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Reviewer: goddessmoe Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jun 2017 6:04 AM Title: Chapter 59

great story I really like it. 

Reviewer: AaronD Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Sep 2015 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 59

Wonderful story, I was surprised to see it end here (Even after 59 chapters). Although I am disappointed that Renesmee was not a part of it.

Reviewer: AaronD Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Sep 2015 8:23 AM Title: Chapter 38

What the hell? The bite from the last chapter wasn't mentioned AT ALL here. She should be turning into a vamp, or he should have had to suck the venom out. Perhaps you should just remove the "he bit" from the last chapter, and the chapter note from this one. 



Author's Response: He bit the pillow! I thought it was obvious. It does say "Then there was the damage to her pillow. How he had stopped himself from biting her he had no idea."

Reviewer: AaronD Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Sep 2015 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 24

The last few chapters have been really out of character for Bella. Especially the Bella you created in the earlier chapters. Using the excuse that she's 17 to excuse her behavior is really quite weak. I'm 18 (male) and consider myself to be quite mature. This is behavior better suited for an 8-year-old, and I would know because I've spent a lot of time around my much younger cousins. 

I've noticed that a lot of the older writers seem to think that this is the usual behavior for teenagers, and perhaps it was for them growing up, but it isn't for me and it especially isn't for Bella. 

Overall this has been a great story though. 



Author's Response: It was not so much that she was 17, as that was what others think. It was more that she had spent so long being the responsible one, the one to blame for everything, that she's lashing out now that things are getting to her as she had never been allowed to before. She has been taken out of her comfort zone and is reacting more like Renee would than herself.

Reviewer: twirob13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2015 2:47 PM Title: Chapter 59

AWESOME!!! i LOVED enhanced bella;) and rachel going wolf to ;) i'm not sure about paul/irena though? but i liked jake/tanya ;) i was hoping for the bree situation to be resolved though ;( thanks for sharing this on here for us ;D



Author's Response: Thanks for the great review. Sorry it took so long to answer.

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Dec 2014 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 59

it was a very good story

Reviewer: Celebrityhound Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15 Dec 2014 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 6

so good

Reviewer: aliciaw68 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Oct 2014 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 59

Loved this, thanks for writing. Ax

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 Oct 2014 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 59

Wonderful story! Thanks for sharing

Reviewer: sonogal Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Oct 2014 4:50 PM Title: Chapter 59

I loved the story. Thanks for sharing.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Oct 2014 3:11 AM Title: Chapter 59

Admittedly, it's always nice to get an acknowledgement of your review, but I also think it's better to get chapter updates! This was a really good story and I wholeheartedly agree that it's not good to lose any of my favorite vampire family in a battle with the Volturi! Hope to see another story from you in future, I know I'll enjoy it as much as I did this one!

Reviewer: Gelsa Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Oct 2014 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 59

I really enjoyed that. Thanks for writing it.

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Oct 2014 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 59

Thank you for this wonderful story.

Reviewer: Melcat Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Oct 2014 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 59

Great ending

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06 Oct 2014 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 59

Glad everyone got home safe and sound. awww for Kate and Garrett.   At least Aro was pacified.  Cauis is loose cannon though.  TY for writing and sharing with us on TWCS

ty

Reviewer: sonogal Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Oct 2014 1:25 PM Title: Chapter 58

I hope it is as easy as it appears. You never know with the Volatari.

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Sep 2014 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 58

[....we can steal them and then dump them close to a police station so they can be returned to their owners." She said. Bella was shocked] lol lol Bella's going to get exhausted if stealing a car shocks her...especially after almost sucking 4 people dry::))

Reviewer: noway Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2014 12:47 PM Title: Chapter 58

I agree with Bella. Everything was just to easy. Maybe that really wasn't Gioffre's lieutenant they let go. Maybe it was him and he just fooled them into thinking he was the lieutenant so he could escape. Hmm. Can't wait until the next update. Thanks, Maria

Reviewer: Sassy12345 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2014 3:34 AM Title: Chapter 58

thanks writing I'm wait for more

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Sep 2014 12:12 AM Title: Chapter 58

Love it when a plan comes together, to steal an A-Team line

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Sep 2014 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 58

If Bella is feeling that was all too easy, I'm sure you are about to prove her correct! Something isn't right, I'll bet! The way Edward's touch took away Bella's thirst needs to be explored, too. I await your next chapter with trepidation!

Reviewer: mrsvixter Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Sep 2014 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 58

fab chapter

well done

Reviewer: sonogal Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 Sep 2014 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 57

Edward better get ther quick. I hope Bella keeps her head.

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Sep 2014 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 57

The thought of Bella drinking from humans isn't pleasant but what bothers me more is righteous Carlisle saying 'I told you so'! lol

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Sep 2014 1:08 AM Title: Chapter 56

Alice must have been grinding her teeth buying Bella clothes at Walmart::))

Reviewer: Holidai Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22 Sep 2014 4:14 AM Title: Chapter 57

Oh my, I hope Edward intercepts her. This chapter was very exciting.

Reviewer: campyrs2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2014 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 57

Great chapter.   Bella finally gets thirsty.....    Oh boy! 

Reviewer: nnalday Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Sep 2014 5:23 AM Title: Chapter 57

Oh no! So sad about the little boy. Why did Bella suddenly feel the thirst? I hope she doesn't actually kill any humans to satiate the thirst.

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2014 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 57

No, no, no, no, noooooo!!!! You'll make it alright, pretty please.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2014 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 57

Poor Bella, what a time for the thirst to make itself known! She has been so free of it for so long that she didn't recognize what it was! Hope Edward gets to her in time to avert disaster!

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2014 3:54 PM Title: Chapter 57

Wow  that poor young boy.   uh oh  Bella's strength for thirst is somehow related to her shield and how far from Edward she is?

Reviewer: tlwatkins36 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2014 2:23 PM Title: Chapter 57

Why now!!!

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Sep 2014 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 57

Oh, wow. Great chapter. I was so sad for the boy: that was the most awful turning ever. Now Bella! She won't forgive herself if she hurts someone. 

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Sep 2014 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 56

Interestin turn.

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Sep 2014 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 56

I think this Gioffre is setting them up... I hope they figure it out first.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Sep 2014 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 56

I hope this hasn't been too easy and that Gioffre hasn't doubled back to Forks, to get behind the Cullens. They have to destroy the newborns and capture their sire or face the Volturi, which could be dangerous!

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Sep 2014 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 56

Ugh  the Volturi love to lay blame.   hope they catch up to Gioffre soon

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Sep 2014 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 55

Paul imprinting on a vampire! Priceless

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Sep 2014 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 55

Two hard headed people together.  ROFL.  Poor Rachel

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2014 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 55

The bonds between wolves and vampires are just growing by leaps and bounds! Rachel is sure not happy about phasing, but really, what can she do but accept gracefully? At least there is another she-wolf to commiserate with! The fact of Bella's lack of thirst is a real mystery! I wonder if they will ever know the cause or how long she can go without feeding? It sure is nice that Bella is happy and secure, finally. I suppose you have to put a stop to that soon? Drat!

Reviewer: Holidai Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2014 11:29 AM Title: Chapter 55

This chapter was excellent. I wonder if Rachel will imprint? I almost worry there was foreshadowing for her to imprint on Edward (though not in a romantic sense since he would not need it) but I doubt that very much. I think Bella's fears just transposed to me temporarily because I am so tired. Plus, since he has everything he needs then he doesn't need to be imprinted on - which really brings up a kinda neat point I never thought of before. I'm getting rambly, I'm sorry.

I am intriguedwith this development and wonder if Rachel will imprint and if so will her imprint will be local. This chapter was very good. :) Oh, I also like that they will be able to remain in the area for a time. I am intrigued by Bella's lack of thrist and wonder if she will need *something* (though I have no guess what) in another way.

Reviewer: Micci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Sep 2014 5:41 PM Title: Chapter 54

Awesome story I look forward to more

Reviewer: sonogal Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 Sep 2014 4:15 PM Title: Chapter 54

Great chapter.

Reviewer: Damsel w Dreams Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Aug 2014 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 54

I'm enjoying this story immensely! Thanks for all your hard work, real life and all!

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Aug 2014 5:08 AM Title: Chapter 54

Bella does need some more self esteem.

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Aug 2014 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 54

"REAL werewolves? What are we then? Figments of your imagination?" lol lol

Reviewer: Holidai Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30 Aug 2014 1:03 AM Title: Chapter 54

I hope Bella becomes more comfortable with attention over time. This chapter was really exciting and very interesting. I really liked it!

Reviewer: campyrs2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Aug 2014 12:19 AM Title: Chapter 54

This was good!  Bella has such a neat ability.  I can't wait for the next chapter.  Thank you!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2014 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 54

It's going to be really difficult to find and neutalize this "invisible" vampire with dreams of conquest! He wants to rule everything he can get his hands on and the Cullens and friends aren't about to let him! Bella has a truly amazing talent/gift, no wonder Eleazar and Carlisle are practically drooling with excitement to test it out!

Reviewer: sonogal Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Aug 2014 7:51 PM Title: Chapter 53

I hope Bella will stop whining all the time. She is almost as bad as Alice. They both want their way all the time. They both need to learn to compromise.

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Aug 2014 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 53

"There was a large gathering of people in the parking lot of Newton's Outfitters, guns of all shapes and sizes very much visible in the crowd as if they were gathering for an old time posse" OMG that's a scary thought::)) Considering highway 101 goes right thru town, there should be lots of strangers to shoot.
Just in case, I'll be mentally preparing myself in case something happens to Charlie.

Reviewer: renee aubin Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Aug 2014 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 53

I smiled that Bella is objecting to being "grounded" at the main house: "And I don't mean to be disrespectful Esme, but how do any of you expect to stop me?"

 

I like Edward's attitude about going home too:

‘Edward put his arm around her and gave her a wicked grin.

"I don't think sleep is what Bella is thinking of." He said.'

 

I enjoyed Edward's method of reassuring Bella that their lovemaking would be at least as pleasurable as before: "I can do this."  Very direct.

Nice:  ‘Electricity sped over their skin, almost feeling like her shield, but this time instead of pushing him away it drew him closer...'

 

Wonderful:  ‘He collapsed on top of her and once again experienced a momentary blackout, if he was human he would have said he was totally exhausted. ...

"Is this OK?" he mumbled into the pillow his face was pressed against.'

 

Oh, and Bella's shield must have something to do with blocking Emmett's and Rosalie's thoughts from Edward?

 

Of course:

‘"I haven't left the cottage." Bella insisted.

"I can see that!" Emmett wiggled his eyebrows...'

 

Yeah, after all it IS rural Washington:  ‘There was a large gathering of people in the parking lot of Newton's Outfitters, guns of all shapes and sizes very much visible in the crowd...'

 

Groan:

"I could do without the visual Seth!" [Edward] protested.

"Can't help it man, you should be inside our heads!"

"I AM! ... I thought there weren't any secrets in our family, that is just... worse!" 

 

Hmm, I wonder where you're going with the two nomads...

Reviewer: renee aubin Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Aug 2014 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 52

Now THIS was unexpected.  Bella runs after the human and then ‘"Are you ok?" she asked as she came to a sudden halt, almost breaking the laws of mass and inertia.'  She was attracted by the smell of spilled blood, but wanted to help rather than eat him!  Carlisle will be so proud.  Good point that with her shield, there's nothing any of the others could have done to stop her, either.

Funny:  ‘{Typical, here I am in the middle of nowhere and a goddess just appears out of the trees, and she's MARRIED!}'

Oh, interesting twist that Edward was involved in Rosalie's revenge on her attackers.  Makes very good sense, with his vigilante background.

Snicker, yeah, between Edward's gift and the pack mind, who needs a satellite phone?

Excellent:  "This is annoying." Irina said from the trees, "any one of us could pick him up and run with him and get him to hospital in less than half an hour, but because you all want to live amongst humans you have to go through this charade."

Oh, good for Charlie:  ‘Charlie was waiting for them on the doorstep, thinking silently that it may be easier for her if they were out in the open, the smell of human blood being diluted in the air rather than concentrated in a small room.'  Aww, ‘Charlie's thoughts were muddled with happiness.'

A well-thought out variation on canon, that Bella's human revulsion for blood morphs into a lack of appetite for it after her change.  Could be a problem, eh?  Is she going to be a "real" vegetarian?  Poor girl, "I'm a freak. I was when I was human and nothing has changed."  Hmm, and human food doesn't smell awful?

Good explanation:  "...we can assimilate [human] blood better. Maybe metabolise would be a better term, there are factors in animal blood that do not feed us as well as they should..." 

Also "The human blood lingering in the tissues is better than anything we can feed on, after all you cannot reject your own blood. It's also why Vampires tend to kill close family members first ... the closer the person is to them, the more compatible their blood is."

I've always enjoyed that your Charlie is a real dad:  ‘{Look after her.} Charlie told him in his thoughts, {I don't like the fact that she isn't eating.}'

Reviewer: goldseadragon Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Aug 2014 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 53

I'm surprised Bella isn't throwing a fit yet. There will always be a reason to interrupt them, always a crisis to be handled...she and Edward should run away for a decade or so to make sure they will be left alone.

Reviewer: TheLadyKT Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Aug 2014 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 53

Glad  B is doing well.   Glad they are banding together to protect the town as best they can.

Reviewer: Holidai Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Aug 2014 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 53

I am glad they were able to return to the cottage after all.  I need to reread but could Mike have been one of them?

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2014 7:47 PM Title: Chapter 53

This is getting to be dangerous for the little town of Forks! Poor Mike, tolose his parents in such a horribloe way! I sure hope the Cullen family, the Denalis and the wolvescan capture and destroy these twp marauders before anyone else is murdered! God forbid they should find Charlie like that, it would kill Bella!

Reviewer: campyrs2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Aug 2014 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 53

Interesting chapter.  Thank you for sharing!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Aug 2014 9:09 AM Title: Chapter 52

Puzzling.

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Aug 2014 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 52

Bella's an interesting newborn. While reading, I could feel the innocence & joy coming off her.

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2014 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 52

Hmmm interesting.... I wonder ... I can't wait till they figure out what is causing her non hunger.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2014 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 52

This is great! Bella saved the young camper instead of eating him!Her ability to ignore the blood is flat amazing, and what a blessing that she can see her dad so soon! That has to have thrilled them both! My jaw did drop, though, when she said how good Esme's cooking smelled! What is going on here, that Bella can feed so little and appreciate the smell of human food? Can't wait for your solution!

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2014 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 52

:)

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2014 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 52

Go Bad Ass Bella.   Love that she can see charlie so soon.

Reviewer: campyrs2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Aug 2014 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 52

Bella is just full of surprises.  Not sure I'd be able to trust her so quickly......

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21 Jul 2014 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 51

"Jake just imprinted!" lol Brilliant! That will keep those 2 characters busy & docile::))
Yep, "strongest genes" my ass!
["When's the wedding?" Charlie asked, taking another swig of beer.] My favorite type of Charlie....in the know & fine with all the crazy.

Vampire Bella is going to be entertaining to read about. I suspect Bella's not heading toward the human to drink

Reviewer: renee aubin Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 51

I love your Charlie.  He's so unflappable in the midst of all these excitable mythical creatures.  My favorite line:  ‘"When's the wedding?" Charlie asked, taking another swig of beer.'

 

Snicker:  ‘It was like a tennis match as so many people turned to the gorgeous woman, then the wolf then back again.'

 

Good for you for directly addressing the issue that imprinting can't be explained as "improving the bloodlines" if it can happen with a vampire.  Which makes Leah's situation all the sadder.  I sure hope she gets an HEA for a change in this story!

 

Also, this is so typical of ruling bodies of every kind:  ‘Of the whole council who attended only Uncle Quil was ever a wolf...' 

 

A good detail:  ‘Carlisle stepped towards the wolf, accidently getting in the path of his gaze, the huge wolf stepped sideways to keep his imprint in view.'  And funny that Jacob doesn't phase back until a particular part of him calms down.

 

I like that Carlisle steps in to slow down Jake and Tanya, so they both have a moment to think about how this will change their futures.

 

Thank you for this:  ‘If he was honest, during her human life she could not have been termed a true beauty by anyone but himself...'  It's so boring when plain Bella Swan somehow morphs into a supermodel when she arrives in Forks.

 

This made me smile:  ‘It was going to be hard enough on her to wake to her new life when she wasn't expecting the change yet, without him behaving like a horn dog.' 

 

Good use of the wolf pack, blocking the newborn's path toward the town.

 

Excellent:  ‘Bella took the opportunity of his mouth being open to kiss him fully for the first time, no worries about his sharp teeth now! So much for her being disorientated or not remembering him!'

 

I enjoyed Emmett being immediately bounced out of the room due to his usual excess of enthusiasm.  Cool too that her shield is selective enough to push away Tanya but not Jake.

 

‘Bella should have gone on alert at the presence of a strange vampire, never mind a werewolf, Edward was as confused as Jasper when she waved at the tall blonde.'  Me too!

 

‘"Is that really me?" she asked, moving to touch the glass with one finger.'  Lovely echo of the dream from New Moon.

 

Another thoughtful detail:  Edward ‘was more and more impressed, and more and more confused. Though actually that could have been Jasper. The civil war veteran had seen thousands of newborn[s] ... and never had he seen anything like Bella's control.'  Over the years they must all have become accustomed to questioning whether a particular emotion actually belonged to them, whenever Jasper was around.

 

Thank goodness:  ‘Esme had dressed her in her favourite pair of jeans and a plain white T-shirt when she had been changing.'  Alice and her designer dress in canon was just ridiculous.  Good for Bella, demanding another pair of the same jeans if they got damaged hunting.

 

I liked this moment:  ‘The next second she was stood upright again, a shocked look on her face. "Was that me?" she asked, he looked at her puzzled. "Did I just GROWL?" she asked, and giggled.'

 

Hilarious:  ‘Edward watched, puzzled at the way she held the beast until he realised that she was holding the cat's spine against her front in order to spare her clothes!'  Amusing that then she really doesn't know what to do with the cougar she captured! 

 

I particularly liked that she only wanted a few mouthfuls and then turned him over to Edward.  I can't remember anyone ever suggesting a vampire would stop before draining a kill.  (Other than Carlisle or Edward, of course, in order to turn someone.)  Nice:  ‘...being offered food from his mate was too much to resist.'

 

Good cliffie!  Somehow I think this Bella will be fine.

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 51

Oh, ooops. But great that Jacob has imprinted on Tanya

Reviewer: renee aubin Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 5:25 AM Title: Chapter 50

Interesting how the physical shield progresses, seeming to expand a little more every time someone new shows up, and yet limited by physical barriers like walls and doors.  Fun that the human cop is the one who directs everyone to get out safely while they still can.  And ‘there was no way [Edward] was leaving, just in case he couldn't get back in.‘

 

Funny moment when Emmett carries Charlie down from the balcony - without warning him first.

 

Good backstory on Eleazar and Carmen.  So they met while Carmen was human too!  And ugh, she was part of a group shepherded into the "feeding room".  Good thing that Eleazar recognized her as quickly as he did.  Ah, the Denali sisters who helped solidify their vegetarian diet.  I liked your contrast to the extra drama it costs the Cullens to interact with humans as they do, so Carlisle can be a doctor.

 

Clever:  ‘Tanya was the first to figure out a way to have her cake and NOT eat it.'

 

Good distinction:  ‘Eleazar had thought it best as they expected to be busy for the next few days, guarding the newborn... or rather the town.'

 

Hmm:  ‘I have never seen anyone with both mental and physical shields, especially not unconscious ones and as a human!"  So our Bella is already something special.

 

Ooh, creepy:  "[Another shield] allowed Aro to touch him once when he wasn't shielded, Aro had him destroyed immediately, I never found out what he read in his thoughts to have him condemned so quickly."

 

Kate notices an intriguing anomaly: "I can usually absorb electric, say from a power outlet, I can store it in my body, but I can't drain this."

Well you've certainly built up some suspense about how Bella's gift will function once she wakes up.

Reviewer: goldseadragon Signed [Report This]
Date: 20 Jul 2014 2:49 AM Title: Chapter 51

So quick to think the worst of Bella, you Cullens! She's just curious, I bet.

Reviewer: asam75 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2014 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 51

Bella's hunt cracked me up...holding the mountain lion to protect her clothes!

And you defended against every argument I would have made against Jacob and Tanya imprinting...though it still doesn't really make sense to me.

Thanks for a good chapter.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2014 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 51

Oh shoot, just when I was beginning to think she was going to be Supercontrol Woman! Sure hope Edward catches her before she does something she will hate herself for doing! Funny to have Jake imprint on Tanya, by the way!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2014 8:40 PM Title: Chapter 51

hee hee Jake and Tanya.    Bella always has to be different.. LOL

Reviewer: campyrs2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2014 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 51

What an interesting chapter.  Bella is sure different.  

Reviewer: romance4me2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2014 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 51

I love the Jacob & Tanya twist! I can't wait to find out just how different Vampire Bella is from the others.

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jul 2014 2:43 PM Title: Chapter 51

Oops... Well that WAS going better than they expected.   I look forward to seeing how this next part goes.

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Jul 2014 7:59 AM Title: Chapter 50

This new shield of Bella's is amazing everyone, except her dad, he just thinks it's cool! It will be interesting to see if she has control over both the mental and the physical manifestations! Loved the backgrounds on all the Denali coven, by the way!

Reviewer: campyrs2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Jul 2014 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 50

Great chapter.  Can't wait for Bella to wake.

Reviewer: errant diva Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jul 2014 1:34 AM Title: Chapter 50

Very interesting....can't wait for next chapter~!

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Date: 13 Jul 2014 11:41 PM Title: Chapter 50

"....appeared on the balcony again, his hands firmly holding Charlie under his arms as if he was a toddler being picked up by an adult" lol lol

You've done a fine job with Renee's character! Altho, it doesn't take much for me to enjoy myself hating her:) Even at her best, she's not worth much.

The question I have going thru my mind is will Bella have control of her shield soon after 'waking' or will she constantly knock others into the next county::))

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2014 8:49 AM Title: Chapter 50

I too gave a backstory to Eleazar and Carmen in one of my fics. In Canon there was too little!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2014 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 50

Bad ass Bella.  Glad Eleazar was able to get away.  Aro is such a wanker.

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Jul 2014 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 50

Well I can't  wait to see how it manifests...  Thanks for updating.

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Date: 08 Jul 2014 5:10 AM Title: Chapter 49

Wow, if Alice's vision or Edward's speed had been a few seconds later, it could have been over for Bella.

So this nomad pursued Bella for no other reason than the scent of her blood?  We didn't even get any clues about who he is.

Sniffle: "I'm sorry my love, I know you wanted more time."  Good for him:  ‘but he refused to drink'.

Interesting idea:  ‘...hoping that she didn't go into cardiac arrest because of the shock. That was how most attempted transformations failed.'

Well said:  ‘There wasn't much of the human Edward there at that moment, the beast inside had taken over and was fully capable of attacking him if he thought his mate was in any danger.'

I never thought of this, but it makes sense:  ‘Of all the transformations Carlisle had seen, and there were many from his time in Italy...'

‘[Carlisle] was still slightly out of practise at hiding his thoughts.'  Why - because Edward was away from the family for so long?

Yeah, this is very likely:  ‘"Ok, look can't you just tell me now?" [Charlie] asked, sounding rather annoyed.'

I really like your idea that Charlie was allowed to see his daughter while she was transforming.   Aww, ‘The man wiped a tired hand across his face, and if Carlisle saw tears fall, he didn't mention it.'

Your Charlie is remarkably strong and adaptable:  ‘"She'll be better than fine. She will never have to worry about being hurt again!" Charlie said stoutly, all the while gritting his teeth.'

Yikes!  ‘Carlisle watched Edward carefully, hopefully he could jump in before anything could happen if he turned on his father-in-law.'  But given how he has already reacted with Carlisle and then Esme...

Good description:  "It feels like the skin is being burnt from your body, but you keep healing so it keeps burning."  Ugh!

 

A welcome moment of lightness: 

"...we don't have hormones or anything." Carlisle told [Charlie], grinning.

"I'm not so sure, Rose has had PMT since 1935." Edward said, smiling slightly at his sister.

"I have not!" she snapped, then smiled too, "I'm just bitchy, I don't need hormones to give ME an excuse."

(I assume PMT = pre menstrual tension?  In the States we call it PMS, S for syndrome)

 

I am grateful that Bella got as much human time with her father and husband as she did in your story.  And that she and Edward were already in agreement about her change.

Reviewer: errant diva Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jul 2014 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 1

Can't wait for the next update! Woo!

Reviewer: renee aubin Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jul 2014 5:37 AM Title: Chapter 48

Interesting point:  ‘Unlike his family he had not had over 50 years to make him depend on Alice's visions.'

 

Wow, for Charlie to say this about Renee:  "She would have been held at Olympic while awaiting trial if she wasn't so well known around here, there is such a prejudice against her in Forks."  It's easy to imagine her offending everyone who knew her in a small town.

 

A nice moment, from Charlie: "You know, my life used to be boring?" Charlie laughed shortly. ... "Then Bella came back, she sure makes life interesting."

 

Encouraging thoughts by Edward, re how Bella has grown and would now fight for herself against Renee.

 

Aww, "You will be magnificent, Bella, and I already watch you every minute."

 

A good description of the difficulties of human-vampire sex:  ‘His face was screwed up in concentration as he tried to rein in his power at the same time as he tried to allow release.'

 

A rather startling summary of Jacob's home situation:  ‘Even after his mother died and the twins both moved out, leaving him to cope with his disabled father on his own, he had never seemed to let it get him down.'

 

Enjoyed the banter:

"I'll look after her, Sam." Bella promised...

"Yeah, but who will look after you?" he asked.

 

Fun sense of humor from Emily, too.  She tells Sam that she and Bella will compare notes:  ‘"Well we both have supernatural lovers!" Sam blushed madly and was out of the door in a split second.'

 

Ooh, good cliffie!

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jul 2014 4:27 AM Title: Chapter 49

"He cried as his teeth sank into the open wound...." So glad I didn't have to yell & bounce around while reading about Edward stalling his changing of her while she's bleeding to death! lol

"...there was no point in making her suffer through such injuries, even if she could have been saved, just to change her after" Bravo! I don't have a clue how many times I've had that thought while reading fanfics where Bella is seriously injured but instead of changing her, she made to go thru months of healing then changed afterwards::))

Ooh, chapter ends with a mystery!

Reviewer: csp4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 Jul 2014 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 48

"She got into the truck and briefly considered calling Edward to let him know that she was heading home, but....She couldn't see the problem" Groan:(

Reviewer: kissinbuttaflyz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Jul 2014 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 49

Omg!!! So not a patient person :) loving ur story!!! Can't wait til next update

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2014 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 49

Yikes!!!

Reviewer: nnalday Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2014 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 49

Omg! What happened? Is Bella's gift starting to develop? What is it? 

 

Please update soon!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2014 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 49

Glad e got there in time.   Really glad B wasn't called to testify.  That would be a nightmare.

hmmm her shield causeing the shocks maybe?

Reviewer: Ski Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2014 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 49

Very interesting. An electric shield??

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2014 12:38 AM Title: Chapter 49

Wow!  I had hope he would get there in time, but I look forward to her awakening!  I wonder what's up with the shock thing to Charlie... I hope he's ok!

Reviewer: Ashmerlin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Jul 2014 12:34 AM Title: Chapter 49

Loving it!

Reviewer: k1942 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jul 2014 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 49

Well, well, looks like Bella is manifesting a talent/ability of some sort! Too bad it worked against her poor human father! Thank God for Alice's vision, or Edward wouldn't have been in time to save his wife! I'll bet Bella won't be apart from her dad nearly as long as the family thought she might!

Reviewer: Camilla11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jul 2014 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 49

Thank you for updating so fast. And now, what is happening?

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Jul 2014 10:22 AM Title: Chapter 48

!!!!! leaving it there, damn... well done, beautifully moved along and lots of info. Though I was expecting the cliffie it was perfectly done.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jun 2014 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 48

Glad Emily is ok.   Silly Bella driving off without an escort back

Reviewer: aabc Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 Jun 2014 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 48

She is so damn stubborn!  What is the matter with that girl... Everyone is trying to protect her and she goes off on her own.... Stupid!

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