Date: 01 Aug 2014 3:59 AM Title: Chapter 34
Bella told Jasper all about himself!
He was being just like Edward.
"Break it."
And Jasper just might break the entire place down.
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I like your writing in third person these last couple of chapters.
Date: 31 Jul 2014 4:58 AM Title: Chapter 32
Well, I guess Peter told Jasper how it is.
Author's Response:
Yeah, Jasper gets told a lot by Peter.
Date: 31 Jul 2014 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 28
Fucking Aro.
And what the hell is Peter up to?
Date: 30 Jul 2014 8:41 PM Title: Chapter 23
"Not at the cost of someone else's."
That's a lie right there, Bella. You'd let someone you love be killed just so you wouldn't have to kill somebody? You wouldn't protect your children or spouse? You'd let them be killed so a death wouldn't be on your hands?
Date: 30 Jul 2014 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 21
Jacob the ass-wipe.
Shoulda killed him.
Reveal themselves to the humans? Doesn't seem like such a good idea.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 20
So how come Peter hasn't marked Char as his mate?
Damn! Victoria and James. Holy shit. It's a wonder Bella didn't tear them both apart.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 6:33 PM Title: Chapter 19
interesting outfit Jasper picked out for Bella.
Then he'll get all pissed off when other folks look at her.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 17
Daddy Cullen's favorite fox. Oh my.
She is hatin' that shit.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 16
So, he was molding her rather like Edward was trying to.
I see.
Jasper wouldn't have been able to make her into the fighter she is if it wasn't there to be brought out.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 15
Ha!
Edward thinking he knows best again. And Alice gets to watch him burn.
They ficked over Jasper and Bella and I guess Bella fucked them right back.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 14
What? She's his mate, but he isn't hers?
Duh fuck?
She's clinging hard to what she thought she learned from the Cullens.
Scent is part of it? Sure.
Aros' dear friends. Must be the Cullens.
Why the hell would they follow Jasper and Bella into the woods?
Date: 30 Jul 2014 3:38 AM Title: Chapter 13
Total sexist, chauvinistic pigs.
What does Bella see?
Two of her favorite people? Or some other vampire out there?
Date: 30 Jul 2014 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 12
ALL the Cullens knew Edward and Alice were going at it?
Jesus Christ. How the hell did Jasper not catch them or feel deceit from them?
He should have done more than rip Edward's arm off.
Alice needed that pretty little face ripped.
And she blames Jasper, claiming he finally snapped.
Payback is due.
Ahhhh. An American Vampire in Paris. Maybe they'll bump into Alice and Edward.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 3:00 AM Title: Chapter 11
Gee. Shouldn't he make sure her arm is back on before he fucks her?
Date: 30 Jul 2014 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 10
Jasper made an enemy of Maria. But she knows where she stands.
I wouldn't trust her.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 2:28 AM Title: Chapter 9
She finally got to feed.
All she wants is to be able to call him Jasper?
She's got to be up to something.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 2:17 AM Title: Chapter 8
Charlotte was worried about Bella? I think she'll learn not to do that anymore.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 7
She's not doing real well with the Newborn 101.
It may take Jasper a little time to get her to his bed.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 6
"hit and quits?"
Never mind. I looked it up.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 5
Newborn 101.
Bella is learnin'.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 4
Jasper has to be curious about what's happened in the last five years.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 1:32 AM Title: Chapter 3
She's all pissed off at Peter, now she's all pissed off a Jasper. And gone.
I hope she doesn't hurt the goon squad too bad.
Date: 30 Jul 2014 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 2
Finally remembered who she was, huh?
Five years ago?
who bit her to change her? Peter?
Date: 30 Jul 2014 1:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
Cheating pixie? Eager to see what the story is behind that.
Date: 20 May 2014 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 10
nope still fucking hate jasper with all my might YOU MADE ME HATE HIM FOREvER in this fic
Date: 20 May 2014 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 9
nope still fucking hate Jasper
Date: 20 May 2014 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 8
i really fucking hate Jasper right now
Date: 24 Nov 2013 5:59 AM Title: Chapter 2
Loved it! Go Bella! Bella is a bad ass!
Date: 24 Nov 2013 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wonderful beginning!
Date: 23 Oct 2013 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 14
Time for a grammar lesson.
Your: indicating possession. "That is your book."
You're: a contraction of "You are". "You're a wanker."
Their: indicating possession. "That is their book."
They're: a contraction of "They are". "They're wankers."
There: indicating location. "The book is over there."
It's really just not that hard.
Also, it's Captain, not "caption".
Also, it's against, not "ageist".
Date: 13 Oct 2013 3:24 PM Title: Chapter 2
Gotta love feisty Bella! :D I'm curious about the rest of the story!
Date: 12 Jul 2013 6:27 PM Title: Chapter 39
noooo please dont leave it there. I want MORE!!!!
Ty for writing and sharing though.
Author's Response:
So glad you liked it. I only left it there because I do plan on writing a sequel to this story when I have the time and after I get a few other things done. :D
Thanks for reading and taking the time to review
Date: 12 Jul 2013 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 38
Wow Surprised that jasper really did the right thing. YEY
Date: 12 Jul 2013 5:52 PM Title: Chapter 37
Excellent job Ms B. can't wait to see the next meeting.
Date: 12 Jul 2013 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 36
hmmm cant wait to see what B has in mind for him.
Date: 12 Jul 2013 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 35
Glad he's finally realizing what a dick he is. Too bad it took Peter this long to force the knowledge on him.
Date: 12 Jul 2013 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 34
Hell Yeah!!!! Love Bella finally being allowed to stand up for herself.
Date: 12 Jul 2013 4:46 PM Title: Chapter 33
OMG I'm SOOOOOOOO in love with Peter right now with that speech.
Date: 12 Jul 2013 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 39
love it
Date: 11 Jul 2013 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 32
Great fight. Go Daddy P. Although B deserves to kick a bit of J's arse too.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 10:28 PM Title: Chapter 31
awww Peter and B come to an understanding. Ugh Major dickhead needs a real wakeup call.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 10:19 PM Title: Chapter 30
oooh really liking Felix Glad Felix and D told her the truth of some things and told off Jasper.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 29
oooh Demetri really has a death wish kissing her. Great job with Chelsea though.
Author's Response:
*giggles* that chapter was written after this story was on hiatus for like... forever and during that time was when I developed my love/obession of Demetri
Date: 11 Jul 2013 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 28
oooh Peter..... you better not ever try that maker thing on her wothout real need. Jane needs to die along with Aro.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 27
hmmm wonder who Aro paid to take down the plane and why?
Date: 11 Jul 2013 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 26
time jump?? uh oh Italy.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 25
Great chapter. Love how she messed with him and he never really knew.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 9:06 PM Title: Chapter 24
Wonder if B willget another shot at P?
Date: 11 Jul 2013 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 23
oooh Go Bad Ass Bella. Peter deserves is for putitng her through it all the way it went down. Liking Garrett
Date: 11 Jul 2013 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 22
Cant blame her for being worried at being punished. She is a funny drunk though.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 21
Excellent Bella Speech. F'ing Jake just had to open his mouth.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 20
ok you saved yourself at the end. I was really pissed that J lets her and char argue and then wants to punish her for doing it? WTF. These other people seem to be getting away with baiting B and she gets punished.
Victoria really needs her tongue ripped out. What a skank.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 7:33 PM Title: Chapter 19
uh oh that end comment is ominous. He should mention something before they leave the room though....or is he trying to set her up.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 7:15 PM Title: Chapter 18
Well at least he is getting better with talking to her like a normal person.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 6:27 PM Title: Chapter 17
lol for her first taste of anumal.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 5:36 PM Title: Chapter 16
Well at least he acknowledges he is a selfish dick. LOL
Date: 11 Jul 2013 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 15
Glad B got a little revenge. E and A did get off easy. E is a moron.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 14
gee Jazz.....can you blame her for not understanding??? Ya been calling her Pet since hte beginning.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 13
Wow he is not a real great communicator. He is a real dick. Emotional abuse can be just as bad as physical
(PS this is not criticiting your writing. I like the story. I just like to vent at the characters, not you. But I'm sure you already knew that :-) )
Date: 11 Jul 2013 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 12
ugh too submissive <whining> hmmm did parents really die that way or was it victoria? No wolves in story? Wow they all sides with the wonder twins. Why bother to keep him around all these years? Protection?
Author's Response:
I promise that Jasper gets what he deserves. It just takes a while since the story changed so much from the original plot I had to what it became.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 11
hmm now what did Peter do to piss her off. Guessing I'm going to be more pissed at Jazz soon?
Date: 11 Jul 2013 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 10
grrr dont care much for the uber submissiveness. Jazz deserves his dick ripped off still at this point. Maria is going to be trouble i think.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 9
nooooo B make him squim!!!! he deserves it.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 8
besides the obvious, why is she so skittish. Really want her to get some revenge on Jasper at this point.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 7
Hope she rips his dick off. Peter's too. He's insinuating Slave or personal Whore...what was she supposed to think.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 6
Stay strong Bella. Wish she had a shield to keep him from messing with her emotions and/or touch her.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 2:13 AM Title: Chapter 5
She obviously remembers more than Peter thinks she does. Hope she gets a little revenge for the hell those two are going to put her through.
Date: 11 Jul 2013 2:08 AM Title: Chapter 4
hmmm Peter and Jazz are in for a rough ride trying the normal shite on her.
Date: 10 Jul 2013 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 3
OMG Bella is hilarious. Hope B fk's up the goon squad. hmm so she's got fuckwards mind reading and she's a shield???? or am I mis reading that?
Date: 10 Jul 2013 10:51 PM Title: Chapter 2
oooh liking smart ass, snarky Bella
Date: 10 Jul 2013 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 1
oooh love me some bad ass Jasper!!!
Date: 10 Jul 2013 3:54 PM Title: Chapter 39
I really enjoyed this story. You put a whole different twist on ot that had me hooked from the very first chapter. Keep up the good work! ^.^
Date: 01 Jul 2013 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 1
Loved the story! And the emotional rollercoaster they went with it! :)
Date: 24 Jun 2013 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
Hi liked this story especially kickass Bella is there a sequel to this
Author's Response:
Not yet, no. I have a million other things going on right now and don't have the time to start it at the moment.
Date: 23 Jun 2013 5:54 PM Title: Chapter 3
Oh boy these two are going to kill each other
Date: 23 Jun 2013 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 2
Oh boy! Pissed off Bella!
Date: 23 Jun 2013 5:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
Jasper is in full major! I wonder when Bella is going to show up
[Report This]Date: 21 Jun 2013 3:23 AM Title: Chapter 39
love the story
Author's Response:
*claps* Thanks so much. This story went through so many changes from the origingal story line that it's hit and miss. I really have come to find that it is a love it or hate it story.
Super thrilled you liked it.
Speklez
[Report This]Date: 20 Jun 2013 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 11
time for a nap i will read more when i wake up it's a great story
Author's Response:
Thanks. Glad you're enjoying it.