Date: 07 Apr 2016 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
Sounds interesting can't wait to read more.
Date: 18 Nov 2015 2:22 AM Title: Chapter 32
great story but it did give me a few head aches because the in each chapter there were some mix ups with names etc. but really good otherwise ;) thanks for sharing on here ;D
Date: 12 May 2014 6:26 PM Title: Chapter 32
awww for carlisle's POV.
TY for writing and sharing.
Date: 12 May 2014 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 30
Well E took the news well
Date: 12 May 2014 5:08 PM Title: Chapter 29
wow so everyone knows everythign now?
Date: 12 May 2014 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 28
B&E were only together 3 weeks ago but she was 5 weeks pregnant?
Date: 12 May 2014 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 27
Hope Ang will be ok
Date: 12 May 2014 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 26
ah so Ang is lying about matt. hmmm
Date: 12 May 2014 4:56 PM Title: Chapter 24
ok jenn is really insensive to bring someone to Bella's place while Amber was babysitting.
Date: 12 May 2014 4:51 PM Title: Chapter 23
wierd dream. But Bella, Mom's don't just get over it.
Date: 12 May 2014 4:37 PM Title: Chapter 22
Alice is annoying. Interesting dream
Date: 12 May 2014 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 21
ah drunkeness always abounds doesn't it.
Date: 12 May 2014 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 20
Lauren is right. She is not ready
Date: 12 May 2014 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 19
6 months is not a long time if you ask me Edward.
Bella is a bit snotty
Date: 12 May 2014 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 18
Glad someone finally told mom. What a sleezebag
Date: 12 May 2014 4:14 PM Title: Chapter 17
Wow B is really being snotty
Date: 12 May 2014 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 16
Wonder how long till they confront E's dad.
Date: 12 May 2014 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 15
Ugh well she knows about Jake now.
Date: 12 May 2014 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 14
Wow Alice is a snot and his dad is a cheating jerk. Wowser his family is messed up
Date: 12 May 2014 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 12
Wow she's being a bitch. She hit him while texting. Or did he do something to her in HS?
Date: 12 May 2014 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 11
Ah Josh. he sounds like a jerk. Yey for Angela.
Date: 12 May 2014 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 10
hmmm so B knew Tanya huh? or different Tanya??
Date: 12 May 2014 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 9
Alice is really annoying me for some reason. Can't pin down why though. At least Lauren dropped the flirtiness when he told her about Tanya.
Date: 12 May 2014 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 7
Her mom is too funny.
Date: 12 May 2014 3:38 PM Title: Chapter 6
Wow I'm not liking his mom at all.
Date: 12 May 2014 3:24 PM Title: Chapter 5
hmmm So B doesn't know about Jake. That is going to come as a big shock when she does.
Date: 12 May 2014 3:08 PM Title: Chapter 4
Poor Tanya. Adoption probably was the best option. Did you guys delete and repost this story. I swear I've read it before.
Author's Response:
I have never deleted this story before. It has been on this website for as long as I can remember. But of course, it is on other websites too.
Thanks for reading.
RobstenLover93
Date: 12 May 2014 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 3
six months is not that long. But everyone is different I suppose.
Date: 12 May 2014 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 2
Not really liking Alice right now. The retard word was out of line and its only been 6 months. Jeez Louise. You'd think it was 6 years or something.
Date: 12 May 2014 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
6 months is not a long time to grieve. Family needs to be patient.
Date: 04 Apr 2014 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 22
Just wanted to let you know that I am enjoying your story.Keep up the good work!
Date: 03 Jan 2014 10:27 AM Title: Chapter 32
Special daddy moments are pure and full of love
Author's Response:
Especially to Carlisle in this story, he won't ever forget the moments of her childhood! Thanks so much for reviewing :)
[Report This]Date: 15 Nov 2013 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
I wanted to tell you that I hardly ever read online, because the backlighting hurts my eyes, and well I am getting to be older than dirt ... LOL.
Anyway so this will be a large review, and I hope that you will read it all, becasue some of it will be meant to be constructive learning advice.
First off the premiss behind this story is truly amazing and I loved the whole idea from the get go. I love the way you told the story, including the flashbacks you used. I am not a huge fan of flashbacks, but you actually did well with them. Now for the advice, and please by all means if you would like to discuss anythign I say or tell you feel free to contact me, on facebook I am Kasi Teamalltwilight Maakestad on gmail I am teamalltwilight@gmail.com. I write under the names, TeamAllTwilight, WeeKittyAndTAT, JessAndTAT and WeeJessAndTAT. I am MORE than open to discussing things with you.
Please know that I am far from grammatic perfection. Your story listed you as having a Beta and that is a good thing, I would suggest having and using a pre-reader as well. You had a few places where you had actual storyline switches. You had some places where you flip flopped your tense as well, these are very easy thigns to do, and I myself am terrible when it comes to tense issues. You had a few instances of word misuse or spelling issues.
As I said, I'm far from perfect. I am only offering the advice and things, becasue I think you have a talent. If you would like I can actually show you what I am speaking of. Send me an email if you are interested.
All in all this story is worth reading, and I sure hope to see more from you. I've added you to my favorites and I'll be watchign for updates.
Kasi aka: TeamAllTwilight
Author's Response:
Thank you for the advice Kasi! I did have a BETA on this but she kind of disappeared far into the story so when I couldnt get a hold of her after an update was taking a while I just posted. If I chose to message you it'll probably be over email. Thanks for reading!
Date: 10 Nov 2013 6:10 AM Title: Chapter 31
Thanks for the story so much happened to them and poor Amber and Jennifer life is ruff. I hope Carlisle rots in hell
Author's Response:
Thanks for continuing to review! I do appreciate it :)
Date: 09 Nov 2013 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 30
A baby on the way and moving in wow
Date: 08 Nov 2013 12:22 AM Title: Chapter 29
They are working things out
Date: 28 Oct 2013 6:37 AM Title: Chapter 26
Poor girl not a way to live
Date: 21 Oct 2013 3:38 AM Title: Chapter 24
So amber's Edward sr weird
[Report This]Date: 20 Oct 2013 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 11
cute story and enjoying it - found it this morning and will read it all the way through - only teeny tiny problem is with "A/N" - when I'm reading a story I don't like to be reminded that it is a "story" I want it to flow and not be reminded that I'm reading not "listening in" to thoughts - thanks for the interesting story though!
Date: 20 Oct 2013 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 24
Amber is a good person I dont think she is to happy with her father and sister right now.
Date: 19 Oct 2013 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 24
What a twisted web we weave. Very interesting story.
Date: 11 Oct 2013 8:29 AM Title: Chapter 23
So they are all in seattle
Date: 11 Oct 2013 8:17 AM Title: Chapter 22
She is having a preminition about babys.
Date: 11 Oct 2013 8:11 AM Title: Chapter 21
She is going to call him did they use the condoms??
Date: 11 Oct 2013 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 20
She needs the right guy I hope he shows up
Date: 11 Oct 2013 7:55 AM Title: Chapter 19
She is bit by the baby bug lol
Date: 11 Oct 2013 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 18
Cheaters never win it gets them in the end.
Date: 11 Oct 2013 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 17
She has a burr up her ass it needs pulled out
Date: 11 Oct 2013 7:21 AM Title: Chapter 16
What will they do about dad??? Suprise Bella that is who he has been looking for.
Date: 11 Oct 2013 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 15
Now she remembers what an asshole he was not worth feeling bad about
Date: 11 Oct 2013 7:04 AM Title: Chapter 14
Some ? should not be asked unless you are ready for the answer.
Date: 11 Oct 2013 6:52 AM Title: Chapter 13
It is good to have great neighbors
Date: 11 Oct 2013 6:44 AM Title: Chapter 12
She is so angry poor Edward he was just being nice.
Date: 11 Oct 2013 6:37 AM Title: Chapter 11
A blast from the past she does not want to see
Date: 11 Oct 2013 5:27 AM Title: Chapter 10
So Bella didnt like Tanya.
Date: 11 Oct 2013 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 8
Her mom is determined to get her out there
Date: 11 Oct 2013 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 7
Small towns you got to love them.
Date: 11 Oct 2013 4:39 AM Title: Chapter 6
He needed to pull himself together for his son
Date: 11 Oct 2013 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 4
Wow that would be so hard
Date: 11 Oct 2013 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 2
It would be so hard to move on
Date: 07 Oct 2013 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 2
I don't like Alice.
Date: 07 Oct 2013 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice start!