[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 32
Whaaaaat!? What now, what's she found? *runs to next chapter*
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 6:02 PM Title: Chapter 31
Lol, so all the guys now know how deadly Bella is, I don't think they'll be thinking she's an easy target any longer. It must be tough for Bella having so many people around when she's used to being on her own for long periods of time, it's not even as though she can just wander off for an hour or two. Sasha's just begging to be taken down in the sparring with the way she's getting on Bella's nerves.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 4:24 PM Title: Chapter 30
Cassie and Cullen are so like Edward, lol, I loved how Cassie called him on his shit about her not having boys as friends. If there are two rogue Volturi there could be more especially if it turns out that Nahuel is still alive. Being called Mommy can be a scary thing when you think of all it entails and implies, Bella will get there in time.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 29
So the Volturi are like super soldiers. Do they want to clone Bella? After all wasn't it said previously that there's nothing unusual that shows up in blood tests and scans? This could only mean they want her DNA to experiment and clone. This fight could go on forever if they don't get to the root of the Volturi. I can understand Peter being protective of Bella but I really think he's going a bit overboard with it. He's never going to be there all the time to protect her, he needs to trust the training he's given Bella and everyone else surrounding her.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 1:31 PM Title: Chapter 28
I know this but I just have to say it, Bella's so techy and clever, I mean, damn! Okay, I feel better now. Finally they got to be together and Edward made his confession. Loved the lemon. I think subconsciously Edward was waiting to meet Penny again during all his years if celibacy. Everything happens for a reason.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 12:57 PM Title: Chapter 27
Oh my God! I'm sitting here trying to get my head around all this. Bringing up Bella and keeping her safe has been some fancy dance. Some knew who she was and where but she didn't know about them and Edward, sort of met her once but didn't, I think he might beat himself up about that but he wasn't to know, he was kept in the dark. I can't believe she's been with Edward's grandparents all that time.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 12:11 PM Title: Chapter 26
Lol, I'm losing track of who's who with all these nicknames. Who's Rock, have you mentioned who that is before? I think Edward's gobsmacked at Bella's abilities as should all of them. I don't think he'll be harping on about training again, well maybe he will but only in respect of Bella training everyone else, lol. Mike and Jane are sick as is Jacob they all need to be wiped from the face of the earth. At least Bella finally got some respect from Sasha before she was knocked unconscious. What about this Volturi lot, how are they connected to Jacob?
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 9:47 AM Title: Chapter 25
Does Bella know Dora? Is Dora one of the people that looks out for her? Bella can't be Dora.....can she? I can't wait to find out who Miss Honey and Guido are and how Edward knows them. What the hell are Mike and Jessica/Jane up to?
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 9:17 AM Title: Chapter 24
Will Sasha back off now? I'm not too sure that she understands the meaning of no. Caius obviously doesn't trust Bella even if his wife does. I think the lack of information about Chaos won't help her popularity with Jasper either, lol, he ended up like a pouting child who wasn't allowed to play with the big kids.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 8:50 AM Title: Chapter 23
Genetic engineering! Messing with someone's DNA would explain why Bella needs to run, the government would see her as their property. Chaos is amazing and will certainly keep Edward and the kids safe. It would be scary what the government could do with Bella's talents because you know that they're not just going to use them for good. Urgh, Sasha gives women a bad name and I can't think what suitable punishment there is for her apart from Bella getting a chance to smack her one.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 2:56 AM Title: Chapter 22
I thought Chaos was Bella's security program that's voice activated, although I did find it weird what she said about her demise and not doing anything unless that was imminent, how would a computer program know that? See you're just adding to my confusion now, lol. I really wasn't expecting Sasha to be there and to be honest I was surprised that Bella drove off, I would have thought she'd stand her ground any knock Sasha out. Ah well, maybe another time, lol.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 21
Possibly Bella will be teaching Emmett and Jasper how to fight, lol. I think Sasha will be in for a surprise with Bella around and I think Bella might be surprised at her own reaction towards Sasha and the feelings provoked by her being around or all over Edward, lol. There could be fireworks.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 03 Jul 2014 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 20
Oh! My! God! Shut the front door! Renee and Esme best friends from way back when. At least now I understand about Bella not really being called that but it is her name. From what Esme said I'm taking it that the government are after Bella because of her super intelligence. I think they wanted her to 'work' for them in some way and Renee and Charlie didn't want that to happen.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2014 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 19
Girlfriend! Edward really is running away with himself and his desire for Bella, if he doesn't slow down a bit he may lose her. Jasper will go mad if he finds out that Bella's been in the security system so no one will see her true eye colour.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2014 3:00 PM Title: Chapter 18
Oh my God! I think a conversation with Aro is due just to see if he knows anything to shed some light on it all, maybe he remembers something from that time. My head is still spinning trying to work all this out. Lol, I think I should just sit back and enjoy the ride although, Mike and Jessica/Jane being married, now there's a shocker who the hell would want to marry him, lol. Has Jane killed Jessica? Did Mike kill Jessica? Hmmm.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2014 2:12 PM Title: Chapter 17
Well they're starting to get to know each other a little better, Bella's opening up more. Does her being a computer genius have anything to do with the reason she's running and hiding? I know you won't tell me but I thought I'd throw it out there. Bloody Mike Newton, he's really up himself he seems like a psycho to me and with any luck not long for this world.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2014 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 16
I loved the nickname Dora, that had me chuckling and also wondering when Aro referred to Dora as them whether that was a typo or is Dora truly two people and if they are could they also be known as Guido and Miss Honey? Bella's whole name thing confused me as well. It seemed like she was saying she made the name up but then it was her real name. Lol, I feel like I'm in an episode of Soap.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2014 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 15
Hmmm, what's Martha done to deserve a beating, or is it more of a case of what she's not done? Is there someone who Bella's running from catching up with her? The plot just thickens and she's not even checked Donkey out yet, I'm dying to find out what she finds.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 02 Jul 2014 12:18 AM Title: Chapter 14
Thank God Jessica is gone. That girl was so stupid. Cullen and Cassie are really running with the idea that Bella's going to be their new mommy, I don't know how Edward thinks he's going to get them to drop that idea, I mean just look what the did at the zoo, lol.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 13
Well we've learned that Bella's a really good fighter and able to defend herself. When did she see such violence that it's stuck with her? I think my head is going to explode, lol.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 12
I'm beginning to think that maybe Bella's running from Jacob Black, but it seems silly to run towards the lions den, but then there's also something to be said for hiding in plain sight. At least we know now that however unsure she is about telling Edward her secret she knows she can trust him. Cullen and Cassie are sure getting some big ideas, lol, I don't think Edward will be far behind them. Jessica certainly has her own agenda but does it go beyond getting Edward and his money? Is she working for the Blacks?
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 10:56 PM Title: Chapter 11
So is Bella an under cover cop, FBI a private investigator or something else? This is driving me crazy trying to work out what's going on? Ursula is one bitter woman, why she has to take it out on everyone else I have no clue.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 10
Definitely major flirting, it's a good job those kids are so young, lol. I love the banter that's developing between them. I think Edward is a few pages ahead of Bella at this point, he's already questioning the possibility of Bella being in a relationship with him.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 9
They're getting closer and actually laughing. Edward copped a feel and Bella had an ogle and got to wear his t-shirt, at least they both got something out of that. Bella's very quick witted, she'll keep them all on their toes especially Edward, lol.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 8
I love Alice's nickname, I guessed that one right, didn't have a clue about Jasper's. Edward seems to thawing a little, well he was until he saw Bella at the club. Does he think she's stripping or is it that he thinks she's too young to work there?
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 7
Is the cottage and meadow the same place Charlie took Bella? I think it is. Was Charlie investigating Edward's family? I'm wondering if when Edward crashed into Bella whether one of his tyres was shot out. Stark - Iron Man, I knew I recognised the name, lol.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 6
Where on earth did Jessica disappear to? She should have been hunting high and low for those kids. I don't recognise the nickname Topspin and I'm resisting the urge to Google, lol.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 5
I think Edward should pay attention to his gut instincts and feelings. Who and what is Bella? My mind is running from one thing to the next with her. She's running from someone or something but who's providing her with info on Edward? Who the hell are Miss Honey and Guido?
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 4
Hmm, did Edward kill her dad? Maybe it was someone who works for him. Stark, is that a comic book reference? It sounds familiar. Bella's raising more questions than answers at the moment.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 3
Okay, so I'm more than intrigued now. I can't wait to find out what's going on with Bella. One sided conversations with a photo of her parents, changing hair and eye colour, computer hacking. I think she'll fit right in with Edward. How cute was Cassie wanting her pink gun. Now there's a sentence I never thought I'd write, lol.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 2
Lol, apart from being Queen of the pool table is Bella some sort of computer whizz kid? I love that she fleeced those blokes. Poor Edward, he's so lonely.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 01 Jul 2014 6:13 PM Title: Chapter 1
Hmmm, intriguing. I'm looking forward to the rest.
Jane x
[Report This]Date: 30 Jun 2014 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 40
Loved your story. It was really interesting and different.
[Report This]Date: 27 Jun 2014 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love your story. Cant stop reading.
I actually thought you called Jessica donkey because she is an ASS but didnt want to say in front of the kids.
Date: 20 Jun 2014 6:37 AM Title: Chapter 40
Wow! Loved it. Great imagination you have. Well done. Thank you! :o)
[Report This]Date: 12 Jun 2014 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 28
Vraiment impressionnant!
Date: 05 Jun 2014 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 9
"Is it because I am black?" Funny as hell!!! Outstanding chapter. I haven't laughed so loud and so long over a fanfic in a while :) . Also loved the baseball bat reference. All characters are great along with all the nicknames, too.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 28
She has got some kick ass technology!
Date: 03 Jun 2014 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 27
Holy Hannah!! My head is literally spinning!
Date: 02 Jun 2014 11:45 PM Title: Chapter 22
Yeah that reaction was sort of weird. One would think that would cause him to deflate, but I guess not. LOL.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 21
Between keeping all the nicknames straight and trying to figure out who and what Bella really is, my head is sort of spinning. LOL.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 2:39 PM Title: Chapter 40
Hahahaha nice ending
Date: 02 Jun 2014 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 18
Jasper probably should be suspicious, but it's only because she is obviously way smarter than he is. LOL. I just lauged when she admitted to Edward that his security was bad and that she could get around it. That's hilarious.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 4:01 AM Title: Chapter 13
I haven't a clue as to who she is and I could guess anyone of the ones already out there. I am clueless.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 12
I love this Bella too! She is hilarious, and Donkey for Jessica? Priceless.
Date: 02 Jun 2014 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 10
Who is she really? She is smarter than anyone around her and is a technology genius-- which is a huge talent to have, I would say.
[Report This]Date: 01 Jun 2014 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 40
ty you for sharing, loved it
Date: 31 May 2014 11:28 AM Title: Chapter 13
thank god ur writing is awesome or i would have to skip to reviews to find out about bella, but u just keep me wanting to read more :P
[Report This]Date: 27 May 2014 2:57 PM Title: Chapter 40
Such a beautiful and very intriguing story, very original and definetly one of my all time favorite stories now. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story and cant wait to read the outtakes!
Melissa
Date: 24 May 2014 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 40
Where to start? I am an avid reader. I think I have read almost all the decent Twilight fan fic out there. This story is certainly one of the best! I love a well written story with a great plot. Lemons are nice when appropriate but the story line is most important.
I've read a few of your fics and enjoyed them all, this surely is my favorite. First time I've liked Tanya and James. I can't say enough about Bella, Edward and all the little Cs. Hate to let them go. But I'm sure they have other adventures.
Thanks for your time and effort. Much appreciated.
[Report This]Date: 23 May 2014 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 40
I loved this story! Thank you for all your wonderful stories!! You never let me down.
Date: 23 May 2014 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 9
"Is it because I'm Black?" Knee slapping funny! I'm African American and this is the funniest exchange ever:))) LMAO
Author's Response:
Tululah~ Nikky and I were worried that it may offend someone, but it was exactly meant the way you took it. We both laughed and laughed over story in several places. This is one of the best Bella's I think we've ever written. She is spunky and such a smarta$$. HUGS and thanks for loving our story. Kasi (and Nikky).
Date: 22 May 2014 3:43 PM Title: Chapter 40
Love love LOVE this story. Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful story with us.
Date: 21 May 2014 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just wanted to give you ladies a 'SHOUT OUT" on your wonderful stories! Sadly I don't review often because I usually download the whole story and sneak reads in when I can! LOVED TTOO and many others...BUT...am reading HCV and it's the best yet!!!! LOVE IT! It's got that slow build but you kept us happy with the juicy lemons in the beginning - OH SO GOOD! You truly do a wonderful job with your stories but this one has grabbed me by the shirt collar and won’t let me go – I was reading on my phone in the pediatricians’ office this morning, now sneaking a peek while at work…what have you done to me???? Best - Amy
Date: 18 May 2014 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 40
Loved the ride as always :)))
Date: 18 May 2014 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 31
This is a great story. Love it. But you keep talking about FF editing. Have you been censored by them? I've read more explicit lemons in other stories on their site by other authors . Are they targeting you ? Love your stories.
Author's Response:
not sure if you read our story Raising the Steaks or not but it was actually pulled for content at FFN. Where there are MANY other stories with much more graphic lemons than ours, we were targeted by someone who likes to leave nasty hateful guest reviews. We deleted their review because it was completely over the top STUPID and 2 days later the story was GONE. So it was a targeted thing, but we lost over 1200 reviews and that hurt to have that happen.
Date: 17 May 2014 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 40
I have to admit, I could not wait to finish this work and read a great deal on line. All in all, it is one of my favorite works of fanfiction. Thank you for giving us such original characters, outstanding plot,and marvelous nicknames! You've outdone yourselves this time!
[Report This]Date: 16 May 2014 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 40
I loved this story. I will miss this crazy, but loving family.
Date: 16 May 2014 4:03 AM Title: Chapter 40
You rock!!! Can't wait for more.
[Report This]Date: 15 May 2014 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 40
THIS WAS AWESOME. I LOVED THAT BELLA WAS KICK ASS BUT STILL SO MUCH FUN AND EDWARD WAS A TRUE KNIGHT IN KEVLLAR. YOU GALS WROTE A RILLIANT STORY AND I DIDNT WANT IT TO END.
[Report This]Date: 14 May 2014 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 40
Great fun reading how everyone is messing with Sasha::))
Geez, how many kids can 1 person pop out? lol
Thanks for sharing this story! I completely enjoyed every chapter:)
Date: 14 May 2014 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 39
"I can tell you this, winding that snatch up never gets old," Happens so rarely...I like this Tanya:)
[Report This]Date: 14 May 2014 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 40
WAHHHH! WAHHHH!!! It's over. But will never be forgotten. Just like all your other fics, this is a massive blowout for me. Sooo can't wait til the next story. I'll be waiting, holding my breath for more Starkella.
I show love cause I get love.
Til next ride.
E/k
[Report This]Date: 14 May 2014 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 38
"to honor and obey" nice added touch to have both of them say "obey":) Considering the situation & who they are, it makes for great symbolism.
Sasha is so pathetic:(
Parasite - Chaos is hysterical::))
[Report This]Date: 14 May 2014 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 37
"Alice is Betty, right?" Charlie asks with a little frown. I nod at him with a grin. "Yes, she is." "Do any of you have a list?" lol lol I do! It got so complicated I made a spreadsheet::))
[Report This]Date: 14 May 2014 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 40
Can not wait for more regarding this family. I impatiently awaited every new update. Please write another sequel to this fantastic story. Thank you for the hours of enjoyment.
Date: 14 May 2014 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 40
You hit another one out of the park with this story.
[Report This]Date: 14 May 2014 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 40
I loved all the twist & turns. The mystery was excellant.
Sorry to see this end. I've enjoyed the journey.
Thank you for sharing all your hard work.
Date: 14 May 2014 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 40
Thanks for another great story looked forward to the updates.
Date: 14 May 2014 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 40
I love you guys you are the best. I love the ending what a great family. Thanks so much and I will be looking forward to all.
Date: 14 May 2014 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 40
Love you guys and your stories. Can't wait to start reading the new one. Thanks for such fun wonderful stories.
[Report This]Date: 14 May 2014 2:08 AM Title: Chapter 40
Masen number eight.... That's enough to make a baseball team, HAHAHA!
It was the pole dance that did it. LOL.
The idea of having a sex slave had Edward to worked up her eggs even surrendered to his prowess.
What a great ride this has been.
Looking forward to more of your collaborations!
[Report This]Date: 14 May 2014 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 40
that was an awesome story
[Report This]Date: 13 May 2014 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 40
Thank you ladies. I enjoyed your story.
Date: 13 May 2014 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 40
Wow he is really good at keeping her pregnant. I love all the names. I can't believe Sasha still wants him after all these years. Tanya is brilliant and getting her riled up. She ended up with Charlie that is great loved this story.
Date: 13 May 2014 10:05 PM Title: Chapter 40
Really enjoyed all your stories, you both are very talented..keep them coming!
Date: 13 May 2014 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 39
Oh I love the names so cute. Tanya is awesome getting the best of Sasha. The kids will be great big brother and sister.
Date: 13 May 2014 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 40
Wonderful story. You are a talented team. Thanks for sharing.
Date: 13 May 2014 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 40
What a terrific epi to end a wonderfully quirky story! I've loved every word and will read your next story for sure! Thanks for giving me hours upon hours of entertainment! I respect and treasure you FF writers who give us you time and talent for free!!
[Report This]Date: 13 May 2014 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 40
awesome story!!!!!!!!!!!!! Loved every line of it!!!
Date: 13 May 2014 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 38
That would not have been good if hawk or Charlie walk in on them on the desk. Love the honeymoon. Cassie is cute wanting a honeymoon.
Date: 13 May 2014 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 37
Awwww so cute love it.
Date: 13 May 2014 8:55 PM Title: Chapter 40
Omg I have truly loved reading this story!!!! It was a great read and I will probably re read again!! Loved this as well as Raising the Steaks and Fertile Dreams!! Thanks and looking forward to more of your good stories!!!
Date: 13 May 2014 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 40
A good ending for a great story! Even though i´m sad it is over! thank you so much!!!!!!!!
Date: 13 May 2014 8:41 PM Title: Chapter 40
This was fantastic! I loved the epilogue! 8 kids WOW! Cute names!
Date: 13 May 2014 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 40
Thank you for taking us on another great ride! It's never getting boring to read the stuff you come up with, so as long as you're writing you can be sure I'm reading;)
This was such a sweet ending again and I'm sure there will be lovely outtakes from you, but it's a great time to leave them as a happy end:)
Date: 13 May 2014 8:04 PM Title: Chapter 40
That wasa great ending. I have to say this is one of best stories I have read Thank you Can't wait for more to come
Date: 13 May 2014 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 40
Great story, thanks ladies.
Date: 13 May 2014 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 40
I love it and will miss it.