Date: 18 Jan 2016 9:25 AM Title: The Threat
I like the story, I like where it's going. Having said that, some of the conversations seems "awkward". I think what is throwing it for me is how they refer to each other as mates when talking to each other, it feels unnatural. I can see it the first few times they speak, but it feels out of place at this point and make the interaction between the characters feel less personal.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 4:59 AM Title: Sentencing
yea. If her father thought Anthony would be merciful, then he's a real idiot.
hmmm Jacob.... Not sure what I want done to him.
Anthony will DEFINITELY get what's coming to him. You are the first person to not try to crucify me for what happened to Bella. They really do need the pride's help to kill off the people that are coming for them. It all has a point in the end... Well, at least in this installment. Thanks for reading. Sorry it took me so long to respond. I just found out how to find my reviews on this site.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 4:50 AM Title: Punishment
Guess I need to go back and figure out what she did that was so wrong cause I can't remember it. If he picks the lion, I'd let the mates kill him after for being overly vindictive. If I were Jasper, I'd channel her pain to everyone else in the "pride". Right now I'm calling BS to Daddy's last comment.
I wouldnt let B anywhere near them after this upcoming battle either. I'd be making sure everyone knew Anthony's thoughts and feelings as well. Him and Daddy were over the line.