Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 29 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 56: The Eye of the Storm

the outcome was a little unbelieveable. i would think that the hospital would at least have been liable for the two victims that were actual hostages.  it would seem also that the police department would be sued for the actions of the SWAT team for going against protocol.  i would have also liked to have seen that the jury was privy to what was caught on camera and also testimony from vitims that were hostages that bella helped. this is where details mean everything.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 28 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 49: Justice Served and Champagne Consumed

personally, i thought the sellers capture left much to be desired.  I mean she put herself and edward in more danger than they were already in.  if as you say someone has his connections, what to stop them from retaliation, even from prison.  i would have liked to hear more of royce. anyway, im still reading, so i must be enjoying right.  but how they feel more safe now is beyond me.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 16 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Sleeping With An Angel

i am thoroughly enjoying your story. its great that bella is the doctor.  as many stories as ive read, this is the first swat team story.  very creative. thanks for sharing it with us.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 23 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Truth Revealed

im enjoying thanks

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 23 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Moving Ahead and Protective Mama Bears

your doing great. still anxious for the prologue. 

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 25 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 34: Equivalency

im enjoying the workings of you mind quite a bit. i may even watch Psyche, who knows.  good chapter, i think it was a great solution to bellas career,  I glad you thought of it, i know i wouldnt have.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 26 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Concerning Charlotte

were you having a bad week? I mean shes only six. Its christmas and her parents cant be with her.  I hope you understand as a writer, you hold our emotions hostage, we give you that gift. so when it comes to little children being hurt, you need to resolve it quickly.  i'll excercise a little patience with the charlotte issue until i see where your going with this ok? as always, remember i wouldn't be reading if i didnt enjoy your story. so thanks.

 

 

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 26 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 40: The Name Game

im sorry but that chapter was ridiculously strange.  one of bellas most valuable qualities in your story is her decisiveness.  shes a quick thinker, she knows what she wants and she follows through even under extreme pressure. therefore, how can she not know which name she wants to take, what happened to the ring stating "my whole heart" its a total contadiction.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 28 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 1: The Fate of a Princess

this story looks like my kind of story. its still to early to tell but i am enjoying so far. i cant wait till they meet at the alter.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 76: Chapter 76

i didnt notice the lack of length to this chapter until it was mentioned.  Its all about the content and i think you did a great job revealing the real purpose behind the dom/slave assignment.  I also liked bella telling alice off for her selfishness and self centerness.  I like it when things dont go well for the cullens, because it becomes a true test of thier character to see how they work things out.   does that make sense?  well it makes sense in my own head.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 81: Chapter 81

you did a great job on this story.  I cant believe i finished it

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

thank you for this lovely story. i will remember it for a very long time.  I have to say i was a little disappointed when edward left bella in the hospital to fend for herself then proceeded to tell her she was the most important person in his life.  well i think what a person does instinctively in more telling than when they have time to think about their actions. I noticed also that edward didnt even seem to be sorry for leaving her for 2 hours. I mean carlisle was with the twins for petes sake.  I just dont get it.  but speaking about the story as a whole, you brought out every emotion in me i could possibly think of, and to me that is a sign of a great story teller.  thanks.

 

 

 

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 11 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

im glad they are taking things slowly. i was wondering how this could be an HEA.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 14 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

i dont like leaving negative reviews because i know you put your heart into what your writing but bella has to be either mature or imature.  seeing jacob and hiding it is extremely imature.  whichever way you choose to write bellas character is the right way, it just has to be consistent through out the whole story. thank you for putting your story out there though. i am enjoying it.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 03 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36 Hard to Concentrate-Epilogue

one of the best stories i ever read. and i've read a lot. im getting ready to read "exposed".  but i hoped you know how great of a writer you are.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 03 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40 - Epilogue - Never Goodbye...

wow.  just wow.  thanks for sharing.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 27 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - Honour thy father

it was a good chapter, i am glad she found her roots, but things happen for a reason and i think that she was protecting the other kids in the rawlings care, from the rawlings themselves.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 14 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Nicknames

for someone who knows 10 languages, edward sure is dense emotionally.  I wonder which one needs counseling more?  i am thoroughly enjoying your story. thanks.  i identify with bella is this story quite a bit and wish i had an edward there when i was 24.

Author's Response:

I know he is dense sometimes, it is the clouded Cimmerian view of his.  Thanks for reading and reviewing, Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 15 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: A Cowboy, a Princess, and a Butterfly

i love this chapter for several reasons. firstly the saint ives riddle was great. but I love bellas response to seths question about where the man was going with all his wives.   i also was happy to see jasper sleeping in another room.                                                                                                                                

Author's Response:

Thank you, we are glad you like it so much!  Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Where Do We Go From Here?

thank you for this story on manely forgiveness and compassion. I enjoy lemons just like the next guy, but the way you have told this story makes you focus on what important in struggles and relationships.  having said all that, i want some sort of retribution for tanya, sue, whatever her name is.  Is it too much to reveal that i would love to see jane work her majic on tanya.  looking forward to the inner workings of your mind. thanks.

Author's Response:

Thanks again and again for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  As the story comes closer to an end, it seems we have a lot of questions or comments that are geared toward answers already given in the story.  So we decided to give a little background to clear up the misconceptions and questions. 

Edward Masen: Father is dead, mother is bi-polar and left him in the care of Esme and Carlisle.  Mother is alive, but whereabouts are unknown.  Edward met ‘Tanya’ in college, they had a short affair and she left, after being caught in trying to get money from him.  Edward then shut down and treated all women as if they were not worth his time.  He refused to date or trust any women and he instead only was with a select few at Aro’s club, where he paid for sex.  Edward owns the restaurant where his parents used to take him to eat at, before his father died and his mother went off the deep end.  Edward is also one of the youngest English professors at UW. 

Bella Swan: Bella was born the child of single mother Renee Higbottom.  Renee met Charlie during one of his planned scams to get money.  Renee was very rich, as were her single father.  Charlie ended up impregnating Renee, but he was already married to Sue Clearwater.  Renee paid off Charlie and Sue to leave her and her child alone, but then subsequently died of breast cancer when Bella was three.  Renee’s father fought for custody, but grand-parents rights are not acknowledged in the state of Washington, therefore after Renee’s death the state went in search of Charlie Swan.  Once he was found Bella was placed in his and Sue’s care.  After Bella went to live with Charlie and Sue, she was treated iek a slave and was never allowed even normal things such as schooling, food, new clothes, and every other basic thing as parents we give our children without second thought.  Bella grew up starved for affection, so once she got to take care of the twins she gave all that affection she has been starving for to them.  Her love of the twins is unconditional as is their love for her.

I hope this helps answer a few questions and clears up a few things.  I’m not sure why, but we have several who think Sue is Bella’s real mother, and that is not the case at all. 

Thank you again so much for all the wonderful heartfelt reviews you all leave for us.  It is amazing to us that we have managed to instill such a deep devotion in our readers to our characters, and we are blown away by just how much emotion our readers feel for our characters.  I know that the character names belong to Stephenie Meyer, but these characters and the way they are in this story are in fact ours, she owns the names and appearance descriptions, but the attitude and demeanor and words are all ours.  Thanks, Kasi (& Nikky)

TEASER Chapter 28: Subject to changes during beta process.
I am so proud of Seth and Leah this past month has not been easy on them, but they have held their heads up high and got on with it.  There has been some name calling at school.  Now I know kids can be cruel but the things that they are saying, is coming from older mouths first.  Things no parent should be saying in front of their children.  Bella and I have addressed the school regarding the problems, but we’ve been brushed off like nothing is going on.  Mrs. Crown the principle said that people will talk.  She went on to point out that I was after all, Seth and Leah’s father, and I was shaking up with their big sister.  The way she said it, implied that Bella and I were doing something wrong.  After her rather rude little speech I called Caius and explained the whole thing to him.  To say that he was angry is putting it mildly.  He went as far as taking the principle in front of the school board, and she was put on a written warning.  Not only is her job and tenure in jeopardy, but her career as a whole is.  Since we have proof that she knowing let kids and adults harass the kids, she was warned that a lawsuit would be filed if the behavior continued.  Her biggest mistake was she was aware what the twin have been though these past five months, yet did nothing to help stop the harassment.

Caius informed me of another school that had room for more students.  It was little school that only had a little over one hundred students.  It went from kinder-garden to fifth grade and each class had mix of around fifteen children per classroom.  It was a private school, and ranked in the top ten of all schools in the state of Washington’s education program.  There was a sister school that managed the grades sixth through twelfth, also ranked in the top ten.   Both schools are quite prestigious and expensive, but cost is of no matter.  There are a few nice things the school is located close to where Esme and Carlisle live, but that also causes us transportation issues for to and from school.  Both Bella and I have talked about this and we all talked about it in family therapy.  Seth and Leah asked to just finish out this year of school where they are before deciding.  We agreed that this was the right choice for right now.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 12 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

why doesn't someone get wisp some knee pads.

Reviewer: maryef Signed
Date: 05 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

i am excited to be reading the sequel.  I hope edward is not the asshole he was in the last story.  i guess we'll see.