting the next chapter up soon as i am done answering the reviews.
But heed the warnings. slash/femmeslash poly sexual activities. poly relationship and couples.
You have a wonderful day and i hope you enjoy the rest of this story.